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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece This was part of the spiritual newsletter.

Overall impression of piece: There is obviously a lot of truth in this. Most great and perfect truths are spoke to our inner person. Otherwise, we don't really hear them

Grammatical and spelling errors" Seems intact. No errors

What I liked?*Smile* This is pretty believable and I believe, heartfelt. It is the God I know too.

What I disliked*Idea*
There isn't a lot new here. Fast paced life is almost a cliche. Kind of coming from a we perspective kind of makes this impersonal. I would be better. but you continue to race about is really part of the sentence before

How the piece made me feel Proabably should footnote his work, if available.

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Peace and beauty in freefall
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Why I chose this piece I like essays. I write them and review many of them

Overall impression of piece

Grammatical and spelling errors Dashes are two hyphens together--then the parathetical thought. A tiny greek girl really isn't parenthetical. I would just use a comma

What I liked?*Smile* I believe this to be honest and forthright. The language of interaction is strong. I am not sure how to piece the events together.

What I disliked*Idea* You go in with a seizure and it looks like you had a heart blockage. This doesn't make sense to me, I need some filling in from your hospital room to visiting other

How the piece made me feel You were encorporated into another family group. That is incredible. Most folks aren't like that.

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Review of Stuck  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Why I chose this piece This was interesting so I bookmarked it

Overall impression of piece: Everyone has a thing about being a cog in the machine

Grammatical and spelling errors: No errors

What I liked?*Smile* Crushing and stretching are really quite visceral. Hopefully, that doesn't happen to me before noon. Heart pumping and lungs are all quite visceral

What I disliked*Idea* The purpose of this is... I am not sure if just being crushed does anything for me as a reader. Being caught in the cogs of the machine isn't too new

How the piece made me feel I feel we need to feel we can make some sense out of things. Noone really gets off on helplessness

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Review of FROZEN FLAME  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece I was looking at another piece (on winter) and saw this portion of your port. It seems like a good idea and deserving of a review

Overall impression of piece Cool piece. Elderly are people too.

Grammatical and spelling errors Maybe a comma after youth and a period after prime

What I liked?*Smile* This is personal and sensual. These feelings don't go away. A frozen flame is quie an image. I get that.

What I disliked*Idea* I had to look at quell. There is an element of overpowering to submission. It is kind of an old word. Burst upon may be better.

How the piece made me feel I get this. I am within a decade of you, but I am sure my fire has not gone out

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece This is part of a newbie newsletter

Overall impression of piece: This is quite good. I have never had a parade follow me home either

Grammatical and spelling errors None seen. Reads well

What I liked?*Smile* We do live our life in pieces. It can see this and feel it too. Who doesn't want more? It is part of the human condition

What I disliked*Idea* Sparkling momments and still scared of the dark seem a little bit at counter purposes

How the piece made me feel: There is a mystery to life. We are all waiting for the big revea. Speaking of reveal, be sure and fill out your bio. It really helps us as reviewers.

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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece I like essays. I understand your background

Overall impression of piece: Essays and philosophy are generally pretty stuffy--not this one.

Grammatical and spelling errors: Two and twenty need to be spelled out. Semicolon followed by an and is kind of redundant. After the semicolon should be a complete sentence.. After twenty, you need a comma. It is a clause modifying two or twenty. A colon after a question mark is not warranted.

What I liked?*Smile* I think about these things all the time. If we are truly living, it is imperative to think on these things. Do not go quietly into that goodnight. This is personal and I believe, quite honest.

What I disliked*Idea* No problems with the ideas themself or the tone.

How the piece made me feel You have hit a very old topic in a new and exciting way

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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Why I chose this piece This came up on a random review

Overall impression of piece: It is always a pleasure to review your work

Grammatical and spelling errors Reads well. No errors

What I liked?*Smile* You wonder where these things get started.. I know what I am to write about before I write it. The enchantress, in this case is subtle with rhythm and rhyme that seem to mesh together and are not strained. I love the reference to triolet. We often need help

What I disliked*Idea* Is it dark enchantress or shadowy? I would hate to have to see Elvira. Maybe just a shade of meaning here.

How the piece made me feel I identified with my own writing and felt your craft in the words and rhythms

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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece This was in nonfiction. I tend to write in some of these areas.

Overall impression of piece: This is pretty cool writing

Grammatical and spelling errors After a semicolon, you generally link another complete sentence to it. You continuation of the first paragraph construction is missing a verb. Perhaps a dash would be better. ... generally means words are left out. I am not sure I see that. Dashes are two hyphens together with no spaces--just the parenthetical thought

What I liked?*Smile* I was a hospital corpsman in the Nanvy and we too had wild and wacky stories. This does bring back some of my own memmories. Very evocative and good writing

What I disliked*Idea*: I've always thought I made a positive influence isn't really tied into anything else. It is kind of part of a mommoir where the rest really doesn't appear like that.

