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Great poem! It starts out with a yearning to be together but stuck at a long distance to ending with a joyful reunion and a desire to never be apart again. That is well said with seeing how I've been away from my friend for a while. When we're together again it's always been a joy. This poem could be personal experience. It could be Family too. (A third genre. Your genre picks are good.) No spelling or grammar errors found. Good job and keep up the good work!
Looks like this activity is active and doing great! The prompts look very interesting and fun to read. Now I wonder where the link of the activity is. No spelling or grammar errors found. I would have picked on round 6 to write a story about personally. Sounds crazy fun. Good luck with the next round!
Halloween nears and Halloween Handles appear! This is a perfect opportunity to celebrate in the Witch's Garden. All those spooky handles are of some use. The appearance is easy to read and follow. The contest rules are clear. All you need to do is nominate a Halloween handle. No spelling or grammar errors found.
My favorite part is the nomination. I think 2 times a day wouldn't hurt anymore. The more nominations, the better it is. I love the images and use of emoticons the most. I think that makes this contest stand out. The list looks good too and well kept up to date. Keep on at it! Good job.
This sounds like you write out of experience. It is very deep and personal about your first experience in getting diagnosed breast cancer. It's a good thing you didn't need chemotherapy. What a long process. That would drive me crazy too. The tests alone sounds exhausting. Your details are perfect. The voice and action kept my interest. No spelling or grammar errors found. I personally never had a mammogram. Too young. But I get the idea that this process is done all the time if abnormality shows. Good job and keep up the good work!
Mint serves a lot of things. In this case, it's relaxing and being mindful. I totally agree with you. You followed the prompt well. The poem is free verse which works great. It describes the meditation perfectly without too much detail. No spelling or grammar errors found. I feel like mint does the same thing for me too. I like the description "Mint is the color of early spring.", but all of it is excellent. Good job and keep up the good work!
10 minutes twice! Great puzzles with actions and feelings involved in them. It is quite a frenzy and you know the last shopping deal. Cyber Monday is a great way to spend all of your hard earned money. So, putting that aside. Thanksgiving and Halloween are the major holidays coming up and you included it quite well. Thank you for this piece of action! HH as in Happy Holidays with big spending involved. (Handle = Happy Halloween) Good job and keep up the good work! Don't eat too much candy now, you hear?
The perspective is unique and draws the reader in. I know using I and you language can be jarring together, but this is meant for a certain someone who died and is missed and loved very much. So the you sentences is appropriate. There is much going on with the confessions being made and a promise to visit. Although every day might not be realistic, the idea is achieved to go and visit. Great details and apology. Things that happened in the past can't be changed but the future changes. One right step to move forward is with a visit.
No spelling or grammar errors found. The genre is perfect.
Good work on this flash fiction and keep up the good work!
Good article about Al. Al raises questions about the future- like will authors and writers be replaced by Al writings with the big companies? I doubt that. It takes great writing and even then not all great writing is noticed. There are benefits for some companies to use them. I wouldn't encourage it for school though. It would feel like cheating that way. No grammar or spelling errors found. Good job and keep up the good work!
Great work! Though it fits the prompt it lacks creature characteristics for the contest. The beginning of school is a tough thing to face and the speaker is afraid of being invisible to the teachers. The feelings are genuine and concerned. No spelling or grammar errors found. Keep up the good work!
Excellent poem and what a unique way to introduce the watch. That place sounds great to go to and meet all of those creatures too. It looks like the form is followed. It's a happy discovery right before school. I imagine they would want to do it again. No spelling or grammar errors found. Good job and keep up the great work!
Good mystery with the beginning of school right around the corner. The characters is believable with only focused on Aliz. She wasn't sure if she would like the school until she met Marishka. Both of them were vampires. Great hints of features they had along the way! Good job and keep up the good work!
Great details and sounds like you experienced this. It must've been hard be at your first boot camp. I don't intend to join. The excitement could be felt and dimish quickly. There is a solid plot through out it all. Just like running out of gas. The pressure builds up. Good job and keep up the good work!
