I think you make the narration very picturesquely, and I can literally see the story happening in my mind's eye. I think there's a tiny bit of flow lacking, though, between paragraphs. Overall, found it an enchanting read.
Wow, that was beautiful. I loved the ending where you say 'love what everyone dreads', because its so perfect and fitting. I'm not going to exceed 250 characters, because I don't want you to think I commented just for GPs, but it was amazing!
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