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#4535128

Review of Dear Me 2020

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Rated: 13+ | N/A (Review only item.)

“Who wants to become a writer? And why? Because it’s the answer to everything. … It’s the streaming reason for living. To note, to pin down, to build up, to create, to be astonished at nothing, to cherish the oddities, to let nothing go down the drain, to make something, to make a great flower out of life, even if it’s a cactus.”—Enid Bagnold

Hi Hooves

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review as a judge for WDC's Dear Me contest

As a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: Dear Me

First Impression: I agree reading the rules does make contests much easier and less stressful. It's good to see you here, my friend.

What needs your attention: I didn't note any needed changes. The letter flowed smoothly. Thank you for the larger font size. It makes it much easier for me to read not being able to put my computer on my lap.

Favorite Parts: I like your avoidance tactics. I was lucky too have missed everything. But unfortunately I've missed many things since my grandson passed or maybe in this instance it was a blessing instead.

Overall Impression: I agree with you writing and entering contests that bring you joy is very important. I really thought I was back on track and then life intervened again. I wish you much success in 2020.

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my pleasure! Lyn

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#4535127

Review of letter to Jake Cosmos Aller Re Big Plans

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

“Who wants to become a writer? And why? Because it’s the answer to everything. … It’s the streaming reason for living. To note, to pin down, to build up, to create, to be astonished at nothing, to cherish the oddities, to let nothing go down the drain, to make something, to make a great flower out of life, even if it’s a cactus.”—Enid Bagnold

Hi J Cosmos

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review as a judge for WDC's Dear Me contest

As a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: Dear Me, letter to Jake Cosmos

First Impression: Congratulations on turning 65. Yes, this is going to be an interesting election, hopefully, the democrats will get their act together and defeat Trump. He has destroyed our integrity world wide. It will not be easy regaining the trust of the world again.

What needs your attention: I noticed that the brackets to hyperlink in the beginning were not in place to achieve the look you desired.
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Favorite Parts: I love traveling and the locations you discussed sound awesome. I hope you consider a travel blog, especially on tumblr or flicker. Many bloggers would enjoy reading about the locations.

Overall Impression: You have given a lot of thought to what you want to do for 2020. I hope you're successful in your pursuit. Although, I think you may want to consider making a list prioritizing your goals.

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my pleasure! Lyn

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#4535124

Review of Dear Me - 2020

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Rated: 18+

| (3.0)

“Who wants to become a writer? And why? Because it’s the answer to everything. … It’s the streaming reason for living. To note, to pin down, to build up, to create, to be astonished at nothing, to cherish the oddities, to let nothing go down the drain, to make something, to make a great flower out of life, even if it’s a cactus.”—Enid Bagnold

Hi Mastiff,

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review as a judge for WDC's Dear Me contest

As a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: Dear Me

First Impression: I'm sorry about the job loss. Yes, it is difficult to job hunt over the holiday season. I hope this finds you happily employed again.

What needs your attention: I didn't note any punctuation concerns but I did see you failed to post the word count which is required for the contest.

Favorite Parts: I chuckled when I read your closing about saving ten cents by not shaving. My oldest son struggles to grow a beard as well.

Overall Impression: I felt the conversation was direct and on target for goal setting. I could easily connect with the author.

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my pleasure! Lyn

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#4535123

Review of Dear Me, 2020

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Rated: E

| (3.0)

“Who wants to become a writer? And why? Because it’s the answer to everything. … It’s the streaming reason for living. To note, to pin down, to build up, to create, to be astonished at nothing, to cherish the oddities, to let nothing go down the drain, to make something, to make a great flower out of life, even if it’s a cactus.”—Enid Bagnold

Hi Tinker

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review as a judge for WDC's Dear Me contest

As a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: Dear Me

First Impression: Yes, it is indeed another decade. My sixth one since my birth. I agree they do tend to blur.

What needs your attention: I didn't note any punctuation that distracted me as I read.

