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I review the way I want to be reviewed. I don't focus too heavily on grammar, though I am good at picking up common mistakes and repeating phrases, etc. What worked for me in your story? What didn't? I will primarily focus on style, and will mostly provide opinions that you should take with a grain of salt. I am constructive, but honest. If I think something can be improved, I will state that, but I will always tell you what I liked as well. You don't need a thick skin, but you do need to be prepared for some detail and not fluff. Finally, I have a somewhat busy real-life, but I PROMISE to try to have a story reviewed within the month of the request!
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Review of The Visitor  
Review by Rakkit
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
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Hello!

I stumbled on your story while perusing WDC, and I thought I'd send you feedback.

Note: please keep in mind that everything posted here is my opinion. Any stylistic suggestions that I give should be taken with a grain of salt.

*Key* Overall Impression:

This was very good. I don't often see present tense used, and it is very difficult to keep consistent. You have done this well, even while keeping two POVs throughout the story.

*Key* Plot/Style/Voice:

You drop me off the middle of the story with no back story for the antagonist/protagonist--and that's okay! It's not needed, especially when you drop small hints throughout the story. You have a very good minimalist approach that works well in developing characters/plot in an engaging way.

*Key* Scene/Setting/Character/Dialogue:

All good, as discussed in the earlier points. The dialogue is believable, and the demon is quite witty.

*Key* Grammar and Mechanics:

There were no blaring typos throughout this piece.

*Key* Suggestions:

The only suggestion I have is perhaps for the end. I don't think much needs to be added--I like the ambiguity--but instead of just using the description of 'deep voice', maybe add one sentence about Tammy not 'seeming' quite right, or perhaps something to do with her expression that would signal to the reader that he traded her soul for the demon to inhabit.

Let me know if my ramblings make sense. I hope to see you around my port!

May your muses sing,

*Paw* Corrine Shroud

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