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Review Style
I'm a no nonsense reviewer. I give my honest opinion. I look for flow, plot holes, and other various creative issues. I am taking creative writing classes right now, so my style will change as I go through these classes.
I'm good at...
Looking at details, descriptions, flow, plot, and overall opinion.
Favorite Genres
Fantasy, Erotica, and paranormal, I am also open to others that are not on my least favorite genre list.
Least Favorite Genres
Romance, poetry, children's pieces, horror
I will not review...
romance, poetry, children's pieces, or horror.
Public Reviews
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Review of The Pumpkin Patch  
Review by Goblin Slayer
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
You sir, are a mastermind! This is a great story. I can't honestly say that I have anything negative to say about it. You described the characters well. You described the scene well, the only thing was that you could have described the scene where the pumpkin tells what's going on, better. But it was still awesome! I will give this 5 stars, I like it that much. Read my chapter 1 if you feel like it, I could use input from a writer like you.


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Review by Goblin Slayer
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Thank you, that should help a lot. I will try it.
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Review of A Place Of Refuge  
Review by Goblin Slayer
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Overall I liked it. I liked the simple context and the simplicity of the whole thing. You turned a simple story into something worth hearing about. I could have used a little more description on the weather and dress. I pictured a windy tundra type setting. I also hated the ending, but, what are you going to do?
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Review by Goblin Slayer
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
I enjoyed this story. I liked the way you set up the scenery.you described just enough for the reader to create their own picture in their minds. You did the same with the knights men. One thing I was curious about was the kind of armor that his men were wearing. Did the creature just bite through the metal of the armor to get at the stomach? That's really the only thing I saw. Other than that you needed a comma just after latest in the first sentence of your second parahraph. I had to read that one twice. All in all, this was a wonderful story.


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Review by Goblin Slayer
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
I LOVED this! I loved the characters, the plot, the sub plots, the flow, just all of it. You're very creative. Now, there were times that I had to guess what you were saying either with missing words, or added words. Sometimes your words seemed like they were in the wrong order. I'm assuming this is just your rough draft. It IS very good though, you gripped me into the story right away. I will be putting you on my favorites list. I want to read more. You should check out mine, The Dread Bridge. It's in a world close to yours.


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Review by Goblin Slayer
Rated: E | (3.0)
I like your overall idea of the story, and I like the message you're trying to send. I think, however, that you need a little work on your English skills, it's a subject I wished I would've spent more time on in school. Also, your story reads.a little like a monologue. Try telling your readers more about his feelings, his reactions to different situations. Other than that, I see great potential in your writing skills. Keep plugging away at it and I think you'll do great! Please check out my story, The Dread Bridge, thank you


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Review by Goblin Slayer
Rated: 13+ | (2.5)
This is a great tool that I never even thought to try on any of my stories, I know about and use foreshadowing. The article have me another thing to look up and learn about. I believe the article was a bit long winded. You have plenty of examples but no real tips on HOW to incorporate the use of this tool in our writing. I think that would have rounded out this article nicely, other than that, this really is a great tool for me to do more research on, thank you for the great idea.
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Review of Envy of Him  
Review by Goblin Slayer
Rated: 18+ | (3.0)
I have to say that I really didn't like the subject matter, kids and sex, but I told myself to keep an open mind and read it all the way through, so I did. Putting that aside I saw some really great writing here, and the story flowed quite well. Whatever you did here I was compelled to read more of the story. There were only two flaws in my mind, 1. you should probably try to put in paragraphs, and 2. you should try to use quotes when your characters are speaking to one another. Obviously you've been here a while so I will try to read some more of your work. Also I will be submitting one of my own adult story soon, I'm almost done with it. If you would give me your opinion on it that would be good. thank you and i will say that your a good writer, so don't quit.
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Review of Etched in Stone  
Review by Goblin Slayer
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi there! I really liked your story and I'd like to read more but I cannot find you or this stories online. I'm on my kindle right now. Anyway, I liked the flow of the story and the dialog made me feel like I was actually there, in the story. The only thing that puzzled me is all the words in bold print. I did have to look up some of the words, but I like having to do that, but to some of your readers, it throws off the flow of your stoty. All and all, I like this story. I would favorite you, I'd like to, but I can't find you. Maybe you could find me and review my first story. That would help me greatly as no one has done so yet. Thanx and keep writing, especially this one.
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Review of First Contact  
Review by Goblin Slayer
Rated: E | (3.0)
Okay, not sure how new to Star Trek you are, but this is not the last resort. Anyway, I like your style and your dialog. I think you have great potential in the Star Trek realm. I'm also not sure if this is a prolly (I'm probably spelling that wrong) or if it's part of a chapter. I think your captain needs much more info than what you've told us so far. This may make for a longer chapter and a more captive audience. Your a discovery writer, as an I, so your going to need to re-read your story several times to include forshadowing. I do this all the time, lol. Overall, I think you have a good concept, but, I want to see more, which is good.
Sorry, I'm a newbie, about a week old, no credits to give yet
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