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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece I am perusing non fiction

Overall impression of piece: These are not simple times, to say the least

Grammatical and spelling errors One picky point. Generally simple numbers are spelled out. Wella is kind of hard to know what you are saying.

What I liked?*Smile* This is entertaining. We have a 75 year old farm house on an acre or so. We have an eagle in the back yard that thinks the place is his He announces it with a distinctive call. I saw and felt your circumstances

Points to Ponder:*Idea* None significant

How the piece made me feel You achieved your purpose. Just had some picky points.

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Peace and beauty in freefall
MichaelFrom Mountains
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for entry "I Hope
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece Reciprocating a review. In general I don't do poetry, but lean towards prose.

Overall impression of piece: Cool piece

Grammatical and spelling errors: Reads well. No errors

What I liked?*Smile* Your faith is something you do and it impacts you. There is a reason to walk with the Lord.

Points to Ponder:*Idea* I hope I will see Him. Faith comes into play. We know. Some of your lines are very long and probably could be broken up some. Your red letter verse is almost assuredly biblical(psalm 31?). I can see why you don't put it in the line. Perhaps a footnote.

How the piece made me feel You have a mature faith. It works.

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Peace and beauty in freefall
MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Interesting thoughts. I too am an Amazon fanatic. There is a legalistic outlook of many conservative Christians that say blood of Jesus but have absolutely no idea what it means. In the Old Testament, our sins were covered by the sacrifice of animals. No one says we were under that sort of blood. Some hymn writers made the concept very popular

Jesus covers our sins by His own sacrifice. We are no way good enough on our own. It is more symbolic that anything, but we do live by symbols, a lot. GDP and the like. I am not sure those are great symbols to live by.

I take this as entirely tongue-in-cheek. Our church has been entirely electonic for month with no end in sight. Disaster will eventually run its course. We survived a lot in terms of epidemics. Entertainment would get a five. Relevance to anything a 4
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Rated: E | (4.5)
This is a pretty cool poem. We think that are manuvering means something, but it in essence does not. We are to be a reflection of the creator. Buisness is not a good character reference.

Picky point. Deceit is a noun. Perhaps deceive would be better.
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Review of A Bright Sparkle  
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Rated: E | (3.0)
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Why I chose this piece You have been watching my reviews. I do appreciate your gps

Overall impression of piece: You have a fascinating story

Grammatical and spelling errors Probably should be came to. Believe you mean taught, Rumor is rumor. Diet probably is died
Died woman probabaly is dead, Rumor is misspelled

What I liked?*Smile* This is a fascinating history. It is well worth expanding

Points to Ponder:*Idea* I think most would want to know what this was like for you. MOst of us ddon't live with dead people

How the piece made me feel I put grammarly on my computer as a free program. I sense English might not be a primary language. There are grammar courses on the site. What I would do in the Hindi language would be laughable

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Peace and beauty in freefall
MichaelFrom Mountains
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Review of Unfortunately  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I get this. Jesus said to love one another as I have loved you. That's a pretty tough act to follow. Are we lazy or unfocused? Love the last line about losing our fortune. We are relationships. Most of my generation things we need to be rugged individuals. All that leads is drinking by yourself.

I was inspired by a pod cast. This person has helped people all over the world. He is a character. Pod cast is about 28 minutes.

https://dreambigframework.com/podcast-1/fortheworl...
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Rated: ASR | (3.5)
Kind of cool little piece. I like the dimension and tension rhyme.

First two lines are kind of standard Christian doctrine. I am not sure if even Christians get the particulars.. Ruled from a different dimension almost is like a psi fi kind of thing. Most people think that Christians have already "beamed up."

If we aren't believers, what do they need?

Michael
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I am returning a review. You have caught the tenor of the time. It can be rather monotonous. I can't argue with a single things you say.

However, where does originality and spontaneity come from? I think the answer is that it comes from individuals. It comes from the spirit that is in everyone that believes the world is more than just what is shown to them. A better focus would be towards individuals. We need to escape with a frantic desperation

You won't change the world. It is impossible. For a revival, go to the parking lot and draw a circle around you. Pray for everyone in the circle. Than, do something.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece Saw this in a spiritual newsletter and it caught by eye

Overall impression of piece> I am not sure of your background but there are some pretty universal things here

Grammatical and spelling errors Reads well. No errors

What I liked?*Smile* We are not our contexts (although they have importance) Who doesn't like hugs?

