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Review of The Dance  
Review by Witchy woman
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Rated: E | (5.0)
“Who wants to become a writer? And why? Because it’s the answer to everything. … It’s the streaming reason for living. To note, to pin down, to build up, to create, to be astonished at nothing, to cherish the oddities, to let nothing go down the drain, to make something, to make a great flower out of life, even if it’s a cactus.”—Enid Bagnold

Hi Sorji

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review as a judge for WDC's Journey Through Genres contest

As a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: The Dance


First Impression: I would have enjoyed
reading more about the dance. You chose it as the title and it appeared in one line before the disagreement between mother and daughter. It would have been a great conclusion that he came to pick her up for the pizza, he ask her father if he could take her to the dance.

What needs your attention: I didn't notice any punctuation errors.

Favorite Parts: The references to African-American discrimination as a comparison to Kellen's struggle to be just like anyone else. Good job on reminding the readers that racism exists still.

Overall Impression: The storyline flowed smoothly, had good tension and was engaging from beginning to end.

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my pleasure! Lyn




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Review of Taken Out  
Review by Witchy woman
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
“Who wants to become a writer? And why? Because it’s the answer to everything. … It’s the streaming reason for living. To note, to pin down, to build up, to create, to be astonished at nothing, to cherish the oddities, to let nothing go down the drain, to make something, to make a great flower out of life, even if it’s a cactus.”—Enid Bagnold

Hi Sumjo

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review as a judge for WDC's Journey Through Genres contest

As a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: Taken Out

She guessed now wasn’t the best time to berate him or untidiness.

First Impression: Amusing twist on take out with the title and the reference to Kentucky Fried Chicken.

What needs your attention: I didn't notice anything that needed your attention other than the typo here. "She guessed now wasn’t the best time to berate him or untidiness." I believe you meant for untidiness.


Favorite Parts: The advertising on farmer's barn roof. I hadn't seen this unusual advertising until I had gone to Kentucky with my husband. On another side note, my husband grew up in Louisville, and saw Colonel Sanders at his restaurant in Corbin before he began franchising his recipe. He did wear a white suit.

Overall Impression: I chuckled when I read oh didn't that man dream big. My husband said that Sanders walked into a room, he made an impression. Great job writing.

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my pleasure! Lyn




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Review by Witchy woman
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
“Who wants to become a writer? And why? Because it’s the answer to everything. … It’s the streaming reason for living. To note, to pin down, to build up, to create, to be astonished at nothing, to cherish the oddities, to let nothing go down the drain, to make something, to make a great flower out of life, even if it’s a cactus.”—Enid Bagnold

Hi Hullabaloo

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review as a judge for WDC's Journey Through Genres contest

As a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: A Voyage of Discovery


First Impression:Interesting discovery journey that didn't meet Willem's anticipated hopes for adventure.
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What needs your attention: I felt some of the sentences were clunky reading. Like this sentence for example, "Other men might be content with living quite predictable lives, knowing what they would most likely be facing on any single day. Willem had to admit to himself that such a life would be not much of an improvement on no life for himself. " I suggest- Other men might find contentment living predictable lives whereas Willem such a life wouldn't work for him. It wouldn't improve his life. clearer and more direct. You have lots of sentences that easily could be more direct.

Favorite Parts: When land was sighted, and he would finally have some excitement. It was interesting to read the how he approached the unknown and the precautions taken to assure their safety.

Overall Impression: I think your story is interesting and has potential with some line by line editing to make each word count.

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my pleasure! Lyn




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Review by Witchy woman
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
“Who wants to become a writer? And why? Because it’s the answer to everything. … It’s the streaming reason for living. To note, to pin down, to build up, to create, to be astonished at nothing, to cherish the oddities, to let nothing go down the drain, to make something, to make a great flower out of life, even if it’s a cactus.”—Enid Bagnold

Hi Aurthor

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review as a judge for WDC's Journey Through Genres contest

As a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: Second Voyage of Christopher Columbus


First Impression: Engaging read that emphasized Columbus's arrogance “Tell them that I am the ranking authority of all of the Spanish colonies of the new world. I command the captains.” but with an unexpected victor.

What needs your attention: I didn't notice any punctuation or grammar that distracted me.

Favorite Parts: The warrior woman giving Columbus an opportunity to prove his merit and his pompous reaction. I enjoyed her response to the other warrior that Columbus was weak and not worthy of any recognition.

Overall Impression: The story unfolded with a glimpse at what happened and how it unfolded and the satisfying conclusion.

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my pleasure! Lyn




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Review of Medical Necessity  
Review by Witchy woman
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
“Who wants to become a writer? And why? Because it’s the answer to everything. … It’s the streaming reason for living. To note, to pin down, to build up, to create, to be astonished at nothing, to cherish the oddities, to let nothing go down the drain, to make something, to make a great flower out of life, even if it’s a cactus.”—Enid Bagnold

HiBob

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review as a judge for WDC's Journey Through Genres contest

As a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: Medical Necessity


First Impression: I chuckled reading it, you did an excellent portrayal of facing mental health issues with satirical humor.

What needs your attention: I didn't note any punctuation or grammar issues. But this one sentence felt like it needed a comma and the word when to make the transition smoother. "I won't be anyone's guinea pig. I get my hands on you, you'll be the first to swallow what you're" I won't be anyone's guinea pig, when I get my hands on you....

Favorite Parts:" Get away from me. You can’t make me. I’m selected? First test subject? You’ve got to be crazy, thinking you can get away with this. Let go of me. I’m not going to swallow anything." I could easily see these arguments happening in my head, it felt just right as it unfolded.

Overall Impression: Light humor on an amusing alternate reality that could easily be someone's reality. Nicely done.