How the piece made me feel I liked this. It brought back memmories

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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece This came up on a random review

Overall impression of piece There is magic on cycles--even our own cycles. Oak trees definitely have a history longer than ours

Grammatical and spelling errors: Reads well. No errors

What I liked?*Smile* The strongest image is purple flags waving in the wind. Lovaed your explanation at the end. You shouldn't have to explain free verse, but I know how folks are.

What I disliked*Idea*: I love science. I was kind of raised that way. I think there is a poetic side that can come out more. How does an oak know and what does it know?

How the piece made me feel What would an oak feel as it comes out of a winter slumber? We need to feel it, not just know it.

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece I was looking through essays. I write a lot of them

Overall impression of piece: I love the attempt at what you were trying to do here

Grammatical and spelling errors: After the indian names there should be a comma before and after the indians. It is an appositive. Twelve needs to be spelled out.

What I liked?*Smile* All these things you are talking about as corrupting influences are right on. They have a lot of modern equivalents

What I disliked*Idea* Tends to be a little bit preachy. I am of the same mind as you so I am not offended. I have been married for 45 years. You kind of go from Matt's voice to a preachy narrator almost theologian. Could some of this be handled with footnotes or better yet, type out the whole verse in the footnote.. (People don't read references.) It would be better to have Matt argue with himself and draw his own conclusions. His internal dialogue is not as important as other folks who aren't there.

How the piece made me feel Don't fail to put something in your bio block. It helps us as reviewers. Is this an ethical choice or a spiritual one? I would think spiritual. It is a pleasure to review something as meaningful as this

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Review of Nature's Gifts  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece Bookmarked this as interesting.

Overall impression of piece: We are getting a bird's eye view of nature

Grammatical and spelling errors: Reads well. No errors.

What I liked?*Smile* Interesting rhyme that is not really strained to make it work

What I disliked*Idea* Nature's beauty is both enigmatic and unclear. Both radiate love. Interesting. I need more. I think we do learn more when things go wrong.

How the piece made me feel This is quizzical. Life generally is

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Review of Now Serving  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece This interested me so I bookmarked it. I am a veteran

Overall impression of piece: I get this. I felt a lot the same way

Grammatical and spelling errors Dashed are generally two hyphens together and no spaces--just the parenthetical thought

What I liked?*Smile* No one talks you into what you already want to do. I like your character's proactive approach

What I disliked*Idea* Who was he talking to? Why is this important? I believe, in a lot of ways, he was talking to himself. Maybe this could use a little internal dialogue. Called to serve seems a little cliche. Maybe more specifics

How the piece made me feel Would we have a memmorial day if no one remembered? I wonder.

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Review of A Zebra Dreams  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Why I chose this piece This raised my interest as I am a aoo volunteer and we do have zebras.

Overall impression of piece Definitely a what if sort of piece.. Why is man a super being? Does he have a better agent?

Grammatical and spelling errors Not much in the way of punctuation to help us in the reading. Some would have the continuation of a sentence on another line start with lower case

What I liked?*Smile* Kind of theater-of-the absurb sort of stuff. Zebras do run quite fast. 35 miles per hour where the Kentucky derby winners only run 37. Some of those stalls do look pretty ritzy

What I disliked*Idea* This is what you would call anthropomorphizing a subject. I doubt if they ever wonder about being human--except maybe in nightmares.

How the piece made me feel It is listed as satire and I get that. I am not exactly sure what you are satarizing.

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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece i bookmarked this. We used to do a lot of outdoor stuff

Overall impression of piece: You do have an eye for this sort of thing.

Grammatical and spelling errors: Start quotes with a capital. Dashes are two hyphens together and no spaces--just the parenthetical thought

What I liked?*Smile* What is here is funny. The things that you say are true and valid.

What I disliked*Idea* Some of this could be played up a bit more, especially snake sitings. I know the paranoia involved. I guess what I feel is missing is a thing of "Why this piece?". One of my favorite outdoor humorist was Patrick McManus. There is a point behind the decrepid canoe. ""They shoot canoes don't they?" Give us something more we can identify with

How the piece made me feel Congratualations on your award!

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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Why I chose this piece This came up on a random review

Overall impression of piece

Grammatical and spelling errors. Moss is generally two ss's. I would think foliage grows

What I liked?*Smile* I like the rhymes in this. They don't seem forced and give an interesting rhyme. It also shows continuity of your description

What I disliked*Idea* Your instructions don't make any sense to a reader.

How the piece made me feel There is a continuity of nature. The poem seems to flow with all the rhymes and rhythm

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Review of The Anaconda  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece This is pretty cool. I bookmarked it to come back to. I deal with snakes at our aquarium

Overall impression of piece: I know about the fears of our customers. This is pretty right on

Grammatical and spelling errors: I believe Morro has two r's. Maybe frozen in terror attached to the sentence in front of it with a dash

What I liked?*Smile* We all look at things the way we think that they are supposed to be. I doubt if there are thirty foot snakes in California. It is an interesting voice in this one. It seems pretty objective and it seems to work

What I disliked*Idea* Commented on

How the piece made me feel I have seen most of this. Most do not easily get over this fear.