Points to Ponder:*Idea* Firmness isn't really a measure of inner people in Western society. You ccan be a spiritual giant and still be a wimp. Maybe honesty in the inner person to surrender yourself to Almighty

How the piece made me feel We are more the same than many realize. Liked your piece.

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Peace and beauty in freefall
MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
This is a pretty cool piece on a fascinating subject. The average person probable doesn't know much about this. I do have Quaker heritage. Ilike all the physical details you put in about the place. It was almost like being there.

Do we reform prisoners or incarcerate them? It has been a plaquing questions. Many of the men in solitary contemplation went quite insane. It was pretty much deemed cruel and unusual. They meant well,but some experience helps a lot.

There is an emotional and spiritual element of this that could be brought out more
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I read a couple of your virus pieces. They seem to contradict each other as fake news and now this one. From what I can tell, there seems to be more concern with closing our borders to illegals. It may be an insurmountable obstacle. I think it is a flood tide. Spanish as a second language would never have been considered a generation ago.

This kind of come off as a rant and you may be right. We have never been good at this. It started with Nafta as we were going to have a continental approach. It was probably a bad approach. On the other hand, can we say that their end of the boat is sinking?.

Its complicated. It might need a bit more depth
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Review of Faith and Freedom  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece This was in an old newsletter. I like history

Overall impression of piece: You have a lot of facts about a giant in our county's history

Grammatical and spelling errors Simple numbers like seven hundred probably should be spelled out. You have a block format, which generally meansa line in between paragraphs. It can be hard to read on screen

What I liked?*Smile* I like your tying Tubmans issues to your own. We all do have issues. The inequality brings them out.

Points to Ponder:*Idea* Your ties to social inequality and societal could be brought out more. With slavery, the inequalities were obvious. I too believe they still exist. Most would not pick up on this without some help. She saved 700 slaves but how she did that could be brought out

How the piece made me feel You did a lot of work on this. A footnote or two might be helpful. I have history stuff on my site
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Peace and beauty in freefall
MichaelFrom Mountains
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Review of Breakdown  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece This was in a Newsletter.

Overall impression of piece: I write spiritual pieces so I am drawn to this faith-based written in real time

Grammatical and spelling errors No errors

What I liked?*Smile* Eventhe aggrevating things can be a God-send--even a Texan. I am not a car guy but somethings should be obvious

Points to Ponder:*Idea* Not sure what flipped through the intersection means

How the piece made me feel Kind of described these things as matter of fact.. Actual feelings would enhance this

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Peace and beauty in freefall
MichaelFrom Mountains
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Review of a cappella  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece Came up on a random review

Overall impression of piece All of this a cappella but it has its place.

Grammatical and spelling errors reads well. No errors

What I liked?*Smile* Services generally have a litany, but true worship often is a capella. You obviously know your worship services and the nature of true worship (non scripted)

Points to Ponder:*Idea* Bugs don't generally buzz around at night

How the piece made me feel You were there. I was too.

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Peace and beauty in freefall
MichaelFrom Mountains
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Review of Dreams  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
This came up on a random review. I have wrestled with this myself. Why don't we all go out and change the world to something better? There are a lot of reasons, most of them have to do with fear. Sometimes the vision to act is not strong enough so we kind of waffle about our life.

Because.. sentence starts with a clause and then become a compound sentence. More of a stream on consciousnsess than grammatical

Dreams is what happens at night. I think what you are talking about is a vision. We get whipers from on high. We're not used to them so, we kind of ignore them
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Review of The Pandemic  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
I like science. I have a background in Pathology and am glad I am not doing autopsies any more. I did several cases of Jacob Creutzfeldt virus where those infected all die within two years.

I think you have some science in here, although you need to define things a bit better so everyone knows what you are talking about and why it is relevant, to them. Your core descriptions were a bit vague. I liked how you brought up the animal reservoir. They think Ebola came from there. Marburg virus sat on the pier for weeks,and ended up not really effecting many--except most of them died. The key to writing a credible article is showing you are competent and why they should believe you.


Good idea about a footnote, so we can look things up. I did

Michael
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Review of Chosen Paths  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece Part of the Newbies newsletter. Welcome to WDC

Overall impression of piece You have some pretty heady thoughts here.

Grammatical and spelling errors Path of sin is pathed with thorns. Excessive drug abuse...is a little abuse ok?

