Hi,
Sumojo
Greetings! I'm
Samberine Everose and one of the judges in the
and I'm here to give you a review in your entry.
Thanks for entering in the contest.
Please note that I am not a professional reviewer, anything I say here is just my humble own opinion and views, don't forget that this will be changed by others' perspective also. Take it if you like and drop it if you don't like it.
MY THOUGHT & IMPRESSION:
The Story is good and it flows smoothly.
I like the author's idea about obsession to a collection that was linked in the given prompt of the contest. The way the author introduced the character of the story is something brief, it is good that the author shows it through the likes and characteristics of the character of the story.
I also like the ending part. it shows a surprise, not expecting it to be its end.
MY DOUBT & SUGGESTION:
There are some words for you to check out that left me in doubt upon reading the story.
I marked it red and color green is my suggestion.
neither would she partake of the brew in anything
you might mean
'nor
The young couple married and set up
a home in the Derbyshire countryside,
adding an a emphasize more.
Albert, by this time, had
realised he had been a minor player in his wife’s story and left the marital home and Edith with her obsession.
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realized
Seriously though, do you think we should
we be doing something?” Anne asked her brother.
Seriously though, do you think we should be doing something?” Anne asked her brother.
Other than that I've stated, I have no more issues arise. Goodluck!
Thank you for your participation in the contest.
I hope to see and read more of your works again!
Just keep On smiling while staying in WRITING!