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Review by elizjohn
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi there!

You reviewed something of mine earlier and I wanted to return the favor!

Thank you for sharing your work. I loved this poem, for several reasons. First, on a personal level, I deeply appreciated the message of this poem. I feel the same way about this site, and I credit this site for helping me become a better writer today. I have been a member of this site now for about twelve or thirteen years; in that time, I have published one book and have another in the works, with content that I generated from site contests and whatnot. Second, there are have been times when I have NOT been active on the site for stretches of time, but I refuse to let my membership go because of how much it means to me. Again, I don't think I would have developed as a writer if not for WDC.

Second, I love that this is a rhyming verse--and you presented it as such so well! I love the eloquence of the writing. I think that that's key when you are writing a verse with meter and rhyme. It will give the piece a kind of timelessness. On those occasions that I write a rhyming poem (and it's not a poem for children) I like for language to be more elevated; it keeps it from sounding to "mother goosey", and you did that. I would also point out that many people think rhyming verse is antiquated, but I think it is more difficult (when done right) to create. It is by far more challenging than free verse, and so I applaud this piece.

I didn't see any errors in spelling, grammar, or punctuation, so that's an additional plus.

Keep up the good work and write on!

Respectfully,

Elizabeth John


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Review by elizjohn
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi there!

You reviewed something of mine earlier and I wanted to return the favor!

Thank you for sharing your work. I loved this poem so much! I think I got a little emotional reading it, actually, so that a good thing. It packed a punch!

I didn’t see any errors in spelling, grammar, and punctuation, so that’s also a plus.

Keep up the good work and write on!


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Review of Wings  
Review by elizjohn
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi there!

You reviewed something of mine earlier and I wanted to return the favor!

Thank you for sharing your work. I really liked this...especially because I have a nephew with autism. He's only ten, but he lives his young life with his wings completely unfurled and I hope that he always continues to do so and that you will also be able to do as well.

Keep up the good work and write on!

Respectfully,

Elizabeth John


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Review of Dusk  
Review by elizjohn
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi there!

You reviewed something of mine earlier and I wanted to return the favor!

Thank you for sharing your work! I do so love a haiku, and this was just lovely especially the last line. I think it is a fitting description for dusk itself: a portal.

Keep up the good work and write on!

Respectfully,

Elizabeth John


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Review of NATURE  
Review by elizjohn
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi there!

You reviewed something of mine earlier and I wanted to return the favor!

Thank you for sharing your work. I think a lot of people can appreciate this poem as lovers of nature. Your poem sparks a lot of sharp imagery and people will be able to easily visualize the scenes you are describing. As a point of critique, I would remove "the list goes on". It detracts from the poem. Rather state what those things are, or find a moment/stanza to stop the list. People will understand and image other things as they read, I'm sure.

Keep up the good work and write on!

Respectfully,

Elizabeth John


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Review of Jump Start  
Review by elizjohn
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi there!

You reviewed something of mine earlier and I wanted to return the favor! Thank you for sharing your work. I thought this poem was super-fun and very relatable, especially the part about tripping over landmarks, hahaha! I tripped over some landmarks just last night in my own bedroom, go figure. Great job with the challenge of the prompt!

Keep up the good work and write on!

Elizabeth John


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Review by elizjohn
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi there!

You reviewed something of mine earlier and I wanted to return the favor!

Thank you for sharing your work. I really liked the premise of this (since I’m one of those who can’t carry a tune), but I had a little trouble following the rhythm. I had to read it a couple of times…when I thought I had it down, I’d read further and then get tripped up. I think some punctuation would help the movement a lot (and mind you, I’m not the biggest fan of punctuating poetry because I myself am not that good at it) but I think you could consider it.

But that aside, I loved the message here. Keep up the good work and write on!!!

Respectfully,

Elizabeth John


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Review of Missing someone  
Review by elizjohn
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hello there!

You reviewed something of mine earlier and I wanted to return the favor!

Thank you for sharing your work. I loved the sentiment behind this piece, although it might have been more tightly executed if you eliminated some of the repetition of "missing someone may be that". I think it would have even more punch. Also, the first letter of every word is capitalized and that is not necessary.

Keep up the good work and write on!

Respectfully,

Elizabeth John


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Review of Beholder's Bloom  
Review by elizjohn
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Rated: E | (3.0)
Hello!

You reviewed something of mine earlier and I wanted to return the favor!

Thank you for sharing your work. This was an interesting piece of writing, although it seemed a bit hard to follow. For me, it was a little too abstract to discern meaning, but that’s just me. However, I thought the poem had good form and structure, and I didn’t see any errors in spelling, grammar and punctuation, so that’s always a plus.

Please know that this is just my opinion. Please feel free to accept or discard it as you see fit.

Keep up the good work and write on!!!

