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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, Lovina 🐕‍🦺

Greetings! I'm Samberine Everose and the judge in the
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Thanks for entering in the contest.


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MY THOUGHT & IMPRESSION:
The given title is really enticing already, I like pies, and chicken tortilla is so new to me.
and wow! the image is really hooking me to choose it, *Hungry* and adding more emoticons too, gives a creatively outcome.
Love this one! Good luck!



MY DOUBT & SUGGESTION:


I didn't find words that distract the flow of the poem and no doubt arise. Good luck!

Thank you for your participation in the contest.
I hope to see and read more of your works again!

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Toffeeman1957

Greetings! I'm Samberine Everose and one of the judges in the
 
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and I'm here to give you a review in your entry. *Smile*
Thanks for entering in the contest.


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MY THOUGHT & IMPRESSION:
This is a good story, even of the given title is simple, it gives an interesting impression.
The plot is simple also, but gives an impact especially after finishing it, in where it gives a tragedy ending, left me the reader to learn and want to know what happened to Denise.
The words flow smoothly, though there are words that filter sometimes the audience. Good Job!


MY DOUBT & SUGGESTION:

My only doubt is, though the given title is quite interesting, but it will be much more interested if you will add some more words to be get intrigue on it, like stirring your audience and hook them more.
Other than that, there are no doubts arise, Goodluck!

Thank you for your participation in the contest.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Roberts89

Greetings! I'm Samberine Everose and one of the judges in the
 
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Thanks for entering in the contest.


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MY THOUGHT & IMPRESSION:
The given title is simple but it links to the given prompt of the contest.
I liked the way how you begin the body of your story, its friendly and have a smooth flow in where it letting me your reader to know more about the story. You did good in hooking me to be in the shoes of your first character.
The scene of the story flows smooth and every time there is a scene, its add more for me the reader to get the information, like knowing the characters and the subject or topic of the story.
I liked also how it ended, and the emotions that were begin and into settled.


MY DOUBT & SUGGESTION:

I didn't find words that may distract the flow but I have some few doubts that arises while reading the story.
The Space Break- using this gives enhance to a story, it gives the reader to have a break and to ponder what the story is reflecting.
The Font- though this are small thing that we miss-looked, but it gives and helps to enhance the clarity of the story.
There are some words that also misspelled. Other than that, no doubts already arise. Goodluck!

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I hope to see and read more of your works again!

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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Hi, Graham B.

Greetings! I'm Samberine Everose and one of the judges in the
 
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Thanks for entering in the contest.


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MY THOUGHT & IMPRESSION:
This is a good story within a journey between two friends, and you did well in linking it to the given prompt.
The way you show it is dramatize through the scene that you've added on how the way they were in their dialogue, this is where I got some few information about the two characters.
I also liked that you gave an action scene/tragedy on what happened to one of your character, giving your audience to feel sad at the ending part, but it enhance the story to break its monotonous and this gives an impact.


MY DOUBT & SUGGESTION:

I didn't find words that may distract the flow, but I have few doubts that arises while reading this piece of yours.
Its good that there is a dialogue part in the story, this is where you used in letting your audience to know your characters, but overusing a method sometimes turns a piece to become a monotonous., I would like to suggest that in the middle part there is a scene or a break scene that will serve as a gap to break the monotonous. Other than that, there are no doubts were being arise. Goodluck!

Thank you for your participation in the contest.
I hope to see and read more of your works again!

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi, Odessa Molinari

Greetings! I'm Samberine Everose and one of the judges in the
 
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Thanks for entering in the contest.


*Exclaimb* Please note that I am not a professional reviewer, anything I say here is just my humble own opinion and views, don't forget that this will be changed by others perspective also. Take it if you like and drop if you don't like. *Smile*

MY THOUGHT & IMPRESSION:
The given title is mystery, and gives an impression to be a horror story, but when I begin reading it, you did well to hook the reader in the beginning part. I liked the technique on how you made your reader to be in the shoes of the first character, maybe by choosing the first point of view method, so I was also intrigue like your character about Suri.
I also liked on how the simplicity of the story went through, but it gives a thought on the middle part and a conclusion on the ending part.
The way how you chose and blend words is easy to reach, any audience can easily understood it.
I liked the story, its simple but properly formed.

