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Review of Advent  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece I like spiritual pieces. It is advent. I get that

Overall impression of piece: Originally, advent had little to do with Christ's birth/ It kind ofpiggybacked onto a Roman holiday called feast of the Invincible Sun and Christians said we have an invincible Son too. No one knows when He was born

Grammatical and spelling errors reads well. No errors

What I liked?*Smile* Death is a part of the cycle of life where we end up dealing with a lot of our pains and realize, we are not enough and need more.
We are all part of the problem awaiting rebirth--even in the dead of winter.

Points to Ponder:*Idea* Kind of have a hard time putting all those songs to this. For me, that is reasonably ok.

How the piece made me feel We are having one of the warmest Decembers on record here in Idaho. Still the lack of sun casts a dour look on things. There is always more.

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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Why I chose this pieceI saw this in essays and, as a child in the 50's it did bring back sosme memories

Overall impression of piece Interesting period pice

Grammatical and spelling errors No obvious errors

What I liked?*Smile* I remember missile drills in the Cuban Missle era. I am not sure what we did under those desks but it was probably not too constructive.

Points to Ponder:*Idea* I am not a young kid. I was born in 51. Some of the references are a little obscure, even for me. I would take us back to those times. 50's and 60's do not equal World War 2 so again it is odd

How the piece made me feel You havae the right idea. Help us relive this specifically

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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece Random newbie review

Overall impression of piece

Grammatical and spelling errors: I's are generally capitalized. You are missing some question marks on your questions. Last dilemma is misspelled.

What I liked?*Smile* Kind of a cool conclusion. You have interesting phases. This is something many can relate to.

Points to Ponder:*Idea* Mainly grammatical. Selah is bible and I know what it means but many won't.

How the piece made me feel Cool picture on your bio. I wish I was that handsome. I could use some words in there too

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Rated: E | (3.0)
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Why I chose this piece I like history and essays. This seemed like a natural

Overall impression of piece Pretty comprehensive.

Grammatical and spelling errors I believe between votes and this , there should be a sentennce break. Generally block format has a line in between paragraphs. It is hard to read. Simple numbers like two are generally spelled out.
Going through the amendments you have a lot of sentences joined by commas making them run-on
What I liked?*Smile* You have all the facts here which is more than most realize. You have a lot of salient points like electoral college

Points to Ponder:*Idea* Why the most important document in history. I believe you are accurate but to fill us in would help. It is your conclusion and reason for the piece.. Could have used footnotes.

How the piece made me feel Put something down in your bio. Reviewers use this to better communicate with those being reviewed

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Review of Creation Science  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece Ilike essays and thoughts

Overall impression of piece Everyone has biases when they read something like this and mine is real science and a scientific job. I also am a man of devote faith

Grammatical and spelling errors Well crafted

What I liked?*Smile* You put down a lot of facts and had several good footnotes. I can tell that you didn't make this up

Points to Ponder:*Idea* Getting something out of nothing has never been explained satisfactorily by anyone. It is magic. God said and did. I do believe that. You never exactly said what you meant by creation science. It can be 7 days like Genesisor a delayed development. Jesus in the New Testament talks of salvation based on Him alone. The details in the Old Testament may not matter for salvation

How the piece made me feel This is a great attempt at a complex subject

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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Why I chose this piece I have written a little of history. It does fascinate me.

Overall impression of piece: You are definitely an historian. You have the syntax and their way of looking at things. Quite thorough

Grammatical and spelling errors: no errors

What I liked?*Smile* This is sequential and quite thorough. I believe after his defeat in Congress, he said if he lost he would go to Texas/ I didn't realize about a publicist

Points to Ponder:*Idea* Very good/ Nothing wrong

How the piece made me feel It is almost a case of what would you like to be real. Most historians I have read are about 50-50 whether he was a hero at the Alamo. It was probably a bit of both

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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece I like spiritual pieces. I do write them

Overall impression of pieceTalk about a God's eye view. He is watching

Grammatical and spelling errors A caring loving and peaceful being. Today's usage it probably is ok. Man do. It is not a sentence. Therefore is missing an e. How could you stray... is a question and needs a question mark.

What I liked?*Smile* This is good and honest. Christianity is about Christ and ultimately, God. we do complicate it

Points to Ponder:*Idea* Linens often means burial clothes. Not used much today. I would clarify what you mean.

How the piece made me feel You are very right on.

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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece I like essays and write quite a few

Overall impression of piece: This is pertinent. Should we be at the mercy of California and New York. There are some real issues Here

Grammatical and spelling errors No obvious errors

What I liked?*Smile* Yes this is a pretty comprehensive problem. You have hit a bunch of the angles. Liked your references.

Points to Ponder:*Idea* Original Founding Father's didn't really trust voters. That got worse after Andrew Jackson and universal suffrage. I almost think they would need a constitution convention to change it. It would probably be good to know your bias.

How the piece made me feel Not a feeling piece.

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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Why I chose this piece I write spiritual pieces. Part of the spiritual newsletter.

Overall impression of piece Concise. evocative.

