|Greetings, Brian’s New Era in 2020 🛸 . I am reviewing your poem today as a judge for the . Thank you for taking the time to create a poem and entering it in the
Initial Reaction: Quite the long poem you've got here. The lines are short to help bring the reader through things without slowing down much so that it doesn't feel like it's too long or anything. You did an interesting approach and put forth some good points in showcasing majority in the minority. It's creative and interesting to read.
Prompt: This time around, the Journey through the Genres contest had a rather simple request in that you had to produce a political poem. The prompt gave you free reign and made it easy enough for the reader/judge to see the inspiration behind the piece. Was easy enough to see from the very beginning that you used the prompt, which meant it qualified for the contest.
Rhythm/Rhyme: With the form, free verse, there is a freedom that can both help and put a poem at a tiny disadvantage. You aren't stuck to a particular set of rules for lines or rhyme but then you can do almost anything. Getting a poem to flow, particular when it starts to get longer, to keep the rhythm throughout can be a challenge. Some lines did alter the flow of the poem just a bit. You could play around with them, read it out loud and fiddle with it if you wanted to see what else you can do with the poem. Or just leave it as is, whatever you want to do. Overall, it works pretty well even with the different lines with the indent as that can look a bit random at times but in this particular piece works.
If I am not right
I am alone
Other Notes: Overall, it was a good poem presented for the contest. For me, I did get a little lost in the length and wasn't quite sure on the trucks/cars aspect from the title. Had a tiny bit of a difficult time in following the poem though could kind of get where you were taking the reader a good percentage of the time. It moves quick though, even with the length. The pacing and end product were all well thought out and appreciated.
Thank you for taking the time to enter the official contest from November. Hope you enjoyed the challenge of the prompt and the final product you created.