MY DOUBT & SUGGESTION:

I didn't find words that may distract the flow and no doubt arise. Goodluck!

Thank you for your participation in the contest.
I hope to see and read more of your works again!

Just keep On smiling while stay in WRITING! *Smile*

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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hi, 💙 Carly - Pumpkin Spiced

Greetings! I'm Samberine Everose and one of the judges in the
 
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Thanks for entering in the contest.


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MY THOUGHT & IMPRESSION:
When my eyes stumbled on the given title, it gave me to ponder to link the given title to the given prompt of the contest, and I understood it simply. The word Faith gave a strong impact in the given title.
I've seen that you used the dialogue method in delivering your story, its good, dialogue enhanced the impression of the reader that the character is moving because on the way they talk.
I liked how you begin, I found some smooth flow of the story.
This is only a simple- a conversation, but it talks that our faith may not be motivates without our friends, sometimes.


MY DOUBT & SUGGESTION:
I have some few doubts for you to consider, just like I've said I liked how you begin the story, there is a smooth flow, I liked the combination of the dialogue method and the narrative method, but why on its succeeding lines, the flow that were being first introduced were being left already on the beginning part.
I was lost when only a dialogue method were being used already, not describing the characters moving, or how they expressed their words.
It just only their dialogue, there are also instances that I your reader didn't know already who said a word.
Other than that, I have no other doubt arise. Good luck!


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I hope to see and read more of your works again!

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Rated: E | (5.0)
A pleasant hour, Bubblegum Jones *Smile*

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*Thought*MY THOUGHT AND IMPRESSION

Wow! this is a good story about I think this is a candy or bubblegum?, Its good to know where it came from and its origin and how they invented its name. I still haven't taste it, but I know this will taste delicious. This story reminds me that everything has a source and origin and its always intended. The way how you wrote it is good and entertaining, the story is short only but its consist the important points or the things that will let the reader know. Well Done!



*Question* *Idea* MY DOUBT AND SUGGESTION :
I didn't find words that can distract the flow and no doubt arise. *Thumbsupr*

Thank you for sharing this good piece of yours, and the happiness and enjoyment I feel while looking and reading it.
I am looking forward to read more of your works again.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Brian K Compton

Greetings! I'm Samberine Everose and I am reviewing your beautiful poem as one of the judges for
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MY THOUGHT & IMPRESSION:

TITLE:
The given title is recollection, gives me an impression about a hot summer, because there are those times that the sun-kissed and gives a bright and hot rays.

IMAGERY:
The form that reflected in the body is like a shape of a Lips, you did great in forming it. I know how hard on it on how to create a concrete poetry, its good that you did it well.

The words within the body gives me an impression about a memory and an unforgettable experience.

TONE/MOOD:
The mood is good also, it links to the given prompt about our beloved bringing him/her close.

RHYME & RHYTHM:
I didn't find any rhyme and rhythm but within the words it has its own beat.

MY DOUBT & SUGGESTION:

My only doubt and it distract the flow of the piece for me is there are some words that I can't easily capture-forgive me for that, I need to see in the dictionary and study the words before I can relate it, so forgive me if I didn't easily captured correctly some of the inward meaning and impression.

Thank you for your participation in the contest.
Good luck!
I hope to see and read more of your works again!

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, Jay O'Toole

Greetings! I'm Samberine Everose and I am reviewing your beautiful poem as one of the judges for
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MY THOUGHT & IMPRESSION:

TITLE:
While reading the title it reminds me of a song- because the given title has its lyrical style on how the words were formed, it gave me an impression that it sounds romance.

IMAGERY:
The formatted words in the body of this piece-it shapes is like a heart, and it links on the given title, through the words Heart and Line, which means every line in there already reflect the heart, I liked the repeating of some words, it gave me an impression that its like the heart is beating and moving.

TONE/MOOD:
The mood that I reflected is only love, no other emotions, its fine because if other emotions will be added then the purity and sincerity of the piece will be polluted.

RHYME & RHYTHM:
There is a rhyme and rhythm here, as I've said the style in repeating the words makes the lines like moving or thumping like a heart.

