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Review of Dream Tree  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece This is a random review. Welcome to WDC.

Overall impression of piece: This is impressive. You have a lot of descriptive excellence in here and very little telling of things

Grammatical and spelling errors I could use a little more punctuation in helping us to read this how you would

What I liked?*Smile* I think there are Christ references here. The feeling words make it easy to feel right along with what was going on.

What I disliked*Idea* I have no idea where this come from. Maybe you could put a short synopsis of what transpires? Given your background, you have much more familiarity than most would have.

How the piece made me feel Pilot would ask Jesus what is truth? It is obvious by his reaction, truth was power. Truth is honesty. I think there is a lot of it here.

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Review of "Do it for Me"  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Why I chose this piece This is in the please review file

Overall impression of piece I certainly can get the emotions of all of this

Grammatical and spelling errors> You join a lot of complete sentences together with commas. Semicolons might be in order

What I liked?*Smile* We always seem to want to pick up on the outsider without even knowing who they are. It is a tale as old as time

What I disliked*Idea* Going to college has nothing to do with reading a special book, You need some sort of causal statement. While in college, I read a special book. Do it for me needs more developement. It seems to be the major emphasis

How the piece made me feel Grammar would probably benefit from the grammarly program. It is a free down;oad on my computer.

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Rated: E | (3.0)
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Why I chose this piece This was in the essay section. I frequent these, a lot.

Overall impression of piece: I like words. Welcome to WDC

Grammatical and spelling errors Firstly is an adverb. I think you want first, an adjective. Details is kind of non-specific. I think you are thinking about methods of communication or rhetorical devices. I have a dream was all extemporanease. He used cadences from Southern Baptist preaching

What I liked?*Smile* You do have the nitty-gritty down. Words can be very good or very bad.

What I disliked*Idea* You kind of dealt with this in the general sense. I think some reactions to what was said might have been helpful. Words have changed everything. They deserve more emphasis. You do have more of an opinion on this.

How the piece made me feel I think sometimes words seem right emotionally, so we follow them. Rationally, it was a very unsettling things to do. Be sure to put something about yourself on your port. It does help us as reviewers.

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Review of King  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Why I chose this piece This came up on a random review

Overall impression of piece There is a lot of idealism here. Life does have a lot of possibilities

Grammatical and spelling errors Could use a few commas for more emphasis like

What I liked?*Smile* It is rare to see anything so positive anymore.

What I disliked*Idea*: We are in control needs explanation. There is a lot out of control. I havaen't been to a coronation in a fortnight

How the piece made me feel Maybe we have small Kingdoms, for a while. Most achievement is really hard work

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Review of Can't Stop  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece This was in a newbie newsletter. Welcome to WDC

Overall impression of piece: There is nothing so mystical as love.

Grammatical and spelling errors: Reads well. No errors

What I liked?*Smile* No one wants to be alone. it is the basis of humanity I think. There is this strange attraction that goes beyond words

What I disliked*Idea* Mesmerize and enchant are more telling words than feeling words. You want people to feel what you feel

How the piece made me feel You told us very little about you. Even an age would help. We have to read and communicate based on something

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Review of Spring Break  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece This came up on a random review. I grew up in the Limmerick age. (Burma Shave)

Overall impression of piece: This may be a message poem. Who said it had to be serious?

Grammatical and spelling errors No errors. Reads well

What I liked?*Smile* College ages we had very different parameters for measuring life. Rhymes are catchy and fun.

What I disliked*Idea* It is hard to get a classic limerick. This is personal, but not earthshattering

How the piece made me feel Those were the days, my friend. We thought they'd never end. You brought back memmories.

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Review of Malignancy  
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece This came up on a random review. I always enjoy your work

Overall impression of piece. We certainly have changed from our old time "Whispering" campaigns

Grammatical and spelling errors: Reads well. No errors

What I liked?*Smile* It is almost like a mantra for the age we live in. We assassinate each other with words, and they aren't particularly clever at that. LOL? Really? Thanks , as usual for putting in poetry mechanics.

What I disliked*Idea* Innuendo is a dart travelling through ether which is nondescript. Seems to be imagery that doesn't quite fit. Maybe Innuendo is like an assassin, travelling at night. Infecion and cancer are also kind of mixed. I have a medical background

How the piece made me feel

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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece This showed up on a random review. My wife and I have been married 44 years. We have a rule: "No dating."

Overall impression of piece: This seems honest and what many young people would think about.

Grammatical and spelling errors: Quotes always start with a capital

What I liked?*Smile*: like old fashioned myself. I almost certainly am that. Your reasoning is sound and intuitive, both at the same time

What I disliked*Idea* There is a story you are not telling us. mobilestyles.com is obviously a buisness you are affilitated with. You are different than an 67 year old guy and we need to know more. Not many of us would know about bumble

How the piece made me feel We are all biased in our own particular ways. Be sure to tell us more of yourself on the port. It helps us as reviewers.

