This is the first time I have been to your port and I wanted to commend you on the way you have it organized. It's easy to follow, beautifully setup and I just love the 'jewels'.
Hi! I have just read your poem Seashells. I re-read some pieces a couple of times, relaying what stood out to me, and my overall general opinion. It is just that, an opinion. Hopefully reviews such as this can help further hone your writing skills or at least you can enjoy my thoughts from a reading point of view.
Impression: Beautiful poetry, beautiful reflection! Kudos to you for pulling off this double acrostic.
Hi! I have just read your poem Haiku Punchlines. I re-read some pieces a couple of times, relaying what stood out to me, and my overall general opinion. It is just that, an opinion. Hopefully reviews such as this can help further hone your writing skills or at least you can enjoy my thoughts from a reading point of view.
Impression: Very pleasing uses of the haiku. Entertaining and original.
Suggestions: Good 5-7-5 syllable lines throughout the pieces. No errors noted
Hi! I have just read your poem Wolves (extended haiku). I re-read some pieces a couple of times, relaying what stood out to me, and my overall general opinion. It is just that, an opinion. Hopefully reviews such as this can help further hone your writing skills or at least you can enjoy my thoughts from a reading point of view.
Impression: I just had to read your piece when it came up trough search because of the topic. In such a short use of words, you truly conveyed the nature of the wolf.
Suggestions: Perfect 5-7-5 syllable lines. No errors noted
Hi! I have just read your poem A Kiss Changed It All. I re-read some pieces a couple of times, relaying what stood out to me, and my overall general opinion. It is just that, an opinion. Hopefully reviews such as this can help further hone your writing skills or at least you can enjoy my thoughts from a reading point of view.
Impression: Very touching haiku. If based on personal experience, you are very fortunate.
Suggestions: Perfect 5-7-5 syllable lines. No errors noted
Hi! I have just read your poem Autumn Night. I re-read some pieces a couple of times, relaying what stood out to me, and my overall general opinion. It is just that, an opinion. Hopefully reviews such as this can help further hone your writing skills or at least you can enjoy my thoughts from a reading point of view.
Impression: Short and sweet!
Suggestions: 5-7-5 syllable usage. No errors noted
You know, it always amazes me when so much can be said with just a few words. Your haiku is a perfect example of so much imagery in just one stanza. I can see the beams breaking through the heavens.
Hi! I have just read your poem Displaced. I re-read some pieces a couple of times, relaying what stood out to me, and my overall general opinion. It is just that, an opinion. Hopefully reviews such as this can help further hone your writing skills or at least you can enjoy my thoughts from a reading point of view.
Hi! I have just read your poem Snowbirds. I re-read some pieces a couple of times, relaying what stood out to me, and my overall general opinion. It is just that, an opinion. Hopefully reviews such as this can help further hone your writing skills or at least you can enjoy my thoughts from a reading point of view.
Hi! I have just read your poem Reaper. I re-read some pieces a couple of times, relaying what stood out to me, and my overall general opinion. It is just that, an opinion. Hopefully reviews such as this can help further hone your writing skills or at least you can enjoy my thoughts from a reading point of view.
Hi! I have just read your poem Candles. I re-read some pieces a couple of times, relaying what stood out to me, and my overall general opinion. It is just that, an opinion. Hopefully reviews such as this can help further hone your writing skills or at least you can enjoy my thoughts from a reading point of view.
Impression: I feel you did very well with the symbolism of life and burning down candles.
Suggestions: I am not going to point out typos, only because the ones I see may be due to international differences.
Hi! I have just read your poem A Useless Span of Timeliness. I re-read some pieces a couple of times, relaying what stood out to me, and my overall general opinion. It is just that, an opinion. Hopefully reviews such as this can help further hone your writing skills or at least you can enjoy my thoughts from a reading point of view.
Impression: Oh how I can relate to this, as so many others in the workforce these days.
Suggestions: Good rhyme and flow between stanzas. No errors noted
Hi! I have just read your poem My Special Girls. I re-read some pieces a couple of times, relaying what stood out to me, and my overall general opinion. It is just that, an opinion. Hopefully reviews such as this can help further hone your writing skills or at least you can enjoy my thoughts from a reading point of view.
Impression: Awesome poem. Very touching and personal.
Suggestions: Good rhyme and flow. Very easy read. No errors noted
Hi! I have just read your piece Dear Me. I re-read some pieces a couple of times, relaying what stood out to me, and my overall general opinion. It is just that, an opinion. Hopefully reviews such as this can help further hone your writing skills or at least you can enjoy my thoughts from a reading point of view.
Initial Thoughts:
I enjoyed this very much. Dear Me pieces always make me wonder what I would say to myself.
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I had been loved this work once. I had been loved this work once. a highly recognised university a highly recognized university
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Nothing else noted.
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I thought you did a good job with this, too bad it couldn't have been entered in the contest. I am not sure what the judging criteria would be but I am sure it would have got a second look for top honors.Overall good job!!
Thank you for sharing this with the WDC Community.
