|Hello TheOneGirl and good morning. I'm Ice Skatin' Jessica is 15 and I will be reviewing My Truth. Please remember that these are only my opinions; feel free to use whichever ones you find the most helpful.
I want to give you a hug! However, we have all felt like this - hopeless, depressed, like no one likes us. You capture the feelings of despair perfectly.
However, I feel like you could include more imagery. The imagery you have is good, however, you are telling us what it feels like instead of showing us what it feels like. While despair is concrete, I think you could play around with the aesthetics of this piece so we can assign our own meaning, instead of being force fed a meaning.
I didn't find any mechanical errors, however, as I suggest to all writers, go back and proofread your poem to make sure you're including everything you want to be included. Going back could give you a fresh perspective too.