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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece This came up on a random review. I don't believe I have had a chance to review your work

Overall impression of piece: It is kind of a colloquial piece with a lot of common type expression. Appropiately rated for content. Nothing too over the top

Grammatical and spelling errors: No errors seen

What I liked?*Smile* I can see how this fits into contest parameters. Men and women are different and there will always be confusion. It is convoluted in getting to the proposal, but it is a sweet story.

What I disliked*Idea* Obviously this has a word limit. I have a hard time getting to a marriage proposal out of this. My wife and I just knew when the time was. it is hard to explain

How the piece made me feel We are not all the same. I get that and your expression has both artistry and salt-of-the earth content.

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Review of Lady Bugs  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Why I chose this piece This came up on a random review. I kind of like childrens pieces

Overall impression of piece This has magic and structure both. My kids--and I-- would marvel to the readings of the Madeline books

Grammatical and spelling errors Reads well. No errors

What I liked?*Smile* Very unusual rhyme scheme, for me. It seems to work very well. Nothing seems forced. We had kids and remember similar conversations

What I disliked*Idea*: Can't think of anything

How the piece made me feel Children are characterized by awe. I am not sure how we educate it out of them

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Review of You are beautiful  
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Rated: E | (3.0)
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Why I chose this piece I like essays. I troll through many of them

Overall impression of piece: You are beautiful. I looked at your picture. I went through the ideas and they do make sense

Grammatical and spelling errors: You have a multitude of grammatical errors. Proper names are capitalized. Can't just capitalize in the middle of a sentence. Inorder is two words. These are just highlights. Period after blessed. There are many more.

What I liked?*Smile* This is very open and honest. They don't have such arbitrary attributes for men. I find what you say, very believable.

What I disliked*Idea*: To get evaluations, you need to think about cleaning things up. I use grammarly on my computer. It is a free download. New Horizons Academy has classes

How the piece made me feel

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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece This is a random review.

Overall impression of piece: It is always a pleasure to review one of your pieces. I don't need much of an excuse

Grammatical and spelling errors You have complete sentences put together with commas. Two of your paragraphs kind of run together.

What I liked?*Smile* This is a real cool piece. I like it alot. I can identify with the premises and the issues involved. Pastoring (ie shepherding) is not one size fits all

What I disliked*Idea* Kind of rambles in the PC paragraph. I am looking for the point

How the piece made me feel There is nothing wrong with caregiver. I firmly believe that Jesus was one. I am still trying to figure out this married thing and I have been married 44 years. Compassion probably doesn't pay much. It is not our way. They call church the "Gift bearing, gift evoking community

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Review of Raven  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece This came up on a random review

Overall impression of piece: One of the more mysterious animals on the planet.

Grammatical and spelling errors Reads well. No errors

What I liked?*Smile* I know these animals somewhat. Poe, I think "never more." I am sure it applied to frogs and fish. Like the two rhyming end lines.

What I disliked*Idea* This doesn't give me much but broad strokes. They do have a mystery. Some thought they were death

How the piece made me feel They are unfriendly. I have never met a friendly one

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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece I bookmarked this as interesting. When it comes to firetrucks, I guess I never knew

Overall impression of piece: This is fun

Grammatical and spelling errors: Four should be spelled out

What I liked?*Smile* The four-year-old definitely has a different perspective. It is a wonder how they get all of this
I pick up on the love of this situation

What I disliked*Idea* You kind of made parts of this into a play. You probably would get more out of this if you communicated what the message was behind the message. Sometimes it is not just what they say, it is the message behind the message.

How the piece made me feel I work with a lot of four-year-olds at the aquarium. I kind of get all of this. They are amazing. I would put something in about who you are on your port. Do Keep writing

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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece I bookmarked this as interesting

Overall impression of piece: This is a gem of descriptive literature. I saw it was biographical which makes it even more intense.

Grammatical and spelling errors: No errors seen

What I liked?*Smile* You have all the details here. We have little idea what this is like in this country. There are obviously family dynamics at play here

What I disliked*Idea* It kind of feels like this is kept at arm's length. It is much more than facts. You were obviously a part in all of this from the disaster to the family part. It has one I sentence in it.

How the piece made me feelThis may be too painful. On the other hand, these are the things that folks need help with.

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Rated: 18+ | (2.0)
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Why I chose this piece This came up on a random review

Overall impression of piece: It seems like it is a narrator that can be believed.

Grammatical and spelling errors: This has as much bad grammar as it has good, You have a lot of wrong words like mutts for much. Kale instead of tale. Two for to. A lot of sentences are missing periods. You need a grammar checker, I use grammarly which is a free download. Screw this is internal dialogue and probably needs quotes

What I liked?*Smile* There is intrigue here. There is suggestive behavior which is ok because of the rating. This is a very concise little story that gets to the point pretty quickly

What I disliked*Idea* Misspelled words add a lot of confusion. If it is the way they talk, you need to emphasize that.

How the piece made me feel A lot of folks won't review this because of grammar.

