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Review by elizjohn
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi there--

You reviewed something of mine earlier and I wanted to return the favor!

Thank you for sharing your work. It is clear that this piece of writing was deeply personal for you. In that, I find that it really doesn't need to be critiqued, per se. I think it is lovely as is and the depth of your emotion and your devotion is evident and moving.

Keep up the good work and write on!

Respectfully,

Elizabeth John


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Review by elizjohn
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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
Hi there!

Thank you for sharing your work. I thought this was pretty interesting. Overall, I thought the rhyme scheme was pretty good, with the exception of the fourth stanza. I thought the rhythm was off in that stanza; I found myself stumbling through it even after having read it twice. The meaning was kind of fuzzy for me in that particular stanza as well. I wonder if the poem as a whole wouldn't be better without it? It's just a thought, but I think it would tighten it up and make the message clear as a bell (I mean, the message is already pretty clear--I think the fourth stanza is unnecessary and muddles it some). Otherwise, cool little piece of writing.

Keep up the good work and write on!

Respectfully,

Elizabeth John


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Review of A meditation  
Review by elizjohn
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi there!

You reviewed something for me earlier and I wanted to return the favor!

Thank you for sharing your work. This was really awesome! Simple and short, but pretty impactful. That last line really brings it all together and seals the deal. Good job with this one!

Keep up the good work and write on!

Respectfully,

Elizabeth John


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Review of The Sailor  
Review by elizjohn
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi there!

I was just passing through for the member to member raid review and I saw your folder of work that had no reviews (good idea btw, putting them in a separate folder. I might try that.). So I thought I’d review one for you!

I thought was quite interesting. I felt like there were kind of a few different messages going on here, and I wasn’t sure where to focus my attention. I wasn’t clear in the message. Separately, I thought the stanzas worked better alone, but I think you want to make your message more cohesive. Also, did you mean this to be a rhyming poem? Some stanzas rhymes and some didn’t (or they did but they didn’t follow the same consistent rhyme pattern) so that threw me off some.

I think with a little more work, this poem could really shine. However, please feel free to use or disregard these criticisms as you see fit. They are just thought and suggestions.

Keep up the good work and write on!

Respectfully submitted,

Elizabeth John
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Review of My Fairytale  
Review by elizjohn
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hi there!

It’s the member to member raid and I thought I’d pop in and give you a review….

Thank you for sharing your work. I saw that you wrote this a long time ago, but I really liked it. It has a kind of timeless feel and sound to it, and the imagery you elicited was very concrete and powerful. Although the ending was full of melancholy, it felt appropriate and right, if you get my meaning.

Keep up the good work and write on!
Respectfully,

Elizabeth John


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Review of MANGO  
Review by elizjohn
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi there!

You reviewed something of mine earlier and I wanted to return the favor!

Thank you for sharing your work. I really liked this poem, mainly because I really like mangos, LOL. As stated in your poem, it is a perfect summer fruit, and the reader learns a little bit more (in the second stanza) of ways to further enjoy this luscious fruit.

I didn't see any errors in spelling, grammar, or punctuation, so that's always a plus. Keep up the good work and write on!

Respectfully,

Elizabeth John


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Review of Grateful Ever  
Review by elizjohn
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi there!

You reviewed something of mine earlier and I wanted to return the favor!

Thank you for sharing your work. This was a lovely poem and honestly, the line about the teachers got me since I'm a teacher, LOL. There was a lot of warmth in this poem as well as a lot of humility that I think many would appreciate.

Keep up the good work and write on!

Respectfully,

Elizabeth John


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Review of What lies ahead.  
Review by elizjohn
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi there!

You reviewed something of mine and I wanted to return the favor!

Thank you for sharing your work. This piece of writing was just stunning! It is so rich in its descriptions; it was very easy to picture this majestic scene. I also like the rhythm of the poem. It flowed beautifully. I don't have any criticisms for you; this was just lovely.

I didn't see any errors in spelling, grammar, or punctuation--but that speaks to the nature of the polish and sophistication of your writing. I got the impression that this has been proofed and dedicated several times over.

Keep up the good work and write on!


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Review of The 23 Enigma  
Review by elizjohn
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi there!

I was just passing through to see what folks did with the prompt, and I thought you did very well with this. You did an excellent job meeting the challenge of the prompt. I love a good poem that tells a story, and you did that with this in spades. The rhyme scheme and rhythm were excellent, and the narrative of the story flowed very well. Nicely done.

