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I found the title intriguing which through the "I Write" contest entries led me to your entry for your "Scream" contest entry. Funny how those things work. With your "Tick, Knock, tick, knock" it reminded me of Poe's "Tell-Tale Heart", which is most likely why I wanted to read it.
I found a few errors which caused me to pause.
Dropnote, suggestions ▼
Overall Characterization and World View:
I do believe you've accomplished the overall characterization and world view of this small horror story very well. You established the fear of the main character and what he/she is searching for and what he/she eventually finds. A good dark little tale.
In the second paragraph, you state it must have been difficult for the "tick, knock" when you're on the first floor of your building. It's a strange statement as I find that on a first-floor building anyone can tap at a window. Now if you're on a second floor and the "tick, knock" were on the opposite side where there is no walkway, I might find the statement a bit more believable.
Last but not Least:
Remember that all my suggestions are only that and you may do with them what you will. I do not purpose to be an expert of any kind.
That being said, As I mentioned earlier, I enjoyed the story and how you brought together the fear elements. I especially enjoyed the twist at the end. I never saw it coming. Great job with that. Horror is something which is difficult for me and it's nice to see such good suspense written well.
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