Favorite Parts: " Career, winding down, retire at 80? Don't drop dead on our clients. Work smart." I felt this line jumped out the most to me. I raised my eyebrows at retiring at 80, but then I chuckled when I came to don't drop dead on our clients. Yeah, dropping dead with a client isn't good for business.

Overall Impression: Your different approach to the dear me contest I felt needed more to be a top ten consideration.

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my pleasure! Lyn

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#4535122

Review of Dear Me 2020

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

“Who wants to become a writer? And why? Because it’s the answer to everything. … It’s the streaming reason for living. To note, to pin down, to build up, to create, to be astonished at nothing, to cherish the oddities, to let nothing go down the drain, to make something, to make a great flower out of life, even if it’s a cactus.”—Enid Bagnold

Hi Neva

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review as a judge for WDC's Dear Me contest

As a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: Dear Me 2020

First Impression: I was saddened to hear January is a difficult month for you. December, April and July are not my favorite months. My granddaughter Sammy died in December, grandson Logan died in April, and most recently Johnny in July.

What needs your attention: The only thing I noticed was you mispelled label in the last sentence.

Favorite Parts: I am always impressed with your writing. I wish you much success this year in every endeavor.

Overall Impression: I felt your entry flowed smoothly and all the goals are reasonable to accomplish.

Be healthy and happy Neva!

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my pleasure! Lyn

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#4535114

Review of Dear Me

Review by Lyn's a sly fox

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

“Who wants to become a writer? And why? Because it’s the answer to everything. … It’s the streaming reason for living. To note, to pin down, to build up, to create, to be astonished at nothing, to cherish the oddities, to let nothing go down the drain, to make something, to make a great flower out of life, even if it’s a cactus.”—Enid Bagnold

Hi Drake,

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review as a judge for WDC's Dear Me contest

As a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: Dear me

First Impression: It sounds like 2019 there were career changes and your goal is to find one more suitable to your nature. It's important to evaluate our weaknesses and strengths from time to time.

What needs your attention: I didn't note any punctuation or grammar issues.

Favorite Parts: Focusing on your health is important. I wish you much success with your goal to reduce your body fat.

Overall Impression: Career changes are interesting as well as stressful. I hope your choices bring you joy.

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my pleasure! Lyn

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#4535112

Review of Dear Me

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

“Who wants to become a writer? And why? Because it’s the answer to everything. … It’s the streaming reason for living. To note, to pin down, to build up, to create, to be astonished at nothing, to cherish the oddities, to let nothing go down the drain, to make something, to make a great flower out of life, even if it’s a cactus.”—Enid Bagnold

Hi Elby,

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review as a judge for WDC's Dear Me contest

As a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: Dear Me

First Impression: I enjoyed reading your entry, your muse definitely gave you great advice. The lines didn't feel forced at all.

What needs your attention: I didn't notice any punctuation or grammar issues.

What's your favorite part? I think your muse is on the right track, I hope you follow your poetic goals despite the odds.

Overall Impression: Interesting destination choices Cuba or Costa. I'm surprised or maybe a bit disappointed you didn't mention different sights available in the locations you chose. I wish you much success with your writing goals.

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my pleasure! Lyn

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#4535110

Review of Dear Me: Official WDC Contest Entry

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

“Who wants to become a writer? And why? Because it’s the answer to everything. … It’s the streaming reason for living. To note, to pin down, to build up, to create, to be astonished at nothing, to cherish the oddities, to let nothing go down the drain, to make something, to make a great flower out of life, even if it’s a cactus.”—Enid Bagnold

Hi Melisscious

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review as a judge for WDC's Dear Me contest

As a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: Dear Me: Official WDC Contest Entry

First Impression: Entertaining and engaging to read. I enjoyed the Sherlock Holmes quote in your closing.

What needs your attention: I didn't notice any punctuation or grammar issues.

