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Rated: E | (5.0)
House Florent Image for G.o.T. "The Iron Bank of Braavos"  "Game of Thrones" 

My name is Angelica, I am one of the sly foxes.

Title: Billy & Mandy Moon the Moon

First Impression: Billy and Mandy were camping out in Mandy's backyard at 5 years old. Then Mandy mentioned Dreamland and Billy wanted to go with her. Then Billy looked up at the moon and got the idea to show his behind. Mandy soon followed suit, claiming to make a third moon. After doing that for a little bit they stopped and the moon gained relief. Billy and Mandy thought they would like to do that again.

Just some kids who just want to have some fun. Showing their behind to the moon was their idea of having fun in this instance. It's a naughty thing they wanted to do to have some fun, but they did it anyway. There weren't any parents around to supervise them. This is a believable action and something kids would do. They have such an imagination. The voices are natural and it was a cute read anyway.

What needs your attention: No spelling or grammar errors found.

What part I liked best: Mandy will show Billy how to get to Dreamland even if it's just going to sleep for her. Billy didn't forget the offer to go to Dreamland and was set to go there and she used that word as another way of going to bed and getting some sleep.

Overall impression: Great details. I say it's just the right amount of details involved. Two children camping and having some fun is a cute idea. I can picture what kind of picture from Deviant got used to inspire this story. Billy and Mandy were up to being a bit naughty to the moon in the process. Their reactions to boredom is natural and just before bedtime too. Only Mandy is calling it Dreamland instead of bedtime. Cute story overall. Everybody is happy. Good job and keep up the good work!

Thank you for allowing me to read your work. It has been my pleasure.

The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.

What does the Fox say?????

Listen Carefully


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Review of T.C.a.G. Ch 1  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
House Florent Image for G.o.T. "The Iron Bank of Braavos"  "Game of Thrones" 

My name is Angelica, I am one of the sly foxes.

Title: T.C.a.G. Ch1

First Impression:Sean was sleeping on the street. Then he noted the time that it was 7 p.m. So it was evening that he woke up from the noise of ambulance. Time the butcher closed shop. The butcher came out on cue and he stood in the entryway, expecting food. Instead, the butcher took him in and led him into a bathroom and gave him soap. So he washed and cleansed himself from all the dirt he picked up from living on the street. Then it was time for food. The butcher had cooked a hearty meal and gave him so much to eat as if he hadn't eaten for a long time. Then the offer for a place to sleep and a place to work was given in the end. He said thank you.

Sean is a homeless guy who was just given a place thanks to Gregory, the butcher. That makes me think that the butcher is a nice, friendly person who will soon be a boss. Sean's adventure is just beginning. I'm curious as to how it will turn out.

What needs your attention: The wording caused me to go back and reread a few times. Try adjusting your details a little bit to read more smoothly. Mainly in the beginning. Reading out loud will help catch the rough spots.

No spelling or grammar errors found.

What part I liked best: I liked the butcher in the story because of his generosity and Sean because of his thankfulness.

Overall impression: Sean is a thankful person despite being homeless and the butcher is a kind and generous person despite being poor. Even though the situation isn't that much better for Sean, it is definitely better than being on the street longer. I enjoyed this chapter and there definitely is more to it which I won't be able to know, but could guess that it'd be his adventure at starting a job under the butcher's care. The ending is solid. I would definitely continue reading the next chapter. Good job and keep up the good work!

Thank you for allowing me to read your work. It has been my pleasure.

The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.

What does the Fox say?????

Listen Carefully


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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is like a limerick in reverse form compared to what I read about the form on Google. The rhyme is there and the lines seems to match (in reverse lengths, top to bottom is bottom to top) and fits the poem perfectly. It speaks so true of the Knight, or what I call the horse in chess. (Yes, I don't have good chess language.) It's also a figure Tetris players are well aware of as well. The L shape in a certain direction. Clever thinking. Nicely done with the details. No spelling or grammar errors found. Good job and keep up the good work!


