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Review by flcomeau Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E ★★★★★ | (3.5)
Wolfkingdom,
I received this item by random review. Honor, life, spirit. You have a lot going on here.
Your poem may be short but it packs a punch. It flows well too which is important to the reader.
Write on!
~Francis
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Review of The Dream  
Review by flcomeau Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E ★★★★★ | (3.5)
wisdomgiver12,
I reached this piece by random selection. The journey to your path thus far has been layed out.
Your future is a blank canvass and will bend to your will. That is my take away from this poem.
I think it was well written and flows pretty well. Keep up the good work.

Write on!
~Francis
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Review of All These Things  
Review by flcomeau Author IconMail Icon
Rated: ASR ★★★★★ | (4.0)
Brandiwyn,
This item came to me by random selection.
I think this poem is well written. It has many pauses and yet you managed to flow well. The progression of more is well layed out. Closing with all these things that make you more, nice ending.
Write on!
~Francis
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Review by flcomeau Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E ★★★★★ | (3.5)
Emberly Gray

This item has come to me by random selection. This was well written, it flowed nice. It's relatable, for me anyway. Great job.

Write on!
~Francis
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Review of People Pleaser  
Review by flcomeau Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ ★★★★★ | (2.5)
You can't please everyone. There is a lot of emotion in this piece. You should read it out loud. Good luck to you.

Write on!
~Francis
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Review by flcomeau Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E ★★★★★ | (4.0)
John, Johnny, Johnson,

I reached this piece by random review.
This was well written and easy to follow.
I like how your vampire needs money.
The salesman was well played too.

Great job!

Write on!
~Francis
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Review by flcomeau Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E ★★★★★ | (3.0)
Happy,
This is a cute message you could send your other half. I like the dedication.

Write on!
~Francis
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Review of Isolation  
Review by flcomeau Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E ★★★★★ | (4.0)
CarlD,
This item has come to me by random review.
First off, well done sharing your work. And that's what it is... work.
Right off the start I could tell you were alone in this story. The longing of another. You nailed it in the end. I enjoyed reading this piece, thank you for sharing.

Write on!
~Flcomeau
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Review of The Fallen Chair,  
Review by flcomeau Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E ★★★★★ | (3.0)
Happy,
This item comes to me by random review.
It's a cute little story about a chair.
I'm not the grammar police but you have a few edits to make.
Read your story out loud, see how it sounds.
That will help you fix most issues. Good luck.

Write on!
~Francis
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Review of Humanity  
Review by flcomeau Author IconMail Icon
Rated: ASR ★★★★★ | (3.5)
This item has reached me via random selection.
To me this is a poetic rendering of or world today.
I did stumble a little as the flow seemed to be jagged instead of flowing smooth.
Read your poem out loud and listen to how it sounds. Just a couple of tips, you're on the right path.

Write on!
~Francis
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Review by flcomeau Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E ★★★★★ | (2.5)
Happy,,
Your item came to me as a random review. I found this a bit difficult to read. Let me show you.

"Once upon a time. Their were 2 ladies going joy riding out in the car,
So as the one lady fasten her seat belt they began to ride.

All of a sudden the lady that was driving lost control of her car and her car pin around and she hit she was crying because she had on her seat belt
Her friend scream and said all my God my friend is Dead.

So their adventure that they plan had change .So the name of this Story: You Held on even when I let go"

My advice proof read every work you create. Speak the words out loud, or in your head at least. Sound them out.
Good luck to you and Write on!

~Francis
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Review by flcomeau Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E ★★★★★ | (2.5)
Laura,
Thank you for sharing your thoughts.
What I took away from this is love conquers all.
Keep writing, the more you do the easier they become.
Good luck.

~Francis
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Review by flcomeau Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E ★★★★★ | (4.0)
sgt10,
I just wanted to say you raise an interesting question.

"Our future as a nation depends on everyone working together for the common good "
I feel this way about the world, we need to come together to fix many issues.

"I believe that can happen."
So do I, in our lifetimes.
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Review by flcomeau Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E ★★★★★ | (4.5)
Proximus Magi,
I see you put a little effort into this. Thank you for clarifying the various levels of magic. This essay was very informative to keep things short. I find this was well written and forms a conversation with it's users. You not only explained magic, you have us under your spell. I enjoyed this read as I am a D&D player myself.

Write on!
~Francis
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Review by flcomeau Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E ★★★★★ | (4.0)
Noisy Wren,
Your essay was randomly selected for review.
I like the effort you put intoi your writting, it shows like a beacon of light.
Your definition of the word "whatever" was striking in ways. For example, if one was not aware of the effects of the word. Yes it has effects, as it affects everyone differently. All in all, this was an interesting read.

