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I look for how well the story or poem flows and if there are things out of place. I also check for grammar and spelling errors.
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Sci-fi, Fantasy, Speculative Fiction
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Rated: E | (5.0)
It is so hard to choose from. I see writing contests is the overwhelming response and yes, sometimes I participate in that myself. I love the variety on here and will be able to help you out if you are in need of more opinions. Good luck with hosting a contest based on the results. I may join myself.*Smile*
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for entry "Invalid Entry
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I think this poem is clever and easy to read. I found a discrepancy between syllables in poem and prompt but don't let that discourage you. I love how simple and expressive your poem is. Your love is there even when the other person makes mistakes or confuse you. I think that's how God is too. Good job and keep up the good work!

"you exasperate" This is 5 syllables instead of 6. I double counted. You can try "you do exasperate" or "you can exasperate" instead to make it 6 according to the prompt.


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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
And now, for a well deserved review for the challenge. First of all, I'm going to say it's amazing and there are so many options available. It's hard to keep track of contests but you do it good here. The rules are quite simple and there the placing of participants and past contests is well thought out. It is easy to navigate. I'd say the set up is just right. The current contests going on top and past contests listed underneath participants.

Suggestion: "CURRENT CONTESTS" could be in a darker color so that it could stand out more.

I think this challenge is worth joining and giving a try. And could always ask for help on months where all the contests are closed or invalid. Good job and keep up the good work!
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Why did I not hear of you before Schnujo? This activity is awesome and I am sure you'll gain more people in October too. The exercises are well thought out and even if I don't use it all it helps me to understand my world better. I just need to remember to check recently updated items when the time comes around. No spelling or grammar errors found. Keep up the good work!
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Review of Didn't Matter  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Feelings of loneliness and hurt could be imagined as I read this poem. Being abused really takes a toll in real life. There is help available to think of but the feelings of hurt and loneliness really interrupts the thought of getting help. No spelling or grammar issues found. It is a sad poem but someone out there would care. Good job and keep up with the good work.


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Rated: E | (5.0)
The message on how important it is to pick the right friends is important. Be careful to choose your path wisely. The light will always be there even in the midst of darkness. There will always be hope with the right allies. There are no spelling or grammar errors. I think the description works really well. Good job and keep up the good work.


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Review of That Chair There  
Rated: E | (5.0)
What a heart felt poem. The twist is a surprise to have the person be turned into a chair. They would feel bored trapped as a chair. The poem is consistent with no spelling or grammar errors. I think it's a cute poem. I like how the mother did find a perfect chair, but not when the child stepped over the line and turned into a chair. Good job and keep up the good work!


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Rated: E | (5.0)
So came here just to rate the calendar. One rating is lonely. There is a solid mix of developing plot, characters, and setting. I like how it's organized with plot coming first then the characters giving tools to build a solid outline and world. Keep up the good job!


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Rated: E | (5.0)
I think this is a great way to motivate yourself and others to focus on being healthy. You can't do it alone, or else it's not that easy to do. Your goal is clear and easy to follow. Weight loss is a challenge for me because the scale goes up and down all the time. So far I lost 20 and need 100 to go. I may cheer you on as well as the others. Keep up the good work!
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Review of To my love  
Rated: E | (5.0)
My first thought is of confusion when I first read "To my love you are evil" but then the further I read the more I understood why. This is a different approach to romance since it involves separation. The speaker still loves on despite being apart. No spelling or grammar errors found. Good job and keep up the good work!


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Rated: E | (4.5)
The pandemic continues and the speaker goes from getting a face shield to riding on an airplane to Varanasi. She becomes claustrophobia at security check and looks at The Scream on her phone on the ride to Varanasi. There is special significance with The Scream. Good work with the story. Keep on writing!

"...even the dreaded “c” word!
Today, it happened during..." Return after word!

i should be I. It appears several times.


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Review of What Price Honor  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello! I see this poem in the perspective of a soldier who fought for freedom of their country and how they feel. It sounds a little lonely but with pride too. I love the choice of words painting a picture. I will say the effort is worth it to think about what is stood for. No spelling or grammar errors found. Keep up the good work!


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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Comments:

*Dialog* A dream began with a proposal, but Kailey started choking and passed out. Then she dreamed about burning the house down before waking up to find it being a dream within a dream. Then she met Quincy and this time she said yes without choking.

Contents:

*Stardavid* The scene flows smoothly and the dream is recognized when Kailey wakes up.

