|Greetings, Batty Bobby Baker . I am reviewing your poem today as a judge for the "Journey Through Genres: Official Contest" [E]. Thank you for taking the time to create a poem and entering it in the contest.
Initial Reaction: You put forth a very good point with this poem. Overall, you did a nice job putting a bit of a political twist to poetry. It's interesting, brings up some history and even puts to use vocabulary that can be appreciated by a reader. Some of the flow with the sentence structure and formatting from the form felt a little off for me, but others will have different reactions based on their own reading of the poem.
Prompt: This round, the prompt required a poem that related to politics in some way or fashion. Makes it simple to both follow for the author but also easy for the judge to find. You have a poem and it involves politics, so that makes it work for the contest.
Form: I was not very familiar with the form though I've read some that follow the structure. The use of any form was extra and an added bonus. I am kind of interested as to why this particular form was chosen. There are so many forms available, the question always comes to mind as to whether it was a random pick or had some more purpose behind it.
Judging by the information I found on the form (the link didn't work for me), it does look like you followed it well. This one can be a bit tough because you have to pick particular words that are going to have enough options to fit the rhyme scheme, but also find something to repeat at the last lines.
For me, while the copied line chosen makes sense for the topic and form, something about the flow of the piece felt a little off for me. The last line or two had a feeling of being extra, not quite connected. This is just a general experience with me as the reader, though, and someone else will have a different perspective.
One suggestion I have with the form is to maybe put more information in the item instead of just the link because some might not want to take the effort to search out the rules of the form in order to see how well the poem followed the guidelines. To put it in so that it doesn't distract from the actual poem, I recommend using the dropnote option. That way more information is available on the page for anyone interested but it doesn't take any focus away from the important part, the poem.
While Senators scheme with duplicitous skill,
Americans fight for their liberty still,
Other Notes: Nice work in creating a political poem for the official site contest for November. We appreciated the entry and the time you took in order to create it. Hope that you enjoyed the challenge of the contest, prompt and the product you created.