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Rated: E | (4.5)
I too sense this is a scourge that has not been dealt with. I think there are degree of sugar and salt that cause anybody to overeat. They sell more product. We collect on life insurance.
One minor glitch of grammar. You say charts is when I am pretty sure you mean charts are. In this work I see no charts, but it could be a format thing.

You make a blanket statement saying childhood obesity causes premature death. You really haven't shown how that works. Of the developed countries, our longevity is one of the lowest. It is not all diet. We have inequalities of healthcare too.

This is book length material. I am sure you did well on the paper part of this. It was well worth the read.

Michael
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece

Overall impression of piece Fun piece

Grammatical and spelling errors reads well. No errors

What I liked?*Smile* We are to refresh each other like oxygen. that is clever.

Points to Ponder:*Idea*: I think technology destroys more than it helps. Yes I am old

How the piece made me feel This kind of raises the question of infatuation or decision. I have been married for 46 years. It changes over time. Human and spirit is all we have. No cell phones in the Garden of Eden. Adam is amazed by the woman

Hope this helps. Use my ideas as your creativity alchemy deems fitting.



Peace and beauty in freefall
MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: E | (4.0)
This is a popular thought in today's world. It is wonderfully and tastefully done. You have subtle rhyme creeping in like move and groove. I too am not convinced that we are to be conquering heroes to change the world. You are right. Out of 8 billion or so, we are not necessarily great.

This kind of leaves me without hope. Christian thought says we are children of the King. True, I am not planning to go to heaven anytime soon but I know God cares for the birds of the air and the flowers of the field. Why not me? I could give you scripture if you wanted it.

Are we at the mercy of the almighty? Yes, but He is merciful.

So what do I ssay if you don't want to change an outlook? You don't have to agree. Look to your purpose. You do have one. Think relationships. Often they are what defines you
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Why I chose this piece I review a lot of Newbies. Welcome to WDC

Overall impression of piece This is kind of a prose thing going on. Both poetry and prose often deal with emotions

Grammatical and spelling errors: Sentence ends in a period, then two spaces
After life maybe use a semicolon to put two complete thoughts together
What I liked?*Smile* I like the rhyme of light and might.

Points to Ponder:*Idea* No one knows when Christmas really is. Christians borrowed Saternalia, a roman holiday. Puritans wouldn't celebrate it

How the piece made me feel Regardless of time, God was dooing a new thing. It is the news of all the lifetimes put together and of course, it is just beginning

Hope this helps. Use my ideas as your creativity alchemy deems fitting.



Peace and beauty in freefall
MichaelFrom Mountains
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Review of 9AM in New York  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I love the challenge of dealing with something with no reviews. Everyone deserves one. This is a pertinent creation. I sense you know more than you tell. You have a lot of evocative memories to make us feel that you were there and we are too.

I think some sentence structure with caps and periods are helpful. Burned bodies and heroes so close together is confusing. I assume the heroes made it so we could live. Sacrificial death so we can live seems a little off.

Michael
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Review of Peace to All  
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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
In New Orleans, a funeral is often a party. Why is it so somber. One lady said, I didn't lose my husband. I know exactly where he is." Can we celebrate in exasperation? Anyone who has been married for more than 5 minutes knows that this is possible.

Stones aren't sacred. People are. The spirit in people defines who they are.

Michael
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Review of Spirit Call  
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Rated: ASR | (3.5)
I am thinking love begins might be better. You have so much going on here. Smoke often is attributed to God in the Bible. There is smoke from a censer in the book of Revelation.

The question of when love begins is a vexing one. Left to our own devices, we are simply not very good at it. The thought is picturesque but perhaps not as clear as it could be.
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Rated: E | (3.5)
During our Covid isolation, we have been left by ourselves to think out and feel just who we are supposed to be. Their is a name that whispers our name and tells us who and whose we are. This was meant to be a felt message. I applaud that. You have rhymes which are , at times a little too regimented to be natural. You never really say what the real way is. Our backgrounds are different and I can accept that

Michael
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Review of Foreclosure  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I get this. I have lived in my home for 26 years and am looking for a dumpster.. The feelings in this one are pretty understandable even though they are not totally spelled out.

Grammar is kind of lose with a lot of sentence fragments. Maybe this as a poem of some sort would come out better. Poems are better for feelings and images. In my era, Simon and Garfuncle had a song called the dangling conversation. We never knew exactly what that was.
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Review of Naming Colors  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I get the quandry suggested by this piece. It is kind of like saying the Amazon River basin is green. We are supposed to help color the world, but real life isn't like that. I am not sure if I have seen a color thesaurus. I am not sure of ginning up anything.

We like to think that colors are so important, but reality says dull and grey. We need to paint with color and not be afraid.

NO ONE WANTS DRAB.

Michael
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Rated: E | (4.5)
If words can talk, they would say something like this. The iceman was not my generation but I get what you are talking about. You have the kid interaction down to a T. They might be unindited co-conspirators.

Since this was before our times, you might mention in your intro the time period.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
What is normal and what is weird? You are right. Many say it is a setting on the washing machine. We have been driven to do new and somewhat weird things. I am fixing an 80 year old barnyard for goats I probably could do without

The poem itself appears to have a rhythm to it. I am not seeing a lot of rhyme. Images are not so much. This might be an odd format for this
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I like this. Tv has gone down hill in its efforts to show a culture that doesn't have one. I think having this being "off world" makes it funny and not quite so offensive. Your allusion to alien abduction fits into are folklore on earth

Maybe Tsk tsk should be introduced earlier. But if you do, you have a narrator problem. Whose story is it?
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Review of An Idea Lost  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
You are writing to a bunch of writers. What a cool piece! I saw your little mermaid statue. I think most good writers read a lot. This has a rhythm and a playfulness that makes it interesting.