*Dragon* Love is in the air but something happens in the dream.

*Tree* In a bedroom until the very end.

*Person* Quincy and Kailey

What I like:

*Heart*In reality she didn't choke when Quincy proposed.

Suggestions:

*Swordr* No spelling or grammar errors found.

Overall Opinion:

*Pumpkin* Great job on this story. Dreams can be a bit weird and it shows through. In reality things happens different than the dreams. Keep up the great work!


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Review of Raindrops  
Rated: E | (5.0)
The flow of this poem is soothing as rain falls down gently with the smell of rain filling the air. There is the enjoyment of playing in the mud and feeling warm in the house. There is consistent rhythm that fits perfectly. I enjoyed the imagery. Keep up the good work!


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Review of Frozen  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Comments:

*Dialog* This is about Frozen from the movie, her elegance and beauty. Great details captured, I can picture her in my mind. I've seen the movie so I know what she looks like. Her skills are also captured nicely too.

Contents:

*Stardavid* This poem has rhyming at the end in a pattern I noticed. ABAB

*Dragon* Feelings of awe and inspiration is in the air.

*Person* Speaker refers to Frozen and Elsa from the movie.

What I like:

*Heart* "Like magic you appeared."

Suggestions:

*Swordr* No spelling or grammar errors found.

Overall Opinion:

*Pumpkin* Great work with this poem. I can feel the inspiration and awe about watching Frozen (character). It's chilly and refreshing. Keep up the good work!


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Review of Dylan and Sophia  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Comments:

*Dialog* Dylan is having a rough time with his marriage and fell in love with Sophia when he went to do a party gig. Sophia had a husband. The two went along with their lives until one day Dylan saved Sophia from a car. Then it turned out Sophia was getting a divorce and could be with him. Happy ending.

What I like:

*Heart* They ended up married to each other and Sophia's son was enjoying it.

Suggestions:

*Swordr* No spelling and grammar errors found.

Overall Opinion:

*Pumpkin* Good work in showing their feelings through the things they did. It turned out to be in Dylan's favor. I think this is well written. Keep up the good work!


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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Comments:

*Dialog* Andreas waits to have his newborn in the world. This would normally be a joyful moment, only no emotion can be shown. They go through the ceremony and he has the child.

Suggestions:

*Swordr* No spelling or grammar errors found.

Overall Opinion:

*Pumpkin* Good details and I get the feeling everything had to be done emotionless. There is the sacrifice of bringing new life into the world. I could see vampires doing this at that time period. Keep on writing!


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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Comments:

*Dialog* Jane seems to have ignored the warning signs from the very beginning when Stan mistook her for Vicki. She stands for her feelings and doesn't let anything move her.

Contents:

*Stardavid* The plot is consistent as Jane reaches her peak and then her downfall.

*Dragon* Love is in the air until Vicki broke the news.

*Person* Vicki was head and tails over Stan but her friends knew better.

Suggestions:

*Swordr* No spelling and grammar errors found.

Overall Opinion:

*Pumpkin* This chapter shows the highlight and downfall of Jane's feelings toward Stan as she gets involved in a relationship with him. I wonder what will happen next after the relationship is broken. Keep up the good work!


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Rated: E | (5.0)
Comments:

*Dialog* The night is cool, but every soft touch brings warmth. The romance is well thought out and consistently shown through the details. I noticed there is rhyming involved as well. The lovers stand beneath the Brooklyn Bridge.

Contents:

*Dragon* The feeling of warmth flows through the love the character feels despite the cool night.

*Person* The character is focused on the person he loves and thinking in the moment.

What I like:

*Heart* "A perfect night, a night of bliss,"

Suggestions:

*Swordr* No spelling or grammar errors found.

Overall Opinion:

*Pumpkin* Good job. The writing shows the perspective of the lover and how he felt being with his other underneath the Brooklin Bridge. Keep up the good work!


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Rated: E | (4.0)
Comments:

*Dialog* I like how Carole sticks to her dream of eating continuously, even if it meant getting into trouble with her work. Just wishing upon a star made a difference in bringing her dream to reality. The entire story is very short and to the point.

Contents:

*Stardavid* Carole sticks to her dream of eating continuously. It is consistent throughout the story as her dream becomes a reality.

*Dragon* Carole is tired of her everyday life and longs to have her dream being made into a reality. She gets excited when her dreams becomes a reality.

*Web1* Follow your heart and passion and not give up.

*Tree* This takes place in a town from Carole's work, to her drive home, and then the food court and cake shop. The setting is consistent.