Write on!
~Francis
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Review by flcomeau Author IconMail Icon
Rated: ASR ★★★★★ | (3.5)
OK, this may be because I haven't had coffee yet. I see the poll. But you asked a question and I don't see anywhere to respond to it. Could be me. At the time I wrote this there was 1991 votes! I didn't know we had that many active members, that's awesome!
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Review by flcomeau Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E ★★★★★ | (3.0)
Maria,
Thank you for sharing your experience. I thought this was a story when I opened it, then I realized this was your experience. I'm glad you had a positive outcome online. Your experience is rare these days, most of the time I hear about poor results with online dating. Good luck to you.

Write on!
Francis
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Review of I am Human  
Review by flcomeau Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E ★★★★★ | (2.5)
I'm a robot 037

I enjoyed Your Poem
Thank You For writing it and sharing.
This piece is strong and confidant.

Write On!

Robot 037
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Review of Twisted  
Review by flcomeau Author IconMail Icon
Rated: ASR ★★★★★ | (4.0)
Hello Black Widow,
I missed a request to review a writing of yours a couple of months ago. I figured I would sneak in and randomly select something else. The Dark Poetry is a sweet spot for me. :)

I enjoyed this poem, it flows well and rolls off the tongue nice. It also made me stop and think for a moment. As I was going to tell you, I found it creative. Then it hit me, you could be deriving these feelings, from real life.

In that case, what would I say. Nothing.

Either way, you are wise, and this was well written. Thank you for sharing.

Write On!
FLComeau
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Review by flcomeau Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E ★★★★★ | (3.0)
Hello Celticsnow,

I came across your work as a random review. It sounds like you had a good day upon writing this piece.

First thoughts, it's nice to be a wanderer.

What I liked, the life experience you presented from this day, and I felt you did well in sharing this experience. Getting your readers to feel your emotions, and thoughts. Is not easy. I feel you did well.

Final thoughts, I liked this piece, it was a pleasure to read. Great Job and thank you for sharing.

Write On!
FLComeau
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Review of Education.  
Review by flcomeau Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E ★★★★★ | (3.5)
BeautyBehindSecrets,
Hello, I reached your item by random review. I felt it was an interesting topic, and as you pointed out. Education means different things to different people. For example, I came to WDC solely to learn how to write better.

Sure, I could have taken writing classes, however, this was my choice at the time. Making choices, I learned from my education. I also learned from living, that when I look back on my education. I read somewhere once, and agree with the following:

"Education is about teaching the students to learn, not what to remember".
Also, in the area you outlined as mistakes. I leave this to life, to teach us. I have come to learn to be true the fact that. If you make a mistake, and do not learn from it, you are bound by universal law, to repeat the same mistake, until you learn from it.

There may be some exceptions to this, however, I find it is a rule of learning, from our mistakes. Even better, is seeing someone else make a mistake, and then learning from it ourselves. I am the youngest of eight siblings, and we all made our fair share of mistakes. I had the opportunity to learn from many of theirs. ;)

Again, interesting topic, thanks for the read, and the hook. ;)
~FLComeau
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Review of "Do it for Me"  
Review by flcomeau Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E ★★★★★ | (3.5)
Hello sfttarget,
First, thank you for sharing a portion of your life, it sounded real. You are correct also, as everything happens for a reason. This does not mean we will or may ever even know the reasons.

I would only be guessing and therefore will not, it does sound to me as though you were prepared to receive a special book later on in life, one which you were able to understand and relate too.

Life has a funny way of guiding us as such and I am glad to hear that not only did you not get terribly maimed, but you learned a lot from your growing up and how to relay your feelings about anything in general ahead of time and in a comfortable manner too you.

Thank you for sharing, I enjoyed reading.
Write On!
~FLComeau
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Review by flcomeau Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E ★★★★★ | (3.5)
Hello ss_writings,
I had some free time and this item came to me by random review. I just wanted to say wow. This poem, sounds as though soldier wrote it, to be sent home. I liked it. I hope you enjoy writing. Please, Write On!

~FlComeau
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Review by flcomeau Author IconMail Icon
Rated: ASR ★★★★★ | (5.0)
Hello,
I reached this item for review, as though I was guided by divine intervention. With that, allow me to play a little, and perhaps, I can give you a little bigger or brighter smile. I feel you are happy, yet, you have concern. I do want to hear about “this”. All of it.

I would not ever look for a way to be rid of you. Not knowing that you’re in love with me. You describe a feeling of my slipping away. Past your eyes, and through your very fingers. You may very well be wrong, and perhaps you are still dealing with unlearning things, or battling an internal struggle.

