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Review Style
While I will give input on any spelling, grammar, and punctuation, I much prefer to rate based on how the content flows and feels to me as a reader. Even if there is room for improvement, I always prefer to stay on the positive side of things. To be honest, every writer has room for improvement. We're all works in progress.
I'm good at...
reviewing poetry. Because poetry is mostly about feelings and imagery (and a little bit about form), I find that poets find my advice to be more helpful than other writers. I like to immerse myself in whatever I'm reading, and the strong feelings evoked in poetry tends to resonate with me better than other forms of writing.
Favorite Genres
I like fantasy, scifi, horror, and drama, but I will read other things. I love monsters, vampires, weird happenings, and things like that.
Least Favorite Genres
I'm not a huge fan of romance and erotica. That's not to say that I wont review a fantasy novel that includes romance or erotica, but I can't take a lot of it.
Favorite Item Types
Poetry, short stories, chapters, novellas, and crosswords.
Least Favorite Item Types
Novels. It's not that I don't want to read your story (I really do), but I am a slow reader. If you want me to review your book, you will have to do so with the expectation that it will take me while.
I will not review...
Fanfiction. Aside from the issue of knowing who the characters are in their original setting, I don't really care for it in general.
Public Reviews
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Review by Sorji
Rated: E | (5.0)
This was very informative! I've seen a great deal of posts on the Community Newsfeed from people who are new to Writing.com asking for help with various things. I think this is a great instructional piece for those who are trying to get the hang of being a part of the fun stuff Writing.com has to offer!


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Review of Love Is Not Lost  
Review by Sorji
Rated: E | (5.0)
Wow. There is a lot of feeling in this poem. It is always interesting to me when I read a poem that is more about evoking feeling than creating imagery. It is more difficult, in my opinion, and when done correctly, can be far more rewarding. I very much enjoyed this poem! Keep on writing! :)
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Review by Sorji
Rated: E | (5.0)
It is really cool to see a poem dedicated to the writers on this site. I feel like there are writers that join writing.com and immediately feel silly about having writing as a hobby, and they really should not. Though, I think that comes from the world around us that sometimes makes us feel like writing is a worthless hobby. I know I felt that way when I first joined because my family did not support my desire to write. Anyway, I think this poem is awesomely positive and speaks truth. Rock on!


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Review by Sorji
Rated: E | (5.0)
I like a lot about this poem. For one, it is visually appealing. Being centered and broken into small stanzas makes it feel like a Christmas story or poem, like "The Night Before Christmas" or something. The color is a nice touch as well. I also like the whimsy it evokes. I have a soft spot for whimsy, myself. Anyway, I really enjoyed this poem. Keep on writing! :)


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Review of The Time Has Come  
Review by Sorji
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
I really enjoyed this poem. It speaks to the idea that we often think we know what we want, but when the time comes, we are not so sure it is what we wanted after all. Success is no different. Sometimes getting what we want does not give us absolution. Very inspiring! Keep on writing!


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Review of Sing Me  
Review by Sorji
Rated: E | (3.5)
I like the ideas and imagery you create with such a simple combination of words, but the form throws me off a little. At some points, it rhymes; others, it feels a little more like free-verse. Perhaps I am missing some cultural reference here. After all, on the date this poem was written, I wasn't even born yet. Still, the strong emotion in this poem is enjoyable in its own right. I hope you continue to find inspiration in your own emotions. Too many people devalue their own feelings in exchange for a more tangible subject.


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Review by Sorji
Rated: E | (4.5)
Good inspiration page! There is a lot of positivity in these words, and to find so many different sayings from different authors in one spot is very refreshing. You do have a small typo in your Faulker quote:

8. "If a story 'in' in you, it has to come out." - William Faulkner

Other than that, I feel like this little gathering of quotes was enjoyably and inspiring! Go you!


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Review by Sorji
Rated: E | (5.0)
I liked the humor you brought forth in this poem. It is a very relate-able feeling to want the comforts of home and your favorite parts of the idea of "home" when you know you wont have that for any significant amount of time, especially if you know you are not going to enjoy the activity that must be done instead of being at home in one's favorite chair. Simple but elegant; very good. Keep on writing!


