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Rated: E | (3.0)
Dear Rima,

Nice account. There is a good grasp of the actual science behind the story, and I liked that this was told from the POV of Venus. There is a liberal use of literary license, e.g. Earth did not name the land masses continents, man did. However, that is okay. I did find a few mistakes and can send you a word by word edit if you should so desire.

Keep writing!

Taher


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Review of Writing.Com 101  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Dear Storymistress,

Your instructions were up to the mark, and I was able to set up my offsite email from my Android Phone without any trouble. I appreciate the trouble you and your team have taken to enable this very useful feature. Thank you very much.

Dr. Taher
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Review of Death Wink  
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
Dear Kotaro

Thank you for sharing a well-written and unusual story with us. I am a complete stranger when it comes to Japan, and your story, with its visible underbelly, showed me a face of Japan I would not really care to see if I visited the country as a peace-loving law-abiding tourist!

The particulars of the game that your item shared with us were a first-time for me, so I really enjoyed reading them. The beginning and the body of the item were strong and compelled us to read further. In contrast, the end was a little timid and more of an epilogue rather than a shocker. Perhaps you might want to trim the ending and leave the readers to guess what happened to the survivors. Just my suggestion.

Dr. Taher
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Dear Crissy ,

I am sorry your request to me to review this item expired already. I am currently not very active on WDC as I am busy with offline work. However, it was a pleasure to go through this poem. Your doctor and your patient are both sketched very well. However, the philosophical answer that the child gives at the end is a bit out of character for the understanding level of the child ... yet, the message to the reader was clear and loud and the sarcasm well captured by you.

In real life, most doctors would not see a child without the presence of an elder relative, most often one of the parents. Secondly, I have yet to come across a doctor who would shun a patient, especially if he were a kid, just because he did not have enough money to cover the consultation. May be I live in an Utopian world, but there! That is just my opinion.

Thank you for sharing this cute poem with the readers. God Bless.

- drtaher


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Review of Is It Worth It?  
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Rated: ASR | (3.5)
Dear BIG BAD WOLF Is Merry! ,

You made me cry! What a lovely ode to parenthood. I could not detect any major interruptions of flow, mistakes of syntax, or any other errors. The poem read more like a movie, it took me down a journey of over 40 years ... wonderful.

Be blessed. Yes, it is worth every bit. Write on!

Dr. Taher
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Review of Whistle  
Rated: 18+ | (3.5)
Dear {suser;hope75},

Thank you for sharing this eerie story with us. Although there was no direct dialogue or interesting punctuations, the flow of the story was maintained well and you did a good job of it by describing the events in a very logical sequence. The fate of the two main protagonists of the story was lamentable, but that is exactly what a reader like me would appreciate.

There were a few errors here and there .... and if you wish, i can point them out to you in a subsequent mail.

Taher
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Dear SWPoet

What a moving essay. Rising from the ashes like a Phoenix really rounded off a well-written reprise on parenting a child as well as managing a nation. The ruse of metaphor worked well here, and I enjoyed your periodic jumps from simple parenting of a child to parenting, guiding and managing a nation with some semblance of control, albeit not too restrictive.

Thanks for sharing this with us. On behalf of "Team India, my best wishes for a win in Round 1 of PWW.

Taher
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Dear SWPoet ,

Hi. I am Taher, and it is a pleasure to return to your port after a long long time. Being a member of "Team India for PWW, I was curious to see what your team had churned out, and when I finished reading this poem, I realised that our team's poem is indeed up against stiff competition from yours. A poet emerges, pencil poised like a weapon from the darkness and hiding ... wow. What a strong image!

Wish you all the best in the Round.

Dr. Taher
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Dear Sarah ,

Congratulations on a very well-written tale. You used the prompt very effectively, and the story itself was hard-hitting and spoke a lot about the justice system, the education ministry, the prisons, and the corrupted people of the country you belong to. I wish you good luck in the contest! Do return to PWW and take a look at "Team India's entries as well.

Dr. Taher
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Dear very thankful .

Hi, This is Taher. I was called to your portfolio from Project Write World, of which I am a member, representing Team India. This is a poem full of hope. I really thought the poet was addressing God, and yet, the lack of UPPER case while addressing Him made me think that perhaps the poet was addressing someone else, someone more human. The question then begs the answer as to why the poet expected a human to rescue him/her from the hell that he/she was going through.

Perhaps you can explain this to me.

