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Rated: E | (5.0)
Cool piece. We think we are so big in the scope of things. Maybe we are, "Just a nuisance.". I really liked the kaleidoscope eyes. If I remember right, they see one image thousands of times with eyes that are a composite. We have a saying of can't hurt a fly. You want to hurt a fly, just try. They're quicker and nimbler than us.
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Review of Through The Blood  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
I am guessing we are missing chapters. This seems to be the next one in line. Of course, the wife is substantial in making plans. I am missing a lot here. How did they get from the frantic phone call to going to China? Then, there is the leak. There is nothing logical to make me think that information has gone awry. Last sentence is incomplete.

It sems that this really happened. but we are missing substantial parts.

Michael
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Review of Dreams Of Flight  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece This came up on a random review

Overall impression of piece: I am not sure of what you are talking of, but I get it and want to be there.

Grammatical and spelling errors: Reads well. No errors

What I liked?*Smile* There's movement here. It is perhaps what we all need in these stagnant times. I must admit, I"ve been reintroduced to my back yard. It is 1.25 acres. The house has seen a lot since 1953

Points to Ponder:*Idea* I do identify with the visceral things in this. I live on both sides of my brain so it can be confusing

How the piece made me feel Still want to be there

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Peace and beauty in freefall
MichaelFrom Mountains
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Review of Through The Blood  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece I generally don't do fiction. I review as a service(I am not doing anything of any note) and I kind of like you. I review because I like to. Don't worry about GPS. I have over 2 million

Overall impression of piece This sort of thing is happening and is part of the general conversation

Grammatical and spelling errors prologue I think is misspelled

What I liked?*Smile* You have set up the drama well. Obviously, with the oriental name, they take their progeny seriously. Too bad we probably don't.. Is this in China? Probably would be a salient fact although they allow abortions for birth control

Points to Ponder:*Idea* I am assuming this is a family thing with a grandchild (Potential). I am not sure I am getting that. I have girls and suicide is generally not the first sentence. You need to know whose story this is. Kind of revert between daughter and father. Who is telling it?

How the piece made me feel I was unaware that the male had to sign off on this. Obviously, it is a good idea. Do males have reproductive rights on their women? Don't know. The woman may be bossy, but she is his daughter. A definite conflict point here> I see possibilities in this

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Review of We are the shadow  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
You seem to have a mind of a Physicist. We are defining a lot of things in our society by their shadow. I think most of these riot things are shadow stuff.. Do we really hate people of different origin? I barely know any.

Are we shadow men or are we flesh and blood with real hopes and aspirations?

I think what I am seeing here in this piece is a lot of pragmatic thinking which probably does apply, but I am not sure if you have made the connections for us
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Rated: E | (4.0)
This is really the basis for what we are to be, asChristians. We think angels with wings and halos but the word also means messenger. In the Book of Revelation God talks about the angels of the different churches. He could easily be talking about pastors.

Our world likes to separate spiritual and physical worlds. They are not as seperate as you might think. Jesus said to love each other as I have loved you (jn 13:34) It obviously is going to cost us something and they will know we were there, in their lives.

This is a simple direct quest to take God as he said to be. It is a major basis of our faith
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Review of My First Concert  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Your response to my review was so positive that I thought I would try another. I was from that era with screaming teenage girls. I saw then on the Ed Sullivan Show. Only those in love could think that anyone saw you up in the nosebleed section. This is Americana, in a nutshell.

I am sure they dealt with teens like you and your sister every show. If you are in love, you don't worry about little things like social security cards. The emotions are still there although I assume you are no longer a teen This brought back a lot of memories.

Obviously not a teen any more. You flash backed. Should you flash forward? There is a movie called Yesterday which presupposes that the Beattles never existed and one guy remembers the songs. "Yesterday," on Amazon. Maybe a look at your upcoming generation.

Cool piece. Thanks

Michael
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece

Overall impression of piece: Love makes the world go round. I feel a lot of folks have gotten off

Grammatical and spelling errors You needs more than a u. Yours needs more than url. One don't without an sppostrophe

What I liked?*Smile* You ask some great questions. A lot don't love themselves I can see that you do. I believe that love was put in us by our creator. I think we do have to have faith in order to love.

