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Review by dragonwoman
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hi Vicky Vale: I was looking for a good item to review and was captured by your title. This is my kind of story. What better group of assassins that maids in rich households? A distaff branch of the French Foreign Legion no less.
Your descriptions are vivid and I found no spelling or grammatical errors.
Well done!


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Review of Riding the Blimp  
for entry "Why I Write
Review by dragonwoman
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Jack, somehow I missed the call. How do I get to the group you formed?
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Review of The Zealot  
Review by dragonwoman
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
I laughed at the final line! Good one Huntersmoon. I was happy to see you used my word for today.
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Review of Tomorrow Now  
Review by dragonwoman
Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi jdennis: You may have a point in this tale. By the time a world is clean and habitable again, those who fled its toxic environment may not live to re-inhabit it. Although chilling and sad, it has too much truth in it to be dismissed.


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Review by dragonwoman
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hi hullabaloo22:

When looking for something to review, I found 'The Water Sprite's Queen'
It seems that there is a queen chosen for the water sprite at regular intervals. It is believed they perish as they never come home again. Annaleine, Cressa's sister is chosen. There is a feast, and false rejoicing. She is made compliant with alcohol then bound up in white for the journey in a boat.
Because the sprite lives in water, it is assumed his brides die while going to him. No one has proof of this, but it is a natural assumption.
The tale is sad, but interesting none the less. I found no typos, spelling or other errors.
Good work!


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Review of The Witch's Game  
Review by dragonwoman
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Luarel: The title of this piece, "The Witch's Game" intrigued me. The action and adventure kept me reading. I would say my favorite part was finding out that Lyra was the niece of Morganna.
Although I found no typos, spelling errors or grammar glitches, I have to admit I found it hard to read as there were no spaces between paragraphs or dialogue.
All in all, a wonderful read,
Good work!


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Review of Cat and Dog  
Review by dragonwoman
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Beholden: Since I am animal lover, 'Cat And Dog' caught my eye when searching for likely piece to review. I enjoy tales of how things came to be in the world, so I was happy read that this was such a story. It seems odd to think of a dog having retractable claws. Envy is a terrible thing and this case lead to a feud that lasted generations. In the end, retractable claws seemed to have not been such a good thing for the cat as it restricted his diet. I found no spelling, typo or grammar errors.
Continue the good work!


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Review by dragonwoman
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Slam: The title "Why I wear real clothes" caught my eye immediately. It seems like your conjurer has the right idea. When you do large spells daily it seems only prudent to save as much of your arcane pool as you can.

I noticed no spelling errors, but as I read I just kept seeing the whole thing as dialogue. With dialogue, it's important to use " ". In long dialogues, the first paragraph usually has the quotes at the beginning and the end. After that, it is acceptable to put quote marks only at the beginning of each paragraph until you reach the last one, then do as you did with the first paragraph (add a quote at the beginning and one at the end.
It was an interesting read. Keep up the good work.


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Review by dragonwoman
Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi Phil Thomas: I got so used to reviewing during the anniversary, I decided to keep at it. 'Paris for the Last Time' was a very appropriate title considering what your main character went through. I can understand why he didn't stay in London for long either! I don't travel abroad too much for the same kind of reason. Being stranded in an unfamiliar country where you don't speak the language must be horrendous!
One thing that could have made the story pop, was using some dialogue, even if he was only talking to himself. For instance, "I'll make one last attempt to use the ATM" he muttered." Talking to himself would be just what he would be doing by then!
I found no grammar or spelling errors though.
Good words!


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Review of HELLO  
Review by dragonwoman
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Ry: See what I did there? This was a very touching story, proving that someone older can affect your life so easily. I would put your note at the end in the section where you describe the story(under the title box, when you are entering your story in your port.) It seems obvious to me that you may have done what the main character did at some point. My favorite part was the last two lines:"I did what Ann taught me. I said hello. The idea that Ann's influence will go on in the main character's life is presented successful by him seeing a man on Ann's bench and stopping to say hello. I found no obvious spelling or typo or grammar mistakes.
Both sad and cheering, is the general mood I find in this tale.
A great read!


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Review of The Letter  
Review by dragonwoman
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Jacky: I love this! Especially when the reader finds out that both the husband and wife are trying to pull a fast one on each other. Dan is trying to lie his way out of an affair and Cynthia is using his lover, Tina as a way to clean out the accounts and be gone before her husband gets the divorce papers she left for him. I noticed no spelling, typos or grammar glitches.
Devious!


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Review by dragonwoman
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Prosperous Snow:
At last, a poem I can relate to! It stirred up vivid memories of my own Christmases past and present (except for the fruitcake, never was a favorite in my family.) The pictures this poem makes are wonderful to me!
I enjoyed it enormously!


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Review of By Any Other Name  
Review by dragonwoman
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi Beholden: The title of this story so intrigued me, I had to read and review it. I'm sure many people have found themselves hating their birth names. That was the case for Ruby. But fate wasn't done with her yet. She agrees to date a man named Hugh Stoneman, only to find out he also had change his name when he changed his physical appearance. I noticed no spelling, typos or obvious grammar problems.
I really enjoyed this one, good work!