MY DOUBT & SUGGESTION:

I didn't find words that may distract the flow and the beauty of this wonderful piece, and no doubt arise.

Thank you for your participation in the contest.
Good luck!
I hope to see and read more of your works again!

Just keep On smiling while stay in WRITING! *Smile*


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Review of Kaleidoscope  
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A pleasant hour, HuntersMoon *Smile*

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*Thought*MY THOUGHT AND IMPRESSION

We are already in the winter season, but I would like to return back to autumn, it made me missed it, so reading this piece of yours, it made to fill my missing ness to autumn. *Smile*
I liked the given title, it means colorful, shows a good description about autumn.
The words in the body were arranged in dramatic style, because before I begin reading it, there is already the smooth flow within the words, and the words were easily captured without having an obscure reflection, by using the style of common words combining to a more classy words- I liked the way you made it that way, there is a blending and balance.
It stir and evokes emotion in where, as I've said it took me again to autumn season, made me to forget the cold season suddenly. Well done!



*Question* *Idea* MY DOUBT AND SUGGESTION :
I didn't find words that can distract the flow and no doubt arise. *Thumbsupr*

Thank you for sharing this good piece of yours, and the happiness and enjoyment I feel while looking and reading it.
I am looking forward to read more of your works again.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
A pleasant hour, Intuey *Smile*

I'm Samberine Everose your friend here in WDC. *Fairy*
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*Thought*MY THOUGHT AND IMPRESSION

I was hooked to see and give a review for this piece of yours because of the word summer times, that always gives a good imagery and wonderful memories. And as I read the words in the body of this poem, I liked the energy and imagery that it shows. There is a smooth flow within the words that gives a sentimental and enticed me to remember about what summer times gives. Well Done!



*Question* *Idea* MY DOUBT AND SUGGESTION :
I didn't find words that can distract the flow and no doubt arise. The Awardicon deserves well. Congratulations! *Thumbsupr*

Thank you for sharing this good piece of yours, and the happiness and enjoyment I feel while looking and reading it.
I am looking forward to read more of your works again.

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Review of She's So Cute  
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A pleasant hour, Showering Dutchessbarbie. *Smile*

I'm Samberine Everose your friend here in WDC. *Fairy*
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*Thought*MY THOUGHT AND IMPRESSION

This cute sweet poem, touches my heart because it shows the love of a mother to her little one, it reminds me of my mom and my little girl too. The words are simple and lines are short but emotional. The flow is good and smooth in where it leaves the reader to ponder the words in every line. Very Heart full poem.



*Question* *Idea* MY DOUBT AND SUGGESTION :
I didn't find words that can distract the flow and no doubt arise. *Thumbsupr*
The awardicon deserves well. Congratulations!

Thank you for sharing this good piece of yours, and the happiness and enjoyment I feel while looking and reading it.
I am looking forward to read more of your works again. Congratulations!

Just keep On smiling while stay in WRITING and REVIEWING. *Smile*
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A pleasant hour, Annette *Smile*

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*Question* *Idea* MY DOUBT AND SUGGESTION :
I didn't find words that can distract the flow and no doubt arise. *Thumbsupr*

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I am looking forward to read more of your works again.

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Review of Foresight  
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
Hi, Bilal Latif

Greetings! I'm Samberine Everose and one of the judges in the
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Write a short story in the given genre to win big prizes!
#1803133 by Writing.Com Support

and I'm here to give you a review in your entry. *Smile*
Thanks for entering in the contest.


*Exclaimb* Please note that I am not a professional reviewer, anything I say here is just my humble own opinion and views as a reader, don't forget that this will be changed by others perspective also. Take it if you like and drop if you don't like. *Smile*

MY THOUGHT & IMPRESSION:

The given title gave me a double meaning, literal and metaphorical so my first impression on the given title is not yet clear and blurred wherein that impression leads me to know more about the story.
The first paragraphs and it's succeeding are short and in what the character's doing in the story, and honestly, for me being the reader, there is a feeling that I'd like to crave more about them, meaning there is a lack of how you show the feeling or emotions of the characters like the move of their body, but when I already in the mid part especially in the later part of the story, that is where I found and their emotions were showed.
For an example of what I am saying:

Norman opens his umbrella and strides through the rain toward yesterday.

