Wow, I really like this story because it had many twists to it. You characterized really well too and it felt like I was inside their heads and knew them in real life. The flow was also good and the imagery; I pictured everything in vivid detail. I found no errors; this is perfect. Good work. =)
This poem is really good, and very truthful. I like your philosophical views and how you search internally for the truth. I wish more political figures thought like this. I also like your imagery and the flow is pretty good. Overall, I thought this was pure genious. There were no errors; this is perfect. Good job!
This is a lovely poem. The first few stanzas is how I'm feeling now, so I can really feel that part of the poem. I really like the emotion and imagery you put into it. It feels real, especially in the flow. I saw no errors; this is perfect. Good job! Keep up the good work.
This piece is so beautiful and I really wish I went back in time to when I was a child and watched my very first sunset on the beach. It was so beautiful and I could really imagine it with this poem. You also make me feel wistful. I am just speechless about this poem because it's just magnificent. I didn't find any mechanical or grammatical errors either. Keep up the good work!
This is such a great idea. Unfortunately I am not a preferred author, but if I was I would love to participate. I'm so glad you thought of this, especially in trying to support and show off new authors. I see no errors in this; this idea is just brilliant. I applaud you.
This was an interesting article. It made me think a lot about clocks and you present your argument well. I can see your point. But, at the end you go off on a tangent that I don't think is really relevent to this article because words don't really have to do with time, unless you were trying to make it even more philosophical. I think by doing that you create the reader to think too much and they lose what you originally want them to think about. I found no spelling or punctuation errors, though. Good job!
This is actually a pretty good poem. I HATE Algebra class myself and could really relate to this poem. I really like how you put emotion in it because any student could relate. I also like the rhythm; the flow is eh, but it's good enough at conveying what you want to. I also found no mechanical or spelling errors. This is a pretty good piece, overall. Good job!
This is a really nice story and I'm glad in the end it all worked ou. It was a nice surprise afterall. ^__^ I really like how you tell this story; it felt like I was there and viewing it directly, especially with your attention to details. The plot and flow also brought this story together well. I didn't see any errors; it's perfect as is. You did a nice job. Good luck!
Though it is so short, you managed to put a lot into this poem. The feeling it gives off is so somber, especially in your descriptions and just the way you word things. I also really liked the rhythm and flow of it because it really brought together this short poem well. Only suggestion I have is to add a little bit more to it, maybe continue it on. I didn't see any errors of any sorts; it's perfect. You did a nice job. Keep up the good work.
This is a really pretty poem and it sounds like it should be a song to show your devotion to your cat. You give really good descriptions and I can really picture the love you have for your cat. The flow and rhythm is also awesome, it brings all of the descriptions and wording into the perfection of this poem. I didn't see any spelling or grammatical errors; this poem is perfect. It's obvious you worked so hard on this and it's just so good. Keep up the good work!
This is a great quiz. Though, I didn't do as well as I hoped, I still liked the questions because they alternated between really easy and really hard, which makes a good quiz in my opinion. Keep up the good work and I can't wait to see more of your quizzes. They're definately fun to take.
This is very pretty. I really like how you used the nature imagery and all the beauty of it to capture your father's spirit. It really does give the reader a view on afterlife and where your father is and what he meant to you. The flow is also great and brought everything together nicely. I didn't see any spelling or grammatical errors. Nice job and keep up the good work!
I really love this poem, it's so beautiful. I really like your imagery and word choice because that builds on the imagery even more. The flow was also well done because it matched line for line. You don't have a rhyme scheme, but that makes it a lot stronger for what you are trying to convey. I didn't find any errors; perfect as is. Keep up the good work!
This is pretty well written. I really like the imagery you used because I could really imagine someone writing and the joy they find in it. The flow is eh, it could be a little more concise, but it still makes the point well. I also like the rhyme pattern, it really goes with the poem. Also, put periods at the end of the words without the commas... that would be a lot better. I didn't see any spelling errors. Just fix up a few things such as grammar and it'll be perfect. Keep up the good work!
This is actually pretty good. I really like the rhyme scheme and flow of it because it brings everything together well. I also love your imagery and word choice because I could really imagine everything going on in this poem. I didn't find errors of any sorts in this poem. It's perfect and you did a really nice job. Keep up the good work!
This sotry was really good. You characterized Milton well, especially the greed and everything about Hollywood. You captured everything well, too, and in great detail. I liked the plot and saw nothing wrong with the content or mechanics. You did a wonderful job as always. Good luck on the contest!
I know exactly how this poem feels because I feel this way daily. You have really good emotion in this and it really brings out the anger and heartbreak. You have eh imagery; I can picture it since it's common to me, but for another reader it might be harder. Also, the flow is lacking a bit. It seems like it is a really long stanza, not broken up. You also have some spelling errors ( But when your alone ... should be when YOU'RE alone) and you have some grammatical errors. Not bad for a first try. Once you clean it up, it'll be better.
Awww... this poem is so pretty. I really love your imagery and how youused outside sources to convey your message. That was a really good idea. I also really loved the rhythm and flow of this piece because it brings it together so well. I didn't see any errors; perfect as is. You did a really nice job.
This poem is interesting, very interesting. You really do have a lot of imagery and I like it. =) I also like your choice of words because they make the imagery even more stronger and gives the poem more varity. The flow also made it stronger along with the rhythm. You did a nice a job; no errors. Good job!
I REALLY like this poem because it really shows the dark side of love and you have more vivid detail than Liberation. I could really picture this one and I like how you play with the words, again. Your poems have great flow and it makes the words even more richer, especially with meaning. This is perfect and I can tell you spent a lot of time on this.
I really like this piece because it shows a hidden side to weddings and the feelings before a wedding. I like your characterization of the narrator and Stephanie; it feels like I know them personally from the dialogue and their actions. I also love your word choice and imagery; you really made the picture from the Pictures Are Worth 1000 Words contest come alive. The flow is great and so is the plot; I love the cliffhanger. I didn't see any errors; looks perfect to me. Great job!
This is a masterpiece! You made me want coffee myself with your imagery of the coffee and the flow of your words. The flow actually made it like I was looking into a cup of coffee, which is genious. You're a very talented writer and I think you should submit it in a contest or something.
A perfect poem about failure and angst. I could really relate to this poem and no exactly how that feels. This poem is very talented and offers imagery and even some tears (by relating to it).
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