I am glad he was able to save the dog. Sorry, he did not save himself. Fire is a dangerous thing. My husband and son were both firefighters. Fire is tragic. Glad his father was there to see him home.
I think you wrote a good story, and I enjoyed reading it.
I like the beginning. Are you going to be giving more info about these characters? Do you have the next chapters ready? I would like to read more of this story.
I really like this poem. We all like to hide sometimes. It takes special people to bring it out in us. I am glad you started writing as I like to read what you write.
I just cleared the rating I last gave this story. You added more, and it is a good story. I enjoyed it very much. I love magic and magicians. Spacing between paragraphs will make it easier to read. Be sure to check your punctuation. I am bad about that! I use Grammarly to help with editing.
I enjoyed this, but it doesn't feel finished. It needs to be proofread and correct the spelling and spacing errors. I would like to read it completed, sounds like it could be a really good story.
I think you wrote this well. I understand the self-doubt, I think it will always be there, but we can't let it be first. We have to believe in ourselves, believe that we are good and our writing is good.
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