Really good! This is VERY awesome. Although on the second line, you could say "Out of the black, though, came something" or just put a word in the middle because the second line is just a bit too short. But overall, good grammar, and really makes me wonder!!!
It makes sense. I'm pretty sure it's something most everyone deals with. I find it relatable- sometimes I throw on a crop top and some short shorts when it's 90 degrees, and stay outside for about 30 minutes. Well, then a storm comes in and it drops to 40 degrees. But that's just because I live in Oklahoma. lol this made me laugh kinda.
Hmm, very good! I love it. It's cute, and heartwarming. Very good! It has great grammar and punctuation, EXCELLENT word choice. I like the story it conveys. I love it. It's kinda emotional, too. Still, very great, great word choice, good punctuation and grammar. Nice job!
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