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my pleasure! Lyn




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Review by Witchy woman
Rated: E | (4.0)
“Who wants to become a writer? And why? Because it’s the answer to everything. … It’s the streaming reason for living. To note, to pin down, to build up, to create, to be astonished at nothing, to cherish the oddities, to let nothing go down the drain, to make something, to make a great flower out of life, even if it’s a cactus.”—Enid Bagnold

Hi Espero

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review as a judge for WDC's Journey Through Genres contest

As a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: Compassion at Wounded Knee

First Impression: It would be a different world, if we had resolved things different than we did. I enjoyed your twist on history.

What needs your attention: In this sentence, it should be at not in. John worked in the local body shop. He enjoyed the trade. He started in high school, liked it, and now worked there full time. There are some sentences that also have in when in doesn't fit.

Favorite Parts: I enjoyed the Quaker solution to the situation. It was the way it should have been versus what it was. John's proposal was clear and logical.


Thank you for sharing your work.


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Review by Witchy woman
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Rated: E | (3.0)
“Who wants to become a writer? And why? Because it’s the answer to everything. … It’s the streaming reason for living. To note, to pin down, to build up, to create, to be astonished at nothing, to cherish the oddities, to let nothing go down the drain, to make something, to make a great flower out of life, even if it’s a cactus.”—Enid Bagnold

Hi Pernell

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review as a judge for WDC's Journey Through Genres contest

As a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: The Mayan Conquistadors


First Impression: History being repeated.

What needs your attention: This sentence is unclear as written .His captor forced him aboard a smaller metal boat to join other captives, and when it was full, they set said with two captors watching everyone.

Favorite Parts: Sergio recalling the stories that swept through Spain after Columbus returned.

Overall Impression: Truthfully, a violent story with a lot of details that didn't enrich the story, isn't appealing to me. I felt overwhelmed by the gore but couldn't understand theauthor's point. Typically, in a story the reader goes on the journey with a narrator, with an arc in the story followed by the conclusion. In your piece, the character was in danger the whole time with no apparent change. Clearly, I'm not your genres target audience.

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my pleasure! Lyn



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Review by Witchy woman
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Rated: E | (5.0)
b}“Who wants to become a writer? And why? Because it’s the answer to everything. … It’s the streaming reason for living. To note, to pin down, to build up, to create, to be astonished at nothing, to cherish the oddities, to let nothing go down the drain, to make something, to make a great flower out of life, even if it’s a cactus.”—Enid Bagnold

Hi Graham

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review as a judge for WDC's Journey Through Genres contest

As a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: The Waters of Arda.


First Impression:I enjoyed how the story draws the reader in by childhood memories and songs. It felt like we as the reader was with Kayan.

What needs your attention: I didn't note anything in punctuation or grammar.

Favorite Parts: I found reliving his father's disappearance interesting and well written. It is difficult being a child and not understanding how adults handle grief.

Overall Impression: Kayan's opportunity to relive his father's disappearance, process the emotions were well written with a very satisfying conclusion. The ocean almost smiled felt perfect.

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my pleasure! Lyn




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Review of The Soldier Man  
Review by Witchy woman
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Rated: 18+ | (3.0)
“Who wants to become a writer? And why? Because it’s the answer to everything. … It’s the streaming reason for living. To note, to pin down, to build up, to create, to be astonished at nothing, to cherish the oddities, to let nothing go down the drain, to make something, to make a great flower out of life, even if it’s a cactus.”—Enid Bagnold

Hi Liliapadwes

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review as a judge for WDC's Journey Through Genres contest

As a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: The Soldier Man


First Impression: I really felt the story needed more to reach it's full potential.

What needs your attention: The word count was missing. I felt like there wasn't information given to explain why Benjamin was so cruel to Amelia.

Favorite Parts: Antonio apologizing for his father. He was mature than his father.

Overall Impression: There needed to more to the story for this reader. Benjamin made no effort to establish a relationship with his children. Nor was it clear why Amelia was dreaming about Antonio and why he died in the conclusion. The beginning of the story and the conclusion connected but there wasn't enough details in the middle to make it satisfying.

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my pleasure! Lyn


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Review of Free Montana  
Review by Witchy woman
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Rated: E | (4.5)
“Who wants to become a writer? And why? Because it’s the answer to everything. … It’s the streaming reason for living. To note, to pin down, to build up, to create, to be astonished at nothing, to cherish the oddities, to let nothing go down the drain, to make something, to make a great flower out of life, even if it’s a cactus.”—Enid Bagnold

Hi Norma Jean

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review as a judge for WDC's Journey Through Genres contest

As a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: Free Montana


First Impression: This reminded me of our present situation with covid. Thankfully, these extremes aren't be enforced. Can you imagine how many red x's would be everywhere we looked.

What needs your attention: I didn't notice any punctuation or grammar issues.

Favorite Parts: Humbit and Gay trying put together a plan to protect the baby and themselves in the event the searchers came.

Overall Impression: It flowed smoothly from beginning to end.

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my pleasure! Lyn


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Review of One Last Job  
Review by Witchy woman
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Rated: E | (4.0)
“Who wants to become a writer? And why? Because it’s the answer to everything. … It’s the streaming reason for living. To note, to pin down, to build up, to create, to be astonished at nothing, to cherish the oddities, to let nothing go down the drain, to make something, to make a great flower out of life, even if it’s a cactus.”—Enid Bagnold

Hi Wicked Fugitive

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review as a judge for WDC's Journey Through Genres contest

As a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: One Last Job


First Impression: I chuckled reading lizards owning humans. Interesting concept with a satisfying ending.