I didn't see any errors in spelling, grammar, or punctuation, so that's always a plus. Good luck with the contest tomorrow! Keep up the good work and write on!

Respectfully,

Elizabeth John


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Review of North on Route 23  
Review by elizjohn
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Hi there!

I hope all is well. I was just reading through some of the entries for today….this was really well done. I thought you handled the challenge of the prompt very well, and the story itself was touching and poignant. I didn’t see any errors in spelling, grammar or punctuation, so that’s always a plus. Good luck with the contest today!

Keep up the good work and write on!!!

Respectfully,

Elizabeth John


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Review of Don't Answer Me  
Review by elizjohn
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi there!

I was just checking out some of the more recent entries for the Cramp and I wanted to read the one for the “don’t answer me” prompt. Glad I stopped by! This was a great story! I thought you did a great job meeting the challenge of the prompt and creating a suspenseful story from there. You did such a good job building the tension, I was nervous reading it for the main characters, LOL.

I only saw a few minor typos or misspelled words, so you may want to review it for those. Otherwise, keep up the good work and write on!

And congratulations on the win!

Respectfully,

Elizabeth John


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Review of Breathe Again  
Review by elizjohn
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi there!

I was just checking out some of the competition trying to decide if I wanted to write for this prompt or not...after reading this, I think I'm going to sit this one out, LOL...

This was an awesome little story. I thought you did extremely well meeting the challenge of the prompt. All the required elements were very smartly incorporated into the story and felt very natural and flowed easily. It was not hard to have empathy for the protagonist--I was glad she was able to leave the ol' dude behind and move forward with her life.

I didn't see any errors in spelling, grammar, or punctuation, so that's a plus.

Good luck with the contest tomorrow!

Keep up the good work and write on!

Respectfully,

Elizabeth John


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Review of Summer Song  
Review by elizjohn
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi there!

You reviewed something of mine earlier and I wanted to return the favor!

Thank you for sharing your work. This was really a beautiful poem. it was super descriptive and I thought it was easy to visualize as well as easy to "hear". I also really liked the centering of the poem--it's a small thing, I know, but I felt like it really put the message of the poem front and center, in a way. In any case, good job overall.

I didn't see any errors in spelling, grammar, or punctuation, so that's a plus. Keep up the good work and write on!

Respectfully,

Elizabeth John


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Review by elizjohn
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi there!

Thank you for sharing your work. I was just looking at some of the entries from yesterday's prompt, and I wanted to pop in and say that I really liked your poem here. I thought you did a great job meeting the challenge of the prompt, and I thought the rhyme scheme and the meter were very good. I also loved the story you told in the poem itself; it felt very reminiscent of 80s and MTV rock culture.

Finally, for the most part, I didn't see any errors in spelling, grammar, or punctuation, except for the very last sentence. You have the word "made", but I really think it should be "make". Just a thought.

Otherwise, keep up the good work and write on!

Respectfully,

Elizabeth John






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Review of No Mow  
Review by elizjohn
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Hi there!

I was curious to see what you came up (especially since you posted so soon after the print was shared) and I have to say, this is just delightful. You really met the challenge of the prompt well, especially given the relatively short nature of your poem. Super cute. Good luck tomorrow and keep up the good work! Write on!

Respectfully,

Elizabeth John


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Review by elizjohn
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi there!

I was just scoping out the competition and I gotta say, I love this!!! It got me thinking about all the “little pieces inside his head”…good things, bad things, memories, feelings…what did they take, I wonder??? LOLLLL

Great job with this prompt! Good luck and keep up the good work! Write on!

Respectfully,

Elizabeth John


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Review of Comrades  
Review by elizjohn
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi there!

You reviewed something of mine yesterday and I wanted to return the favor!

Thank you for sharing your work. I thought this was kind of cute…kind of tongue-in-cheek. But also, they might not be compatible….so there’s that. LOL

I didn’t see any errors in spelling, grammar, or punctuation, so that’s also a plus.

Keep up the good work and write on!

Respectfully,

Elizabeth John


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Review by elizjohn
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi there!

You reviewed something of mine yesterday and I wanted to return the favor!!