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Review of Trust  
Review by Sorji
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
This piece has really caught my interest. It almost feels like a preface to a longer piece, like a novel. I think it would be great to see this story expanded to include more of this particular woman's adventures. The only issue that I see within the writing itself is that I am unsure if you are implying that she barely heard the gunshots because she was distracted or if you are implying that the silencer actually made the shots "silent." While silencers do lower the decibles of gunshots drastically, the shots are still quite loud. You might want to address that, if you are concerned with realism. That being said, I still very much enjoyed this story! Keep on writing!


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Review of The Singularity  
Review by Sorji
Rated: E | (4.5)
I like the imagery that you created here without coming out and saying exactly what it is that is going on. Sometimes a little vaguery makes for a more interesting vision to your reader because they can then decide how the content should be translated. I do think that you might want to change "group" in the last stanza to "gather" or some other synonym because "group" initially comes off as being a typo or, if it is intended, it doesn't flow quite as well as the rest. Great content, though. Keep on writing!


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Review by Sorji
Rated: E | (5.0)
I really liked this poem. I like the images you created within the confines of the rhyme and the deep meaning you conveyed without coming out and explaining all of the details of the story. I also really like that you took a subject that most people would perceive one way and turned it upside down, took an entirely new perspective on something that people think they know a lot about. It was awesome! Keep on writing!


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Review of Day Dreaming  
Review by Sorji
Rated: E | (5.0)
I know this is listed under the "nonsense" genre, but I actually feel like I got a lot out of this piece. Being trapped in your own mind like sleep paralysis or "locked-in" syndrome; it sounds terrifying. I really enjoyed this poem! Keep up the good writing!


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Review by Sorji
Rated: E | (4.5)
Overall, I like it. It is pleasing to the eyes and ears, as far as form goes. I'm not sure if you meant to change "cue" to "queue" in the third passage, but I figured I would point it out to you. Very good. Keep writing!


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Review of Just One Wish  
Review by Sorji
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
This was a very fun read! I also love the reference to Bill Gates. Honestly, the character of Satan reminds me of a villain called "The Wishmaster" from a movie series by the same name, which tugs at my heart strings. He is one of my favorite villains, and this dialogue evoked the spirit of his contending nature and judgement against those who do not use their wishes wisely. I didn't see any major spelling or grammar errors, though the "Sigh" strikes me as odd. Perhaps it can be put in parentheses or something to show that it is more of an action than a spoken word. Great writing! Good luck in the contest!


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Review of The Party  
Review by Sorji
Rated: E | (5.0)
Despite the restrictions of the contest, this is actually very well-written. I really enjoyed the fact that some of the lines are not perfectly rhymed. It makes the poem more interesting, in my opinion. I also like that you did not limit yourself by trying to place the required words at the ends of the lines. You worked it into your content, rather than sacrificing content and wording to make the structure work. Over-all, I very much enjoyed reading this. Good luck in the contest!


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Review by Sorji
Rated: E | (4.0)
WOW...This was just so moving and inspirational. It makes me want to go to my parents and say "Hey, let's spend some time together; my treat." And it is so true. You never think of time as being limited, but endless. He must have been a great person for you to write about him as you did.

I did find a couple of errors:

"If I had know(N) I wasn't.."

"Perhaps I wouldn't have (put) blame where it..."

"Forgetting(,) however(,) to be strong for myself."

"I was too stubborn, to(o) harsh with words and deeds"

These are all just suggestions. I know how it is to read through my own work a few times and still miss minor things, and I know how it is to not put in certain punctuation for a reason. I just thought I'd let you know what I caught. :)

Very nice poem. I like how you put it in stanzas, it makes it much easier on my eyes. I also like that you put the dedication at the bottom because these kinds of works (biographies, poetry, ect.) really should show that kind of realism. I really enjoy your writing. :)
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Review of Life is not a box  
Review by Sorji
Rated: E | (4.5)
I like this poem. It uses symbolism, which I love. It also shows one of your personality traits, which is cool. I think that, even though it is somewhat short, you get your point across without being completely straightforward. Good work!
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Review by Sorji
Rated: E | (4.0)
I like this poem very much. I like the way you compared love to something that truly is endless. t's a bit short, but somethings are better left short and sweet. I like it and I can't wait to read more of your work. ^_^
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Review of In the Dark  
Review by Sorji
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
How wonderfully real, and yet the man's feelings are pleasantly exaggerated.

I really enjoyed this story, mainly because I can relate.

It was slightly humorous to find out she had been sleeping (or pretending to sleep) while he poured out his feelings to her because he may not ever get the same courage to tell her again and if she didn't hear, she'll never really know.
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