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Review of Nefertiti mummy  
Rated: E | (3.0)
I actually have studied this. When her husband died, women ordinarily did not become Pharoh so she went off to try and marry some foreign king. As far as I know, no one ever found her tomb. Most think she was kind of fed to the fish.

You did list this as fiction which is appropriate. Generally archeologists would have a full name. Quiet probably is quite.

She is the most complicated of women. She was also probably one of the most beautiful. This story is pretty well known as James Patterson has written fictionalized history of her

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for entry "Chapter 5 Discussion
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I pretty much read all of this (some skimmed). This type of outlook is the stuff of today. I realize the writing is academic. They have their own special brand of non-communication. They don't say anything simply. It is not their way.

This is valid--very valid. When I went through college way back when, my academic interest survey listed eight things. They were all very varied. Circumstances and a pretty young thing who wanted to be married definitely had an influence.

Did I make a right choice? The answer would be yes and no. It was very satisfying for many years. It could have been something else. We are kind of regimented on the way we make decisions. I think the general public is starting to realize that.

It is not all about education 0 to 25, work for 4 decades and then die. You might read The Three boxes of Life
People need help. They may not make a fortune but maybe they won't have to

Obviously, you wrote this for stuffy academic types. I've done it too. The subject is fascinating but you have to be able to bring everyone along with you. I rated this based on the original purpose for which it was written. This is a book for the common person
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece I saw this is newbie reviews
Overall impression of piece

Grammatical and spelling errors Reads well. No obvious errors

What I liked?*Smile* Talks about people who were centuries ahead of their times. The answer is there. Are we willing to listen?

Points to Ponder:*Idea* I am not aware of MLK being nighted. Sir would imply that. When you use they, it is indeffiniate about who they are. It loses some of its punch

How the piece made me feel We should all have a dream. Lincoln didn't really back sufferage but was against forced slavery

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Peace and beauty in freefall
MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece Part of a Newbies newsletter

Overall impression of piece I can hardly imagine what this might be like, but you have described it well

Grammatical and spelling errors reads well. No errors

What I liked?*Smile* I read your bio. You wrote this with a sensitivity of a background and a gentle spirit. Rhyme is pretty interesting

Points to Ponder:*Idea*: Adieu and too may be a little contrived. Should Jones have a footnote?

How the piece made me feel Are we what we appear or what we feel? I think you identify with both. That is pretty cool

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Review of Ancient Ones  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece I have had the pleasure of reviewing another of your pieces

Overall impression of piece I caught the spirit of this. There is more to our world than us

Grammatical and spelling errors: Reads well. No errors

What I liked?*Smile* Can you feel your destiny? Are we listening? Maybe we are in the wrong century. We have a greatness written in the whispers of wind

Points to Ponder:*Idea* Ancient ones made me think SG-1, the TV series. I need a little more help getting plugged into the Indian connection. Perhaps some drum beats matching the wind?

How the piece made me feel We are written with the spirit of the creator, regardless of how we see that to be.. Ancient Indians were probably more spiritual than the Christians of their day

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I get this. I reviewed your port and was impressed. I wish for such a clear vision too. Imagine, what the original twelve must have felt. They started out as mere fishermen and the like. A tax collector? Are you kidding me? God has a sense of humor. God didn't use spiritual giant. He used people who were ready to expand and grow

There is more to us than we realize. Bold and confident being repeated is very effective. I realize this is a look at 2020. Christmas is piggybacked on the Roman Holiday of Feast of the Invincible Sun. Christians would say, we have an invincible son too.

Some of this is bordering on cliche like stepping into tomorrow. I think everyone would know what you mean by this so it probably is ok.