Respectfully,

Ekizabeth John


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Review by elizjohn
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi there!

You reviewed something of mine earlier and I wanted to return the favor!

Thank you for sharing your work. I thought you did a great job of meeting the challenge of this prompt. You struck the appropriate tone and it was meaningful as a result. I didn’t see any errors is spelling, grammar or punctuation either so that’s always a plus.

Keep up the good work and write on!

Respectfully,

Elizabeth John


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Review by elizjohn
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi there!

You reviewed something of mine earlier and I wanted to return the favor!

Thank you for sharing your work. This is a lovely poem. I liked the emotions you evoked when describing the various places you lived that had views. I especially liked the sense of community that you described and juxtaposed the loss of community in the modern times by which in we live.

Keep up the good work and write on!

Respectfully,

Elizabeth John


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Review of GRATEFUL HEART  
Review by elizjohn
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi there!

You reviewed something of mine earlier and I wanted to return the favor!

Thank you for sharing your work. This is a great acrostic (?) poem in which you were able to cleverly use the letters for GRATEFUL HEART in a meaningful way. Very positive and uplifting.

Keep up the good work and write on!


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Review by elizjohn
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi there!

I was just passing through and I happened to see your entry. What a lovely sentiment! For the most part, I thought this was well-crafted. There were at times some spots where the rhythm was off a bit; perhaps reading it out loud can help isolate some of those bumps in the road. However, those are minor issues. More importantly, was the message of the poem that really appealed to me. Some of the best things in life are not only free, but if you don't pay attention, you will miss them altogether.

Good job with this piece and write on!

Respectfully,

Elizabeth John


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Review of Self Talk  
Review by elizjohn
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi there!

I was just passing through…I saw this prompt yesterday, and I thought yo myself: “Ugh! What a lame prompt…!” 🙄

But you absolutely met the challenge of the prompt, and you did it like a champion! I love it! Yes, it’s silly and irreverent, it light and fun nonetheless…and why not? Poetry can be so serious and abstract lately; this is wonderfully refreshing, as far as I’m concerned.

You did a great job with both the rhythm and the rhyme scheme, and I didn’t see any errors with spelling, grammar or punctuation, so that’s always a plus.

Good luck with the contest today! If it were me judging, you’d win hands down.

Keep up the work and write on!

Respectfully,

Elizabeth John


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Review by elizjohn
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi there!

You reviewed something of mine earlier and I wanted to return the favor!

Thank you for sharing your work. I thought your piece was very interesting. Overall, the rhyme scheme was pretty strong; there were only a few stanzas where I may have fumbled a bit where the rhythm or the rhyme was a little off, but nothing major.

I do think it might have been a bit too long; I feel that at times, some of it was repititive, and the same sentiment was being expressed over and over. I think you would have a tighter poem if you reviewed it for redundancy and then eliminated a couple of stanzas.

Also, there was one line in particular that kind of bothered me because it is not grammatically correct:

"The air has now fell stagnant"

Normally, this would be "has fallen"; I understood that you were trying to fit the rhythm but because it is grammatically incorrect, I couldn't get beyond that line. Perhaps try some different wording that is both correct and fits the rhythm and the intent of what you want to say.

Thank you and keep up the good work. Write on!

Respectfully,

Elizabeth John


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Review of My Father  
Review by elizjohn
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Rated: E | (3.0)
Hi there!

You reviewed something of mine and I wanted to return the favor!

Thank you for sharing your work. I got the impression reading this that there is a lot of bitterness and disappointment and hurt on the part of the child, and the father is perceived to living--for lack of a better word--a guilt-free life, with no memory or understanding of the pain and anguish he has inflicted. I think I would open the stanzas a bit more though, if it were me. Particularly the stanza about the key. It seems to small an incident in a poem that feels very open and broad. I think some more details or examples of the hurt or the poor parenting would help that stanza quite a bit. But again, that's just my opinion. Please disregard it as you see fit.

I didn't see any errors in spelling, grammar, or punctuation, so that's always a plus. Keep up the good work and write on!

Respectfully,

Elizabeth John


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Review of Dire Learning  
Review by elizjohn
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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
Hi there!

Thank you for sharing your work. I promise I'm not stalking you; I'm just reviewing poetry responses from the Cramp, and you keep coming up a lot. That's definitely a good thing.

I remember this prompt, and I remember thinking that I wasn't even going to bother to try it. But you did a good job with it. Actually, as a teacher in my real-life, I thought you hit the nail on the head with what will probably be actual policy implementations for instructions, so kudos on that front. Maybe you should be a school administrator, hahaha.

Keep up the good work and write on!

Respectfully,

Elizabeth John


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Review of Inside Outside  
Review by elizjohn
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi there!

