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I do not claim to be an expert in writing or reviewing. Therefore, these are just my opinions and you may feel free to use or discard them.
Title and description:
I'm interested in all things goal-setting and inspiration so I was intrigued by the "No U-turn" concept.
The best bits and my overall opinions:
Apart from the few minor mistakes I highlight below, this piece was very well written. You managed to get all your thoughts across in a coherent and easy to understand way. I liked the way you explained why you felt you needed to take on this no u-turn policy. And actually, the concept is a good one - very well explained too. Self-analysis is not always easy to get down in words, but you did a good job!
As I say, my corrections are laid out below. The minor errors are the only reason I gave 4.5 not 5.
Reading this, I was able to relate a lot of it to myself. Therefore, as well as reviewing your writing, I wanted to offer you some tips. I too struggle with goal-setting - I make giant lists and if I don't tick everything off, I get annoyed at myself. I also drive a lot for work so once I've driven for 3 hours plus the job I went to do, I've run out of time for anything else. I'm also disabled and suffer with pain, I try not to let it bug me bug sometimes its hard. So, here are my tips (feel free to use or ignore):
Driving: get a voice recorder (dictaphone). I'm not saying you'll be able to record a whole book ready to be typed up later. Bu use it to record ideas, quotes, snippets of stories that come to mind. Hitting record/stop should be ease and wont take you attention away from the road.
Being hard on yourself: On my laptop desktop I have an image of a quote from an author called Sue Fitzmaurice. I refer to it a lot, and it goes like this: "Stop beating yourself up. And stop beating yourself up for beating yourself up. And stop beating yourself up for beating yourself up for beating yourself up. Sheeeesh!"
Goal-setting: many of us think goal-setting is just writing down a goal and saying "yup, that what I want to do" and then walking away. It's not! Its about writing down the goal and working out exactly how to do it. Think of a pizza ...
You never get a whole pizza and push it into your mouth as one bit. It's impossible - too big and too messy. Many of the goals we set, might look small on paper, but really they probably need a few goes. So we need to slice up our goals just like a pizza. So, next time you have a goal-setting session, here's what I suggest:
Grab a bit of A4. At the top, write down one goal. Under that, draw the shape of a pizza (so, a circle with lines through it for slices). In each slice, write one thing that would be a step towards your goal. So, if you want to achieve something by the end of the week, draw 7 slices - one for each day. Or, if its a 6 month goal, one slice per month, etc. Breaking up goals this way, just makes it a little bit easier to think about what needs doing to get to the end point.
I hope this makes sense and you don't mind me sharing these things. You piece just made me think of all this so I wanted to share.
Improvements or corrections:
I do not have many things to point out here. The things I do point out are just my opinion so not to be taken as gospel.
The word ‘jewelry’ is spelt ‘jewellery’
Here: “a long-undiagnosed broken vertebrae” – I think this should be: “a long-undiagnosed broken vertebra” – singular. OR “long-undiagnosed broken vertebrae” – plural without the ‘a’.
Here: “Roseanne Barr when she said that…” – I don’t think you need the word ‘that’ – “Roseanne Barr when she said…”
Here: “Personal Power program when he said” – a comma would be good after the word ‘said’.
I really enjoyed reading this item and I hope my comments have helped a little; at least. Thank you very much for the read. I hope I get the opportunity to read more of your work at some point soon ☺ xx
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