What needs your attention: I didn't notice any grammar or punctuation errors.

Favorite Parts: Edwin's fascination for cats, James joking about them shredding Edwin's body after he dies. Edwin laughing because the cats are already trying.

Overall Impression: Enjoyable read with satisfying conclusion with the human's antics on Edwin's suits. That was funny.

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my pleasure! Lyn


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Review by Witchy woman
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Rated: ASR | (3.5)
As a lover of poetry, and short stories and not a professional reviewer, I hope you take my personal opinions in the manner that they are given, my goal is to be encouraging and give you something that will help you grow as a writer.

Is the title suitable to the poem/story? Yes, it is.

Does the story have an introduction, a middle and a conclusion with a suitable climax. Yes, but there is a lot that doesn't add anything to the story. It dragged it down for this reader.

How did your piece make me feel? I felt a connection to the princess because marriage does evolve over time with many disappointments.

What was my favorite part? The ending when she decided to appreciate her life as it was.

What would I change? The pearl wedding for Princess Wencheng and her husband will be held this Saturday.
"Everything has been well done, and the 30th anniversary'll be perfect," Princess Wencheng said to herself. She decorates the sofa, the pillows and the dinner table with the new red cloth covers she bought several days ago. It's a little weird to decorate with so much red color inner house, for it's so strong that a bull might be mad. But Princess Wencheng loves to use red in her important days because it means fortune, joy and happiness in Chinese culture.
The sunlight crosses through the windows, shining on the newly changed red sofa, pillows, and the tablecloth, Princess Wencheng sips her tea and smiles, apparently satisfied with her masterpiece, which means happiness in China, even if the happy color has been used by her, for the previous 29 wedding anniversaries, she never feels bored.
Clapping the pillows again and again to make them look more fluffy, Princess Wencheng frowns, for she thinks of the receipt for the anniversary gift she found in the pocket of her husband's suits. It's the tradition her husband buys her a gift for their wedding anniversary every year, and the gift must be a surprise to her, the climax of the wedding anniversary. But this year, she has known what her husband has bought for her.
A pearl necklace. A pearl necklace for their pearl wedding anniversary. The perfect anniversary gift! She frowns again, lying on the sofa, then closes her eyes.
At this moment, the phone rings, and Princess Wencheng stood up. She pats the pillow under her into a good shape before putting it back on the sofa, then she grabs the phone to her ears.
"Excuse me, is that Mrs. Lin? The cake of your wedding anniversary is in production, but we wanna check the writing decoration on the cake."
"Yes," Princess Wencheng answers. It's the bakery shop. She booked the wedding anniversary cake a week ago, and it's the expensive style in the bakery, with three tiers, decorated with pearls all made of candy, by skilled cake-maker, though everyone knows the cake is too large for the anniversary, for it's just a small family gathering party. Except for her and her husband, Mr. Lin, only the family of their only daughter will fly back from Chicago. But at the moment Princess Wencheng feels happy when she imagines all her family and her lovely grandchildren yelling when they see the giant cake decorated with pearls, and the luxury thing matches their family, the founder of a family-owned real estate company, famous around Chinese neighborhood.
"The cake is for the 30th anniversary of ...ur..." asked the bakery, "Princess Wencheng and King Songtsen Gampo, right? Mrs. Lin? "
"Correct, I have left the details when I booked it."
"Yeah, but Mrs. Lin, your name on your credit card is Feng Li," replies bakery. "Thanks for your time, and your anniversary cake'll arrive at your home at the noon of tomorrow . Happy anniversary and hope you enjoy it."
Princess Wencheng thinks for a while, and she murmurs, "Yes. Thanks." Then she hanged up the phone. At this moment, Princess Wencheng remembers, before her marriage to her husband, Mr. Lin, and her immigration to America, her actual name is Feng Li, which is a common Chinese name for a common woman at her age. And Everyone knowns her for Mrs. Lin after marriage. But her husband and friends gave her Princess Wencheng, a lovely name, as her nickname, for she is so proud of her stories about her royal blood and marriage.
"I would be the real princess if I lived in Tang dynasty, for I'm the descendants of Yuan Li, the founder and king of Tang dynasty." She always started her story like that, to her husband first, then her workmates in her family-owned real estate company, then her daughter, now herself.
"Mom, your surname of Li couldn't prove your royal blood. You just have the same surname of Li, with the Princesses in Tang dynasty." Her only daughter questioned about her Mom, Princess Wencheng's story when she studied Chinese history in school .
"You're a USA girl and you don't know the Chinese history." Princess Wencheng said, "My grandfather kept our family tree book hanging on the wall of his living room. It said our blood originated from the third wife of Yuan Li, the king of Tang dynasty."
And she might continue, "My marriage is like the story of Princess Wencheng and her husband, Songtsen Gampo, in the dynasty Tang, far, far ago, a happy and impressing story in the ancient history of China. Princess Wencheng, surnamed Li, was a princess of a minor branch of the royal clan of the Tang Dynasty. Tubo King Songtsen Gampo fell in love at first sight..."
At this moment, her husband, Mr. Lin, laughed, and said, "yes, Mrs. Lin, you're the Princess Wencheng in the United States, for your surname is also Li, so I'm your Songtsen Gampo, the king, for I fell in love at first sight of you, in Beijing."
Almost everybody knows the marriage of Mrs. Lin, "Princess Wencheng", and Mr. Lin, "king Songtsen Gampo" was full of difficulties, after Mrs. Lin told them their love story. Thirty years ago, she lived in a narrow alley, called Hutong in Chinese, in Beijing, and in a party she met Mr. Lin, a Taiwanese, immigrated with his family and lived in America. Mr. Lin fell in love with her at her first sight, for she was so young and beautiful, like a shining pearl newborn in the shell. He proposed to her after several weeks with her in Beijing. But Mrs. Lin's family disagreed with their marriage, for Mr. Lai was ten years older than her, and also he was a Taiwanese, and lived in the United States, far away from Beijing.
"King Songtsen Gampo's proposal was refused by the king of Tang, for Tubo was far away from Tang," Princess Wencheng's eyes filled with tears when she spoke of her happy marriage, "but King Songtsen never gave up and sent the envoy to propose to the princess for three times."
Regardless of her family's opposition, Princess Wencheng, before she became Mrs. Lin, agreed after Mr. Lin's first proposal and married him soon, and she knew Mr. Lin was so popular among the unmarried women, for the marriage to an American citizen was the best way of immigrating to America, a fancy heaven to every young woman. But she never referred to this truth behind her love story, and she didn't know whether she loved Mr. Lin at her marriage because she was so young, just an undergraduate.
But Princess Wencheng waited for the reviews of the immigration office for almost two years before she could immigrate to America, even after she became Mrs. Lin. She always continued her story, while sharing it to others, "King Songtsen Gampo's proposal was refused by Tang dynasty. But he didn't give up and at last he married Princess Wencheng, but Wencheng Li spent almost 1 year on the dangerous and hard journey to Tubo."