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Review of Crew Welcome  
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Rated: E | (3.0)
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Why I chose this piece This came up on a random review

Overall impression of piece: This is a great idea.

Grammatical and spelling errors Can I buy a period or starting the sentence with a capital? Thank you is two words. Join is mispelled.

What I liked?*Smile* I like the idea. This is sorely lacking.

What I disliked*Idea* Grammar and nicities like punctuation are really important. They are a part of your message.

How the piece made me feel With all the errors, it is hard to take this seriously.

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Review of I am Human  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece This came up on a random review

Overall impression of piece: Very evocative piece

Grammatical and spelling errors: I in last stanza needs a capital

What I liked?*Smile* We are so very different. On the outside, it is obvious and if we look at individuals at this site, it is really apparent.

What I disliked*Idea*: I have to accept you basic tenents, even if I don't agree. This is about writing, not philosophy. Is there something else, or will we be in a constant state of war?

How the piece made me feel You do have a world of endless war which, much as I hate to admit it, is pretty much what we have. We are in a more and more global world. Can we change? Should we

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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece Part of our spring review raid.

Overall impression of piece: Nature does have cosmic significance

Grammatical and spelling errors> Maybe a comma after blessing in the first line. Second two lines are really a clause and doesn't appear to read right

What I liked?*Smile* It is very hard to see a bigger view of what everyone sees as mundance. You have done a credible job.

What I disliked*Idea* Heaven is always full of sevens by defininition. It is a perfect number.. Maybe a bit of a strained rhyme? I am not sure if I see a church ship.

How the piece made me feel Pretty good attempt at a difficult piece.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece Hunting for outdoor pieces for our raid. I decided to hop to yours

Overall impression of piece: This is fun. Little kids always want to know what their parents did

Grammatical and spelling errors: Reads well. No errors

What I liked?*Smile* You can teach about frogs and family. You wouldn't think they'd be related, but obviously, you would be wrong. The rhymming kepts this interesting

What I disliked*Idea* Most of the best children's poetry I have read uses more rhyme and generates more of a rhythm
It almost feels it could be as essay.
How the piece made me feel I caught a lot of the joy in this one

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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece This was tied to another piece that I liked. I thought I might review it too.

Overall impression of piece: This was an interesting exercise. So many things seemed like a good idea at the time.

Grammatical and spelling errors: No obvious errors.

What I liked?*Smile* This is appropriately rated for content. We don't want to give 13 year old any more ideas for mischief.

What I disliked*Idea* I don't know all the details of your life and couldn't possibly make sense of them. You kind of had to be there. You give all these examples of living backwards, than say, "I wouldn't do it.".

How the piece made me feel I do think we learn from our mistakes. They are a big part of our life process.

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Review of Less is great  
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Rated: E | (2.5)
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Why I chose this piece This was located in essays. I kind of think in these lines

Overall impression of piece. I suspect you have truth here. We live, in North America, in a very affluent culture compared to the world

Grammatical and spelling errors; No obvious errors

What I liked?*Smile* I kind of like short in my work. You have taken some of the great truths and expressed them simply

What I disliked*Idea*: Even for me, this is way too short. You can expand any one of these ideas. Give examples Your reader needs things to focus in on and know exactly what you mean

How the piece made me feel You are on the right track,
Don't be afraid to give us more in your bio.

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Review of Apart  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Why I chose this piece I was looking through your site after seeing a random review. this one interested me more

Overall impression of piece: This is the epitome of a great piece. I was impressed that you are only 18.

Grammatical and spelling errorsNo errors. Reads well

What I liked?*Smile* This is a nice tight piece with good rhythm and rhyming, Rymes are not forced. You left the imagery in pretty good order. Many rhymers kind of lose tract.

What I disliked*Idea*

How the piece made me feel Why do the kids seem to be the only ones who are adult? Your last stanza is what families are about.

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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Why I chose this piece This came up on a random review.

Overall impression of piece: This is clear and quite concise.

Grammatical and spelling errors: Seems ok

What I liked?*Smile* The story is quite easy to follow/ Dialgue is pretty easy to peg what everyone is like. Obviously, time is of the essence.

What I disliked*Idea* Even in flash fiction, we need something to say that this is over and the crisis averted..

How the piece made me feel I am not sure of, "Why this piece?"

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Review of Ocean Moon  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece I bookmarked this as interesting

Overall impression of piece: This is certainly interesting and evocative.

Grammatical and spelling errors: Reads well. No errors.

What I liked?*Smile* I seeit. I hear it. I can almost smell it. Imagery pretty much takes us there

What I disliked*Idea* Continent versus sea is a bit hard to get a hold of. I would think over time, they should come out pretty equal. You have observations of the leatherbacks, but I am not sure how they relate to your message.

How the piece made me feel We all have our origins in the sea. Our very blood is sea water.

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