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Review of Unanchored.  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
A sad moment when Gracie, the 19 year old dog died. The moments leading up to it must have been the toughest for the speaker. The details are just right. The story is very believable. Some dogs can move that way even when they are old. R* is a great supporter, being there in the time of need. No spelling or grammar errors found. I find this story sad yet filled with hope that there's a heaven for Gracie to go to. The speaker mourns after the final moment in an understanding way. The death stings. Good job and keep up the good work!


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for entry "Finding the Evidence" 
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Rated: E | (5.0)
The speaker and Danika is searching for evidence among files for something that would prove Carlson Roberts hasn't got a leg to stand on. Then the speaker started looking at the schedule and noticed something off. The time was 2 hours apart from each other. Good catch. Usually the babysitter would come right when they are needed, not beforehand. So that would've given time for the leg to be put on.

Great details. The evidence was right there when they needed it. It just took a little bit of prodding to do. The voice sounded natural. They might even be a little bored of going through all of that paperwork, yet it needed to be done. But a little bit more searching to do through the schedule and the evidence appeared. No spelling or grammar errors found.

Could put some more details on how the speaker felt as they spoke. It doesn't have to be very much. Just a sentence or two here and there throughout the conversation will work. Also, I think the story flows smoothly as is and is tight. There is no rough spots along the way. Good job and keep up the good work!


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Rated: E | (5.0)
The valley sounds like home for the speaker, yet the speaker is far from home. It calls out to the speaker, but mountains hear the speaker's secrets and the rivers flow with the speaker's thoughts. Too many days have passed to walk through the valley again.

Great details. I see a rhyme every second and fourth line consistently. The poem flows smoothly in a neat manner. Home is missed but the speaker feels too far away to return. The valley sounds like a wonderful place. No spelling or grammar errors found. Good job and keep up the good work!


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Review of Wonderland Again.  
for entry "C2 "The Dodo" " 
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
What a race! With Obama, Trump, and Clinton in it running and Trump changing directions every five steps I'd be hesitant to race along as well. Glad to see some familiar faces. I would be like to be on the side doing a review like Megan. Annette is brave. Beacon is like a leader to those children. Gaby is leading a contest preparation and a warning from buddhangela. I would heed the warning too and run away from the race as well.

Good details. Characters are captured nicely. The race is in a nonsense way. I wonder who would be the winner. No spelling or grammar errors found. Good job and keep up the good work!


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Review of Beast and Dog-Boy  
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
The principal's assistant came and Valerie listened to the judgement. In class suspension and after school detention. Then she followed them to the room where she made sure the bullies were out of sight. Then she went to the coach's office to report the news and give conditions. After school they went to football practice. Drew's first play was a success but at the cost of injuring others. The coach agreed to center and rest of practice went smoothly. Then Valerie went home and introduced Drew. They agreed to let her visit. So she went over and helped cooked supper. After eating Drew showed her where all the money was hidden and then they kissed each other. Valerie left to go back home.

Excellent work so far! The details are great. I noticed missing " marks in a couple of spots. One in the beginning and one toward the end (when he was showing her hidden money). Good job and keep up the good work!


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Review of Beast and Dog-Boy  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
On the ride to school Valerie noticed Drew improved overnight. She got him to laugh with her jokes. They made it during first period. When the bell rang Valerie thought to hurry to make it on time to second class. The teacher had a pop-quiz waiting. After that class she went to her locker to find Drew there. He wanted help with his lock and they were late. Only Drew convinced a hall monitor of it being an excuse. After more classes came lunch and Drew talked about PE. Then he got into a fight and they both went to principal's office. There they were alone until Mr. Thamos came in. He assured them that the principal was coming.

I wonder what would happen next. Good details. It would be interesting to see what the principal will decide. Next chapter. No spelling or grammar errors found. Good job and keep up the good work!


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Review of Striking a Chord  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Wilson had two choices- music or baseball. At first he obeyed his dad and did baseball with music on the side. Then, one game, he turned to music. People loved his style. Excellent details and sticking to the dream of music worked out. No spelling or grammar errors found. Good job and keep up the good work!


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Rated: E | (5.0)
Good job capturing what Westlia would do. She would definitely defend her favorite place. All the qualities are there. Those robbers don't stand a chance. Good thing. There's room for more details but this is a good start. No spelling or grammar errors found. Good job and keep up the good work!