*Person* Carole is driven by her dream of eating continuously with a passion. She has one goal in mind.

What I like:

*Heart* Carole's dream becomes a reality when she becomes the blobwoman.

Suggestions:

*Boxcheck* Maybe add the scene of Carole taking half the donuts before chapter 1 to add suspense.

*Boxcheck* Add more emotion in some areas, like showing eagerness to eat more.

*Swordr* Chapter 1: "'Don't you give me your old sweet talk trick'" needs a comma at end

*Swordr* Chapter 1: "'...I'll achieve my dream in one way or another'" add a . in end

*Swordr* Chapter 1: "'I wish there was someway...'" somehow (unless it's a word in British English too)

*Swordr* Chapter 1: "'...that I could just eat all the time'" needs . at end


*Swordr* Chapter 2: "'...I should've known it was only a fantasy'" needs . at end

*Swordr* Chapter 3: "'...This is amazing!!!', 'I'm becoming Carole 2.0'" remove the comma between amazing and I'm and put comma after 2.0

*Swordr* Chapter 4: "'...That's so cool'" add . or ! after cool

*Swordr* Chapter 5: "'... as I’ve not been here a while'" add . after while

*Swordr* Chapter 5: "'...what you’ve given me master'" add , after master

*Swordr* Chapter 6: "'...that massive behind I’d developed'" add , after developed

*Swordr* Chapter 6: "'... worth it “Thank you master for everything that you’ve given me'" add . after it and me

*Swordr* Chapter 6: "'...whatever I want like this'" add . after this

*Swordr* Chapter 6: "'... that there’s a new girl in town.... add " after town

Overall Opinion:

*Pumpkin* This story shows a lot of potential. Instead of being the point of view of a villain, Carole is the main character and society being against her instead. I think more emotional details could really make her stand out. Great work!
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Comments:

*Dialog* A puppeteer fell in love with the president and then a pandemic struck the country with jeopardized the president's marriage. I think this story is well thought out and had a happy ending in the end. The twist, in the end, was pulled off really well.

Contents:

*Stardavid* Victoria works with puppets and stood up for the president no matter what happened. The views and scenes flowed smoothly from one transaction to another.

*Dragon* There was love in the air for Victoria and, when she pushed that aside, it turned out the president loved her too.

*Web1* When the pandemic struck, love stood all the way through.

What I like:

*Heart* Victoria became a First Lady in the end.

Suggestions:

*Swordr* No spelling or grammar errors found.

*Pumpkin* The story turned out to be interesting and the obstacles that occurred when the pandemic struck were clear. Victoria is a good character who ended up having her dreams come true. Good job!
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
*Dialog* The feel of magicians and ghosts communicating to each other is consistent through the various forms of poems grouped into one poem. I like the mystery it shows as the tarot cards seem to have an important influence on the speaker.

Contents:

*Stardavid* Made of different poems and sayings and consistent with the voice.

*Dragon* An eerie feeling as the description could represent a witch or a ghost, depending on the speaker.

What I like: The clever use of words written backwards before forwards at one point like a tarot card reading.

*Heart* "The past is a phantom/ the future a siren..."

Suggestions:

*Swordr*No spelling or grammar errors found.

*Pumpkin* Nice job with this poem. The use of different poems and saying is well done. The mystery of the tarot cards is intriguing. There is a lot to be explored.
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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
I got lots of novels and have started practicing beta reading other books... I'm just at the beginner level! *PepperJalapeno* Never been dedicated to editing extensively after writing before (writing pattern going by November- write. December to October- procrastinate.) I am practicing. A set up of peers giving feedback to each other over novels would be perfect! Keep up the good work!


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for entry "~ Am I A Writer? ~
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Great job with this story. The process of becoming a writer is detailed nicely starting from the calling to write to actually becoming an author. This story makes an inspiration for others who might consider the answer to the calling to write. God works in mysterious ways. Keep up the good work!


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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Comments: This poem is unique from the others as it focuses on the results of sin. Where wickedness will one day be. It's crushing for many but it's true. This is the direction everyone is headed. But forgiveness is our way out.

Contents: The wicked are heartless and cast out of the real world. As this happens light becomes darkness. Where they enter netherworld, watch out for evil twins.

Spelling/Grammar: No errors found.

Overall Comments: Good job! I consider this a darker kind of poem but you pulled it off well. That verse is very direct and to the point and the message that verse had came through in this poem. Keep up the good work!


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