Great work with the details and using the familiar poem Twas the Night Before Christmas. Interesting story about the tiny intruder- a mouse. The dogs sure had an adventure and RIP goes to those ornaments. The poem fits the prompt nicely. I don't think it has to rhyme. Only that the words flow smoothly when read out loud. I love this style. No spelling or grammar errors found. Good job and keep up the good work!
Tough one. I think it is plausible. As far as I could tell the terms is used correctly and the protagonist will be in a tough situation. Security will be on high alert.
I do see a crime going on since I think the pump and dump is used without consent. There will be a conflict of interest for doing what would be better. The protagonist will have to lie to avoid being caught and the company may take notice eventually.
Well set up. Now it needs a beginning, middle, and end and you can start writing. The words are unfamiliar but I think I got the idea. No spelling or grammar errors found. Hope your plot is an inspiration.
The flow is smooth in free verse form. The poem starts with the question and then answers it nicely. I love the description of the answer it gives. All of these qualities define a good person. This will cheer your friend up.
I can't think of any suggestions. It looks like you covered everything. Well done.
The main character is a good Samaritan despite being there to rob an apartment. Calling the police to help a lady in need in the middle of doing a crime. The other person had sense to avoid jail. Fits the prompt perfectly. I am curious about what happens next but that might go over the word limit. No spelling or grammar errors found. Good job and keep up the good work.
In just a few short words, this poem speaks a lot. The dragon and rider works hard through the thunderstorm to become the champ before going back to the dragon camp. It does also follow the Terzanelle pattern perfectly. The dragon camp must be filled with dragons and riders alike even if the poem didn't say but gave hints of the camp being alive. No spelling or grammar errors found. Good job and keep up the good work.
Out of a twig a tree grew proud and strong. Looks healthy to me and a great picture too. The haiku tells the story behind the tree perfectly well. It is loved by the planter, in this case your father. I say it is something to be proud of. No spelling or grammar errors found. Good job and keep up the good work!
Great story which introduces a man whose interest is in eating vegan food. To celebrate his birthday, vegan cake is a must. So came the recipe for vegan birthday chocolate cake. It looks pretty yummy. This grandson must be proud to be a vegan. It would be hard to feed a vegan. No spelling or grammar errors found. Good job and keep up the good work!
This is a beautiful poem about a horse who is steadfast and loyal. Blanko must have been one happy horse looking forward to those walks along the forest road. I can imagine he'd be fast enough for a Derby too. Nicely written. No spelling or grammar errors found. Good job and keep up the good work!
The demon cat sounds very mean. Then again the daughter doesn't seem to have much luck either. The narration is very simple and to the point. The demon cat won the house for as long as it remained alive. Breaking the family up. No spelling or grammar errors found. Good job and keep up the good work!
This is a realistic war scene about Oleksander and the Russian. Oleksander struggles to survive as the Russian attacks. Until finally his comrade comes to the rescue. A photo of a little girl with a teddy bear was the only Intel. Great details involving the main character action and reaction to the Russian. The language fits right in. The place and scene fits well too. No spelling or grammar errors found. Good job and keep up the good work!
Thank you for entering! I'm reviewing for I Write. It's all about the wonderful sounds of Spring and the joy that it shares. I love every line of it- it is well balanced. Spring is a time of celebration as well as time for new life in nature. I see the rhythm flow smoothly. The details are carefully laid. No spelling or grammar errors found. Good job and keep up the good work!
Tense moment going on here. Noth and his guards are capturing intruders and the intruders keep calling themselves Jesse Forster. Until the big one captures Noth and frees the others. I wonder what will happen next and if Noth will ever get free. No spelling or grammar errors found. Great details. Good job and keep up the good work!
Marge seems to be having memory problems here. The day starts out her expecting somebody. Only cars were banned five years ago. Then breakfast came and they didn't have bacon. While coffee brewed she wanted to go to the beach and it was too dangerous. So nothing went her way that Tuesday. Great twists. No spelling or grammar errors found. Good job and keep up the good work!
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