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Review Style
While I will give input on any spelling, grammar, and punctuation, I much prefer to rate based on how the content flows and feels to me as a reader. Even if there is room for improvement, I always prefer to stay on the positive side of things. To be honest, every writer has room for improvement. We're all works in progress.
I'm good at...
reviewing poetry. Because poetry is mostly about feelings and imagery (and a little bit about form), I find that poets find my advice to be more helpful than other writers. I like to immerse myself in whatever I'm reading, and the strong feelings evoked in poetry tends to resonate with me better than other forms of writing.
Favorite Genres
I like fantasy, scifi, horror, and drama, but I will read other things. I love monsters, vampires, weird happenings, and things like that.
Least Favorite Genres
I'm not a huge fan of romance and erotica. That's not to say that I wont review a fantasy novel that includes romance or erotica, but I can't take a lot of it.
Favorite Item Types
Poetry, short stories, chapters, novellas, and crosswords.
Least Favorite Item Types
Novels. It's not that I don't want to read your story (I really do), but I am a slow reader. If you want me to review your book, you will have to do so with the expectation that it will take me while.
I will not review...
Fanfiction. Aside from the issue of knowing who the characters are in their original setting, I don't really care for it in general.
Public Reviews
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Review by Sorji
Rated: E | (5.0)
This was so cute! I love it. It is so fun and whimsical, but with just a few words changed, this could be like a serious story about armies and quarreling nations. I absolutely love what you did with this and would be so curious about how a full-length novella or novel using these interesting "characters" and this political climate you've created would read. Just something to think about. *Smile*

Very good! Keep on writing!


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Review of Unspoken  
Review by Sorji
Rated: E | (4.5)
I really enjoyed this poem. It evokes strong feelings, which I think is the mark of a great poem. The only things I would suggest would be capitalizing the first letter of each line (because you're subsequent lines get a little lost after the first/capitalized line of the stanza) and maybe add punctuation at the ends to help gather thoughts together into sentences. It just looks a little unfinished without it to me. Otherwise, it was awesome. Keep on writing! *Smile*


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Review by Sorji
Rated: E | (5.0)
Wow. I know this is an older piece, but this is a wonderful poem. It really hit me right in the feelings, which, in my opinion, is the mark of great poetry. I also love the imagery. The rhyming scheme is quite appealing. It has good flow. I'm glad this piece found me today. *Smile*


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Review by Sorji
Rated: E | (4.5)
Awesome awesome awesome! This is a great preface to a novel or series of short stories. In one fell swoop, you've established your history, good guys, bad guys, and political climate in great detail. You're off to a great start. I found a few small typos, which I will outline below, but overall, it looks great. Keep on writing! *Smile*

form alliances and borders - add a comma (2 clauses)
divided up into 9 kingdoms - spell nine out throughout (it looks nicer; good for word count too)
candle but Suliau - add a comma (2 clauses)
and used them (;) not to help the people but (no comma)
after that and to prevent - and,


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Review of Icing on the Cake  
Review by Sorji
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
I really liked this. It pulls my mind in several different directions as I read it. The only thing I can see that I would change is that I would put punctuation at the ends of the lines. I see that you have some commas, but no periods. Also, I would either capitalize each line or play with the spacing (like indent the line after the comma). Otherwise, this poem looks great! Keep on writing!


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Review of Economy Class  
Review by Sorji
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Oh my gosh! I can SO relate to feeling crammed in the plane. I have only flown twice (to and from Boston), and both times, it was like packed sardines in a can. Though, on our flights, the sodas and snacks were free. Maybe it's a Southwest Airlines thing. Anyway, I loved the flow and rhyme of the poem. It's funny and factual, which is awesome. I'm glad this came my way. *Smile*


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Review by Sorji
Rated: E | (5.0)
I think this is an awesome contest! It really makes you think about what you're going to do with your year to make it worth it. I found this to be very similar to my yearly post on Facebook about what I'm going to do this year, but I felt like I could go a little more in-depth without people freaking out about how long my post is or how my goals are probably way out of reach because other people just don't have the drive to finish their yearly goals. Well, I surely do, and I'm glad that I got to share them with Writing.com! Thanks guys!
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Review by Sorji
Rated: E | (5.0)
Wow. If you made this yourself, then color me impressed. It looks very real. The corners are even curling a little bit like real Post-It notes do. I also like the somewhat whimsical font you used. As much as I like looking at it, I hope that you get to take it down soon. There's nothing like the rush of getting a writing project done.


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Review by Sorji
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Overall, I like the feeling this poem evokes, but I do see a few small errors that you might want to see to.

Line 1: I think you mean "stands" on the hill.

Line 3: sill's - you don't need the '

Line 4: "make *her* their home" maybe?

Line 6: "Looks" should be capitalized, like the first word of every line


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Review by Sorji
Rated: E | (5.0)
You know, usually I am not a huge fan of rhyming poems, but I really did enjoy this one. I think that I liked it so well because you used some interesting words for your rhymes, especially in that first stanza. What's funny is that the flow and rhyme of this poem could almost be sung as lyrics. I wonder if that was planned. Anyway, great poem!


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Review by Sorji
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a nice, simple poem. The message is pretty clear. The spelling and grammar looks good. I can relate to the experience of using big, fancy words to confuse someone when I could not use the nasty, hurtful words that I wanted to. It is one of the perks of being a writer or poet. You know all the right words to say exactly what you mean, even if nobody else gets it.


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Review by Sorji
Rated: 18+ | (1.0)
It is a shame that his project seems to have fallen by the wayside, based on the publishing date listed for it. I was curious to see if you were taking this in the direction of the Vulcans referenced in Star Trek or, if not, what these new Vulcans would be about.