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Review of Beast and Dog-Boy  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Valerie is learning more about Drew while she visited him at Wezell house. First, she taught him to take a shower. Next was eating time. As she washed the dishes, she caught his attention by flipping the light switch on. Then she stopped to show him a lamp that had three settings. Then he explained about his world, how it is in his world. He is the lowest, Valerie is the brightest. Then it ends with him walking her to her home and they enjoy a goodnight kiss. This sounds like things are getting interesting. He wants her to be queen of his world and she doesn't want it. For now, she doesn't have to worry about it. Good tension built up.

Good details with the shower, food, lamp, and walk home. Just the right amount given. Him from another world sounds authentic. I wonder what kind of questions she'll ask tomorrow. Would just have to wait and see. No spelling or grammar errors found. There is some scenarios I can anticipate which she would have to enter the world. Getting chased down by bullies for example. Good job and keep up the good work!


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Review of Beast and Dog-Boy  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
It starts out with a bus scene going home from school. Drew got picked on and Valerie stood up for him. When they got to her place they got off and she agreed to meet him by the bus stop. The next morning she went there and he wasn't there. She waited and got on the bus. Then he showed up driving a pickup. She was too late. At school she agreed to go with him, skipping class to eat somewhere secluded. He drove much better this time. When it was time she ended up driving the pickup into the ditch and he got the pickup unstuck and they made it back home in the nick of time.

Brilliant details and it was easy to follow. I didn't see the pickup coming. Nice twist. And who knew that he wasn't human? It would be hard to guess. Superhuman strength. I like that. No spelling or grammar errors found. Good job and keep up the good work!


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Rated: E | (5.0)
Good song choice! It is romantic and very uplifting. Your opinion on the song is right on. It does have a good beat. Love the details that you put into it. It is short and to the point. The lyrics is fast paced but I can understand every word said. Once more you do a great job explaining without giving too much information away. I like that. In the end you mention the lyrics inspire you. While this part can be expanded a little, I'm curious if it makes you feel like you could do anything as you listen. Maybe motivation to write or something. No grammar or spelling errors found. Good job and keep up the good work!


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Review of Community Service  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Wonderful story here. The details are great. I was able to follow the plot from beginning to end and not foresee what will happen next. Joey had a rough time after graffiti. So community service is deserving. What a twist when the bully came into play. It seemed too good to be true about what he did. And I was right about that. Maintenance work is a tough job. It turned out he was stealing meds and putting sleeping pills instead. Rotten switch! Glad the nursing home had other plans. A police officer and cameras to find out what was going on.

I could see Joey stammering or stuttering his response at telling the truth. Yet he did it. From fear of community service to enjoyment of it with the bully being the biggest obstacle and maintenance work to discovering the bully's secret and the bully getting caught. There's a happy ending to this one.

Nice transitions of time and and from scene to scene. It blends in quite well. Seems to last weeks. No spelling or grammar errors found. Voice is good as well and consistent. Love the ending. Good job and keep up the good work!


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Rated: E | (5.0)
What a fun word search to do. As I am on my phone I could find the words but not cross them off. Each one of those subgenres of romance is out there. I would be interested in the Fantasy one. Gothic too. Paranormal might scare me. Good selection and variety. No spelling or grammar errors found. Good job and keep up the good work!
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Review of Cowboy Heaven  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Great pondering about what would cowboy heaven be like if you were to make it. Or when. The details shows true to cowboy dreams ranging from cattle to coffee to rodeo. I imagine there will be something even greater too in heaven. No spelling or grammar errors found. Excellent details. Good job and keep up the good work!


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Review of Spotted Pup  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a lovely poem about Skeet. Raised from a pup on a farm with spots, must be quite popular. Doing hard work with the cowboys for eight years is a long time. Healthy too. Then ends in search for another spotted pup to put in Skeet's place. I hope they succeed. Tone is realistic and good details. Just a few words paints a picture. This poem has a happy ending. No spelling or grammar errors found. Good job and keep up the good work!