Actually, Mrs. Lin's hard journey doesn't end even after she immigrated to America and reunited with her husband, for Mr. Lin, her Songtsen Gampo, was not the rich king but a poor young man, working in a restaurant of China town after their marriage. But Princess Wencheng didn't feel disappointed or frustrated, even though they lived in an old, dirty apartment, surrounded with the drunk and junkie every night, after she gave the birth to her daughter. Together with her husband, she worked hard in a laundry of China town for nearly 14 hours per day, meanwhile studied English in the night school. They worked day and night for several years, and then they saved an enormous amount of money. During the financial crisis, they bought a giant building in China town at a very good price, sold by a bankrupt owner, with their hard-earned money. They founded their family-owned real estate company, and the value of the buildings they invested rose like crazy when her daughter went to primary school.
They now are rich people in China town, even in their city they live. They are the real princess and king.
Princess Wencheng always ended her story with, "Songtsen Gampo's and Princess Wencheng's have a happy ending for 40-year-marriage, and their union brought hopes of promoting a harmonious, matrimonial relationship between the peoples of Tubo and China." Princess feels also proud of herself when she shares her story, both a magic Chinese ancient story and a real American dream, and she proves she becomes a winner of both family and career, other than a hillbilly from the country, marring with someone for green card.
But Princess Wencheng and King Songtsen in the United States, never ends.
Staring at the enormous green lawn and flower nursery in the backyard, through the giant French windows, Princess Wencheng considers whether to call the gardener to come and prune it before Saturday. Then she decided to do it by herself, for she doesn't want others to disturb their family gathering party, and she has enough time to finish all the stuff because the flight of her daughter's family will arrive tonight.
Wearing the shield glasses and earmuffs, like a young girl, she jumps into the lawn-mover and turns on the engine. The mover shakes like a small boat, floating in the roaring waves, and she held the steering wheel tight, like a skilled captain. It's easy to her, for she is experienced in gardening and pruning by herself, after she retired from their family-owned real estate company and returned to her family, to take care of her daughter and husband.
The lawn-mover runs steadily, and she holds and turns steering wheel carefully, to prevent its detailing. Princess Wencheng feels satisfied that the green lawns are cut neatly and smells like the fresh melon in the summer. While driving, she enjoys her masterpiece, line by line, like a colorful rainbow after the rain, behind the wheels of the mover. At this moment, she recalls the scene every time she drives by the giant building of their family-owned company, through the giant glass windows of which, her empty office has been kept beside the windows by her like before, even though after she turned back home from her career of real estate. And the windows look colorful with sunlight, shined like a mirror covered with soap bubbles. But she trusts everything is under her control and never derails.
After she cleans all the grass from the lawn, she feels exhausted, but she must prepare for the dinner to welcome the family of her daughter, arriving tonight. She has bought all her daughter likes, for she knows her daughter's favorite food since she was a child. However, she feels confused because she doesn't know what her grandchildren and son-in-law like, for she only meets them twice a year, one for the wedding anniversary, and the other for the Christmas party, after her daughter accepted the proposal of the son of her best friend in China town, then left them for Chicago. Looking through the luxury marble-made island, and glancing at her daughter's bedroom since she was a kid, kept like before and cleaned by her every week, she sighs and said to herself,
"Everything tough is the test to Princess Wencheng, for she must overcome all difficulties for her happy marriage, her husband and kids. It's destiny." She adds, "At least they will come back tonight, and everything seems not to derail."
At this moment, the phone rings and she answers. It's her husband, Mr. Lin, and simply he says on the other end, "My princess, sorry to call. I'll work late and could you please say sorry to the family of our daughter for my absence of the dinner tonight. I promise, I'll prepare the gift for our important anniversary tomorrow, a big surprise, my princess."
Work late! Again! She feels a bit disappointed but says nothing to her husband, for she endured then accustomed to his working late, since she returned family. And apparently it hasn't been a secret to her the gift for their 30th anniversary is an expensive pearl necklace. But it's a big surprise to her, for she found her husband bought two same pearl necklaces and paid twice the price, from the receipt, twisted as a paper ball, inside the pocket of his suits when she washed it. Her heart twists again, like the wrinkled receipt, but soon she escapes from the anxious thoughts. Her beloved husband, the king Songtsen, won't betray their marriage because they have overcome so much that their 30th pearl wedding anniversary will come tomorrow.
"Maybe the other necklace is for our beloved daughter. He always buys the same gifts for both us." She says to herself. "My love story never has a sad ending."
***
Their daughter, son-in-law and the grandchildren arrive after dawn, before the dinner time. Princess Wencheng stood by the windows, looking at their cab stopping before her big house, she taps the pillows on the sofa again. Satisfied by all the decorated sofa, dinner table and other furnitures, she walked toward the front gate and stood before the giant gold-painted mirror, and reorganizes her hairstyle and dress again, awaiting the bell ringing.
Ding-a-ling, ding-a-ling. The bell rings, followed by the yelling of kids. Princess Wencheng smiles and opens the door. "Welcome home, my dear," she exclaims.
"Mom, happy pearl wedding anniversary, and I miss you," tired of dragging a big travel suitcase with one arm, her daughter hugs Princess Wencheng with the other, and then kisses with her stiff lips. Then the lovely grandchildren, a five-year-old boy and a three-year-old girl rushes into her, "Granny," they yell and hugs Princess Wencheng's legs. At this moment, tears upwelling from her eyes, Princess Wencheng feels everything coming back to the rail again.
"I miss you, my darling," Princess Wencheng says, directing them to their bedroom. After putting down all their package, the kids rushes into her giant backyard with their dad, jumps on the new-cut grass lawn and flower bed, and they yell, for they have never seen a beautiful garden like their grandma's, since they life in an apartment without backyard in Chicago.
Looking through the windows besides the kitchen island, princess Wencheng frowns at her grandchildren in her tidy backyard for a while, then she squeezes a smile on her face soon. She hands the dinner sets made of china used only in their important family parties to her daughter, and says,
"You should move back with your kids and husband," she adds, "the kids enjoy the playground, and our house has enough space for you."
"Don't judge my life, Mom." Setting the dinner table, her daughter cuts in suddenly, ignorant of what she said. "Have the dinner sets been placed in their right rails?" Princess Wencheng stares at the enormous shiny dinner table beside the windows. "Your papa might come back late for dinner tonight," she removes the dinner set for her husband, and mutters, "but he has prepared all for our pearl wedding anniversary."
After hearing Mr. Lin might work late tonight, her daughter frowns and asks, "Mom, how about you these days? I mean, you and Papa?"
"Good, why do you ask like so?" Princess Wencheng glanced at her daughter.