Thank you for sharing your work. I thought you did a great job meeting the challenge of the prompt for the contest. This was really well done, and I liked how the character really became part of the house. During this quarantine, I'm sure we can all relate.

I didn't see any errors in spelling, grammar, or punctuation, so that's a plus.

Keep up the good work and write on!

Respectfully,

Elizabeth John


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Review by elizjohn
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi there!

I was just passing through and I saw your piece and wanted to comment.

Thank you for sharing your work. I thought you did an awesome job meeting the challenge of the prompt. The rhyme scheme is very elegant, as are the sentence structures and tone, which I personally appreciate very much with rhyming poetry. I also loved that you told a story within your verse, which to me is always an additional plus.

I didn’t see any errors in spelling, grammar, or punctuation, and the rhythm was excellent. Keep up the good work and write on!

Respectfully,

Elizabeth John


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Review of The Handkerchief  
Review by elizjohn
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Rated: E | (3.0)
Hi there!

You reviewed something of mine earlier and I wanted to return the favor!

Thank you for sharing your work. This was an interesting story with a lot going on given the word count. I think the main thing that confused me was the number of characters. There’s the old tramp, the old man, the policeman, and of course, the handkerchief. The problem I had was trying to find the connection between all these characters and elements. Additionally, I’m not sure why the handkerchief itself is important, and given that this is also the name of your piece, I think some more information is needed. I would suggest adding to it just a bit for some more clarity.

I didn’t see any errors in spelling, grammar, or punctuation, so that’s always a plus. Write on!

Respectfully,

Elizabeth John


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Review of Other Ways  
Review by elizjohn
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
Hello!

Thank you for sharing your work. I thought this was interesting piece. Certainly, you did a good job meeting the challenge of the prompt. I think my problem with the story is that it could have used some more development. Your word count was 844; I think you could have made good work of the outstanding 156 words to smooth some transitions, and perhaps better build and express her incredulity. I know the word count is tight at 1K, but I just felt that Susan's reactions were a little abrupt. But that's just me.

One other thing: visually, your story could use some formatting. There is no spacing or indentation, and it makes it a bit difficult to read. I did not, however, see any errors in spelling, grammar, or punctuation, so that's a plus.

That said, please feel free to use or discard these suggestions as you see fit. You know what is best for your story.

Keep up the good work and write on!

Respectfully,

Elizabeth John



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Review by elizjohn
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Rated: ASR | (3.5)
Hello--

Thank you for sharing your work. I went back and check the prompt requirements and it seemed like you met the challenge of the prompt pretty well. The message was pretty simple and straightforward, and I didn't see any errors in spelling, punctuation or grammar, so that's always a plus.

The only critique I have on this piece is that there seemed to be a slight discrepancy with the form. In moving from the first to the second stanza, the first stanza ended with "how" but the second stanza did not lead with this word, unlike all the other stanzas. It could be a simple change: "How you ask?" and then you'd be set. Anyway, it's just a thought.

Keep up the good work and write on!

Respectfully,

Elizabeth John

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Review of Hide Away  
Review by elizjohn
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hello!

Thank you for sharing your work. I thought that this was a very interesting piece of writing. I know you stated that you were "just beginning to dabble with poetry" so I hope you don't mind if I make a particular critique; there was one section that I thought you could omit altogether:

It was pointless from the start.
And now at the end of it all,
Do I have regrets ?
Do I wish to continue ?
Do I?

Questions are pointless.

I feel like this part kind of drags the poem down. It seemed clear to me that the person has welcomed death, so why go back and question it. Let nature and the nature of this poem take its natural course.

Otherwise, I didn't see anything else wrong with this piece of writing.

Keep up the good work and write on!

Respectfully,

Elizabeth John


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Review by elizjohn
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Rated: 18+ | N/A (Review only item.)
Hello!

Thank you for sharing your work. I thought this was a beautiful poem, full of sorrow. My family is Haitian, so this was particularly poignant. Technically, I didn’t see any errors in spelling, grammar, or punctuation, so that’s good. Stylistically, I think I would change “the names speaks” to “it speaks” as a reference to the island as a whole. I feel like “the names” are kind of removed from the island itself. But that’s just me. Use this suggestion as you see fit.

Keep up the good work and write on!

Respectfully,
Elizabeth John

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Review by elizjohn
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Rated: 18+ | N/A (Review only item.)
Hello!

Thank you for sharing your work. I thought this was a beautiful poem, full of sorrow. My family is Haitian, so this was particularly poignant. Technically, I didn’t see any errors in spelling, grammar, or punctuation, so that’s good. Stylistically, I think I would change “the names speaks” to “it speaks” as a reference to the island as a whole. I feel like “the names” are kind of removed from the island itself. But that’s just me. Use this suggestion as you see fit.

Keep up the good work and write on!

Respectfully,
Elizabeth John

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