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Review of Gaia  
Review by Sorji
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Not sure if you meant to say "arroyos" (meaning steep gully or something like that) or if this is a typo ala "arrays," but I figured I would point it out in case that's an error.

Now that the technical stuff is out of the way, let's talk about your content.

This almost feels poetic, which may be why I enjoyed it so much. It's very deep and meaningful, which is a nice change of pace considering some of the stuff that's out in the massive writing universe. It's very descriptive, almost tangible, which I love. As much as I like it, I don't know what you could build around it that would do this part justice. However, I would love to find out what you come up with.

This might be sort of a weird thing to pick out, but I like how the shadows of the deer are "following" them, like the shadows have a life of their own. I also very much relate to "language doesn't know how I feel." Despite all of the weird German words that cover feelings and instances that the English language doesn't seem to cover, there are always times when it feels like there aren't enough words out there anyway.

I really liked this. I would love to see what this turns into.


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Review of Monochrome Heart  
Review by Sorji
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
This is a very interesting look at relationships. As someone who has been in some rough ones, I can feel the push and pull of the words, ultimately culminating in a feeling of "Is it really so bad that they're gone?" This is very deep. I love it. Also, I didn't see any spelling/grammar/spacing errors. Great poem! *Smile*


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Review of Double Wide  
Review by Sorji
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Oh my gosh! This about knocked me out of my chair! I love it. It is both humor and truth. Not to say that I have never made a quick run to Walmart in my jammie-pants, but this poem speaks to me because I have seen women like this with my own eyes. What really gets me is that this poem is also both "sweet" and "sour." It is about love, but then that last line kind of kills the "awww" of it. Very cute!


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Review by Sorji
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I bet this was a great prompt to mull over. And, I completely agree. I have been through some serious stuff, some of it was my own doing, but I would not change anything. Going through stuff changes the way you see things and how you react to similar situations later on. It may be painful to think back on, but it is important to recognize the importance of everything you experience, good and bad. This was an awesome read. *Smile*


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Review by Sorji
Rated: E | (5.0)
What a fun little task! I'll give it a whirl! (this is loosely based on an idea I had for a screenplay)

Once upon a time there was a lone demon spawn, lying in dark, waiting. Every day, he waited for his chance; his chance to strike, his chance to live, his chance to BE. One day, tragedy struck for two parents of an ailing child in the Midwest. Their precious babe had passed in the night. Because of that, the spawn drew near. It watched the little soul float off into the light, and when the body was cold and blue, he took it for his own. The babe drew breath. His cheeks pinked, as did the parents' when he let out a shrill cry. The demon spawn lived within the child for years, going about the daily grind that was life with great joy; going to school, doing chores, being part of the local soccer team. Until finally, the day came when his parents wanted something he could not give them. They wanted him baptized and confirmed in their faith, a sure-fire cure for demonic infestation. He tried in vain to think of a good reason why not, to plead with his parents against it, but to no avail. He stood before the pool of blessed water and thought back on the great gift that had been his life. He dreaded the pain the parents would bare, completely unaware of what they had done, pain that he wouldn't be there to share. He gazed into the crystal-clear waters as the priest beckoned him in before the congregation, and as he stepped in, he prayed.


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Review by Sorji
Rated: E | (5.0)
I like the rhythm and repetition of this poem. It feels almost song-like. I also love how sweet and positive this poem is. It is very light and fluffy with imagery and words that appeal to all of the senses. I also like that you altered the font to make the text visually appealing. I think it gives the poem a little something extra. Keep on writing!


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Review of favorite boy  
Review by Sorji
Rated: E | (5.0)
This poem really speaks to me. I find often that poetry about romance makes one or both people seem impossibly perfect, but you cover both sides of the coin by pointing out flaws which everybody has. It's a breath of fresh air to me to read something about love that feels more lifelike. I very much liked this poem! Keep on writing!


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Review of Nostalgic  
Review by Sorji
Rated: E | (5.0)
I like this poem both because it speaks a truth for all of us as living beings and because it has good form. The repetition really cements a feeling that is sort of difficult to describe, but it is a strong one. Is this one of your older works reposted, or is this new?


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Review by Sorji
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This is a very interesting, very descriptive piece. I like the imagery of this girl who is so attractive and desperately desired transposed with the idea that the narrator is simply dreaming of the ability to be intimate with her, which is something I think a lot of people can relate to in one way or another. Very good! I very much enjoyed this poem!


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Review of Fast Heart  
Review by Sorji
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
You have good descriptors here, but you switch your tense from past to present a few times. I would pick one and change the verbs so that it is consistent throughout. Overall, I did enjoy reading this. It seems like it would fit right into a young adult novella. I also love that you did not name him. It gives the reader a chance to play with your description of him and decide what his name by be for themselves. Very good!


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Review by Sorji
Rated: E | (4.0)
Honestly, my first thought when I read this was that of me lying in bed trying to fall asleep. Sometimes, I lie awake thinking about stuff and every little sight and sound is so distracting. Anyway, I really enjoyed this simple poem. It is both clear and vague with a hint of whimsy. Very cool. Keep on writing! :)


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Review by Sorji
Rated: E | (5.0)
This was so cute! Very typical behavior of siblings, or at least, my siblings when we were growing up. I just love that he put the time and energy into folding the paper the way Lily does to really seal her fate. He could have just mindlessly tossed it into her room and his, but nope. He had to be sure. I enjoyed this little snippet. Very good. :)


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Review of Foghorn Leghorn  
Review by Sorji
Rated: E | (5.0)
This was awesome! I love it! It is so cool that you can take something so whimsical and make it sound so real like an actual news story. Interesting choice of characters as well. I am not sure about how you came up with this, but you definitely have a talent for this kind of writing. I really enjoyed it. :)


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