Michael
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Review of Strangers  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Why I chose this piece I was looking through inspirational and kind of thought this asked the right questions

Overall impression of piece Short. Concise. To the point

Grammatical and spelling errors Reads well. No errors

What I liked?*Smile* It is all here. Your arguments are strong and straightforward

Points to Ponder:*Idea* This kind of comes from a sound logical point of view. I get that. I have systematically studied things. I am not sure if this is the real way to now God. It is a struggle that I work on to

How the piece made me feel: As Christians, we know this stuff. Obviously, you have the addresses of a lot of this. Something happens. Perhaps we're too busy or preoccupied? Nobody else in my little church does this. They might think I'm a little nuts

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece I have long been interested in the topic

Overall impression of piece: This is pretty right on. You have most of the salient facts

Grammatical and spelling errors No errors. Reads well

What I liked?*Smile* You have a great deal of factual stuff here that most would not know. Well researched and put together

Points to Ponder:*Idea* This is a folklore contest. Generally, there is a fact that makes folk lore work. It doesn't even have to be true. Think George Washington and the Cherry Tree. December 25'th was the "Featst of the invinsible sun. It seems gone but will be back. Christians would say "We have an invincible SON too

How the piece made me feel The true origins off Christmas may never be known. Sometimes these things just happen. I agree / December 25'th is not the day. What is the main thing. Mrs of Christmas is a time to worship

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece am part of both the zoo and aquarium volunteer scene

Overall impression of piece People don't read long things. I like this attempt to tell the story

Grammatical and spelling errors Title are underlined

What I liked?*Smile* most of the experts say about 6" per year. Glacier National park has no glaciers

Points to Ponder:*Idea* The historical references are telling but there is a lot of stuff happening right now. After Hurricane Sandi, New York City built a sea wall. Everything on the coast is built way to close to the ocean. Miami was the first city with building codes, because they needed them. Baltsea reference seems obscure

How the piece made me feel This is a real problem now. Somehow I am not sure that comes out. It has more of a hypothetical tone

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Review of Advent  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece I like spiritual pieces. It is advent. I get that

Overall impression of piece: Originally, advent had little to do with Christ's birth/ It kind ofpiggybacked onto a Roman holiday called feast of the Invincible Sun and Christians said we have an invincible Son too. No one knows when He was born

Grammatical and spelling errors reads well. No errors

What I liked?*Smile* Death is a part of the cycle of life where we end up dealing with a lot of our pains and realize, we are not enough and need more.
We are all part of the problem awaiting rebirth--even in the dead of winter.

Points to Ponder:*Idea* Kind of have a hard time putting all those songs to this. For me, that is reasonably ok.

How the piece made me feel We are having one of the warmest Decembers on record here in Idaho. Still the lack of sun casts a dour look on things. There is always more.

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Review of The Funeral  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece I found this in philosophy and found it interesting. I am a Christian, but I like to encounter everyone here where they are.

Overall impression of piece. I had time as a Navy medic. I had 40 years doing Pathology which means, alot of autopsies

Grammatical and spelling errors Reads well. No errors

What I liked?*Smile*. You do have this right. Seeing death as much as I have, there are no emanations from another world. I do believe that the other worlds exist, but I am not sure how to deal with them. Death might not be the place.

Points to Ponder:*Idea* The author of Dr Zivalgo had the opinion that no one ever dies. We live on in the hearts of those that loved us. I go along with that. This might be the last moment to remember the loved one. You are right--it has no purpose for them. Life is always for the living

How the piece made me feel This kind of comes acrossed judgmental. I am not sure if that's what you are looking for. I don't understand all of life well. There is room for some question

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Why I chose this pieceI saw this in essays and, as a child in the 50's it did bring back sosme memories

Overall impression of piece Interesting period pice

Grammatical and spelling errors No obvious errors

What I liked?*Smile* I remember missile drills in the Cuban Missle era. I am not sure what we did under those desks but it was probably not too constructive.

Points to Ponder:*Idea* I am not a young kid. I was born in 51. Some of the references are a little obscure, even for me. I would take us back to those times. 50's and 60's do not equal World War 2 so again it is odd

How the piece made me feel You havae the right idea. Help us relive this specifically

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece Random newbie review

Overall impression of piece

Grammatical and spelling errors: I's are generally capitalized. You are missing some question marks on your questions. Last dilemma is misspelled.