( I wonder what Norman's impression about the rain?

Behind, in the water-hazed distance, Del shouts his name, boots slapping through puddles and scraping over granite to clomp straight for him. “Norman, stop!”

This second paragraph appeals that it was immediately followed wherein it gave the reader an impression on changing on the idea immediately, or the idea in the first paragraph of the story jump immediately to the second one, which left the reader wonder and hasn't chance to ponder the feeling and thoughts of the story

maybe adding what Norman feels and react about the rain can give a smooth flow to the next idea or episode of the story.

Norman twists the umbrella’s handle, peers into the crimson canopy and asks, “Ready, Ariel?”

MY DOUBT & SUGGESTION:

I didn't find any words that distract the flow of the story, other than what I've said.

Thank you for your participation in the contest.
I hope to see and read more of your works again!

Just keep On smiling while stay in WRITING! *Smile*







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Review of Driver's Test  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hi, Lovina 🐕‍🦺

Greetings! I'm Samberine Everose and one of the judges in the
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Journey Through Genres: Official Contest  (E)
Write a short story in the given genre to win big prizes!
#1803133 by Writing.Com Support

and I'm here to give you a review in your entry. *Smile*
Thanks for entering in the contest.


*Exclaimb* Please note that I am not a professional reviewer, anything I say here is just my humble own opinion and views as a reader, don't forget that this will be changed by others perspective also. Take it if you like and drop if you don't like. *Smile*

MY THOUGHT & IMPRESSION:

My first impression when I begin to read this story of yours is interesting, though, I'm not fond of any vehicle story but knowing that this is about sci-fi and the story is about a high tech vehicle then that would curious me to find it.
Probably, there is a sense of drama when I read the story but not too emotional.

There are some lines that distract me when reading the story like for example


She smiled. Today was a good day, another huge step toward adulthood and freedom. Her head snapped back as the track started up again, bringing her and her car ever closer to the testing area. By the end of the day she would be fully licensed and, per her wonderful father, have a nice new car of her very own.

The one that I highlighted with red color maybe you would like to give more description about it.

I wonder also how Karla felt about the machine, the way how the machine was described to your audience is through the sense of sight, or the way you see, I wonder how Karla expectation on it, especially as the title said its a vehicle test.

I also liked the dialogue, its good but sometimes dialogue can't stand alone if we don't add some action or more description on how the characters move or express what they telling in the part of the dialogue.
Readers may be blocked to enter in the dialogue, what I mean is although the reader is not a part in the conversation in the dialogue of the story
but by being the sitter or the viewer the reader is still a part of it.


MY DOUBT & SUGGESTION:

Other than what I've said, I didn't find any other words that may distract the flow of the story. Good job.


Thank you for your participation in the contest.
I hope to see and read more of your works again!

Just keep On smiling while stay in WRITING! *Smile*







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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hi, Laurie Razor

Greetings! I'm Samberine Everose and one of the judges in the
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Journey Through Genres: Official Contest  (E)
Write a short story in the given genre to win big prizes!
#1803133 by Writing.Com Support

and I'm here to give you a review in your entry. *Smile*
Thanks for entering in the contest.


*Exclaimb* Please note that I am not a professional reviewer, anything I say here is just my humble own opinion and views as a reader, don't forget that this will be changed by others perspective also. Take it if you like and drop if you don't like. *Smile*

MY THOUGHT & IMPRESSION:


The first impression that I felt when seeing this piece of yours especially knowing that it's in the dark genre is I'm afraid to read it, but when I see how your formatted well the story then it took me to give the story a chance, so I tried to read it.
And I can say you did well in showing the emotions and tackled the genre that you've chosen, even if you only used, or the way how you show the story is in the dialogue form or style.
It's fine but if a story is mostly in the dialogue already especially if the length is long it gave a monotonous appeal to the audience,
we can use the dialogue form purely in a story if the length is short.
Maybe adding some style of narrating in some area or paragraph may contrast its monotonous.

MY DOUBT & SUGGESTION:

Other than what I've said, I didn't find any words or other doubts that may distract the flow of the story. Good job!

Thank you for your participation in the contest.
I hope to see and read more of your works again!