Additionally, I think that it might help the readers to know exactly what a "Rondelet" is so that they can review the poem from its artistic point of view as well.

Thank you for sharing the poem with us, and be Blessed.

- Taher
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Review of Eyes  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hello, dear friend, SOM .... long time no see. I have been inactive on wdc since the past 2 years. Returning now to read and perhaps to write some stuff. This pi poem is well done. The significant referral to Death as black eyes that see into a house are reminders of the feelings you must have had when you were ill. I am sure you are all right now from whatever you had in the recent past. Take care and be blessed.

Taher
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Dear Doctor,

Thank you for referring us to your article. I think I may have read it in its earlier avatar, but might not have rated it at that time. The February 2012 update, in my humble opinion, adds nothing more to the article than what is already stated earlier by you.

This article will not be taken seriously by readers (read patriotic American citizens) because they will, as is usual for them, continue to bury their heads in the sand and dream of how great their nation is. To make impact, you will have to provide genuine references rather than base it on "this is what I learned from my economist friends" type of reference. Why not do more indepth research and come up with references to support more of what you have stated (I do acknowledge that you have provided some references, but these are not enough). Try and avoid Wiki references, American references will be best, as the citizens of USA will believe only their own experts.

I think you need to explain why India and China are still doing all right in spite of the crisis in the US and Europe. You have mentioned this in passing when you said that they are the beneficiaries of the demands for goods and services ... but I think that, to a large extent, this may be, at least in the case of India, also due to more prudent savings-based policies of Reserve Bank of India and a more strict personal code of financial conduct that Indian citizens still possess ... although the mall culture is threatening to overwhelm the large Indian middle class and putting them in danger of a crisis too.

To sum up: a great aticle, Needs more references to lend credibility. Needs further material to explain why Asian countries have escaped going down with the WCW.

Thank you for sharing this point of view with us.

-drtaher
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Review of Doing My Part  
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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
Dear Kenzie

Hello from an old friend who has been truant from the site for nearly a year. It was a pleasure to visit your port through the "Random Read" button.

Your item is over 9 years old, but its relevance to environment is fresh even today. However, and I say this with knowledge, most of today's newspapers are made from recycled paper and not as many trees are cut down for them as, say, what used to be the case a decade ago. Perhaps you would have grasped this fact as well. I do not know if you continue to not buy newspapers even today. If you don't, I appreciate your resolve and tenacity. If you do (buy them, that is), I do not think it matters for the reason I shared with you above.

I liked your telling of your parental history in respect of them purchasing and perusing the papers every single day, and how you went about a detailed reading and how you used the information to score brownie points with your girl friends in those days. It was extremely enjoyable to read that.

Thank you for allowing us to read and review your work.

-drtaher

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello, katwoman45 ,

I am really overwhelmed to read this immensely wonderful poem. You have a felicity to tell simple things in a very nice way. Euphemism, metaphor, alliteration, simile, you have used such lovely language that I could not but use these superlative phrases for you.

Anything to criticise? None.

The verse that expands on her past experiences (There had been other sacrifices ... hear) was my favourite one as it told of miseries indescribable and yet told much more than it did in those 25 odd words.

Write On!

-drtaher

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Review of The rain and I  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Dear Vindhya/Jaya,

Hi! I am Taher and I came to your item through the Reviews page. This is an interesting take on Rain. I must say that your poem allowed me to look for the Succour within my soul as well.

Title, rating, genres and brief description:

Almost perfect. In the sense it has been used, I would substitute the word "finding" with "find".

Contents of this item:

An introspecting item, it describes how rain opens up the mind and helps find happiness. I was a bit confused by the dual image of a happy soul and tear stained lids. Perhaps you could make the last image positive too.

Beginning and Ending lines:

Nothing much to say about both these lines. The ending is good.

Flow and rhythm:

The poem flows easily enough.

Format, spacing, indenting, etc.:

No suggestions here.

Grammar and composition:

You might want to change the spelling of succor to succour - the better one.

What things I liked:

I liked the imagery and your descriptions of what rain does to various aspects of life.

What things I did not like:

Nothing that I did not like, so *Thumbsup* from me!

Suggestions on improvement:

Already given above. You are free to either apply those or not, they are only suggestions!

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Review of A Fresh Start  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Dear

Hi! I am Taher and I came to your item through The "Reviews" page. Did you actually send this poem to your wife? And what was the result, if I may be so bold as to ask? As this is a personal poem, I have decided not to even look for errors of grammar, rhyming or syntax. Your heart it is that is speaking to your beloved, and so be it. This is also the reason I am rating it with FIVE *Star* !