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Review of Challenged  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece I bookmarked this as interesting

Overall impression of piece: Obviously free verse. You have dealt well with the idea of feelings and what those feel like

Grammatical and spelling errors strength may have a typo

What I liked?*Smile* The visceral components really shine in this. It is a very confusing time in relationships

What I disliked*Idea* I would put more punctuation in. It kind of serves to help the reader say things as you would. Poems are meant to be read/

How the piece made me feel Whoever knows how this is all going to work. My wife, I was sure at first, was an alien. We have been married for 44 years.

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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece This came up on a random review

Overall impression of piece This sounds like what might come up at your house. There is always drama

Grammatical and spelling errors Pretty sure you have the wrong kind of soar. Sore doesn't read right. Maybe a period between lunch and I thank you

What I liked?*Smile* Interesting internal rhymes within the lines. I think you had fun thinking and writing about this. I bet you know and appreciate your world

What I disliked*Idea* I would go with some punctuation. It really helps us as readers.

How the piece made me feel Pretty much covered.

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Review of Road Rage  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Why I chose this piece This came up on a random review

Overall impression of piece: I generally don't like rants, but this is exceptional. It pretty much tells it like it is

Grammatical and spelling errors: Reads well. No errors. Well punctuated.

What I liked?*Smile* You do have some rhymes in here that bring out emphasis. You are right. There should be an answer

What I disliked*Idea* Can't think of anything.

How the piece made me feel There is as much death and destruction in one year of driving as most of our major wars. Who declared war. I would guess stupidity

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Review of "THY WILL"  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Why I chose this piece This came up in a random review.

Overall impression of piece An invocation for us all

Grammatical and spelling errors These are invocations to the Lord. I think Lord needs to be set off by commas. Otherwise, well punctuated.

What I liked?*Smile* This is simple, direct and to the point

What I disliked*Idea* It is a prayer. Not all are going to buy into it. Thy is kind of antiquated.

How the piece made me feel Honest.

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Review of i love my india  
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Rated: E | (3.0)
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Why I chose this piece This came up on a random review

Overall impression of piece: Interesting. I can see there is beauty here.

Grammatical and spelling errors Unable to say

What I liked?*Smile* I can sense some rhythm and rhyme to this. I bet it would be quite beautiful read.

What I disliked*Idea* I don't know this language. I am kind of at a loss to say anything about this. Could you run a translating or at least a description of the poem. Maybe you could attach an audio file

How the piece made me feel Unable to say

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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece I was looking through essays and found this piece

Overall impression of piece: I do believe you looked up 60 verses on faith. You have a lot of them here. It is very comprehensive.

Grammatical and spelling errors: Dashes are two hyphens and no spaces--just the parenthetical thought

What I liked?*Smile* You have definitely given this some thought and research. There is nothing more important to think about. It got me thinking

What I disliked*Idea* You have copied a lot of these pretty much out of the Bible. I think what people really want to know is how you, as a believer put these all together. If you can answer the first question of "What is faith, you will have much more. Scripture says that the devils believe in God and shudder. I think Faith is a matter of trust. We are not very trusting

How the piece made me feel I remember my Dad trying to get me to jump into the pool. Poor Dad. I didn't learn to swim until college. I got to a point where I had faith that I had ability and could master this. Do we have faith in God's ability?

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Review of The Architects  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece This is part of the spiritual newsletter

Overall impression of piece: This may not be mainline theology of any sort. That is ok

Grammatical and spelling errors: No errors. Reads well

What I liked?*Smile* Hieroglyphics are called sacred carvings in Egyptian. We don't like to change our writing today because writing has a sacredness to it. This is graphic. I know these scenes do exist. I can't explain them little along make sense of them

What I disliked*Idea* I don't quite get the culture talked about here. I would guess Mayan, but I need more help. Maybe some sort of extraterrestrial visitor

How the piece made me feel There is a mystery to life. We may never know it all

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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece This was part of a spiritual newsletter. As a Christian with understanding, I have great admiration for the Jewish people. Jesus was Jewish

Overall impression of piece You have quite a piece of work here. There is poetry, but it goes beyond that

Grammatical and spelling errors: No overt errors

What I liked?*Smile* You scholarship is top notch. You have a lot of significant facts of which I was unaware, I like the poetic parts with rhyme. It makes those parts more readable. I like that you have an URL listing where you got this stuff. You describe discrimination--which is well known. It might be better to describe why we should not.

What I disliked*Idea*: There shouldn't be any discrimination against Jews. Yes, they are different, but so is everybody it seems. I think we discriminated because we could get away with it. It was the thing to do. A small unique enclave is a bit stilted in its language.

How the piece made me feel I think a lot of this has to do with reaching beyond the chasm. Christianity has it roots it Judaism.

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Review of Orchestra  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece This came up on a review

Overall impression of piece: We are a product of everywhere we have been and some places, we have not.

Grammatical and spelling errorsReads very well. No errors

What I liked?*Smile* This is amply descriptive for the art form it is. I can see it, hear it and touch it.

What I disliked*Idea* I am used to a surprise in these writings--something unexpected. Maybe and I am just shooting wildly, crickets sing by starlight

How the piece made me feel Best of luck. I am not sure if there are hard criteria for this

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