Favorite Parts: I enjoyed the sunbeam on a Sunday afternoon in a cemetery. I paused and re-read this line. I agree giving up on our goals isn't healthy. We're creatures of habit.
Overall Impression: It was delightful and thought provoking. I wish you much success with your writing goals and finding a suitable fur baby to join your family.

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my pleasure! Lyn

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#4535107

Review of Dear Me

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

“Who wants to become a writer? And why? Because it’s the answer to everything. … It’s the streaming reason for living. To note, to pin down, to build up, to create, to be astonished at nothing, to cherish the oddities, to let nothing go down the drain, to make something, to make a great flower out of life, even if it’s a cactus.”—Enid Bagnold

Hi Debmiller1

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review as a judge for WDC's Dear Me contest

As a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: Dear Me

First Impression: I really enjoyed the suspense opening your dear me letter. It was very engaging.

What needs your attention: I didn't notice punctuation or grammar issues. Nor did I actually look because I was enjoying reading your letter.

Favorite Parts: I was hooked with the stormy night and the fear of being home alone but once the doorbell camera showed there was nothing to fear at least not from a stranger. But it might have been easier after all to have a stranger because the questions the inner self asked weren't easy to answer.

Overall Impression: I found the letter enjoyable and the game plan was well thought out with reasonable goals if the author really wants it. I'm looking forward to seeing next years dear me entry, Debbie.

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my pleasure! Lyn

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#4535105

Review of Dear Me 2020 - Keep The Vision Alive

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

“Who wants to become a writer? And why? Because it’s the answer to everything. … It’s the streaming reason for living. To note, to pin down, to build up, to create, to be astonished at nothing, to cherish the oddities, to let nothing go down the drain, to make something, to make a great flower out of life, even if it’s a cactus.”—Enid Bagnold

Hi Carly,

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review as a judge for WDC's Dear Me contest

As a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: Dear Me 2020-Keep the Vision Alive

First Impression: You're a busy girl. It's good tosee you're actively following your dreams. You've come a long way, Carly. I'm so happy for you.

What needs your attention: I didn't notice any punctuation or grammar issues.

Favorite Parts: Wow, six hour drive. I'm so glad Caroline joined you and you had a lot of fun too! The writing conference in Toronto sounded like a positive opportunity for you. I went to a writing conference myself last year, I enjoyed it immensely.

Overall Impression: I found your letter enjoyable. I hope you find success in your writing endeavors, Carly.

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my pleasure! Lyn

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#4535104

Review of Dear Me 2020

Review by Lyn's a sly fox

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

“Who wants to become a writer? And why? Because it’s the answer to everything. … It’s the streaming reason for living. To note, to pin down, to build up, to create, to be astonished at nothing, to cherish the oddities, to let nothing go down the drain, to make something, to make a great flower out of life, even if it’s a cactus.”—Enid Bagnold

Hi Steph B.

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review as a judge for WDC's Dear Me contest

As a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: Dear Me 2020

First Impression: YIKES, Dust bunnies. It sounds like you have a solid game plan for kicking the weeds to the curb.

What needs your attention: I didn't notice any grammar or punctuation errors.

Favorite Parts: That's really cool, taking 8th in Writer's Digest. I agree there's a lot of competition. I've entered the poetry competitions several times now. I wish you a lot of success with the Mainstream area.

Overall Impression: You've discussed your totem carvings and made plans to overcome them. I believe your muse and you appear to have it under control.

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my pleasure! Lyn

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#4535099

Review of Dear Me "2020" Letter

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

“Who wants to become a writer? And why? Because it’s the answer to everything. … It’s the streaming reason for living. To note, to pin down, to build up, to create, to be astonished at nothing, to cherish the oddities, to let nothing go down the drain, to make something, to make a great flower out of life, even if it’s a cactus.”—Enid Bagnold

Hi Legendary Mask

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review as a judge for WDC's Dear Me contest

As a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: Dear Me 2020

First Impression:I'm sorry to read you have heart issues. I hope your doctors have everything under control and your future will be long and healthy.