Title, rating, genres and brief description: Perfect!

Contents of this item:

This is a sincere heart-felt poem and says what it has to say in beautifully designed lines. Most of the lines rhyme well too, and give a sense of clean, unadulterated, old-fashioned romance mingled with common sense and a feeling of maturity that belies the years.

Beginning and Ending lines:

They are really super, and I don't think anyone can improve these!

Flow and rhythm:

Very nice flow, and the idea that the poet is willing to let bygones be bygones, as well as willing to swear that he will not pursue past mistakes nor awaken ghosts of past problems, is fantastic.

Format, spacing, indenting, etc.: and
Grammar and composition:


All nicely done.


What things I liked:

Most importantly, the fact that you don't mind publicly writing about such a personal topic. And the fact that there is nothing here but honesty and loyalty from a soldier to his wife.

What things I did not like:

Nothing.

Suggestions on improvement:

None whatsoever. Keep up the good work. Thank you for sharing this with us!

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Review of EARTH VOYAGE  
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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
Dear Dean,

Amazing imagery is what my first impression was on reading the poem. Somehow, though, it is a very pessimistic view of things. Humans who have almost brought the earth on its knees are too intelligent not to devise some great invention within the next fifty years and save the earth from annihilation. We are on the brink, yes, but we still have time to think and save ourselves and the planet from doom. We will do this, of that I am very hopeful. I want us all to think positively, and dream not about stale rivers of blood, but of waves of positivity and innate goodness that will be our redeeming qualities.

Thank you for sending us a stark reminder of what can be if we do not correct our course. Good luck in the contest.

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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
Hi Pat,

I enjoyed reading your guidelines on how to review an item here on WdC. I am over 8 years old on this site, and I have had some amazing reviews from very senior moderators. I have also had very candid reviews, but all in all, receiving a review that is comprehensive and at the same time tacit and humble is one of the highs on this site. Well-written. I did not find any errors.

= drtaher, and ex-showeree.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Arpita,

This is a genuinely superb forum! I think this is the first time a newbie has created a help forum for people fo their own kind. I am impressed by your smooth use of WritingML and emoticons, as well as the superb links that you have created all throughout the main page.

Here is wishing you lots of good luck, community recognition, friends, merit badges, GPs, and all the other things you wish to have on WDC.


Taher

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Review of The Cafeteria  
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Rated: 13+ | (2.5)
Hi! My name is Taher, and I came to your story through the front page under "Read a Newbie". First of all, welcome to Writing.com. Once you immerse yourself in this site, you will forget all the other things that are there on or off the web. It is that addictive. I wish you a good outing on WdC, and request you to keep in touch. If ever you need help, don't hesitate to contact me.

I am going to review this story in some length. While pointing out the positives, I might also draw your attention to negative things if there are any. Please bear with me as I read the story through before commenting anything at all.

*Reading* *Smile*


Title, brief description, rating and Genre-type:

Your title, brief description and genres are perfect. I would modify your rating to 18+ as the story has the F-word many times in it.

The beginning:

Your telling of the circumstances around the later part of the story was very interesting and done with near perfection. However, without any say-so, the close friends of the narrator seemed to apparate from nowhere. You should have eased them in with a brief statement that you were with your friends, and maybe added a few lines about them - their appearance or mannerisms or behaviour, or idiosyncrasies - or whatever.

The body of the work:

I liked the conversational style throughout the story. You are either a college-going student yourself, or are very familiar with the lingo teens and young adults use in college. I think if you double space the lines throughout the dialogue, and use a new line for EACH AND EVERY NEW QUOTATION, no matter how small it is, the item will become more readable. I see that the entire story has some double line breaks, thus enabling the reader to skip from one scene to the next, and this is wonderful. Have you considered using three asterisks or dashes or something like that to make this even more easily visible?

The craft of story-telling and the grammar:

I would rate you average on the first, and in need of a few spelling and grammar checks on the second. The use of slang should be, as far as possible, within a dialogue, and not in the narration, because the narration is by the author, while the dialogue is by the character within the story. For example, using "kinda" instead of "kind of".

The ending and the overall effect of the story:

The ending was a really pleasant and interesting surprise, and it rated high on my list. It is a good twist indeed, and the final dialogue links the whole story together, so no complaints here!