Just keep On smiling while stay in WRITING! *Smile*







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Review of The Bamboo Cutter  
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hi, Kirby Ray

Greetings! I'm Samberine Everose and one of the judges in the
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Journey Through Genres: Official Contest  (E)
Write a short story in the given genre to win big prizes!
#1803133 by Writing.Com Support

and I'm here to give you a review in your entry. *Smile*
Thanks for entering in the contest.


*Exclaimb* Please note that I am not a professional reviewer, anything I say here is just my humble own opinion and views as a reader, don't forget that this will be changed by others perspective also. Take it if you like and drop if you don't like. *Smile*

MY THOUGHT & IMPRESSION:

My first impression before I read this piece of yours is the length is long but when I begin reading it, I was surprised because it's only short then, which means that the length of a story will depend on how the story was good and great, and I can say that you did great on it because I was entertained when reading it.
The first thing that hooks me on the first part of the story is how you chose the main subject in the story, what brings me closer to find and follow the story is by using a 'baby' as the main subject or theme as well as the character of the story, you did well in making your reader craves and to follow especially on what happens to the baby, what I mean is you did well in choosing a topic and hold your readers interest by giving more actions that happen in the story until your reader reaches the ending part.
You did well also in adjusting the range of understanding for your audience, as an ESL (English Second Language) this is where it's hard for me, especially those parts and impression that is hidden within the words, it's good that I understand it and enjoyed too. Well Done!

MY DOUBT & SUGGESTION:

I didn't find words that distract the flow of the story and no doubt arise.

Thank you for your participation in the contest.
I hope to see and read more of your works again!

Just keep On smiling while stay in WRITING! *Smile*







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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hi, Seuzz

Greetings! I'm Samberine Everose and one of the judges in the
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Journey Through Genres: Official Contest  (E)
Write a short story in the given genre to win big prizes!
#1803133 by Writing.Com Support

and I'm here to give you a review in your entry. *Smile*
Thanks for entering in the contest.


*Exclaimb* Please note that I am not a professional reviewer, anything I say here is just my humble own opinion and views as a reader, don't forget that this will be changed by others perspective also. Take it if you like and drop if you don't like. *Smile*

MY THOUGHT & IMPRESSION:

The given title is interesting, the given impression is really in sci-fi, it gives me imagery about people living in the future-literally and people inside of themselves only metaphorically.
The first paragraph or the beginning of the story somehow gives me an impression that this is created in an article style in storytelling, because the author is conversing its reader on the beginning stating and maybe introducing the character in an "article" style, the next paragraph and others were started already in introducing the main character that already part in the story which made me -your reader to concentrate and trying to know the main character.
The story is good, it shows what happens but it was delivered into two impression- literal and metaphorical, I may understand the literal, but maybe didn't catch up the metaphorical, this is where its hard on my part being an ESL (English Second Language), so through adjusting the range of understanding to your readers may cause to be for everybody- any level of your readers.
The ending part shows again the article style in storytelling, which really left me-your reader thinking.

MY DOUBT & SUGGESTION:

Other than what I've stated, I didn't find any words or no other doubts arise that distract the flow of the story. Good job!

Thank you for your participation in the contest.
I hope to see and read more of your works again!

Just keep On smiling while stay in WRITING! *Smile*







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Review of Alien Glyphs  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi, debmiller1

Greetings! I'm Samberine Everose and one of the judges in the
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Journey Through Genres: Official Contest  (E)
Write a short story in the given genre to win big prizes!
#1803133 by Writing.Com Support

and I'm here to give you a review in your entry. *Smile*
Thanks for entering in the contest.


*Exclaimb* Please note that I am not a professional reviewer, anything I say here is just my humble own opinion and views as a reader, don't forget that this will be changed by others perspective also. Take it if you like and drop if you don't like. *Smile*

MY THOUGHT & IMPRESSION:

The given title stated already the topic and idea of the story and its good because its
really related to the prompt of the contest.
The impression that draws me to follow the story is the mystery of what happened of Athena and Ares mother, including also the mystery of what happened to their dad, that is the main subject, in the beginning, you did well in using that idea to hook your reader to gather more information too on really what happens.
The only thing that drops me at the end is the way how the story went on or the ending part of the story, it left me thinking on really what will be happened to the artifacts of the alien because the author left the reader to choose what will be its ending.