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Review of The Magic Shop  
Review by dragonwoman
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hello Lesley May in 2195747: I enjoyed this tale of a magic shop. It is well written and I was surprised by the Grandma's practical magic. To encourage him to save his money, she convinced the male customer to use just a drop from a bottle. But the key was, for it to work, he had to stop smoking and drinking. As the white witch explained, once he did those two things he would have the money to get married and even live long enough to see his grandchildren. I found no spelling or grammar errors in my reading.
Well done!


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Review by dragonwoman
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi OldRoses: This story caught my attention and I had to read it. Furball and his posse are my kind of pets. I've felt the touch of Reinforcement paw myself frequently. You have managed to show the many personalities of three cats thoroughly. I smiled through the whole thing! Feline Treat Monsters do attack but in very different ways. I was charmed and amused by this story. I found no grammar or spelling errors either.


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Review by dragonwoman
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Hazel (1): In my search for something to review, I found your chilling story 'The Art May Take Your Heart'. You were very good at building suspense and horror.
Just a few things you might want to think about. The huge space before the blurb about the artist is distracting because it's so large.
I noticed you did well with the artist's last name, except you used an 'e' instead of 'o' once in the sentence when she realizes the curator is the ghost artist.

In the phrase "nearly faint of fear" you might try 'from' instead of 'of'. In 'feeling very gullible, perhaps 'vulnerable' would flow better than gullible. 'With a face of fear' seems a little awkward. Maybe 'a face full of fear' or a fearful face would work better.
I have to say I write horror but I don't often read it, since I've been known to have nightmares like your young character Milly. But this was one I really enjoyed.



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Review of The Irony of It  
Review by dragonwoman
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Ruth Draves: Looking something to review, I stumbled across your flash. Boy, can I relate to this character's frustration with the word limit and some prompts! Every now and then I'm stumped for where to go with a prompt too.
It seems the character's frustration is causing some real life problems. She probably shouldn't cook in her state. At least her husband is helpful, not sure why he doesn't finish meal prep for her, I know mine would!
I found the humor relatable and the piece had no obvious grammar or sentence structure glitches. As I write this I'm still smiling especially at the long story short comment by the husband.
So enjoyable, keep writing


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Review of The Waiting Room  
Review by dragonwoman
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi amateur40: When I read you weren't getting reviews, I thought I'd stop by.

This poem is very touching and a little sad. The child's spirit was panicking as it didn't understand where it was and thought it should get back its family and friends. I'm a firm believer in the heavenly waiting room.

I have written several stories, one that has an angel character who supervises the waiting room. Gabriel was kind and loving as I picture him to be with all souls but especially with children.

The poem was easy to read and very descriptive. Thank you, I enjoyed it.


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Review by dragonwoman
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi TJ: This story made me chuckle, then outright laugh. I like the way you used a list to show what you did and what happened, like a recipe which I'm sure was your intent. I do hope you consoled your kitties with bits of baloney from that sandwich.
I have had several cooking and baking disaster too, so I know of which you speak.


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Review by dragonwoman
Rated: E | (5.0)
235th Entry -
Once upon a time there was a magician named Marvelous Melnish. Everyday, he would appear in a new place and time. But he never stayed long and always disappeared again before he was ready to. Because of that, he was never able to solve his ongoing problem that stemmed from the time he made himself disappear at Carnegie Hall.Until finally, he just gave up and continued to time travel until he could find someone who could help him get back to his own place and time permanently.
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Review by dragonwoman
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello G. Goughnour: I love this short but sweet note. In fact it answers a few questions I've had over the years. Excellent work!


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Review of A Little Drunk  
Review by dragonwoman
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Jacky: I found this story heartwarming. As they say, there is someone for everyone one and all it took was two not quite sober people and a street light. Harry had a unique pick up maneuver I must say.
I think my favorite part was Ann introduced herself and held out her hand. When Harry took it there was actual sparks.
Small glitch: I think you meant stinky man, not sticky; but then again he may be a sloppy drunk.


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Review of Jilly Waves  
Review by dragonwoman
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Jacky: The title of this tale caught my fancy. Since I have a lot nieces and nephews both regular and great, I see how the main character might want a fence and some privacy!

I was also a preschool teacher for a few years, so that kind of continuous questioning was not uncommon. Even I didn't expect the ending although I guess logically that would be Jilly's next step. The only advantage to Jilly at the upstairs window is unless she can open it or it is regularly opened, she can't questioning incessantly.

The tale was well told and I could find no obvious spelling or grammatical errors. Thank you for sharing and congrats on the win.


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Review by dragonwoman
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Paul ~ D: I found your story in the Read and Review section. The title sounded like the beginning of some medieval jester's latest joke and I was intrigued. As I started reading, I smiled. About half way through, I laughed and I was lost! Your characters sound a lot like some of mine, they never want to do as they're told or they aren't even in the story and they butt in! My muse often has no control!
I found a couple of glitches: Granted the mantis does prey on things, but its actual name is 'praying mantis' because of the way it holds its front legs.
Instead of 'to' earnestly, I believe you mean 'too' again as too much.
Otherwise it was very humorous and enjoyable to me.
Of course, this is one writer's opinion so you are free to take it or leave it.


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Review by dragonwoman
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Thanks Angus, I have seen the movie several times and enjoyed it each time.
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