Hi, Beholden

Greetings! I'm Samberine Everose and one of the judges in the

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and I'm here to give you a review in your entry.
Thanks for entering in the contest.


Please note that I am not a professional reviewer, anything I say here is just my humble own opinion and views, don't forget that this will be changed by others' perspective also. Take it if you like and drop it if you don't like it.

MY THOUGHT & IMPRESSION:

The story is good and the created words give good
imagery to the reader. Sometimes good imagery especially if it touches the reader's heart through their experience, visions, dreams, likes, and inspiration can stimulate their emotions to like and love as well as be hooked on the given title of a piece.

You did well in hooking your reader about the mysterious lights that come in the wood and at the end of the story they are wolves.
The proper using and choosing of words and blending them can create vivid imagery and evoke emotions. This will enable the reader to be a part of the story.
The crafted words are good for me, they create vivid imagery.

Great Work! Good luck!
MY DOUBT & SUGGESTION:
I have a few thoughts for you to consider, I colored them with red and my suggestion is in green.


Jim realised that they looked like eyes,
Jim realized that they looked like eyes,


Could it be the Werwolf?
Could it be the Werewolf?

Thank you for your participation in the contest.
I hope to see and read more of your works again!

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Hi, Kåre Enga in Udon Thani

Greetings! I'm Samberine Everose and one of the judges in the

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Short Shots: Official WDC Contest  (ASR) Use the photo to inspire your creativity. Write a short story and win big prizes! #1221635 by Writing.Com Support

and I'm here to give you a review of your entry.
Thanks for entering the contest.


Please note that I am not a professional reviewer, anything I say here is just my humble own opinion and views, don't forget that this will be changed by others' perspectives also. Take it if you like and drop it if you don't like it.

MY THOUGHT & IMPRESSION:

The given title gives an impression to be magical, folktales as well as mystery and ancient.
The created body is good even if it's short it links to the given title and to the prompt of the contest,
in where it flows smoothly and vividly and creates a good imagery.
You did well also in personifying the glass and develop its character through reflecting his feelings, grief and thought.

Great Work! Goodluck!

MY DOUBT & SUGGESTION:

I have a few doubts for you to consider, I colored them in red and green is my suggestion.

Fireflies aglow?
are Fireflies aglow?

This is where she had died.
This is where she died.

We soon saw their fear mirrored by our face. I winked out; but..
We soon saw their fear mirrored by our faces. I winked out; but..

were chatty and spoke of other lives as branch and twig.
were chatty and spoke of other lives as branches and twigs.

Thank you for your participation in the contest.
I hope to see and read more of your works again!

Just keep On smiling while stay in WRITING!

Hi, LightinMind

Greetings! I'm Samberine Everose and one of the judges in the

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Short Shots: Official WDC Contest  (ASR) Use the photo to inspire your creativity. Write a short story and win big prizes! #1221635 by Writing.Com Support

and I'm here to give you a review of your entry.
Thanks for entering the contest.


Please note that I am not a professional reviewer, anything I say here is just my humble own opinion and views, don't forget that this will be changed by others' perspective also. Take it if you like and drop it if you don't like it.

MY THOUGHT & IMPRESSION:

The title of the story gives me the impression of a memoir or remembrance because it is the header of a letter.
The created body is in the first point of view and you did well in expressing the emotions smoothly and gradually on the first part or beginning part you hooked the reader about the simple biography of the main characters.

The story flows smoothly and in the middle part, it stirs emotions like concern and sympathy.
There is only one character with sub characters mentioned in the letter, and you did well in developing and introducing it, through the way the character acts and think through is biograpjy letter in the story.

Great Work! Goodluck!

MY DOUBT & SUGGESTION:

I have some few doubts for you to consider, I colored them in red and my suggestion is in green.

their phony compassion and nosey concern did for me was train me how to fake it with
their phony compassion and nosey concern did for me was trained me how to fake it with

Thank you for your participation in the contest.
I hope to see and read more of your works again!

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Hi, PureSciFi

Greetings! I'm Samberine Everose and one of the judges in the

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Short Shots: Official WDC Contest  (ASR) Use the photo to inspire your creativity. Write a short story and win big prizes! #1221635 by Writing.Com Support

and I'm here to give you a review of your entry.
Thanks for entering the contest.


Please note that I am not a professional reviewer, anything I say here is just my humble own opinion and views, don't forget that this will be changed by others' perspectives also. Take it if you like and drop it if you don't like it.

MY THOUGHT & IMPRESSION:

The story is good, mystery, horror, and adventurous, it gives me an impression of being in another place and another era of time.
You did well in hooking me at the beginning and gradually created a mystery in the middle part and a good conclusion and solution at the ending part.

The characters were properly developed and introduce in the dialogue part which reflects there each one personality that makes the story more interesting.

The sequencing of the scene was related to each other and created a breathtaking or suspense experience.

Great Work! Goodluck!

MY DOUBT & SUGGESTION:

I have a few doubts for you to consider, I colored them in red and green are my suggestions.

It was hard to see it because their oblong oval mouth didn’t move.
It was hard to see it because their oblong oval mouths didn’t move.


