I like you work and the idea about a dream. When you referenced Mr. Allen's A dream is a vision, you might have stated Mr. Allen wrote "A dream is a vision - and the rest of the paragraph in parentheses followed by the book title. I'm new at reviewing and this is only my opinion. I don't know for sure if I'm grammatically correct. You did a good job and got your point across
lucky dog
Interesting short story, makes you stop and think. Life is different for so many people and we never stop to think what other people deal with. Secret communications - maybe pig latin in sign language, that would be different.
I enjoyed the post - have a good day
lucky dog
Hi Berryhill
What a moving peace, you brought tears to my eyes and a lump to throat. This was well written and very moving. The understanding and love that you poured into this peace was wonderful. I've loved and lost my father who I respected and admired and your speech brought my thoughts back to him. God Bless
lucky dog
Enjoyed your blog, and found it a great read. Sounds like you are having fun and letting everyone know how it makes you feel. Keep up the good work.
lucky dog
Hi WakeUpAndLive
I enjoyed your story, it was a fast read and it flowed beautifully. Being a dog owner myself I can relate to all that you had to say. Congratulations on getting third place in the contest. I will look forward to reading more of your stories
luckydog
Hi Hannah
I just finished reading your story and overall I liked it and thought it moved well. At first I wasn't sure if it was Biographical or a story and I went looking for the genres to see how you had listed it. I think you put in some things that didn't fit with what you presented. You said Kenzi was in middle school but in one paragraph you said she did theater 5 days a week, also in the same paragraph you said Chris worked for a dairy and gone but also that he worked around here. A little later you have Kenzi bringing the car around and your main character who is 17 driving. There were a few conflicts like I mentioned but you ability to move the story along was good.
lucky dog
Hi Janetd
Good job, for your first attempt. I believe the story flowed well and the suspense was understandable. I liked how you used Milo as a comforter to a scared young women. You might have added the reason she hated storms, giving it a little more substance. Keep up the good work
lucky dog
Hi ESB1944 - I enjoyed your story and thought it flowed well. I would suggest that you add a space after each paragraph. I think that just helps the overall look of your story. Keep up the good work
Lucky dog
Hi LBV
Well done - I enjoyed your piece and was surprised by the last paragraph. My mind was trying to figure out the situation and I never would have gone where you took me. The only error I can see was in the third paragraph, last sentence "I haven't done it a long" (I think should be) "I haven't done in a long. Other than that I think you did a great job! Keep up the good work.
Lucky Dog
Good Morning Harry
I enjoyed your story about the ups and down of a rafting experience that parallels growing old. I'm there and I felt the essence of what you were writing about. With life comes adventure and twists and turns that have to be navigated. Your story was easy to read and I was pleasantly surprised with the concluding paragraph. I'm new to reviewing and I'm a high school grad so I don't have any suggestions or pointers with punctuation.
Happy dog
I enjoyed your piece, I'm pushing 70 so I understand more and more about what you are writing about. Congratulations on reaching 85. The sentence "Youth ran away. Just let it be", is how I feel. You touched me and brought a smile to face. Keep up the good work
Lucky Dog
Hi Jenny - I saw your request in reviews and I like your title. I have little knowledge of poetry and so I can not make any comments or suggestions that would be constructive. I like your poem, but I had to read the poem about 5 times before your meaning started coming through to me. (I'm slow). You did a good job - keep writing
Hi Brent - I enjoyed your poem, and I can relate to the abyss since I've seen it. I don't know a lot about poems but I feel like yours flowed properly. Your title caught my eye and your explanation was cryptic since I did not know who Nietzsche was and I had to look him up. You did a good job
Hi Lindsay -I enjoyed your poem. I'm new to the art of reviewing so bear with me. I would look at the listing of your items. falls from the sky - from the hose - exist in a drought, streams down your cheeks, floods your insides and the rain that demands. Since I've never written any poems - I shouldn't be reviewing but I think it might flow in a better line. Please take this as intended, from my point of view - I did like what you wrote.
I like your story, and enjoyed reading it. I have experienced a lonely bike ride myself. I think it flowed well and you took your reader on the bike ride with you. I'm don't do well with punctuation but I did notice on the last paragraph where you quoted Paul "to be thankful in all things." Nice Job!
I enjoyed your poem, I think you captured the meaning of friendship and the want to be there for someone you care about. Keep up the good work and I'll look forward to reading more from you.
I enjoyed your peace, but I had to read it several times understand the first 5 paragraphs. I think if you had used combining instead of muddling would have made the sentence flow better. Once you began going with the VA Doctor and your experiences I could feel the narrative. I look forward to seeing more of your writing.
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