Greetings! I'm Samberine Everose
and one of the judges in the
and I'm here to give you a review in your entry.
Thanks for entering in the contest.
Please note that I am not a professional reviewer, anything I say here is just my humble own opinion and views, don't forget that this will be changed by others perspective also. Take it if you like and drop if you don't like.
MY THOUGHT & IMPRESSION:
The given title is simple but it links to the given prompt of the contest.
I liked the way how you begin the body of your story, its friendly and have a smooth flow in where it letting me your reader to know more about the story. You did good in hooking me to be in the shoes of your first character.
The scene of the story flows smooth and every time there is a scene, its add more for me the reader to get the information, like knowing the characters and the subject or topic of the story.
I liked also how it ended, and the emotions that were begin and into settled.
MY DOUBT & SUGGESTION:
I didn't find words that may distract the flow but I have some few doubts that arises while reading the story.
The Space Break- using this gives enhance to a story, it gives the reader to have a break and to ponder what the story is reflecting.
The Font- though this are small thing that we miss-looked, but it gives and helps to enhance the clarity of the story.
There are some words that also misspelled. Other than that, no doubts already arise. Goodluck!
Thank you for your participation in the contest.
I hope to see and read more of your works again!
Just keep On smiling while stay in WRITING!