What needs your attention: I didn't note any punctuation or grammar issues.

Favorite Parts: I am a three time cancer survivor and I can relate to what you said about the value of your family's love and your faith. Both are amazing. I know reading the entries in Love Shouldn't Hurt it always amazes me how much a human can overcome. Together, we're a force to be reckoned with.

Overall Impression: You've shared very personal experiences and how your faith helped you. This can be very helpful to others. Thank you for sharing.

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my pleasure! Lyn

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#4535086

Review of Letter to Self

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

“Who wants to become a writer? And why? Because it’s the answer to everything. … It’s the streaming reason for living. To note, to pin down, to build up, to create, to be astonished at nothing, to cherish the oddities, to let nothing go down the drain, to make something, to make a great flower out of life, even if it’s a cactus.”—Enid Bagnold

Hi Nix,

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review as a judge for WDC's Dear Me contest

As a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: Letter to Self

First Impression: The author is focused on self analysis but isn't sure where to begin and when too much is too much.

What needs your attention: The rules of the contest are pretty specific, the letter must say Dear Me in the title and have a word count either at the top of the page or at the bottom.

Favorite Parts: Procrastination is a difficult habit to break. I wish you luck.

Overall Impression: Sometimes, we need our comfort zone rattled for us to discover new coping skills or opportunities.

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my pleasure! Lyn

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#4535084

Review of Dear Me 2020

Review by Lyn's a sly fox

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

“Who wants to become a writer? And why? Because it’s the answer to everything. … It’s the streaming reason for living. To note, to pin down, to build up, to create, to be astonished at nothing, to cherish the oddities, to let nothing go down the drain, to make something, to make a great flower out of life, even if it’s a cactus.”—Enid Bagnold

Hi Pumpkin

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review as a judge for WDC's Dear Me contest

As a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: Dear Me 2020

First Impression: You and I are alike... doing the same thing but hoping for a different result. I think they call that insanity. :)

What needs your attention: I didn't notice any punctuation or grammar issues.

Favorite Parts: Writing is important, never let anyone diminish you.

Overall Impression: I do agree consistency helps, setting a specific time helps. But I disagree about blogging. I see blogging as a way to clear the cobwebs before you sit down to write what matters.
I hope you find the balance you're seeking.

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my pleasure! Lyn

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#4535077

Review of Dear Me

Review by Lyn's a sly fox

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Rated: 18+

| (2.0)

“Who wants to become a writer? And why? Because it’s the answer to everything. … It’s the streaming reason for living. To note, to pin down, to build up, to create, to be astonished at nothing, to cherish the oddities, to let nothing go down the drain, to make something, to make a great flower out of life, even if it’s a cactus.”—Enid Bagnold

HiWaynemart

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review as a judge for WDC's Dear Me contest

As a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: Dear Me

First Impression: It sounds like you need to put alerts on your phone to keep dates in mind.

What needs your attention: I didn't notice any punctuation or grammar issues.

Favorite Parts: Lying to your wife is not a good practice to begin, it would be better to choose a different lake or invite your wife to spend time with you on the boat and maybe have a picnic out on the lake.

Overall Impression: Good luck writing

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my pleasure! Lyn

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#4471302

Review of Dear Me, Don't Forget to Chew

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Rated: 13+ | N/A (Review only item.)

“Who wants to become a writer? And why? Because it’s the answer to everything. … It’s the streaming reason for living. To note, to pin down, to build up, to create, to be astonished at nothing, to cherish the oddities, to let nothing go down the drain, to make something, to make a great flower out of life, even if it’s a cactus.”—Enid Bagnold

Hi Hooves, how are you?

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review as a judge for WDC's Dear Me contest

As a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: Dear Hooves,

First Impression: You made me laugh with the hang over face.

What needs your attention: Oops, you forgot to write dear me.