The whole residence was feeling the Extreme Hot become that DeathBringer was running around that residence wildly.
The whole residence was feeling the extremely hot become that DeathBringer was running around that residence wildly.

Only now she did it with three Young One who were surrounding her
Only now she did it with three Young Ones who were surrounding her


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I hope to see and read more of your works again!

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Hi, Happy to write

Greetings! I'm Samberine Everose and one of the judges in the

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Short Shots: Official WDC Contest  (ASR) Use the photo to inspire your creativity. Write a short story and win big prizes! #1221635 by Writing.Com Support

and I'm here to give you a review of your entry.
Thanks for entering the contest.


Please note that I am not a professional reviewer, anything I say here is just my humble own opinion and views, don't forget that this will be changed by others' perspectives also. Take it if you like and drop it if you don't like it.

MY THOUGHT & IMPRESSION:

The story is simple but you did well in capturing the essence of Christmas with a link to the given prompt of the contest.
It straight to the point flows smoothly and creates good imagery, which reflects good emotions during the best and happiest day of the year,
where we always won't forget it.
There is also a magical aura in which it links to the given prompt.

Great Story! Good luck!

MY DOUBT & SUGGESTION:
I have some few doubts for you to consider, I colored them in red and green is my suggestion.

This is about the day I learned that we aren't alone and there's more to life then what is seen.
This is about the day I learned that we aren't alone and there's more to life than what is seen.

When i heard a small sound like a tiny choir raising
When i heard a small sound like a tiny choir raising


All the stars started to move just a little at first then alot spelling out Merry Christmas is what they wrote.
All the stars started to move just a little at first then a lot spelling out Merry Christmas is what they wrote.

I look closer rubbing my eyes and this little small star was moving very fast towards me.
I looked closer rubbing my eyes and this little star was moving very fast towards me.

Hello, it say and yeah you aren't alone here on earth we are real;
Hello, it says and yeah you aren't alone here on earth we are real;

She explained to me that she liked some of the activities surrounded around our Christmas holiday
She explained to me that she liked some of the activities surrounding our Christmas holiday


Thank you for your participation in the contest.
I hope to see and read more of your works again!

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Hi, Beck Firing back up!

Greetings! I'm Samberine Everose and one of the judges in the

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Short Shots: Official WDC Contest  (ASR) Use the photo to inspire your creativity. Write a short story and win big prizes! #1221635 by Writing.Com Support

and I'm here to give you a review of your entry.
Thanks for entering the contest.


Please note that I am not a professional reviewer, anything I say here is just my humble own opinion and views, don't forget that this will be changed by others' perspective also. Take it if you like and drop it if you don't like it.

MY THOUGHT & IMPRESSION:

The story is a mystery and full of adventure which is linked to the given prompt of the contest inwhere it reflected a magical moment with those snowflakes on a dim night.

You did well in showing it through your words as well as the proper sequence of the story is in order which flows smoothly and not in force but naturally.
The characters were developed well their personality in the dialogue scene and the way they act.

And I liked the ending part, we have the free will to choose our path.
W can choose our path if that is what makes us happy.

Great Work! Good luck!

MY DOUBT & SUGGESTION:

I have some few doubts for you to consider, I colored them in red and in green are my suggestions.
The snow had picked up and the woods seemed ominous on this night.


Jenna thought back to the snowflakes that light up with a brilliant light.
Jenna thought back to the snowflakes that lit up with a brilliant light.

“Designed? I am not understanding.”
“Designed? I do not understand.”


Thank you for your participation in the contest.
I hope to see and read more of your works again!



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Hi, Amethyst Angel (House Mormont)

Greetings! I'm Samberine Everose and one of the judges in the

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Short Shots: Official WDC Contest  (ASR) Use the photo to inspire your creativity. Write a short story and win big prizes! #1221635 by Writing.Com Support

and I'm here to give you a review of your entry.
Thanks for entering the contest.


Please note that I am not a professional reviewer, anything I say here is just my humble own opinion and views, don't forget that this will be changed by others' perspective also. Take it if you like and drop it if you don't like it.

MY THOUGHT & IMPRESSION:

This is so beautiful story and you did well in showing it.
It flows smoothly from the beginning hooking me to wonder about the little girl and the homeless man and I am not expecting in the end that they were related to each other-father and his long-lost daughter.

I can relate to this, and I liked the emotions that were stirred at the ending part, you did well in arranging the scene and the parts of the story to be in order.
You did well also to reflect the prompt to be especial and momentous.

This reminds me that God shows His love wonderfully, especially to simple things and through little children, those who are weak and helpless.

Good job!

MY DOUBT & SUGGESTION:

I have a few doubts for you to consider, I colored them in red and my suggestion is green.


patch of woodsy brush the city called a park.
patch of woodsy brush in the city called a park.


"That's too bad," Alice looked me over. "
That's too bad," Alice looked at me over. "


She spoke with such simple confidence, I didn't have the heart to argue.
She spoke with such simple confidence, that I didn't have the heart to argue.


Maybe it was time to man up, get my life together.
Maybe it was time to man up, and get my life together.

Thank you for your participation in the contest.
I hope to see and read more of your works again!

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