What I liked?*Smile* Kind of a cool conclusion. You have interesting phases. This is something many can relate to.

Points to Ponder:*Idea* Mainly grammatical. Selah is bible and I know what it means but many won't.

How the piece made me feel Cool picture on your bio. I wish I was that handsome. I could use some words in there too

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: E | (3.0)
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Why I chose this piece I like history and essays. This seemed like a natural

Overall impression of piece Pretty comprehensive.

Grammatical and spelling errors I believe between votes and this , there should be a sentennce break. Generally block format has a line in between paragraphs. It is hard to read. Simple numbers like two are generally spelled out.
Going through the amendments you have a lot of sentences joined by commas making them run-on
What I liked?*Smile* You have all the facts here which is more than most realize. You have a lot of salient points like electoral college

Points to Ponder:*Idea* Why the most important document in history. I believe you are accurate but to fill us in would help. It is your conclusion and reason for the piece.. Could have used footnotes.

How the piece made me feel Put something down in your bio. Reviewers use this to better communicate with those being reviewed

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Review of Creation Science  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece Ilike essays and thoughts

Overall impression of piece Everyone has biases when they read something like this and mine is real science and a scientific job. I also am a man of devote faith

Grammatical and spelling errors Well crafted

What I liked?*Smile* You put down a lot of facts and had several good footnotes. I can tell that you didn't make this up

Points to Ponder:*Idea* Getting something out of nothing has never been explained satisfactorily by anyone. It is magic. God said and did. I do believe that. You never exactly said what you meant by creation science. It can be 7 days like Genesisor a delayed development. Jesus in the New Testament talks of salvation based on Him alone. The details in the Old Testament may not matter for salvation

How the piece made me feel This is a great attempt at a complex subject

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Why I chose this piece I have written a little of history. It does fascinate me.

Overall impression of piece: You are definitely an historian. You have the syntax and their way of looking at things. Quite thorough

Grammatical and spelling errors: no errors

What I liked?*Smile* This is sequential and quite thorough. I believe after his defeat in Congress, he said if he lost he would go to Texas/ I didn't realize about a publicist

Points to Ponder:*Idea* Very good/ Nothing wrong

How the piece made me feel It is almost a case of what would you like to be real. Most historians I have read are about 50-50 whether he was a hero at the Alamo. It was probably a bit of both

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece Your reviewsare well done and appreciated. I thought I would return one

Overall impression of piece: I could write pieces on my dreams but they would be quite confusing. I admire yours.

Grammatical and spelling errors: Reads well. No errors

What I liked?*Smile* It is very descriptive and easy to read. You have done well in the feel the points of the poem. It is mainly an emotional response

Points to Ponder:*Idea* Chicane is a little obscure. I had to look it up. It is a great word but I would let your reader experience the crooked road more clearly. You also wrote this mainly in third person. It is easier to relate to direct experiences

How the piece made me feel I remember more of my dreams than I care to. Aricept for early Alzheimers will do that.

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece I like spiritual pieces. I do write them

Overall impression of pieceTalk about a God's eye view. He is watching

Grammatical and spelling errors A caring loving and peaceful being. Today's usage it probably is ok. Man do. It is not a sentence. Therefore is missing an e. How could you stray... is a question and needs a question mark.

What I liked?*Smile* This is good and honest. Christianity is about Christ and ultimately, God. we do complicate it

Points to Ponder:*Idea* Linens often means burial clothes. Not used much today. I would clarify what you mean.

How the piece made me feel You are very right on.

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece I like essays and write quite a few

Overall impression of piece: This is pertinent. Should we be at the mercy of California and New York. There are some real issues Here

Grammatical and spelling errors No obvious errors

What I liked?*Smile* Yes this is a pretty comprehensive problem. You have hit a bunch of the angles. Liked your references.

Points to Ponder:*Idea* Original Founding Father's didn't really trust voters. That got worse after Andrew Jackson and universal suffrage. I almost think they would need a constitution convention to change it. It would probably be good to know your bias.