Hi! I have just read your poem Flying In Love. I re-read some pieces a couple of times, relaying what stood out to me, and my overall general opinion. It is just that, an opinion. Hopefully reviews such as this can help further hone your writing skills or at least you can enjoy my thoughts from a reading point of view.
Impression: Beautiful rendition of falling in love.
Suggestions: Perfect rhyme and flow between stanzas. Very easy read. No errors noted
Hi! I have just read your poem week 10 haiku contest entry on heaven. I re-read some pieces a couple of times, relaying what stood out to me, and my overall general opinion. It is just that, an opinion. Hopefully reviews such as this can help further hone your writing skills or at least you can enjoy my thoughts from a reading point of view.
Impression: I love haiku's and this one representing heaven is beautiful.
Hi! I have just read your poem Seeding Change…. I re-read some pieces a couple of times, relaying what stood out to me, and my overall general opinion. It is just that, an opinion. Hopefully reviews such as this can help further hone your writing skills or at least you can enjoy my thoughts from a reading point of view.
Impression: Bravo!! I have re-read this piece several times just for it's inspirational value and overall eloquent expression.
Suggestions: Perfect rhyme & rhythm. No errors noted
Overall: I am looking forward to viewing your port. Please keep to your writing!! Great Job!!
Hi! I have just read your poem Forgotten. I re-read some pieces a couple of times, relaying what stood out to me, and my overall general opinion. It is just that, an opinion. Hopefully reviews such as this can help further hone your writing skills or at least you can enjoy my thoughts from a reading point of view.
Impression: Your poem spoke to me. It tells of a lost and lonely soul who moves up and forward, to start life anew.
Suggestions: Good rhyme and flow between stanzas. No errors noted
Hi! I have just read your poem Lost Within. I re-read some pieces a couple of times, relaying what stood out to me, and my overall general opinion. It is just that, an opinion. Hopefully reviews such as this can help further hone your writing skills or at least you can enjoy my thoughts from a reading point of view.
Impression: You did well with your chosen words to match the title of this piece.
Suggestions: No spelling errors noted. I personally think a poem reads better if your stanzas flow more smoothly. For instance, your first two sentences could be re-spaced into one stanza. The last stanza would read better like this;
But what you only see,
on the outside, is me.
Lying on the soft feathery grass,
When I am plunged deep into insanity.
Hi! I have just read your work Cruelty of Fate. I re-read pieces a couple of times and let you know what stood out to me, whether it is good or bad. Hopefully reviews such as this can help further hone your writing skills or at least you can enjoy my thoughts from a reading point of view.
Initial Thoughts:
Very powerful story. Teenage suicide is on the rise, at least where I live and you bring it to direct attention. Your imagery brings the reader right to the heart of the matter. Very descriptive.
Spelling/Typos/Technicals:
but I know that i can never do that, nobody can know what I've done. But I know that I can never do that,
Suggestions:
Re-read through the story, there are a few more small i's which should be capitalized.
Overall Impression:
Using first person for this piece enhanced it, makes it feel as personal as it is. I liked the way you created the ending, moving through his memories. Good job!!
Thank you for sharing this with the WDC Community.
Awesome job Ken !! You cover both sides of abuse; the silent and the ignored. I just wanted to express how glad I am that a piece such is this is out in plain sight for all to view. Perhaps the silent ones will speak sooner if this subject is brought more to the light in this form of writing.
As far as poetry: Your rhyme scheme is perfect, great imagery.
Hi! I have just read your poem Van Helsing's Battle. I re-read pieces a couple of times and let you know what stood out to me, whether it is good or bad. Hopefully reviews such as this can help further hone your writing skills or at least you can enjoy my thoughts from a reading point of view.
Impression: Awesome interpretation of what the novel conveyed. Kudos for turning it into a poem.
Hi! I have just read your poem The Midnight Meal. I re-read pieces a couple of times and let you know what stood out to me, whether it is good or bad. Hopefully reviews such as this can help further hone your writing skills or at least you can enjoy my thoughts from a reading point of view.
Impression: Perfect match to title and description.
Suggestions: Your rhyme is good. To increase the flow patterns, so the reader doesn't stop, take a look at these ideas;
First stanza: instead of EARS, keep it as ear.
Third stanza: instead of job, see if you can come up with something which matches the 'op' in stop.
Fourth stanza: THERE, do you mean they're or their?
Tenth stanza: instead of life and die, again see if you can match the ending sounds.
Overall: If you decide to keep it as is, the poem is still a good job!
Hi! I have just read your poem nothing. I re-read pieces a couple of times and let you know what stood out to me, whether it is good or bad. Hopefully reviews such as this can help further hone your writing skills or at least you can enjoy my thoughts from a reading point of view.
Impression: Well, I feel your pain and loneliness; good imagery.
Suggestions: Not sure if they are typos or intended however, the I'll, he's & she's make the poem flow better if you corrected them. As written, my eyes stop and look twice. a light i ll never have a light I'll never have
he s going home he's going home she s going to her family she's going to her family
Overall: Good Job!!
Keep writing & posting!
~Eyz
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