Her daughter pauses after a while, then she walks toward her Mom and whispers into her ears, "Mom, I have some bad news about Papa to tell, but I'm not sure whether it's the proper time."
"You live so far away from us, and what do you know about your Papa?"
"It's from Mom of my husband," her daughter lowers her voice, "your best friend, and she said Papa brought a pretty young woman to their business party. I believe they might not tell a rumor, for your friend circle of Chinese real estate business is small."
Princess Wencheng's heart sinks, and what her daughter said reminds her of the receipt of their anniversary gifts--two same pearl necklaces, the secrets might bomb at any time and smash her happiness into pieces. Princess Wencheng's heart twists again and burns because the news of her husband's affairs with other woman, prettier and younger than her, flies fast within her daughter, her son-in-law and all her friends, except for her. But she soon calms down, even relaxes after the secret bombed in her heart. Nothing changes. Her daughter and husband come back in the end.
"Rumor! I know the woman, and she is the new workmate hired by our company," Princess lifts her head and speaks steadily.
"Mom, I've known the aunties and uncles in your company since I was a child, and the pretty young woman might not stay in our company in China town."
"Apparently they're jealous about our happy marriage and success. She might be the client of our business." Princess Wencheng adds, "Your Papa has bought the expensive pearl necklace for our pearl wedding tomorrow."
Helding shoulders of Princess tight, her daughter sighs. "Mom, don't cheat yourself, and you're only 55 and young. It's America here, and you shouldn't endure his cheating like the women of old times in China. I'm a lawyer, and the laws'll protect you even if you divorce Papa. We'll support you because we love you, Mom..."
"But you don't know what I need, what I expect most," Princess yells, with tears in her eyes. "As I told you, Princess Wencheng and King Songsten have a happy marriage for 40 years."
"Mom, that's not the truth. King Songsten died after 10 years of their marriage, and Princess Wencheng lived lonely in Tubo for almost 30 years." The young daughter yells back, "That's unfair to her, and you. And I'll divorce without hesitation if my husband cheats on me."
"Please don't judge me!" Princess Wencheng tries her best to low her voice and hide her tears. "Tomorrow'll be my big day and everything is in rail. I have another 10 years, 20 years even 30 years with your Papa."
The young daughter sighs and pulls the door to backyard crack. "Come on, kids, dinner is ready." She yells at her husband and children.
***
Early Saturday, the sun lights come through the windows and flowers in the nursery blossomed as usual. Everything seems normal in this house, and the 30th anniversary begins.
Princess Wencheng wears the red silk-made traditional cheongsam, made for her marriage 30 years ago in Beijing, with all her hair combed up tight like a bun. She stood at the middle of their giant house, awaiting her husband, the king Songtsan Gampo, and their little princess and princes. The whole family people should dress up in traditional styles, for Princess Wencheng has hired the personal photographer here, after their party, to take a family photo for their family.
At last, Mr. Lin walks down the stairs, wearing a set of gray suits, with his shiny hair combed back on the head. Princess Wencheng frowns at him, for she has cleaned his traditional silk-made Tang costume he wore in their marriage party 30 years ago and put it on their bed this morning.
"Why don't you wear the Tang costume for our anniversary?" She asks.
"My princess, the costume is too small for me, for I put on weight these years." Mr. Lin says, pointing his new suits, "the new suits fit me."
Princess Wencheng stares at her husband and mutters, "the old clothes are better than the new ones."
At the moment, the family of her daughter walks outside her bedroom, wearing the traditional red costumes they wore every year for the anniversary, prepared by princess Wencheng. Princess nods at them and smiles.
"Mom, I swear, next year, we wouldn't wear these costumes, for they don't fit us now." her daughter scolds.
The doorbells ring. The luxury cake arrives on time, and it's placed on the middle of the table, covered with red tablecloth, and decorated with fresh flowers, in their beautiful backyard garden. The three- tire anniversary cake, covered with pearls made of sugar, shined under the sun lights, and on the top stood a big candy tag written with 'the 30th anniversary for Princess Wencheng and King Songsten'.
"What an awesome pearl wedding cake!" Surprised by the luxury and beautiful decorated cake, the young couple praise, and princess Wencheng feels happy inside her mind. The luxury ceremony pulls everything back to rail, though it costs a lot. But from the praise by others, she knows the money spent deserves it.
"Another surprise, my princess Wencheng," her king pulls a box from his pocket, and opens it before Princess Wencheng. It's the pearl necklace, the secret. But at this moment, everyone stares at the fantastic gift, and nobody remembers the rumor of the old man.
This impressive necklace is composed of round, white South Sea pearls with the sharpest luster. The rare, large pearls have a bright white body color with iridescent silver overtones. The cute necklace is knotted in white silk and finished with a 14-karat clasp. The strand attracts everyone's eyes and hearts, especially Princess Wencheng. She widens her eyes, and strokes it cautiously, for it is the most beautiful gift she has received for the 30 years. At this moment, she knows everything she sacrifices for their family deserves.
Feeling everything pulled back into the rail, some familiar light flashes through Mr. Lin's eyes, and he smiles like he always does. "Let me help you wear it, my princess," he wears it around her neck then whispers into her eyes, "happy pearl wedding, and you deserve it."
***
After the dinner, before taking the family photo, Princess Wencheng walks inside the house, and stands before the huge wall mirror in the hall, like a real young princess. Then she strokes the sea pearls with her fingers. Suddenly, she hears someone screaming, and soon she realizes her gift, the pearl necklace around her neck yells at her,
"It hurts," the pearls cry.
Unaware of what was taking place the little oyster cried, princess Wencheng reorganizes her dress and hair, but she smells some salty flavor of tears of pearls, and she feels every tear becomes a covering that changes the sand inside. Then the pain is so great that the sharpness of the grain of sand merges with the flesh of oyster.
At this moment, princess Wencheng tastes something bitter and salty. She realizes it's a tear, but she can't identify whether it's hers or the sea pearl's. She thinks it tastes like her pearl marriage, filled with hurt and injury, bitter and painful, but now as smooth as butter.
Staring at her family in the backyard, waiting for the photographer and tidying up the clothes for each other, her daughter's advice of divorce last night flashes through her mind and she murmurs to herself,
"She's too young to understand the truth of marriage. It's painful. Just like the oyster produces pearls from hurtful grains of sand. God produces things of beauty from hurts we can't understand."
At this moment, she relaxes herself and doesn't care about whether his husband will gift the other necklace to their daughter or another young pretty woman. Stroking her necklace, she knows her choice doesn't mean she is timid, or she is a traditional Chinese woman as her daughter said. She murmurs,
"Every marriage is like the pearls, the God's great love that makes them out of pain."
Phew. She stares at herself in the mirror without tidying up her hair and dress again. Then she feels happy,
while letting something out their rail. Apparently satisfied, she turns around and smiles as usual, ready for taking their family photo on their 30th pearl wedding anniversary.
"At least, a real princess never divorces," saying to herself, she smiles, lifts her head and pulls open the back door.