Grammatical and spelling errors: Reads well No errors

What I liked?*Smile* This is a difficult question handled in a way that is evocative. Life was imprisoned according to Greek Mythology

Points to Ponder:*Idea* You are quite metaphorical about death. I can't say you are wrong. Could it be more helpful to be a little more specific. My personal deal is that people have to like what I write. TGhe pertinent question might be, do I like it?

How the piece made me feel Does something have to die before you can be rebuilt? I think you are right here. We're afraid of dying, but it is part of our natural cycle. I think most of our inner growth has not to do with others but deciding to move ahead, give up things

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Review of LIFE  
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Rated: E | (3.0)
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Why I chose this piece This was part of the spiritual newsletter. I write some of this myself

Overall impression of piece: This is short concise and too the point

Grammatical and spelling errors except misspelled. Generally periods have two spaces after it. Comma comes right after the clause, then comes the continued thought, Believe is misspelled.

What I liked?*Smile* You have a lot of truth here. We look for all the answers within ourselves, and we are the source of the problem, not the answer. Do we want answers? I love the tought of cutting down our desires

Points to Ponder:*Idea* It would be useful to know what background you write from. Filling out your bio really helps

How the piece made me feel This is honest. I found it believable

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Review of Old Lovers  
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Rated: E | (3.0)
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Why I chose this piece Noted in Newbie reviews

Overall impression of piece: Wwow. This smacks of a lot of realism

Grammatical and spelling errors: Words like fifty are spelled out. Lots of contractions without apostrophes. A lot of I's are not capitalized.. You have used block formatting and generally there is a line in between paragraphs
. It is hard to read on a screen. Runs in the bedroom should have a capital
What I liked?*Smile* You have so many descriptors of the event and the feelings that it is easy to identify with. I think there would be conversations with the dearly departed.

Points to Ponder:*Idea* This is mainly a grammar issue in reading this. It makes it hard to read. I often use the program grammarly to highlight mistakes. It is free to download.

How the piece made me feel I sense you know about this sort of thing. Put something in your bio. As a reviewer, it helps to know something about the author. I have been married 45 years. Marrages change but the commitment never does.
Masculinity often says, "Let's fix this."
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Review of Lullaby  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Why I chose this piece This came up on a random review

Overall impression of piece A thoughtful piece

Grammatical and spelling errors: Console is generally a verb so it is awkward. In general, it reads pretty well.

What I liked?*Smile* This is open and honest. It has a sweet spirit. I believe we are more aligned with death than life. I am not sure why

Points to Ponder:*Idea* I have a biology background. I am not sure what you are talking of. Extinctions?

How the piece made me feel: This thing we call life is profound. We think we are autonomous but obviously are not. There is a lot here. It could be expanded

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Rated: E | (3.0)
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Why I chose this piece I like essays and spiritual stuff.

Overall impression of piece This is short, concise and to the point

Grammatical and spelling errors A period has two spaces after it. Comma is right after the clause and then, one space. You are writing in block format. Generally there is a line between paragraphs. Burdenized is not a word. Burdened

What I liked?*Smile* This kind of describes our world and the way out. You have a good message.

Points to Ponder:*Idea*PPersepherence and optimism as swords is really strong. Definitely develop that. Saying Allah is all kind of leaves some of us out. How about a higher power? Personally I am Ok with it.

How the piece made me feel I Like that we are more alike than you might think.

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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece This is part of the spiritual newsletter.

Overall impression of piece You do have talent. What you describe is obvious and is even commented on in the Bible

Grammatical and spelling errors Reads well No errors

What I liked?*Smile* Rhyme seems to add something and is not too obvious. This is tremendously uupbeat and something I needed.

Points to Ponder:*Idea* There is a fight here between God''s glory and the humdrum of everyday. I wish faith were that easy. There is lots of scripture to agree with you. Reality says there is a struggle.

How the piece made me feel Jesus said,"Even the rocks would cry out."

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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece Part of the spiritual newsletter.

Overall impression of piece Interesting and true

Grammatical and spelling errors: Reads well no errors

What I liked?*Smile* I like the succinct nature of this. I believe exactly how you believe

Points to Ponder:*Idea* This is all kind of hypothetical. People are anything but that. I read your bio. You obviously have some backdrop to put this in

How the piece made me feel I feel kindness has a "feel" to it. We think we are so analytical. We are much more

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Review of LOST  
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Rated: 13+ | (2.5)
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Why I chose this piece I like essays. This is very honest.

Overall impression of piece: There is no doubt about the way you feel

Grammatical and spelling errors ourfels I have no idea. Is it too hard is a question. Many of your sentences are joined with a comma. That makes them awkward and hard to read. Two spaces after a period

What I liked?*Smile* There is no doubt

Points to Ponder:*Idea* Watch swearing (even with asterics) You probably should rate this as a higher age group. A bully is a person. It is not a feeling

How the piece made me feel Tells us something about yourself on your site. It does help us as reviewers.

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Review of Life is Dukkha.  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Why I chose this piece This is a requested review on our site

Overall impression of piece This is short but very intense. There are universal things in here that we all struggle with

Grammatical and spelling errors With all her heart really motifies she. Maybe move the clause

What I liked?*Smile* This portrays a real struggle that seems very flesh and blood. All these stories and backstories are a big part of all of us--even for older people.

Points to Ponder*Idea* Moms quote could be identified and put in quotes

How the piece made me feel. We do all have messages from our past, we would do best to forget.

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Review of Curiosity  
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Rated: ASR | (3.5)
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Why I chose this piece This was a newbie review. Welcome to WDC

Overall impression of piece

Grammatical and spelling errors Block formatting generally requires a line in between paragraphs. On the screen, it become hard to read.

What I liked?*Smile* I like the detail about going into the cellar. Counting the steps is good. Pretty good setting

Points to Ponder:*Idea* Most mothers don't have they're kids break into the cellar. I need more of a reason. Katie at least introduced herself, but I could have used a bit more explanation. I am looking for some reason the story happened.

How the piece made me feel You didn't give us anything to go on in your bio. It helps us as reviewers to know something of the author

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Review of From Beyond  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Why I chose this piece This came up on a random review. Rampaging dust bunnies on a bender? Why not?

Overall impression of piece Captured my imagination.

Grammatical and spelling errors Reads well. No errors

What I liked?*Smile* Of course, they multiply like rabbits. They are part of the natural flora and fauna. Pasteur might have been wrong about spontaneous generation

Points to Ponder:*Idea* Seems ok to me

How the piece made me feel They really are an accepted animal at our house. They are definitely untamed. Sure, blame it on alapse in the space-time continuum. Everything else is

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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Why I chose this piece I write essays. I saw this in recent additions

Overall impression of piece: This is kind of a day in the life type of piece. I do envy you

Grammatical and spelling errors No obvious errors

What I liked?*Smile* I liked the appointment add. We all could use helps

Points to Ponder:*Idea* For a short piece,this isn't very focused. If you want authors to think of the things they have to help them, say that. Liking something to do something is helpful. A lot of us need to feel we are doing something useful

How the piece made me feel Work is sometimes hard. That is why we get paid for it

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Review of Alea iacta est  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece This came up on a random review. I do like history

Overall impression of piece

Grammatical and spelling errors: Honor has more than one meaning. Perhaps pride might have been better.

What I liked?*Smile* You seem to have all the people in the right order. You seem to know the back story well

Points to Ponder:*Idea* I am missing the wife's miss-givings. Was she psychic? I don't get the latin in the title

How the piece made me feel The story always has a back story. This is plausible and tenable.

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Review of I See Old Ones  
Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
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Why I chose this piece This was part of the spiritual newsletter. It is definitely part of a spiritual culture

Overall impression of piece Definitely appreciated. It should never vanish

Grammatical and spelling errors: Reads well. No errors

What I liked?*Smile* This is pretty visceral in its outlook. I feel the dream. Do we miss dreams today? Martin Luther King is the last "dreamer I can remember. The I have a dream segment is totally not in the script and almost all that is remembered.

Points to Ponder:*Idea*The tie in of Grandmothers to grandfathers seems a little vague. Did they wait in dreams? Did they understand? I am not indian but women seem to understand things more than men

How the piece made me feel

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Review of The Bar Mitzvah  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece This was in the spiritual newsletter. As a Christian, I do know some things of Judaism.

Overall impression of piece: This is definitely cross-cultural and interesting

Grammatical and spelling errors Seems ok

What I liked?*Smile*: This seems pretty personal and very detailed. You obviously know this and have authority

Points to Ponder:*Idea* Too much detail. I would know what I am up against if undergoing bar mitzvah. I would go more for the basics. Bar would be son of and mitzvah commandments. Christians to have to keep rightousness. Perhaps we are not as different as most think. I think this is written from a Jewish perspective with all the detail

How the piece made me feel The tallit is kind of a symbol of a committed follower. Jesus wore one

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Review of Choices  
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece I like spiritual pieces. I write them

Overall impression of piece: It was almost like being there. I could feel it

Grammatical and spelling errors: Well punctuated. Reads well

What I liked?*Smile*: There are a lot of visceral images here. I could feel them

Points to Ponder:*Idea* Faith could use more descriptors. You spent most of the time on destiny. I think faith is what changes us on the inside and makes all these other changes (which are inevitable) almost meaningless

How the piece made me feel The best poems make you want to feel alongside of the poet. We do live in a destiny filled generation and subsequently, very unhappy. Of course, destiny goes back to almost the dawn of time

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Review of Lead me  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Why I chose this piece I write spiritual pieces so I try and review them too

Overall impression of piece: I think this is the heart of many seekers

Grammatical and spelling errors Tomorrow and days don't seem to mesh

What I liked?*Smile* There are interesting rhymes in here. I like some of them not being end rhymes

Points to Ponder:*Idea* Human potential is kind of coming down more on the human side than the God side. Generally, people are only burned at one stake. God is hope. God's interpretation of hope is a sure thing

How the piece made me feel By not filling in Port stuff, you haven't given me much to go on. I would fill that in

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