Favorite Parts: Writing with Megan sounds like fun for you both. Healthy eating is more important as we get older, I'm focused on getting back in shape too! I wish you lots of success with that.

Overall Impression: Good luck with I write up to 1000 words. I'm sure you got this. I agree reasonable goals and balance in life are the keys to success.

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my pleasure! Lyn

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#4471299

Review of Dear Me,

Review by Lyn's a sly fox

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

“Who wants to become a writer? And why? Because it’s the answer to everything. … It’s the streaming reason for living. To note, to pin down, to build up, to create, to be astonished at nothing, to cherish the oddities, to let nothing go down the drain, to make something, to make a great flower out of life, even if it’s a cactus.”—Enid Bagnold

Hi Peacerose,

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review as a judge for WDC's Dear Me contest

As a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: Dear Me,

First Impression: Looks like you spent spect some quality time considering how to express your artistic nature.

What needs your attention: I didn't notice any grammar or punctuation errors. Oops, looks like you forgot the word count.

Favorite Parts: I wondered what quilt pattern you were trying to finish before March. I love quilting, it's very relaxing to me. Is it for you.

Overall Impression: It's hard for me to balance one artistic outlet but it looks like you have many. I'm envious. Good luck with your goals this year.

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my pleasure! Lyn

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#4470400

Review of Dear Me 2019

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

“Who wants to become a writer? And why? Because it’s the answer to everything. … It’s the streaming reason for living. To note, to pin down, to build up, to create, to be astonished at nothing, to cherish the oddities, to let nothing go down the drain, to make something, to make a great flower out of life, even if it’s a cactus.”—Enid Bagnold

Hi Steph,

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review as a judge for WDC's Dear Me contest

As a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: Dear Me 2019

First Impression: This was really interesting but unfortunately the letter did not begin with dear me. Game of Thrones was a lot of fun, I missed it last year.

What needs your attention: I didn't notice any punctuation or grammar errors but I was so enthralled with your story.

Favorite Parts: The dust bunny hopping past you as you discussed your writing goals. The Writer's Digest Annual Writing Contest is wicked cool. Go for it!

Overall Impression: Your goals sound reasonable and you know what you need to do. After seeing you in action in the game of thrones I'm sure you got this, Steph.

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my pleasure! Lyn

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#4470035

Review of fleshy foreshadowing

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Rated: E

| (3.5)

As a lover of poetry, and short stories and not a professional reviewer, I hope you take my personal opinions in the manner that they are given, my goal is to be encouraging and give you something that will help you grow as a writer.

Hi Clown,

My name is Lyn.

Is the title suitable to the poem/story? Yes

Can it be read out loud? Yes, but it doesn't flow smoothly off the readers tongue, some of the words stumble.

Do the lines and stanzas build upon each other? Yes, but there are excess words that can be eliminated to help the pacing or cadence.

Does the story have an introduction, a middle and a conclusion with a suitable climax. The author set the scene and the conflict and conclusion effectively.

How did your piece make me feel? It has potential but needs some tightening up and stronger verbs to help provoke emotions in this reader. What I've learned thus far when writing poetry that it's important to have strong verbs and to not use: the, will, and, I, you, they slow the cadence down. Minimize the words to get your point across in a sharp crisp fashion.

What was my favorite part? The stanza about the tattered books, I wish you had elaborated more on that because it eludes to the time when gods were the guardians of history but I understand that wasn't the focus of the poem.

What would I change?

There's a dilemma reaching us all
a feeling foreshadows the fall
felt but forgotten over time

broken wings and shattered dreams
stories lost, forever unseen
as the world marches forward

march to the beat of the drum
as the tattered heart slips from
the open page of yesterdays news

can you feel the thumping earth
a reminder we're not the first
to see the angel's wings fold

no protector or guardian left
or people to feel bereft
nobody cares what's right or wrong

Was it well thought out and well written? The author chose a concept that most people can connect with. It just needed a bit of tweaking. I hope you find my suggestions helpful. Thank you for asking me to review your work.