That can’t ever feel well, now about the beginning. You say you were bored? OK, I will agree with that, however, you were more than bored. You were hollow. What you call a “Hi”, I call a form of acknowledgment. I am pleased that you like my being open and straightforward with you. I felt you were excited on some level, my heart, began to flutter.

You and I did connect instantly, and you are aware why. I can tell you, ever and always, we share these feelings for only one another. We both changed our ‘routines’ and basic ways of life, to accommodate each other.

There is not a night, morning, or a single moment in between, that you are not on my mind. While there were several times, we seemed less than “adult” in the ways some things were handled. I still everyday smile and dream of ways to ‘keep you on your toes’. With a smile as you enjoy, and a knowing of belonging.

I too, want to scream, shout, and carry on about how well you make me feel. As for how many ways, I can tell but one story, I enjoy this, and even more so, for you. As you laugh, you smile, and at times, you are aware, I do it for you.

You say stereo typed you, I feel as though I called you out. I seen your game, and you are no stranger to the evil that men do. You must be aware by now, what we share, is not only uncommon, we are powerful. You and I alone, are intimidating, not to each other. To anyone who may know us.

I did laugh at your “blu tooth” pairing analogy, however, we must teach. You know I enjoy teaching, as well as learning.

You fell? While I am not for certain, when specifically, you fell. I knew you were done. You fell hard, I know this, as I too, fell hard. Some days, I can hardly breath, you take my breath away. Even with only a smile, I know what’s behind those smiles.

Without comparing as I have known no comparison. It is true, every day and night, I am with you. You speak of a short time of misery, My Love, Life is short. What is misery, but a lifetime of pain. We have felt it enough, and when it comes to insecurities. These are some of our tests I spoke of. We don’t do it consciously. There’s a reason for that.

For example, every time, I see a code, or even a kind gesture between people, and animals. I see you, in everything I do. My Love, I could litterly write a romance novel on us alone, and you are the star, in the center of my universe.

My Delight, this planet, it in itself, is hopeless. The people knowing it or not, need us. We are One, and We learn together. Babygirl, you are my family, this is no fantasy. It is scary, and we have the courage to overcome any obstacle, and the love needed to do anything we desire.

I do so love to carry on and think about you and want so baldly to talk to my friends and family about you, and how good you are for me. I want to boast about how I plan years in advance on ways to make you understand, I am always in love with you. Once I was guided to you, I knew from that day, you had to make a choice. You got to see, and feel me, for yourself. As I felt, and feel you, from anywhere in the Universe.

I will tell you now, you are mine forever, always and ever, and in every life time. There are things I want to do with you, and our families, the lists are really endless.

Baby, don’t ever think I would ever give up on you or us. I have at times, pulled away, so you could think, and feel for yourself. Times like this, are some of the hardest moments in my life.
I feel pain inside when we are not together, and I am fully aware, we belong to each other.

I gave you my word once, I told you, I saved the best of who I am for you. Only you, as I see you as my wife. You will kiss me, and we will embrace each other, and we may not ever let go of any given hug. I am yours, My Love. I lack ‘words’, however, I know who I am and what I am capable of.

Thank you for this letter. It’s beyond words, how you touch me, and how we make love. I love you My Angel, every breath I breath, I see you in my minds eye. I told you once, when you are ready, you will know. I hope you are having a good day. May my words, bring you a smile, and perhaps a tear or two of Joy. You are My Life, and I want to see you, and never leave you. I am beyond words at the moment.
I want to hold you. I hope this helps you My Love.
Love,
Francis
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Review of Unclear  
Review by flcomeau Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E ★★★★★ | (3.0)
Hello IAMWATIAM,
This is a classic example of less is more. You described the basic, yet most complex thoughts and struggles, we as humans endure throughout our lives. Some advice, for you, as it has done well for me, and I have seen it work for countless others. If you choose less, and feel more, you may begin to find the answers you seek.

We all have our choices to make, however, there are times when time itself does not allow time for a thought out decision. Times like these the most, you will find yourself relying in instinct.

One other thing, I feel you will benefit from. Make a list, My first one, was ten (10) items. 'I AM' statements. When you begin a sentence with " I am", you own it, as well as the reactions or actions resulting in making a statement, often times, subconsciously.

Here's a few of mine, I hope they resonate with you, and help you out one day.

I AM Grateful
I AM Happy
I AM Joy
I AM Fun
I AM Peace

Play with it and see how it goes.
~FLComeau
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