How the piece made me feel Not a feeling piece.

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Review of LIFE  
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Rated: E | (3.0)
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Why I chose this piece This was part of the spiritual newsletter. I write some of this myself

Overall impression of piece: This is short concise and too the point

Grammatical and spelling errors except misspelled. Generally periods have two spaces after it. Comma comes right after the clause, then comes the continued thought, Believe is misspelled.

What I liked?*Smile* You have a lot of truth here. We look for all the answers within ourselves, and we are the source of the problem, not the answer. Do we want answers? I love the tought of cutting down our desires

Points to Ponder:*Idea* It would be useful to know what background you write from. Filling out your bio really helps

How the piece made me feel This is honest. I found it believable

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Review of Old Lovers  
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Rated: E | (3.0)
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Why I chose this piece Noted in Newbie reviews

Overall impression of piece: Wwow. This smacks of a lot of realism

Grammatical and spelling errors: Words like fifty are spelled out. Lots of contractions without apostrophes. A lot of I's are not capitalized.. You have used block formatting and generally there is a line in between paragraphs
. It is hard to read on a screen. Runs in the bedroom should have a capital
What I liked?*Smile* You have so many descriptors of the event and the feelings that it is easy to identify with. I think there would be conversations with the dearly departed.

Points to Ponder:*Idea* This is mainly a grammar issue in reading this. It makes it hard to read. I often use the program grammarly to highlight mistakes. It is free to download.

How the piece made me feel I sense you know about this sort of thing. Put something in your bio. As a reviewer, it helps to know something about the author. I have been married 45 years. Marrages change but the commitment never does.
Masculinity often says, "Let's fix this."
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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Review of Lullaby  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Why I chose this piece This came up on a random review

Overall impression of piece A thoughtful piece

Grammatical and spelling errors: Console is generally a verb so it is awkward. In general, it reads pretty well.

What I liked?*Smile* This is open and honest. It has a sweet spirit. I believe we are more aligned with death than life. I am not sure why

Points to Ponder:*Idea* I have a biology background. I am not sure what you are talking of. Extinctions?

How the piece made me feel: This thing we call life is profound. We think we are autonomous but obviously are not. There is a lot here. It could be expanded

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Review of " TIME TO PRAY "  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Why I chose this piece I llike spiritual writing. I do some myself

Overall impression of piece: I am wrestling with stuff like this myself. How do we follow the call of the Lord?

Grammatical and spelling errors: Reads well

What I liked?*Smile* You have truth on every line

Points to Ponder:*Idea* I am not sure what needed prayers is about as a possessive. Maybe a period after prayers. I think the power of pieces like this is always personal. You have truth, but it isn't very personalized

How the piece made me feel I know you are on the right page. Blessings on your walk

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: E | (3.0)
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Why I chose this piece I like essays and spiritual stuff.

Overall impression of piece This is short, concise and to the point

Grammatical and spelling errors A period has two spaces after it. Comma is right after the clause and then, one space. You are writing in block format. Generally there is a line between paragraphs. Burdenized is not a word. Burdened

What I liked?*Smile* This kind of describes our world and the way out. You have a good message.

Points to Ponder:*Idea*PPersepherence and optimism as swords is really strong. Definitely develop that. Saying Allah is all kind of leaves some of us out. How about a higher power? Personally I am Ok with it.

How the piece made me feel I Like that we are more alike than you might think.

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece This is part of the spiritual newsletter.

Overall impression of piece You do have talent. What you describe is obvious and is even commented on in the Bible

Grammatical and spelling errors Reads well No errors

What I liked?*Smile* Rhyme seems to add something and is not too obvious. This is tremendously uupbeat and something I needed.

Points to Ponder:*Idea* There is a fight here between God''s glory and the humdrum of everyday. I wish faith were that easy. There is lots of scripture to agree with you. Reality says there is a struggle.

How the piece made me feel Jesus said,"Even the rocks would cry out."

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