I do like this story, I know I keep saying that, but it is true. What I would like to know is how you keep track of what you have written against what you still have to write. Do you use a program or anything like that? an outline? I've never been good with outlines. Anyway, can't wait to hear what else Cleo is hiding.
I enjoyed this story and would like to read more. Inn the second paragraph I think the word 'mourning' should be 'morning'. I did not see anything else. I would like to read more to see where these boys go.