MY DOUBT & SUGGESTION:

Other than what I've stated, I didn't find any other words or doubts that may distract the flow of the story. Good job!

Thank you for your participation in the contest.
I hope to see and read more of your works again!

Just keep On smiling while stay in WRITING! *Smile*







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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi, Graham B.

Greetings! I'm Samberine Everose and one of the judges in the
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Journey Through Genres: Official Contest  (E)
Write a short story in the given genre to win big prizes!
#1803133 by Writing.Com Support

and I'm here to give you a review in your entry. *Smile*
Thanks for entering in the contest.


*Exclaimb* Please note that I am not a professional reviewer, anything I say here is just my humble own opinion and views as a reader, don't forget that this will be changed by others perspective also. Take it if you like and drop if you don't like. *Smile*

MY THOUGHT & IMPRESSION:

I can say that the story is somehow a mystery sci-fi, you did well in choosing the theme and its link in the given prompt. The way how the story flow is fine and there is a dramatic appeal on how the characters were showed and introduced. The only issue that I have is the range of understanding that you used to your audience, being an ESL (English Second Language) through words that were used by the author, they have the ability to filter their audience understanding, and as I read this piece of yours, there are words that literally I understood but metaphorically I might not catch it.
But, overall the story is fine and well.

MY DOUBT & SUGGESTION:

Other than what I've stated, I didn't find any other words or doubts that may distract the flow of the story . Good Job!

Thank you for your participation in the contest.
I hope to see and read more of your works again!

Just keep On smiling while stay in WRITING! *Smile*







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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi, PureSciFi

Greetings! I'm Samberine Everose and one of the judges in the
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Journey Through Genres: Official Contest  (E)
Write a short story in the given genre to win big prizes!
#1803133 by Writing.Com Support

and I'm here to give you a review in your entry. *Smile*
Thanks for entering in the contest.


*Exclaimb* Please note that I am not a professional reviewer, anything I say here is just my humble own opinion and views as a reader, don't forget that this will be changed by others perspective also. Take it if you like and drop if you don't like. *Smile*

MY THOUGHT & IMPRESSION:

The given title is interesting, my first impression is like it's not linked in the given prompt, but when I begin reading it, I've discovered that its pure sci-fi.
The story is good and has the mystery which draws me, the reader to continue reading and follow the story.
You did well also in introducing the characters, there is a smooth way in introducing it until I crave to know more about them especially Konnica, and find out at the tragic ending happened to her which gives an impact.
Overall the story is good and well. Good Job!

MY DOUBT & SUGGESTION:

I didn't find any words that distract the flow and no doubt arise. Good Job!

Thank you for your participation in the contest.
I hope to see and read more of your works again!

Just keep On smiling while stay in WRITING! *Smile*







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Review of Note to Self  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi, Words Whirling 'Round

Greetings! I'm Samberine Everose and one of the judges in the
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Journey Through Genres: Official Contest  (E)
Write a short story in the given genre to win big prizes!
#1803133 by Writing.Com Support

and I'm here to give you a review in your entry. *Smile*
Thanks for entering in the contest.


*Exclaimb* Please note that I am not a professional reviewer, anything I say here is just my humble own opinion and views as a reader, don't forget that this will be changed by others perspective also. Take it if you like and drop if you don't like. *Smile*

MY THOUGHT & IMPRESSION:

The given title is interesting, my first impression is a kind of monologue using the word self and it was really like a monologue because you used the format of being in the first person point of view.
And you did well in expressing and introducing your character to the audience, using the first person point of view free to express its thought and emotion.
Using also the mystery note which hooks your reader to find more about it and continue its reading until the end.
Words weaved are fine and the story has a smooth flow.
The only issue that I have is the impact, I can't find an impact or I said the climax.
Overall the story is fine. Good job!

MY DOUBT & SUGGESTION:

Other than what I've said, I can't find any other words and doubt that may distract the flow of the story. Good Job!

Thank you for your participation in the contest.
I hope to see and read more of your works again!