What I liked:

As I stated above, I liked your writing style and your ending.

What I did not like:

There is nothing here that I did not like ... except that, as I said earlier, you might want to use double spacing between your dialogue lines, and do a good spelling and grammar check here.

Suggestions for improvement:

I usually refrain from pointing out errors, but if you need that kind of editing, do let me know, and I will do it for you, albeit at my own leisure.


That's all.

Thanks for a nice read!

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Rated: 13+ | (2.5)
Dear

Hi! I am Taher and I came to your item through the Comedy NL. Congratulations on being featured there.

Title, rating, genres and brief description:

Absolutely nothing wrong there, though you will be surprised how many profanities under 13s all over the world already know!

Contents of this item:

This is, as you describe, a personal, emotional experience of your having to eat the ice-cream in the title. As such, I would have liked you to express yourself much more than what you have done. Perhaps a racing heart, or a sinking feeling in the stomach, or nausea ... something that would take the poem to not just "telling", but "showing".

Beginning and Ending lines:

Considering that this is a four-line poem, I am of the firm opinion that every single word must count. Using the full name of the ice-cream in both the opening and ending lines is a needless repetition. You could have used the last line for delivering a punch that would make the reader laugh.

I have another suggestion. Why not include a few lines on inviting the reader to taste the ice-cream or tell you what they felt when they had a similar experience or something equally nice.

Flow and rhythm:

The lines look equal in size, but when you recite the poem aloud, the cadence just isn't there.

Format, spacing, indenting, etc.:

No problems there.

Grammar and composition:

None here either.

What things I liked:

I liked the way you told us something about a food that you paid for and didn't enjoy. Experiences, both positive and negative, teach individuals something or the other, and telling them like this ... sharing them with us ... is a wonderful thing.

What things I did not like:

I did not "not like" anything, except what has already been told above.


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Review of The Chaser.  
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
Hi! My name is Taher, and I came to your story through a browsing of your port.

In my review, while pointing out the positives, I might also draw your attention to negative things if there are any. Please bear with me as I read the story through before commenting anything at all.

First out, let me say that writing a story in just 55 words is commendable.

*Reading* *Smile*


Title, brief description, rating and Genre-type:

I am a bit more in favour of "pursuer" than chaser, although they probably mean one and the same thing. The reason I choose that word is that it is more polished, closer to the reality of an individual that follows someone doggedly, and more well defined. Chaser may as well mean a guy who chases a drug through his nose. So, with "pursuer" there is less ambiguity. The choice of Genres and rating are appropriate.

The beginning:

You could have put in some more facts had you "precised" the first two lines. Just think over it and see what you can do there.

The body of the work:

This is very much okay, given that the entire story is told in just over three lines. The choice of "simpered" is a bit off the actual emotion. I would have preferred a simpler "said". When the guy hasn't done anything wrong, why should he simper?

The craft of story-telling and the grammar:

Reasonably good. Instead of "crossed arms", I would have gone with "Arms crossed".

The ending and the overall effect of the story:

A climax or an anticlimax works best when the event is really shocking to the reader. In that sense, this was a very good try.

What I liked/disliked:

I liked the content of the story. There was nothing to be disliked.

Suggestions for improvement:

Already given above.


That's all.

Thanks for a nice read!

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Rated: E | (4.0)
Dear Guptaji,

Thank you for a well-written experience account of your stay, and your observations on America and Americans. I am waiting for you to write a little more about your son, his family and so on, but perhaps that will have to be off-wdc. I agree on most of the above points, and do feel that this is a very balanced write-up on a country that you so passionately write against in most of your other work.

Taher

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Dear Bhaskar,

Still wondering how you managed to stumble on to this unique essay topic. In a word, I am stunned. In five words, I am speechless, amazed, stunned, denervated and shocked at the fate that befell Boa and her now dead language. Your descriptions are great, but even greater are your interpretations and your outlook-statements towards the end.

Well written, my friend.

Taher
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Dear Vanillafire,

It is true that what man proposes, God has His own way to go about: whether one's wishes will or won't be granted is entirely up to His disposition. The protagonist of this story has held and comforted and loved a soul that was to be welcomed in his/her home as a sibling. However, due to some extenuating circumstances, this was not to be. The adoption process, as you mention it in the short description, failed to conclude positively and the process got aborted. In such an event, your continuing the "relationship" in the form of unrequited love is a very good thing!

Thank you for sharing this item with us.

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