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#4470031

Review of Dear Me

Review by Lyn's a sly fox

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

“Who wants to become a writer? And why? Because it’s the answer to everything. … It’s the streaming reason for living. To note, to pin down, to build up, to create, to be astonished at nothing, to cherish the oddities, to let nothing go down the drain, to make something, to make a great flower out of life, even if it’s a cactus.”—Enid Bagnold

HiLollycrow

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review as a judge for WDC's Dear Me contest

As a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: Dear Me

First Impression: Take no prisoners approach, awesome. I'm guilty of being blunt and I see you are as well. If we can't be honest with ourselves than we'll never reach our goals will we?

What needs your attention: I didn't note any grammar or punctuation issues. I felt the writing was focused and flow smoothly throughout.

Favorite Parts: When you recommended she pull up her big girl panties and do it. All of us are so worried about others think so much that we set impossible barriers before we begin and end up handicapping our self unnecessarily.

Overall Impression: I thought you gave excellent advice, didn't shirk your responsibility by sugar coating it. I loved your approach, it reminds me of myself. I've had some great conversations with myself over the years. I agree you got this!

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my pleasure! Lyn

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#4470027

Review of What's the matter with you?

Review by Lyn's a sly fox

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Rated: 18+

| (5.0)

“Who wants to become a writer? And why? Because it’s the answer to everything. … It’s the streaming reason for living. To note, to pin down, to build up, to create, to be astonished at nothing, to cherish the oddities, to let nothing go down the drain, to make something, to make a great flower out of life, even if it’s a cactus.”—Enid Bagnold

Hi Mesonali,

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review as a judge for WDC's Dear Me contest

As a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: What's the Matter with You?

First Impression: Not a dang thing, Mesonali. I enjoyed reading this entry, I chuckled as I read. Thank you.

What needs your attention: I didn't note any punctuation or grammar issues but in all honesty I wasn't actively looking because I was enjoying the tone of your letter so much.

Favorite Parts: Clicker, that's an interesting description for a photo bug. I really like that. I may start calling myself that instead of amateur photographer. I agree with your sentiment, pictures are indeed art and if there is a market make the most of it.

Overall Impression: We certainly can be our own worst enemies can't we. We immediately tell ourselves we can't or we're not and put ourselves behind a protective barrier instead of taking the chance. No truly isn't going to physically harm us. I'm happy for you, click on woman! You got this and good luck with your dear me entry. I found it very refreshing.

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my pleasure! Lyn

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#4470026

Review of Dear Me

Review by Lyn's a sly fox

In affiliation with Blog City ~ Every Blogger'...

Rated: ASR

| (4.0)

“Who wants to become a writer? And why? Because it’s the answer to everything. … It’s the streaming reason for living. To note, to pin down, to build up, to create, to be astonished at nothing, to cherish the oddities, to let nothing go down the drain, to make something, to make a great flower out of life, even if it’s a cactus.”—Enid Bagnold

Hi Jennifer

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review as a judge for WDC's Dear Me contest

As a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: Dear Me,

First Impression: I'm sorry for your loss. Grieving is not easy on anyone,hon. I agree with making those memories with your own babies, everything will eventually fall into place.

What needs your attention: I didn't see anything that distracted me as I read.

Favorite Parts: You're a crafter like me. I love doing things with my hands too! I can't be at the computer all the time, my mind shuts down. Yet, when I'm crocheting... I sing, listen to music or audio books. That's one way you could increase your reading of the great books out there.

I chuckled about the sleeping and wasting valuable time. I'm always on my hubby's case for that. He sleeps way too much.

Overall Impression: I agree with your muse's assessment about spreading too thin. We're all guilty of that. If I may Jennifer, choose what gives you the most joy, find a way to include your children in that activity and make the most of those moments for they will become precious memories.