Just keep On smiling while stay in WRITING! *Smile*







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Rated: 18+ | (3.5)
Hi, Paul

Greetings! I'm Samberine Everose and one of the judges in the
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Journey Through Genres: Official Contest  (E)
Write a short story in the given genre to win big prizes!
#1803133 by Writing.Com Support

and I'm here to give you a review in your entry. *Smile*
Thanks for entering in the contest.


*Exclaimb* Please note that I am not a professional reviewer, anything I say here is just my humble own opinion and views as a reader, don't forget that this will be changed by others perspective also. Take it if you like and drop if you don't like. *Smile*

MY THOUGHT & IMPRESSION:

The given title is an expression or in other words, there is an emotion within to hook any reader, though it didn't relate to the given prompt, its still interesting.
I can say that the story is good and you did fine on it, my only issue is I wonder why at the beginning why the intro rate is for everyone, it should be Non-E because there are some words that the writer used here is not fine to be for everyone, I don't know if its intended but for me it doesn't give an appeal to the story, there are also some line that it didn't have a relationship in the story, other than the range of level of understanding that was used was filtered.
Overall the story might be good if those things that I've stated will be improved.

MY DOUBT & SUGGESTION:

Other than what I've stated, there are no other things that may distract the flow of the story.

Thank you for your participation in the contest.
I hope to see and read more of your works again!

Just keep On smiling while stay in WRITING! *Smile*







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Review of Jack's Solution  
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hi, Robert Edward Baker

Greetings! I'm Samberine Everose and one of the judges in the
SURVEY
Journey Through Genres: Official Contest  (E)
Write a short story in the given genre to win big prizes!
#1803133 by Writing.Com Support

and I'm here to give you a review in your entry. *Smile*
Thanks for entering in the contest.


*Exclaimb* Please note that I am not a professional reviewer, anything I say here is just my humble own opinion and views as a reader, don't forget that this will be changed by others perspective also. Take it if you like and drop if you don't like. *Smile*

MY THOUGHT & IMPRESSION:

The given title is simple but interesting because of the word solution, it gave powerful imagery and description.
The flow of the story is good and I can say it has a smooth flow and I also find a drama on what happens. You did well in introducing your character at the beginning using narrative storytelling that shows. The chosen plot is good also, you did well in hooking me and become curious about what happened to Jack's daughter so I follow the story if the said solution would be effective, and I didn't expect that on the last part there is a twist which gives an impact.
The only doubt that I have is the way how transparency goes in your viewer, in other words, the range of level of understanding that you chose, using some word that is not easy to understand may filter the level of understanding by the audience especially in its metaphorical view of writings.
But, overall the story is good and well. Good Job!

MY DOUBT & SUGGESTION:

Other than what I've said, I didn't find any other words that may distract the flow of the story and no other doubt arise. Good Job!

Thank you for your participation in the contest.
I hope to see and read more of your works again!

Just keep On smiling while stay in WRITING! *Smile*







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Review of The Cube  
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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
Hi, QueenNormaJean HoHoHumbuggery

Greetings! I'm Samberine Everose and one of the judges in the
SURVEY
Journey Through Genres: Official Contest  (E)
Write a short story in the given genre to win big prizes!
#1803133 by Writing.Com Support

and I'm here to give you a review in your entry. *Smile*
Thanks for entering in the contest.


*Exclaimb* Please note that I am not a professional reviewer, anything I say here is just my humble own opinion and views as a reader, don't forget that this will be changed by others perspective also. Take it if you like and drop if you don't like. *Smile*

MY THOUGHT & IMPRESSION:

The given title is simple, it gave me first an impression that the story would be a monster cube. I can say that the story has a smooth flow and it really hooks me started at the beginning and until the end. A nice plot that you had chosen, I really followed what happened and what will be happened to the cubes.
You didn't concentrate more on the characters, right? but you've concentrated more on the movement in the story, the things that happen simultaneously and I followed it until the end.
My only issue is the way how the range of the level of understanding to your audience.
There are some statement or words that filters my understanding, especially in the metaphorical aspects that distract when I read.
But overall the story is good and well. Good Job!


MY DOUBT & SUGGESTION:

Other than what I've said, I didn't find any words that may distract the flow and no other doubt arise.

Thank you for your participation in the contest.
I hope to see and read more of your works again!

Just keep On smiling while stay in WRITING! *Smile*







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