|Hey River ,
I'm Khariyya Jia Li ~ Studying 247 and I'll be giving you a review for your story "Dumpster Diver" .
First of All:
Before I go on to say anything else, I want to say that you followed the prompt very well! You not only included the line in your story, but you also continued the theme throughout, and that's what I look for in good stories: consistency .
I didn't spot any mistakes in your piece. Very well written and you used great language that told the story well. Again, I spotted great consistency within the piece.
So there's a man who is obviously poor. He can't afford his own meals, and so he takes what other people have dumped out. By the language used, the description and setting, I get the feeling that he may be poor for a reason? Or that he has gotten himself into some trouble in the past, maybe.
The story has kind of an eerie feel to it, which is what gives me that feeling. It's consistent, which gives me new ideas about this character.
The story is short, but that didn't take away from the goal you're trying to achieve: to let the readers know what this man's goal was. To find food for himself.
Not much is revealed about the character, which is another reason I find him kind of mysterious and mischeivous. But in this case, not much has to be revealed.
There's only one important character in the story, which is the man. He has no name, but we know that he's poor.
He is definitely believable, yet mysterious.
What I Liked
Again, I loved the consistency! You never switched tenses, genres, feel, etc. which made the story fun to read and easy to follow.
I like how you stuck to your prompt so well, instead of just throwing it in there once and then forgetting about it. Instead, the prompt was the story's entire theme, as it should be.
What I Didn't Like
At first look, the story was kind of hard on my eyes. The prompt ran directly into the first scene, which kind of bothered me (this is a personal and somewhat strange opinion, don't feel pressured to change anything). I like to usually have the prompt kind of set off, like in a smaller font, a different color or in a dropnote.
Besides that little quirk of mine, there's nothing else that I disliked! Keep writing, you're doing a great job!
Thanks for sharing your piece,
A "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group" review.
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