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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This captures the coldness of darkness nicely. I shudder to think that there will be more to come. From the description of going unconscious to that of the afterlife then back to being alive awaiting the inevitable, the details are just right. Showing works in this case. I could imagine the cold unfeeling of death as it explores the feeling. No spelling errors found.

"... sky's ..." -> sky is would blend in better but if you feel this matches the voice keep it. I'm only seeing a snippet it looks like.

The rest of the punctuation in the poem is consistent in each stanza so I would just keep it up. Good job and keep up the good work!


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Review of A Favored Season  
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Time for some football fever it looks like as I read this poem. It is short and straight to the point. Since I have been to a game I can relate to the scene. No spelling or grammar errors found.

The opening line brings an image of the stadium I've been to, even though it could be any stadium, and how that stadium became filled with the team colors. Only a section set aside for the opposing team.

Then the second line describes the last game of the season. That couldn't be anymore exciting for the crowd.

The third line describes the team playing against the other team. This sounds like a championship game they are playing and the pressure to win is on.

Fourth line gives a hint of a winning touchdown being made. Might be middle of the game or the end. I don't know. Either way the crowd is pleased.

Finally, the results. The team moves forward from this game to the next level. It may not be their last time after all. It could be down to the championship game. That's inferred.

Accurate details and the strict rules of 7 words per line is followed. Good job and keep up the good work!


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Rated: E | (5.0)
Thank you for entering! The imagery of being homeless on Christmas day is vivid and, despite the hardship and dread of being homeless that day, the speaker managed to find time to sing some Christmas songs. Sheep is a good use of what the conditions are. I imagine the cardboard box wasn't very stable. Good details. No spelling or grammar errors found. Good job and keep up the good work!


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for entry "December 31" 
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Party games are really fun if it is like a board game or pictionary. So throw that in please. Sleeping by midnight- I did that too. Not a favorite thing but just happens.

Good details about the pink elephant. Though hay all over is kind of gross. What a unique way to spend the 31st. Poor dog. At least the elephant got what was coming next. Even if the punishment was a bit harsh. All pink elephants just like that? Now I'm scared.

No spelling or grammar errors found. The message is fitting for the prompts listed below and I see the attitude fitting for the blog challenge as well. Good job and keep up the good work!


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Rated: E | (4.5)
Good start to this story. The first chapter could be rewritten into third person pov to match the rest of the chapters and in past tense. This would help keep things consistent. How you begin the reader expects the same throughout. No spelling or grammar errors found. Great details. I love the setting. And Hysteria is believable in her actions and character. There is danger in the Nether, but she manages to find her way home. Then she looks for resources and runs across an injured wolf. They have great potential together. Good job and keep up the good work!


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Review of The Masked Girl  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Great work with the beginning of this story. Reason I say beginning is because it says to be continued in the end. Anna's feelings is strong towards her father as she visits the grave and then, one night after work, she discovers a superpower after putting on a mask. This led to her seeking her father's journal which is in the basement only to meet Alex the Last Occult Detective. I'm curious if she ends up going to be trained to become an Occult Detective. With the superpowers the gifts from her father gives, it would be a wonderful surprise. Great details. No spelling or grammar errors found. Good job and keep up the good work!


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Rated: E | (5.0)
Excellent work here. There is a lot going on in just those few chapters of Proverbs related to women. It goes without saying and many of them can be applied to me as well. Do I allow the wicked ways interfere with my life or can I learn from them and do the right things? It's hard to do when religions of both parents is conflicting one another.

Keep up with the consistency of labeling the versus. Now that there is free time you can fine tune with the consistency. Great organization on how it is neatly organized and listed with thoughts addressing the verse beneath. Maybe you could italicize the proverb verse that the thoughts are addressing them too to help make it stand out better.

This is a good study book for future reference in case anyone wants to look into proverbs and ask themselves what it would mean to live a life as a good woman. Back in that time they were expected to become wives with many children, but there are some things that could still apply to those who are single too.

Great details. There may have been spelling or grammar errors but I didn't record them. I mainly focused on the content. Way to pull off a nonfiction novel on time and keep up the great work! *Smile*


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