I try to keep a notebook(when I remember). I hear an interesting quote, I write it down. I do have Early Alzheimer's, so it is an uphill battle. This creative thing is a battle. I think Gothe said, the urgent often gets in the way of the truly important.

This is a wonderful piece
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Review of Doors  
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
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Why I chose this piece This was appended to another piece that I thought interesting

Overall impression of piece Life is supposed to amaze you, but not scare you to death

Grammatical and spelling errors: No errors

What I liked?*Smile* It almost is like an LSD trip(I'm told-no experience) We really don't know what is going to happen

Points to Ponder:*Idea* The doors were a rock group with a huge history. You could give us more. Maybe a narrative like an Lsd trip

How the piece made me feel There should be magic. We must be prepared for it.

Hope this helps. Use my ideas as your creativity alchemy deems fitting.



Peace and beauty in freefall
MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Fall out for the magical mystery tour said the old Beatles song. They all got on a bus and the bus driver knew the first stop, but that was it. They always seemed to end in a pub.

So much has been written about this. We scribe for the next step, to go somewhere artistically we have never been before. You are right, Poetry is not logic. We paint in nuances and pray that someone will get it.

So what do we we do? Write...write...write some more. It is either our way to sanityor someone at our graveside saying, grandpa was a poet

Michael
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I am returning a review and hoping to do as well as you did. I am kind of an essay guy so gravitated this way. You are reacting to very real circumstances brought out in great detail. What you talk about has been talked of in classical literature forever like "Bridge over San Luis Rey.

Why this accident? Life is unfair. I guess that is not much of a take home message. What did you learn? Even being perplexed is a valid response. Why this piece?

Dumbfound is a single word, a verb
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Review of The contest  
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Rated: E | (3.0)
You have a couple of questions here without a question mark. Trifled is pretty much a very. I am thinking trivial.

The soul gives us life and purpose. Someone said (thoreau?) that men live lives of quiet desperation. I think this is going towards soul building but it is not quite there yet

Michael
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Review of A Good Meal  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
This is very impressive for a high school student. I am assuming male with the name. Young girls and furry animals seem to have an affinity for each other. "Ah, they are so cute!" Of course cats are fickle. It is their nature.

You have enough rhyme to make this interesting and it is not too contrived. This is fun and live-like.

If you want to be known, put a little more in your Bio. I have heard you can publish an E Book on Amazon for Free. I think Ken Squires has done that on this site
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Review of Mount Vesuvius  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I generally review what I like and/or catches my eye. Predominately I am not a poetic but love poetic expression, done well. It is gratifying to see another Christian on the site. I like hope in both lower case and upper case. The world knows only lower case, as in "hope so. Maybe last Hope in stanza with a capital

I like the rhyme that really helps with rhythm and readability. Mount Vesuvius needs both capitals (But it probably doesn't exist anymore since it blew up) Apostrophies in conjunctions.
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Review of Humility  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece Part of a spiritual newsletter.

Overall impression of piece A geneuine step towards finding yourself

Grammatical and spelling errors. Commas are immediately after the clause, then one space. Instead of at you assume perhaps an as.

What I liked?*Smile* I think you are right. If you want a revival, start with yourself.

Points to Ponder:*Idea* I can not express isn't very expressive. What do you feel?

How the piece made me feel Transformation is a big area. Give more specifics

Hope this helps. Use my ideas as your creativity alchemy deems fitting.



Peace and beauty in freefall
MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
I was diagnosed with early alzhemimer's some 11 years ago. I get this. It meant the end of my medical career because even if I could do the job, no one would take a chance on me. Life is a matter of what you can do, not so much what may have drawbacks. I think we are all looking for an adventure to live. Who wants to be bored?

Some minor issues. Quotes generally start with a capital. I would probably start off with an I statement in the first paragraph, like I read about him.

This is personal. I think it is the only persuasion that makes a difference. People change because they feel like it

Michae
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Review of Enrichment  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I saw this in a spiritual newsletter. I got the Descartes quote before you explained it. Both have an equal sign in the middle, so they could be said either way We think that all the intelligent have to be like us. There is egoism here. The reactions are priceless. Is the guy nuts is the unseen question?

Jesus would have been wildly unexpected. Could he even read? Most could not. He had Godly authority and the people who listened knew it.

I am a little light about where the resplendent light comes from. It just kind of pops up
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I went to review you and found I had reviewed a lot of your work. I am still alive and reasonably active. Showering acts of Joy may be no more, but here we are. I started my writing as an environmental columnist for a college paper. This is near and dear to my heart.

This is well written without obvious errors. This is a monumental project. There are numerous books on the subject. I volunteer at a zoo and an aquarium. This is good in giving us the history of a fine organization.

I guess my question is why this organization today. Churches used to be big in our society. Is there a call to be involved? It needs to be updated and personalized to today's reader
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Review of The Turning Point  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I saw this in a spiritual newsletter. Definitely qualifies as a "Wow!" Mostly you don't see things on WDC with this much depth and feeling.

Grammar looks fine. No errors

You know, it is interesting. We are often like drunks looking for our keys only under a streetlight. We never look at darkness as illuminating. I am sure you could probably write a book on your experiences, but I could probably use a little more as to why you were on this journey. Doubts are a part of the journey. I get that.
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