What I liked?*Smile* There is a lot going on here that could call for Godly intervention

Points to Ponder:*Idea* Jesus never knew sin but had trials and tribulations even before his death. Job was a righteous man and God allowed Satan to do evil. Maybe some of the evil is a result of a rebellious world, but not all of it

How the piece made me feel God loved sinners in Jesus day. I think it is His native language. We are called to love each other, especially in hard times

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Peace and beauty in freefall
MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: E | (4.0)
He didn't really write the "I have a dream segment." Aretha Franklin was on the Podium with him and said, "Martin. Tell them about the dream." It was totally extemporanease. The papers omited it the next day because it was not what he had planned to say.

I roomed with a black man in college in 1973. People did think I was kind of weird. You have got some good data about economic racism. I too believe it is still real. Taking one event and launching off of that is perhaps a bit over the top.

TGhis isn't the 60's or the 70's Freedom is a tricky process.. I personally don't look at color as any kind of a barrier in my life. No, I am not black
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece I was looking through essays and found this. I like essays. I have a new one

Overall impression of piece When does human life begin. It is definitely a loaded question.

Grammatical and spelling errors Sentence with later,in doing so is a run on sentence. After later could be a semicolon

What I liked?*Smile* You have a very good for instance with a 12 month quarrenteen.

Points to Ponder:*Idea* Are humans not human if there is no air to breathe? It is kind of rhetorical, but significant. Last paragraph equivocates enough to totally throw out your argument. Your opinion is your opinion

How the piece made me feel God says, He kknew you before you were born. Is killing prospective mothers double homicide?

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Peace and beauty in freefall
MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Who knows what will come next. The writer of those original words had no idea. Many say that he eventually went crazy himself.

You have a lot going on here. Your images are evocative as causing certain emotions. We all seem to be getting ready for a storm these days. What do we do and whose are we?

Most of these verses are in third person. It misses some of the immediacy of all these things happening to you,a person. You describe it well, but there is something about being there.
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Review of Body, Mind, Soul  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
I am afraid what these three lines portray is more common than most think. Your bio(which I always read) told me a lot more about this than the poem did.

You are not the only one like this. I hang out with lizards at the aquarium where I volunteer. I can be bored in my life and I know that there is something more.

Your reader wants to know what this feels like. You have had heavy duty things going on. I'd plant moon flowers
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Review of Fast  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Miracle, when you get to the actual meaning, means "wonderful happening." You are absolutely correct. We need to pray with anticipation that God is ready and willing to do in our everyday life. It doesn't necessarilytake much. Even an inch or two if you are drowning, makes a big difference.

Faith moves mountain is kind of a cliche. I think you could help the reader feel what this might be like. Think Red Sea and what that must have been like. Nobody saw that coming (except Chaleton Heston and great gobs of Jello.

We need miracles right now, more than ever
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Review of Nefertiti mummy  
Rated: E | (3.0)
I actually have studied this. When her husband died, women ordinarily did not become Pharoh so she went off to try and marry some foreign king. As far as I know, no one ever found her tomb. Most think she was kind of fed to the fish.

You did list this as fiction which is appropriate. Generally archeologists would have a full name. Quiet probably is quite.

She is the most complicated of women. She was also probably one of the most beautiful. This story is pretty well known as James Patterson has written fictionalized history of her

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for entry "Chapter 5 Discussion
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I pretty much read all of this (some skimmed). This type of outlook is the stuff of today. I realize the writing is academic. They have their own special brand of non-communication. They don't say anything simply. It is not their way.

This is valid--very valid. When I went through college way back when, my academic interest survey listed eight things. They were all very varied. Circumstances and a pretty young thing who wanted to be married definitely had an influence.

Did I make a right choice? The answer would be yes and no. It was very satisfying for many years. It could have been something else. We are kind of regimented on the way we make decisions. I think the general public is starting to realize that.

It is not all about education 0 to 25, work for 4 decades and then die. You might read The Three boxes of Life
People need help. They may not make a fortune but maybe they won't have to

Obviously, you wrote this for stuffy academic types. I've done it too. The subject is fascinating but you have to be able to bring everyone along with you. I rated this based on the original purpose for which it was written. This is a book for the common person
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece I saw this is newbie reviews
Overall impression of piece

Grammatical and spelling errors Reads well. No obvious errors

What I liked?*Smile* Talks about people who were centuries ahead of their times. The answer is there. Are we willing to listen?

Points to Ponder:*Idea* I am not aware of MLK being nighted. Sir would imply that. When you use they, it is indeffiniate about who they are. It loses some of its punch

How the piece made me feel We should all have a dream. Lincoln didn't really back sufferage but was against forced slavery

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Peace and beauty in freefall
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