Thank you for sharing your work. I loved this poem. It was softly heart wrenching, which made it lovely if sad. Using a “rainbow” was ingenious in that it was deceptive; usually, rainbows are an indicator of happiness and so, given the way this was written, it gave the poem even more punch. I didn’t see any errors in spelling, grammar and punctuation, so that’s also a plus.

Keep up the good work and write on!!

Respectfully,

Elizabeth John


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Review of Amazing Love  
Review by elizjohn
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi there!

You reviewed something of mine and I wanted to return the favor!

Thank you for sharing your work. I thought this was an interesting piece of writing and most readers will be able to relate to the sentiment you express. I would respectfully suggest to maybe not repeat "your amazing love" so much since it's clear that is what you are talking about...otherwise, it kind of drags the poem down, somewhat. Additionally, I noticed every single word started with a capital letter. That is not necessary and is actually somewhat distracting. It makes it hard to focus on the message.

In any case, these are just suggestions. Please use or discard them as you see fit.

Keep up the good work and write on!

Respectfully,

Elizabeth John


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Review of SILENCE  
Review by elizjohn
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi there!

You reviewed something of mine earlier and I wanted to return the favor!

Thank you for sharing your work. I thought this was a lovely piece of writing, and I personally could relate. Of course I have my moments when I am envelopped by sound via music, my kids, life, etc, but I have those moments when I need and crave silence so I can be alone with my thoughts and my spirit. The benefits of life contemplation are immeasurable, and I think you did a good job of capturing that in your writing.

Keep up the good work and write on!

Respectfully,

Elizabeth John


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Review of Nights Of Wonder  
Review by elizjohn
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi there!

You reviewed something of mine earlier and I wanted to return the favor1

Thank you for sharing your work. I found this to be a very interesting piece of writing. Certainly, it elicited a lot of concrete images, and I think that is very good. I did find that the rhyming word for each second line seemed kind of a stretch, and it detracted from the mood you were setting. It's the only thing I had a little trouble with, because the words--although they did rhyme--never seemed as eloquent as the rest of the stanza. But that's just me.

Regardless, use or discard this critique as you will. Keep up the good work and write on!

Respectfully,

Elizabeth John


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Review by elizjohn
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi there!

You reviewed something of mine earlier and I wanted to return the favor!

Thank you for sharing your work. This was an interesting poem. It certainly was relatable, as we all had the same experience with Covid for sure. I personally was distracted by the emojis...to me it made it feel less serious and grave...I'm not sure if that was what you were going for or not. If it were me, I would leave them out so the reader could better focus on the message. Just a thought.

Keep up the good work and write on!

Respectfully,

Elizabeth John


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Review of Expatriots  
Review by elizjohn
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi there!

You reviewed something of mine earlier and I wanted to return the favor!

Thank you for sharing your work. I am enjoying your story poems---they are so much fun! This one was great because it was unexpected. I really thought it was going to be about some actual people as expats--so imagine my surprise when it wasn't and further, the reason for them becoming expats. I do think Europe will fare just fine...they are the land of stinky cheese and no deodorant, after all...LOL

Great control of both rhyme and meter, and I didn't see any errors in spelling, grammar, or punctuation. Keep up the good work and write on!

Respectfully,

Elizabeth John


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Review of Finding Flies  
Review by elizjohn
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi there!

You reviewed something of mine a couple of days ago and I wanted to return the favor!

Thank you for sharing your work. I just loved this!! It is so light and fun, and I'm pretty sure kids would love it. The rhythm and the meter were excellent, and it elicited a whole lot of imagery--that may be a good or a bad thing, depending, LOLLLL. In any case, I really enjoyed the read. I didn't see any errors in spelling, grammar, or punctuation, so that's also a plus.

Keep up the good work and write on!

Respectfully,

Elizabeth John


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Review of Lighthouse  
Review by elizjohn
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi there!

You reviewed something of mine a couple of days ago and I wanted to return the favor!

Thank you for sharing your work. This is such a lovely piece of writing. What I especially liked was the romantic slant that you created for something as innocuous as a lighthouse. Honestly, I never would have even imagined such a thing---but of course, that's the beauty of writing and imagination, isn't it?

The rhythm and the cadence for your writing were really on point, and you elicited some lovely imagery as well. My favorite stanzas were the last three, mainly because it brings in the significant other into the equation, and how together they are stronger and better in love.

I didn't see any errors in spelling, grammar, or punctuation, so that's also a plus. Keep up the good work and write on!


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