Was it well thought out and well written? Yes, it was.


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Review of Dead End  
Review by Witchy woman
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Rated: E | (4.0)
As a lover of poetry, and short stories and not a professional reviewer, I hope you take my personal opinions in the manner that they are given, my goal is to be encouraging and give you something that will help you grow as a writer.

Is the title suitable to the poem/story? Yes, the title works.

Can it be read out loud?
Yes, because I did.

Do the lines and stanzas build upon each other? I felt stanzas 1, 3, 4, 5, 6 did.

Does the story have an introduction, a middle and a conclusion with a suitable climax. I felt the poem gave the reader an invitation for reflection as they read.

How did your piece make me feel? I felt like the author was spending time inside my head.

What was my favorite part? Dead End--
Just a little matter of perspective,
of deciding a new direction
or
choosing
to sit on the bench
going nowhere.
Anywhere
Nowhere
at all
!

I felt the ending was a great conclusion to a reflective journey. The author gave us the reader choices without recommending one over another.

What would I change? The second stanza made me pause and wonder why the author wanted me to feel like there was no way to move forward. I would have preferred

Dead End--
nowhere to go.
The End--
But is the
Story Finished.

Was it well thought out and well written? Interesting poetic opportunity for reflection. Thank you for sharing your work.


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Review by Witchy woman
In affiliation with Blog City ~ Every Blogger'...  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
As a lover of poetry, and short stories and not a professional reviewer, I hope you take my personal opinions in the manner that they are given, my goal is to be encouraging and give you something that will help you grow as a writer.

Is the title suitable to the poem/story? Yes, it can.

Can it be read out loud? Oh yeah, and it flows smoothly reading.

Do the lines and stanzas build upon each other? Yes, the author created an interesting tale.

Does the story have an introduction, a middle and a conclusion with a suitable climax. Yes,

How did your piece make me feel? Envious, I wish mine was as good.

What was my favorite part? Rising from the grave in tattered clothes... a great image to bring us on the journey.

