I liked this piece. The slowly building of tension and the obsessive perception growing until it took over the character was well done. The final sentence is a great ending connecting her thoughts and the mundane world. Keep writing.
I really like this piece. I've written some tanka and know the discipline it takes to write it The imagery is great in conveying a coherent scene.
Keep it up.
A great piece. It does a great job evoking the common experience of most folk when they find a place that satisfies their needs with positive feelings. My wife and my first place was three small rooms and bath in the upstairs of a modest home but for us it then it was great.
The structure as well as content works as well.
Thanks for reminding me of that time and place.
Keep writing.
I this piece. The kind of reflection you express caught me and carried me through the same kind of experience. I lost my wife of 47 years in 20 to complications of COVID. Good and bad the thoughts carry me back as you've expressed so well.
Thank you for your view along that road.
I really like your poem. I understand what you mean. I lost my wife in 2020 I remember the place you are. It gets better but takes many tears.
As Gandalf said in The Return of the King:
"I will not say do not weep, For not all tears are evil
I know it very well
I really enjoyed this piece. The structure and word choices are great. Sorrow can sometimes be overwhelming. I'm 72 and I've weathered a lot of sorrow. We must go on somehow and we do.
I know from personal experience that is does not disappear but becomes part of you. Those we've lost are always inside us as we go on.
Keep writing.
I really loved this poem. The brief lines work well and help create the image into an intense emotion that can be described with the image of a moment. As a widower myself I can understand the way such moments can paint abiding love.
I really liked this piece. The image to image rhythm draws the reader on. I am a fan of Japanese and Chinese poetry for their brevity constructing a told image. Great work keep writing.
I really like this piece. I have an attic like that although most of mine is in my head. It's even better since you were obviously responding to prompts. I believe we all have some of those things in our heads. For me such things are a dominant of what lead me to a lot what leads me to poetry.
Keep it up and keep writing.
I really enjoyed this piece. The controlled form demands careful word choice and precise executions all of which is done well here. It also expresses the concise imagery that is the sought for meaning of the piece. Well done keep writing I hope to see more of your work.
I really liked this poem. The comparing of the enjoyment to that of music was very apt and holding the work together is done very well throughout. Keep writing.
Great interpretation of a supernatural experience. I had my own experience long ago, different but I felt that timid awe of realization. I would never doubt that such things occur and often dismissed out of hand. A well drawn scene. Keep writing/
Wonderful poem. Rebuilding oneself after that kind of break-up is huge. Word choice and flow through the piece is great and tells the tale emotionally as well as moving the reader into what you were expressing. Keep your head up and keep following your muse and keep writing.
Enjoying military stories set in a very specific era. This captures the mechanical workings of the aircraft explaining the maneuvers and the consequences. Great exploration of combat and its results And baron's thoughts and pride. Keep writing.
Great piece. Love is so rare one should embrace it. Great expression of the difficulties and the love intertwining. Take it from a man who found his true love, but unopposed by society, just her family. But I know that love is worth it wherever one finds it. Keep Writing.
Great poem. Your demonstration of a lg happy marriage affect me because I had 47 years with my soulmate. I lost her in 20 to covid before they had a treatment for it. But a litany of moments like yours sustain me now. Hold onto them. Keep writing.
Wonderful piece. The feeling of being overwhelmed by worrying about too many things at the same time really struck an emotional chord for me. I've medical issues and I feel I need to get my affairs in order, have cats who are over ten years old whose health concerns me, and run a household.
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