Points to Ponder:*Idea* Surreal needs to be developed. I am from the 60's and we equated it with LSD. We are on a magical mystery tour although without drugs--hopefully

How the piece made me feel Love teaches you how to even see the world in the first place

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I can see you are a Godly person and are dealing with truth correctly. I wish you had more in your bio. It helps us as reviewers. The Lord'sprayer is praying for restoration of the Kingdom. It is in Solomon's dedication of the Temple. It is a process and can be quite spectacular. (2 Chron 7?)

We obviously need to be an ongoing work in progress.

Michael
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Review of Fate  
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Rated: E | (2.5)
Computers are very helpful for this. You are missing capitals, misspelled, grammar errors, lack of quotes when obviously they were needed. Missing capitals at the begiining of sentences

I am sure you have the lingo write for your age group. It sems natural for your age group. With all the errors, many won't review.
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Review of Trust Issues  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Salt does look like sugar. It is a pretty good analogy. Sugar and salt are actually both pretty toxic. You kind of center on the "Other person." Relationship is not all about the other guy. We are all about us. That is not relationship. It is a felony that many could be guilty.

How do we know? We ask questions. When the sanswer is "No answer came the firm reply,"run for the hills. It is a famous line from somewhere. Relationship is communication. No answer is extremely frustrating

Michael
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Rated: E | (3.0)
You really need to answer the, "So what?" The Book of Revelation talks about being able to put an army of a million onto the playing field. What can be done? Are we at the mercy of an undisclosed terror. If you have specifics, you need to share them. We don't even know how you know this sort of thing

Michael
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Review of IN THE DARK ROOM  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I get where this is coming from and it is very good. There may be more here that you haven't thought of. I go back a bit when camera pictures were on film and not digital. They had to be developed in a dark room; otherwise you would ruin the image--except for a safe red light. In the old daysit was a person in darkness with a bunch of chemicals. If you couldn't get it in focus, you had nothing. I think sometimes darkness allows us to see things we ordinarily wouldn't.

Your point of darkness and things that go bump in the night is universal and well spoken. Sometimes we see great things when we are not hindered.

Sorry about my tangent

Michael
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Even roses have thorns in them. We put up a lot for roses. You are dealing with what really is up.

Grammar: A period is followed by two spaces

The big issue is "What is life?" Why are we here? I doubt if it is to be comfortable. There is some misery involved. You havekind of skimmed over the issue when we really need more of a "How do you do that?"

Michael
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece This type of piece is long overdue. We all need to know, "Just the facts."

Overall impression of piece

Grammatical and spelling errors Between weapon and therefore , you have a comma. Those are two complete sentences so a semicolon would be appropriate

What I liked?*Smile* So much coverage and so few facts. I am glad you are dealing with them

Points to Ponder:*Idea* Chavin's case is problematic. Maybe it should be reviewed before they decided to do anything If you don't know what is going on, a quandary is alright. The whole nation is in a quandary. US grant kind of comes out of left field. Washington has slaves. He released them at his death

How the piece made me feel Summarys have to have a purpose. This seems to include a lot of things

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Peace and beauty in freefall
MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
I have had the same thing happen to me. In fact, an old pole has a lamp for my driveway. Everything has a story and it is not what we think it is or should be. we are determined to think that life should be the way it has always been. It is funny, like you said.

Is there a reaction of the person with the missing pole? We are all a little polish thinking it should be there.. If you don't know what she thought, be creative.

This is fun. I would have fun with it.

Michael
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Review of My Journey  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
It has been a long time since I read a piece of yours. I am sorry about your husband. I have early Alzheimers with no progression in 11 years

How do we respond to life? God's creation does giggle. We just don't listen. This is simple direct and heartfelt. Life is beautiful then it makes ugly changes. We have had the wetest June on record and we live in a desert. No one sees any of this coming.

What is the next step. You still have a voice that needs to be heard.

Michael
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Rated: E | (3.0)
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Why I chose this piece Previously reviewed your work, You write about good things

Overall impression of piece: You have a lot to say for a young man

Grammatical and spelling errors I am are two words. You can use a contraction saying I'm. Project is mispelled. Your what if sentences are really questions. Need a question mark. Block formatting generally has a line in between paragraphs. It makes it a lot easier to read on screen. See the work on my page. I think you mean egos instead of discos

What I liked?*Smile* Ilove the relizance on God. Why do we get up in the morning and do anything? Are we to change something in the world?

Points to Ponder:*Idea* You have a list of points. Use a colon to say a list is coming. Indent your points to make them easier to read

How the piece made me feel What is successful? You can be a successful garbageman. You go at it like you have a mission. I think that is what you are talking about. I would download grammarly on your computer. It picks up a lot os these glitches. It is free.

Hope this helps. Use my ideas as your creativity alchemy deems fitting.



Peace and beauty in freefall
MichaelFrom Mountains
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Review of Saddle Up  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece I saw this advertised. It looked interesting. Who doesn''t need an adventure?

Overall impression of piece: This is kind of a fun call to adventure.

Grammatical and spelling errors Seems ok. Reads well

What I liked?*Smile* Power come from mental. Interesting! Samson was a thinker? I like the rhymes. It is easily readable and rememberable

Points to Ponder:*Idea* If you haven't ridden a horse, what is with the saddle and straps? What is the unanswered question? You never say. Last line could use a rhyme> Maybe a good attempt is the best bet and then regrets

How the piece made me feel Someone said life is an adventure or it is nothing

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Peace and beauty in freefall
MichaelFrom Mountains
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Review of Love Thy Neighbor  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Remarkably cool piece. I will have to read more.

You have pretty accurately characterized what is going on in this country of ours. I am from Idaho.

I assume you are talking about 9-11 in terms of enemy attack. It could be clearer. They thought we were evil. Evil begets evil. For a long time, we didn't like Muslims all that well.

The Golden Rule is just about in every religious expression. Christianity took it one step further and said "Love as I (Jesus) has loved you(jn 13:34). This is going to cost us. It probably is the only thing that will change anything. You have given us a call to action. You are a little vague on what that might look like

Michael
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece I was looking through Newbie literature. It was advertised on a side bar.

Overall impression of piece: This is highly original

Grammatical and spelling errors: Desire is mispelled, Commas are immediately after the clause, then leave one space. Making a list, use a colon instead of a semicolon
You do not choose yourself is really a fully sentence, not a part of what came before
What I liked?*Smile*

Points to Ponder:*Idea* Your leadership characteristics have little to do with your lion analogy. Consider a stronger tie.

How the piece made me feel You do have something to say. I can see your compulsion to write. Keep it up. There are grammar courses on the site that may be of help

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Peace and beauty in freefall
MichaelFrom Mountains
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Review of flashback  
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Rated: ASR | (3.5)
We all do think that we are having our own particular problem, but there is a lot happening at 13. I knoww you are speaking to someone in our audience pool.

I sense there is more going on here. Just fixing them physically is not the answer. They just stop eating all over again There is a little conflict as to whose story this is. Belle and Ashley have a part, but if there is to be life change, we need just one life.

Be sure to put something in your bio block. It help us as reviewers

Michael
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Review of A Father to Us  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Really cool piece. The only one I know that is that good is our Heavenly Father. I certainly wouldn't argue the point with you. Fathers are to do the right thing, at least most of the time.

We can be a treasure. I am not sure I grew up that way. Of course, he's gone now. I hope you send him a copy of this.

Michael
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Review of Bug Lights  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Looking through prose and saw this. Are fireflies flight always futile? I get the false God of incandescence. What makes our world move and go in a purposeful pattern? Are we fireflies? I get all the analogies here. Are they all authentic? We do some things that are purposeful--maybe not many. (What do I want in 25 words?)

Michael
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Rated: E | (4.5)
These rhymes are incredibly clever. The only exception is disaster and easter. It is a bit strained as they have little to do with each other. I have a good vocabulary but fease might be a bit over the top. Mess and yes seem to go together. Yes is always the way out of a mess

The diction and rhythm is pretty much free and easy. It makes me think, "Don't worry. Be happy.
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