What would I change? Not a thing.

Was it well thought out and well written? Yes, I believe Kare considered every word and it's effectiveness.


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Review of A Haunted House  
Review by Witchy woman
In affiliation with Blog City ~ Every Blogger'...  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
As a lover of poetry, and short stories and not a professional reviewer, I hope you take my personal opinions in the manner that they are given, my goal is to be encouraging and give you something that will help you grow as a writer.

Is the title suitable to the poem/story? It does indeed.

Can it be read out loud? Yes, it does read easily out loud.

Do the lines and stanzas (paragraphs) build upon each other? Yes, the story flows smoothly.

Does the story have an introduction, a middle and a conclusion with a suitable climax. Yes, it does.

How did your piece make me feel? A feeling of immense sadness. I connected with the loss. I lost a baby at four months. The loss never fades.

What was my favorite part? The crazy cat lady made me chuckle. Vic calls me that all the time. I love my fur babies.

What would I change?" Nightmares entered her mind and the next sentence." This sentence sounds abrupt and like author intrusion. I suggest... Nightmares of a little boy, a cat, and an old woman in a lovely red-tiled house with white plastered walls and a green grape in the backyard disrupted her sleep.

Was it well thought out and well written?
You did an excellent job with the prompt, Petra. The story was engaging and held my interest throughout.



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Review of The Face  
Review by Witchy woman
Rated: ASR | (3.0)
I've sent you a word document with your edits.

I realize English is not your first language and English with all its contractions and similar word usage can be very confusing. That's why I did it in a word document to help you.

Your story was interesting and reflected a the fear each of us has the first time traveling very well.


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Review of Dear Me  
Review by Witchy woman
In affiliation with Blog City ~ Every Blogger'...  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
“Who wants to become a writer? And why? Because it’s the answer to everything. … It’s the streaming reason for living. To note, to pin down, to build up, to create, to be astonished at nothing, to cherish the oddities, to let nothing go down the drain, to make something, to make a great flower out of life, even if it’s a cactus.”—Enid Bagnold

Hi Dark Lady

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review as a judge for WDC's Dear Me contest

As a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: Dear Me


First Impression: I'm saddened to hear 2019 wasn't a good year for you either. I can relate myself. My grandson died in a dirt bike accident. I hope 2020 is better for both of us. Writing is very helpful, I hope you continue to write.

What needs your attention: I didn't note any changes needed.

Favorite Parts:" Keep in mind family means more than money." That is indeed a very wise reminder. I would give anything to have one more hour with my grandson. They will remember the things you did together more than anything you bought them whether it is doing crafts, or making cookies or even playing endless board games.

Overall Impression: It looks like you have given a lot of thought to your entry and what you see is possible for this year. I wish you much success in 2020.

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my pleasure! Lyn


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Review of Dear Me 2020  
Review by Witchy woman
In affiliation with Blog City ~ Every Blogger'...  
Rated: 13+ | N/A (Review only item.)
“Who wants to become a writer? And why? Because it’s the answer to everything. … It’s the streaming reason for living. To note, to pin down, to build up, to create, to be astonished at nothing, to cherish the oddities, to let nothing go down the drain, to make something, to make a great flower out of life, even if it’s a cactus.”—Enid Bagnold

Hi Hooves

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review as a judge for WDC's Dear Me contest

As a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: Dear Me


First Impression: I agree reading the rules does make contests much easier and less stressful. It's good to see you here, my friend.

What needs your attention: I didn't note any needed changes. The letter flowed smoothly. Thank you for the larger font size. It makes it much easier for me to read not being able to put my computer on my lap.

Favorite Parts: I like your avoidance tactics. I was lucky too have missed everything. But unfortunately I've missed many things since my grandson passed or maybe in this instance it was a blessing instead.

Overall Impression: I agree with you writing and entering contests that bring you joy is very important. I really thought I was back on track and then life intervened again. I wish you much success in 2020. *Heart*

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my pleasure! Lyn




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Review by Witchy woman
In affiliation with Blog City ~ Every Blogger'...  
Rated: E | (4.0)
“Who wants to become a writer? And why? Because it’s the answer to everything. … It’s the streaming reason for living. To note, to pin down, to build up, to create, to be astonished at nothing, to cherish the oddities, to let nothing go down the drain, to make something, to make a great flower out of life, even if it’s a cactus.”—Enid Bagnold

Hi J Cosmos

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review as a judge for WDC's Dear Me contest

As a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: Dear Me, letter to Jake Cosmos


First Impression: Congratulations on turning 65. Yes, this is going to be an interesting election, hopefully, the democrats will get their act together and defeat Trump. He has destroyed our integrity world wide. It will not be easy regaining the trust of the world again.

What needs your attention: I noticed that the brackets to hyperlink in the beginning were not in place to achieve the look you desired.
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Favorite Parts: I love traveling and the locations you discussed sound awesome. I hope you consider a travel blog, especially on tumblr or flicker. Many bloggers would enjoy reading about the locations.

Overall Impression: You have given a lot of thought to what you want to do for 2020. I hope you're successful in your pursuit. Although, I think you may want to consider making a list prioritizing your goals.

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my pleasure! Lyn




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Review of Dear me...  
Review by Witchy woman
In affiliation with Blog City ~ Every Blogger'...  
Rated: E | (3.5)
“Who wants to become a writer? And why? Because it’s the answer to everything. … It’s the streaming reason for living. To note, to pin down, to build up, to create, to be astonished at nothing, to cherish the oddities, to let nothing go down the drain, to make something, to make a great flower out of life, even if it’s a cactus.”—Enid Bagnold

Hi Rinsoxy,

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review as a judge for WDC's Dear Me contest

As a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: Dear Me,


First Impression: I agree getting out of the house is a good goal. Some days writing 500 words a day seems insurmountable to me as well.