I wondered what happened to you in 30 day, now I understand. I's challenging juggling writing when there are lots of other fun things going on. You'll find the balance needed.

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my pleasure! Lyn

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#4470024

Review of Dear Me 2019

Review by Lyn's a sly fox

In affiliation with Blog City ~ Every Blogger'...

Rated: ASR

| (3.5)

“Who wants to become a writer? And why? Because it’s the answer to everything. … It’s the streaming reason for living. To note, to pin down, to build up, to create, to be astonished at nothing, to cherish the oddities, to let nothing go down the drain, to make something, to make a great flower out of life, even if it’s a cactus.”—Enid Bagnold

Hi Chris

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review as a judge for WDC's Dear Me contest

As a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: Dear Me 2019

First Impression: You've laid out your goals and intentions for the year.

What needs your attention: I realize this is a letter to yourself but there a lot of redundancies that could easily be edited to make your points stronger. I felt like it was a sermon more than focusing on your goals.

Favorite Parts: Fasting is interesting. It actually has a lot of health benefits. I fast everyday for 16 hours and only consume food and beverages during an 8 hour window every day. I've lost 55 lbs thus far.

Overall Impression: Keep on doing whatever gives you peace and hopefully everything will fall in place for you.

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my pleasure! Lyn

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#4470023

Review of Dear Me 2019

Review by Lyn's a sly fox

In affiliation with Blog City ~ Every Blogger'...

Rated: E

| (5.0)

“Who wants to become a writer? And why? Because it’s the answer to everything. … It’s the streaming reason for living. To note, to pin down, to build up, to create, to be astonished at nothing, to cherish the oddities, to let nothing go down the drain, to make something, to make a great flower out of life, even if it’s a cactus.”—Enid Bagnold

Hi Charity,

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review as a judge for WDC's Dear Me contest

As a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: Dear Me 2019

First Impression: Wow, I have a good friend and her husband that did exactly what you're planning. They sold their home and moved into an rv initally traveling all of Europe. They sold that rv and moved back to the states and purchased another rv. They're now traveling throughout the 49 states. It's takes an amazing amount of discipline to live a minimalist life. So I can't imagine doing it with children, that's huge Charity but you know your situation better than me.

What needs your attention: I didn't notice any grammar or punctuation errors. I felt the paragraphs flowed smoothly.

Favorite Parts: I think it will be an exciting adventure too! I hope you find the resources to make your dream come true.
Four books is quite the accomplishment. I suggest contacting different hospitals and treatment centers and find out what resources are available for schizophrenia patients you might be able to promote a speaking opportunity.

Overall Impression: It looks like you've laid out an effective game plan and the only factor in your way appears to be the six month deadline. But with perseverance anything is possible. I wish you and yours success.

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my pleasure! Lyn

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#4470011

Review of Dear Bob 2019

Review by Lyn's a sly fox

In affiliation with Blog City ~ Every Blogger'...

Rated: 18+

| (4.5)

“Who wants to become a writer? And why? Because it’s the answer to everything. … It’s the streaming reason for living. To note, to pin down, to build up, to create, to be astonished at nothing, to cherish the oddities, to let nothing go down the drain, to make something, to make a great flower out of life, even if it’s a cactus.”—Enid Bagnold

Hi Bob, how's it going?

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review as a judge for WDC's Dear Me contest

As a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: Dear Bob, 2019

First Impression: I chuckled as I read the poem and then your inner voice telling you to avoid poetry, it doesn't pay the bills.

What needs your attention: The poem flowed smoothly and covered all the points of the contest.

Favorite Parts: It was interesting to discover you have a novel in hiding with redundant scenes obviously you want removed before you turn it loose for review. Now, you've got my curiosity peeked. Come on show and tell time.

Overall Impression: It's always a pleasure to read your work so I'm not sure why you're reluctant to put it out there beyond short stories and poetry. We're our own worse enemies aren't we?

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my pleasure! Lyn

My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .