Hi there,
How I found and selected this particular item: I am reviewing your work as a WDC Power Reviewer.
I will admit, poetry is not my forte - so I may not be the best poetry reviewer (yet! I'm determined to learn.
How do I feel now that I have read it?: I get the feeling you (if this is biographical) would have had a sense of clarity or 'blowing cobwebs away' whilst writing this - and certainly after.
What I liked best: This is a very wise poem. I like the way I can relate to the sentiments of this poem, as I am sure the majority of other people could.
My favourite part of this poem is: Controlling my thoughts all of the time.
Release all my dreams they will be fine.
Here I feel you using your vocabulary to portray the notion of being trapped in your thoughts of another - needing to let go once and for all so everything can feel right again.
Going further, your mention of god indicates your solace, without feeling trapped.
How might the piece be improved: As I said, I do not claim to be the queen of poetry reviewing. However, here I felt that some punctuation changes may be open to consideration. For example: " It is not yours forever have and to hold."
Maybe I'd think about putting a comma after forever(?).
Also, this sentence felt slightly off to me when I read it: Who my dreams I wished would've last.
I was thinking that inserting the word in might make it easier to read.
What piece of advice would I give you, one writer to another?: Not really advice really - despite my corrections, I really enjoyed reading this poem. Thank you for the read, I look forward to getting the opportunity to read more of your work :) x
I've just popped by to offer you WDC birthday power review :)
What I liked best: This is lovely story, full of detail and description that helps the reader picture the scene. As I was reading, I could easily "see" the owl, the trees and the cottage. Yet, the story is snappy and to the point - no long sentences to trawl through, which is great.
How might the piece be improved: Near the beginning, you allude to another 'he' that isn't the dog:
"The soft glow from the windows let her know that he was still up"
I get the feeling there is a story behind this sentence all of it's own. However, there was no further mention (unless I missed it) of this allusive 'he' and it has left me wanting to know more!
What piece of advice would I give you, one writer to another?: Not really advice, but I think this is a very nice, tidy and inspiring little story. Thank you for the read, I look forward to getting the opportunity to read more of your work :) x
Hi there,
How I found and selected this particular item: I am reviewing your work as a WDC Power Reviewer.
I'm just floating around WDC looking for fantasy pieces to read.
What I liked best: I love the fantasy genre so I was interested to see what your poll was asking. I like the way you managed to group most of the obvious fantasy characters into just five options - no mean feat, you could have been there days.
How might the piece be improved: I'd like to take this one step further and find out why people like certain types of characters. Mostly because I'm nosy!
What piece of advice would I give you, one writer to another?: Not really advice, but I think this is good. Thank you for the read, I look forward to getting the opportunity to read more of your work :) x
Hi there,
How I found and selected this particular item: I am reviewing your work as a WDC Power Reviewer
What I liked best: I really like the idea of the "Barney Ship"! This is a nice little story of the start of your career as a ship hand. You obviously enjoyed it since you wanted to go back again :)
How might the piece be improved: I am a little confused if I'm honest. The description on this piece says "A story of dolphins, in the springtime". However, I saw no dolphins in what I read (unless I'm not reading properly? This is possible). I wonder whether this is the beginning of a much longer story. I get the feeling that there are a great number of details that could be included to make this a very interesting piece of writing. Indeed, it would certainly be a story I would like to read.
What piece of advice would I give you, one writer to another?: I think this is a good start to a good story. If you had time/wanted to I would suggest you come back to this and build on the foundations you already have. If you do, I would be more than happy to come back and review the changes.
Thank you for the read, I look forward to getting the opportunity to read more of your work :) x
Hi there,
How I found and selected this particular item: I am reviewing your work as a WDC Power Reviewer
How do I feel now that I have read it?: I'm still laughing if I'm honest. Mostly because I can relate so well to this story. I'm not Deaf but I do have a physical and speech impairments - I have had a lot of ridiculous comments in my time.
What I liked best: I really like the way you use your great sense of humour to tell this set of stories. It's interesting, if humour wasn't used I think you'd get a lot of "ohh that's awful". So, I think it's important that you've done it in this way - such is life! I love the last line of this piece: When he was 12 he started losing his hearing and the family joke was we need a Hearing Ear Cat for the Hearing Ear Dog.
Do you get to keep the dog as a pet once it has retired? Do they feel put out if you get another "working" dog?
How might the piece be improved: The only correction I could find to make is a question of tense: "...Vet and determined that he's getting old"
Should be (I think): "...Vet and determined that he was getting old
What piece of advice would I give you, one writer to another?: Not really advice, but I think this is a good job. Thank you for the read, I look forward to getting the opportunity to read more of your work :) x
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I know this is an older piece of work, but the title a description caught my eye.
How do I feel now that I have read it?: I'm smiling because I like this so much.
What I liked best: This short poem encompasses so many different parts of real life in a succinct manner. I think if I had to choose my favourite part of the poem, it would be these two lines:
While finding one's place,
Many trials one must face.
Just because its so true. Yet we always learn from the trials (as you say in the previous line).
How might the piece be improved: I cannot see any significant improvements to be made - good job! :)
What piece of advice would I give you, one writer to another?: Not really advice, but I think this is really good. Thank you for the read, I look forward to getting the opportunity to read more of your work :) x
I've just popped by to offer you WDC birthday power review :)
How do I feel now that I have read it?: There was plenty in your port that I fancied reading and will have to come back for. However, I really wanted to read something that made me smile. I found something here :)
What I liked best: It's hard to find the best part of this poem and why I like it, because there is so much to like! But I think my favourite lines are:
And I barely remember by age of Five,
what once I knew at Three.
Its a very true ending to a great poem.
How might the piece be improved: The following line doesn't sit right with me. Not because it is gramatically in correct - it isn't (I don't think!), it just looks like it: What games there are will be played with blocks of wood
What piece of advice would I give you, one writer to another?: Not really advice, but I think this is great. Thank you for the read, I look forward to getting the opportunity to read more of your work :) x
I've just popped by to offer you WDC birthday Simply Positive review :)
How do I feel now that I have read it?: I'm smiling and thinking "this is definitely something I need to do soon!"
What I liked best: I've read lots of 'bucket lists', or similar, and I am often left wondering why the person has chosen these particular things. Yours, however, is different. I love the fact that parts of your personality comes across in this piece and I felt like I was getting to know you better the more I read on. I also enjoyed the fact that I found myself chuckling to myself and nodding my head in agreement
What piece of advice would I give you, one writer to another?: Not really advice, but I think this is great! Thank you for the read, I look forward to getting the opportunity to read more of your work :) x
Hi there,
How I found and selected this particular item: I am reviewing your work as a member of the Simply Positive group
How do I feel now that I have read it?: ahhh I love this. I wasn't too sure about the style when I started reading. But now, I love the concept. In fact, it also reminded me that I pictured a piece of my own in a similar "style" while I was driving today.
What I liked best: I just really enjoyed imagining a "dream superhero" as I was reading your work.
How might the piece be improved: I think, there may be areas where you could lose the odd word to help it flow a little better. For example: I ignore it,
But now I know my time is limited.
Perhaps the "but now" could be left out? But this is merely my opinion.
What piece of advice would I give you, one writer to another?: Not really advice, but I think this is a great piece. Thank you for the read, I look forward to getting the opportunity to read more of your work :) x
Hi there,
How I found and selected this particular item: I am reviewing your work as a member of the Simply Positive group
How do I feel now that I have read it?:
This actually reminds me of the one and only love poem I've ever written with my Fiance in mind. Therefore, it has made me smile. What I liked best:
I love the depth of this poem - I can feel the passion of the words striking me as I read. The vocabulary you've used to described this love, is delightful.
How might the piece be improved:
I donāt think Iād improve anything. In all honesty, reviewing poetry is not really my speciality (its on my list of improvements to make). However, I know good poetry when I see it ☺ What piece of advice would I give you, one writer to another?: Not really advice, but I think this is a fantastic job. Thank you for the read, I look forward to getting the opportunity to read more of your work :) x
You were below me in the "I write..." contest (well technically you weren't but I got confused) so I am here to review your work.
Well done for writing a piece in 100 words. I've tried a few 150 word pieces and struggled. So, I know its no mean feat.
This has really grabbed my attention and I find myself wanting to read the rest of the story. Therefore, this short intro must be good. It takes skill and a great use of words/language to grab someone in only 100 words.
I can find no faults or technical writing errors, so good work!
Thank you, once again, for the read and I look forward to reading more of your work :)
Hi, you are below me in the "I write..." contest so I have popped over to review your work.
Obviously, given the subject matter, I feel uncomfortable telling you that this is a good piece of writing, I did not like it. I do not like the way such things occur, shocking entire countries. Indeed, shocking the entire world. Sitting here in Britain, I do not have a personal connection to these specific events. But I do feel saddened and sickened by them.
But, your writing is good. I was able to picture the news tickers streaming by as you watched on. I was able to completely understand your feelings, your thought and your connections. I appreciated the way you interlinked the story with the processes of you own mind.
Hello! Once again you are below me in the "I write..." contest, so I am here to review!
I absolutely adore this and I am so so pleased I get to read and review it! Really and truly!
Now, I'm not great at reviewing poetry: I try my hand at writing a few poems here and there, its true. However, to be honest I'm never sure what I'm looking for. Maybe I should learn? I think I'm going to learn. So this will, by no means be the greatest poetry review you've ever received.
But! In terms of the poem's concept - its fantastic! It most certainly is 'an unusual take on the idea of "First Love"' and the idea far outweighs the take others, certainly myself, would have on the specific "prompt" or "theme". Indeed, I think the concept in and of itself is a worthy contest winner.
I really like the way the poem is, in a way, a story of your life; how you've changed through the years and the things you've loved during that time. You've done a great job of describing the way things have come and gone in your life but that writing has been a constant source of pleasure for you.
Hi there,
I am reviewing this for the "I write..." contest.
This is an interesting poem, where the writer cleverly illustrates the imaginative potential we all have within ourselves. Keep your horizons broad and harness that creativity some more :)
The only part of your poem I struggled with was:
Or mountains ranged
Like sleepy pillows
This is because the "sleepy pillows" make me think of clouds rather than mountain ranges and it halted the flow of my imagination when reading
However, this is a great piece of work. Thank you for the read :) x
I am slightly confused as there doesn't seem to be a place for me to make note of my actually answer.
I sometimes catch the tail end of "Deal or No deal" and often wonder what I'd do in the contestants position, which is similar to what you're asking. It's a tricky one.
Ć think I'd stick with my box. They are not taking money off me so I can't lose either way. Also, I'd be more upset if I'd swapped and lost
I really like this, it's right up my street and is the type of thing I love to read. My only issue now is that I find myself really wanting to know more. I'm guessing the contest you entered this in had a word limit, in which case you did well to build up the story so well.
But now I'd like to know moreā¦ is he a freak? What are freak? What's the back story?
I really like this - very well written and it paints a clear picture of the lives and thoughts of these inmates. It is just unfortunate that this is not always the case and some go back!
Thank you for the read - I will certainly check out your portfolio and have a read of your other work :) x
How I found and selected this particular item: Popped up on random read
How do I feel now that I have read it?: In my mind I'm saying "huh, simple yet effective"
What I liked best: It is what it is - it describes the process effectively, but makes the idea of the process more "catchy".
What piece of advice would I give you, one writer to another?: I think you're more of an experienced creative writer than me, so I doubt you'd need my advice. I'm guessing this was for a contest? I wonder how you got on.
I like this story. You sound so satisfied, so comfortable, here at WDC. I have to admit I've been on WDC for about two years (ish) now, but on and off really - so I'd say I've only been active about a year. Therefore, I'm yet to feel entirely comfortable, like you.
However, something brought me back here the other day after about 210 days away. This time I am determined to make full use of WDC. I want to read all the wonderful poems and stories, I want to meet all the wonderful people and I want to learn to entertain with my ideas that might, one day, make it on to the screen.
I love reviewing, too. This is not the best review, I grant you. But, my point, as flowery as it may seem, is that you make me want to be here!
How I found and selected this particular item: This popped up as a random read
How do I feel now that I have read it?: I always say, when reviewing poetry, that I can get confused when reading poetry - try as I might to understand the words. However, I get the feeling of "ahh I know it well"... longing for a way back, a way to change what has gone.
What I liked best: "That age misspent in argument,
Rebellious music, dark dissent.
If Iād known then the bough was bent,
I might have been less discontent."
This would be my favourite quote. I'm sure we all, at some point, will probably see these types of words float through their minds.
What I liked least: Once understood, I don't think I disliked anything.
How might the piece be improved: I've rated this piece with 5 stars and you've won first place in a contest with it. Therefore, I don't think I can offer suggestions.
I got a little lost: I always do with poetry - I found my way (I think) in the end.
What piece of advice would I give you, one writer to another?: Keep going - I am going to make an effort to read more of your work, having enjoyed this so much :)
This contest looks great. Seen as it is 30/06 already, I do not see myself attempting to get an entry in for the June prompt. However, as some one who is trying to get her writing flowing, I have saved this to my favourites and will definitely be heading back to see what next month's prompt is.
I am also looking forward to reading through some of the previous entries!
I totally know the "wearing a mask" drill. In a sense, we all do it on a daily basis. We all wear different "masks" for the different life roles we have. However, I know this is not what you mean.
I have tried to be several different people in my life time, to match the people I surrounded myself with. It took a while for me to realise who I really was, and a little while longer to realise that I actually liked that person.
It is important to be yourself; the people that matter most will love you for you.
I realise this is not necessarily a review of your work. If I could tell you my story, you would see where I was coming from more clearly. I suggest you should continue to write in order to find the real you.
In fact, you have inspired me to write a poem called "I am me!"
This is great, especially given it is written for a 300 words or less contest. I am thinking of doing said contest but I am not sure I would ever be able to get something so emotive into so few words...
If you can do this so well, I am very interested to ready more of your work :)
This does seem like it would belong to a book I would usually read. I must admit, however, that I very rarely read prologues as very often they do not make all that much sense until you read your way through the book. But that's just me, I just want to get straight into the story.
It's good though. It has left me wanting to read more, which is always a good thing
I have to be honest, I love this! You had me hooked right from the start - I needed to know why your character was saying good bye. The story was a little longer than I expected it to be. But that's ok, because it was not 'too' long at all.
The story certainly does a great job of illustrating exactly how reliant we are on the internet and technology these days. Twitter was 'down' the other day and the number of people who were stumped because they couldn't go on Twitter to find out what was up with Twitter was astonishing!
Thank you for the entertaining and well thought out read, keep writing!
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