|“Who wants to become a writer? And why? Because it’s the answer to everything. … It’s the streaming reason for living. To note, to pin down, to build up, to create, to be astonished at nothing, to cherish the oddities, to let nothing go down the drain, to make something, to make a great flower out of life, even if it’s a cactus.”—Enid Bagnold
My name is Lyn and I am doing a review as a judge for WDC's Journey Through Genres contest
As a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!
Title: The Mayan Conquistadors
First Impression: History being repeated.
What needs your attention: This sentence is unclear as written .His captor forced him aboard a smaller metal boat to join other captives, and when it was full, they set said with two captors watching everyone.
Favorite Parts: Sergio recalling the stories that swept through Spain after Columbus returned.
Overall Impression: Truthfully, a violent story with a lot of details that didn't enrich the story, isn't appealing to me. I felt overwhelmed by the gore but couldn't understand theauthor's point. Typically, in a story the reader goes on the journey with a narrator, with an arc in the story followed by the conclusion. In your piece, the character was in danger the whole time with no apparent change. Clearly, I'm not your genres target audience.
Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my pleasure! Lyn