What needs your attention: I didn't note anything that distracted me.

Favorite Parts: Loving one's self. We all have times we're our won worse enemy. We tend to accept flaws in others but not in ourselves.

Overall Impression: Congratulations!

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my pleasure! Lyn




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Review of Dear Me  
Review by Witchy woman
In affiliation with Blog City ~ Every Blogger'...  
Rated: E | (4.0)
“Who wants to become a writer? And why? Because it’s the answer to everything. … It’s the streaming reason for living. To note, to pin down, to build up, to create, to be astonished at nothing, to cherish the oddities, to let nothing go down the drain, to make something, to make a great flower out of life, even if it’s a cactus.”—Enid Bagnold

Hi Bluejay

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review as a judge for WDC's Dear Me contest

As a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: Dear Me


First Impression: Four goals are very reasonable.

What needs your attention: I didn't note anything that distracted me while reading your entry.

Favorite Parts: Reading real books is an awesome goal. I'm working on that myself. My goal is 25 books this year. I've read 4 so far, I tend to do better during the winter than I do the rest of the year. I found reading early in the morning with my first coffee of the day to be the most successful use of time. What I do suggest is blocking a specific time for reading.

Overall Impression: I wish you much success with your writing and reading goals.

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my pleasure! Lyn




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Review of Dear Me - 2020  
Review by Witchy woman
In affiliation with Blog City ~ Every Blogger'...  
Rated: 18+ | (3.0)
“Who wants to become a writer? And why? Because it’s the answer to everything. … It’s the streaming reason for living. To note, to pin down, to build up, to create, to be astonished at nothing, to cherish the oddities, to let nothing go down the drain, to make something, to make a great flower out of life, even if it’s a cactus.”—Enid Bagnold

Hi Mastiff,

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review as a judge for WDC's Dear Me contest

As a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: Dear Me


First Impression: I'm sorry about the job loss. Yes, it is difficult to job hunt over the holiday season. I hope this finds you happily employed again.

What needs your attention: I didn't note any punctuation concerns but I did see you failed to post the word count which is required for the contest.

Favorite Parts: I chuckled when I read your closing about saving ten cents by not shaving. My oldest son struggles to grow a beard as well.

Overall Impression: I felt the conversation was direct and on target for goal setting. I could easily connect with the author.

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my pleasure! Lyn




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Review of Dear Me, 2020  
Review by Witchy woman
In affiliation with Blog City ~ Every Blogger'...  
Rated: E | (3.0)
“Who wants to become a writer? And why? Because it’s the answer to everything. … It’s the streaming reason for living. To note, to pin down, to build up, to create, to be astonished at nothing, to cherish the oddities, to let nothing go down the drain, to make something, to make a great flower out of life, even if it’s a cactus.”—Enid Bagnold

Hi Tinker

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review as a judge for WDC's Dear Me contest

As a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: Dear Me


First Impression: Yes, it is indeed another decade. My sixth one since my birth. I agree they do tend to blur.

What needs your attention: I didn't note any punctuation that distracted me as I read.

Favorite Parts: " Career, winding down, retire at 80? Don't drop dead on our clients. Work smart." I felt this line jumped out the most to me. I raised my eyebrows at retiring at 80, but then I chuckled when I came to don't drop dead on our clients. Yeah, dropping dead with a client isn't good for business.

Overall Impression: Your different approach to the dear me contest I felt needed more to be a top ten consideration.

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my pleasure! Lyn




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Review of Dear Me 2020  
Review by Witchy woman
In affiliation with Blog City ~ Every Blogger'...  
Rated: E | (4.5)
“Who wants to become a writer? And why? Because it’s the answer to everything. … It’s the streaming reason for living. To note, to pin down, to build up, to create, to be astonished at nothing, to cherish the oddities, to let nothing go down the drain, to make something, to make a great flower out of life, even if it’s a cactus.”—Enid Bagnold

Hi Neva

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review as a judge for WDC's Dear Me contest

As a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: Dear Me 2020


First Impression: I was saddened to hear January is a difficult month for you. December, April and July are not my favorite months. My granddaughter Sammy died in December, grandson Logan died in April, and most recently Johnny in July.

What needs your attention: The only thing I noticed was you mispelled label in the last sentence.

Favorite Parts: I am always impressed with your writing. I wish you much success this year in every endeavor.

Overall Impression: I felt your entry flowed smoothly and all the goals are reasonable to accomplish.

Be healthy and happy Neva! *Heart*

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my pleasure! Lyn




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Review of Dear Me  
Review by Witchy woman
In affiliation with Blog City ~ Every Blogger'...  
Rated: E | (5.0)
“Who wants to become a writer? And why? Because it’s the answer to everything. … It’s the streaming reason for living. To note, to pin down, to build up, to create, to be astonished at nothing, to cherish the oddities, to let nothing go down the drain, to make something, to make a great flower out of life, even if it’s a cactus.”—Enid Bagnold

Hi Elby,

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review as a judge for WDC's Dear Me contest

As a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: Dear Me


First Impression: I enjoyed reading your entry, your muse definitely gave you great advice. The lines didn't feel forced at all.

What needs your attention: I didn't notice any punctuation or grammar issues.

What's your favorite part? I think your muse is on the right track, I hope you follow your poetic goals despite the odds.

Overall Impression:
Interesting destination choices Cuba or Costa. I'm surprised or maybe a bit disappointed you didn't mention different sights available in the locations you chose. I wish you much success with your writing goals.

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my pleasure! Lyn




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