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Review of Imaginable Hugs  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
This is pretty cool. I am returning a review. They rhyme scheme makes the words kind of trip off the tongue. I am not sure of your era (fill in your bio) but it seems true to my own. The imagery brought back memories. As you get older, it seems these are more important

Michael
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Wow. I saw this in essays and since I write a lot that no one reads, I had to give it a go. The distrust of foreigners is all over are nations conscience. They used to warehouse them at Angel Island in an attempt to send them back to China. The questions were wildly unfair. The poetry they wrote on their bunks is beautiful and haunting. We took away Japanese Land in World War 2 which was against our own laws. (eventually it was repealed by the Supreme Court)

A few things I would consider, If you have a reference, footnote it. I really want to see your reactions; it can be played forward into today's world

This is a thought provoking piece. Thanks

Michael
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Part of the please review me page. You get this. Terror and desperation is the same in any race or creed. It will not go away. This is a crime despite any color. The I's say this is personal. Indeed, it is an attach on all of us.

They looked the other way when Hitler and his hulligans came on the scene. Eventually, there is no one else to fight injustice
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Review of Childcare  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
This is real. I have a few generations on you (perhaps). I didn't learn about diapers until the kids were potty trained. Should men be a part of this. You bet. I have seen my daughters husband get heavily involved. It is positive. Relationships are made, early.

Women do have more of a multifactoral brain. They can do a lot of things at the same time. Your argument is logical and sequential

Maybae a few more points to prove your point would help. It is cool that it is happening.

Michael
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Review of Hope  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece Perusing newbie reviews. Welcome to WDC

Overall impression of piece: You gave this a lot of thought

Grammatical and spelling errors Second sentences is not a sentence. It is a list of all the things described in sentence one. Join with a colon or a dash

What I liked?*Smile* Almost buisness-like and thourough You have covered most of the basics

Points to Ponder:*Idea* All the things you say are true. We have heard many of them before. Making it personal and easier to identify with is more effective

How the piece made me feel Rationally I follow. heart wise is another matter.

Hope this helps. Use my ideas as your creativity alchemy deems fitting.



Peace and beauty in freefall
MichaelFrom Mountains
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Review of After It All  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Certainly direct and to the point. Especially, in the South in the Civil War, they did use alcohol for pain relief. Northerners blockaded their supplies. Perhaps there is more here? How many PTSD patients resort to this? There is more going on here. I think there is more to give
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Rated: E | (4.5)
It is irritating to me that anything with heart, soul and mind often does not get reviewed. This has all three. It is a call to action. In God we trust, if you look up Sandra O'Connors ruling, said it is more like a motto than a reality. It probably is the truth.

You could write a book on all you covered in your piece. End times starts with a plague. I don't think this is the one, but perhaps a wake up call. I have read the end of the Book.

The real question here is revival. All of America's big revivals were in times of crisis. I's like to think this will be over, but my spirit tells me this is the beginning of hard times. You have so much going on here, that maybe we kind of miss the main point.

Picky point: Rabbi with two b's

You are a voice. Keep it up

Michael
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I can't dispute your numbers as they seem pretty accurate. You say it is infinitely big then you put numbers on it. You have a bunch of them. Maybe a bit over the top for number usage.Our closest star is 4 light years away (Alpha Centari) At the speed of light it will take 4 years to get there and were no where close to that. Imagine a 14 to 27 billion year trip. I wouldn't buy a condo although Next gen star trek was kind of fun.

Hubble in the late 50's started to postulate how big the universe was. It truly is a big question
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Why I chose this piece Part of a spiritual newsletter. I like spiritual stuff.

Overall impression of piece: I like the first person outlook on this. I think we all struggle with this, especially with Covid keeping us all at home and decreasing our ties

Grammatical and spelling errors Reads well. No errors

What I liked?*Smile* This is personal and emotional. It seems real. You have a place in all of this. This is almost lyrical in quality

Points to Ponder:*Idea* Some of this seems a bit too much, like a song from the hymnal. I like the reality parts that tie this back to you, a person

How the piece made me feel This is special both to writer and reader. It is uplifting in these trying times

Hope this helps. Use my ideas as your creativity alchemy deems fitting.



Peace and beauty in freefall
MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece I was looking through psychology, I think in the encircling crisis, we all think that things could be better.

Overall impression of piece: I am up many nights, but I am afraid, it is about being older.

Grammatical and spelling errors: Reads very well. No errors

What I liked?*Smile* Rhyming is very clever and keeps a playful mood. It makes a rather somber piece,more fun. There seems to be a dialogue going on

Points to Ponder:*Idea* Abuse yourself or write? Indeed, an interesting question. I think we feel that the world revolves around us. It does not. Do we write for us, or someone else?

How the piece made me feel It reminds me of the sad poetry I used to write. You have good questions. Be bold, even if only one person other than yourself read them

Hope this helps. Use my ideas as your creativity alchemy deems fitting.



Peace and beauty in freefall
MichaelFrom Mountains
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Review of Winter haiku.  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This came up on a random review. Haikus are mystery pieces. Both are good. We have all been here and wonder about mystery and how to get there. I guess I would go with the second one.. Snow doesn't crunch on its own. Either way, it is obvious that there is a journey involved.

Michael
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Rated: E | (3.5)
I have been heavily involved in the marriage movement and have been married for 46 years. I am familiar to the verses referenced.

There is a lot of supposing going on. From my experience, most of success or failure has to do with working on it. Couples are so very different. You haven't established any real authority here. Most troubled marriages only get better when they work on it.

Michael
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Obviously there are words to be used in this contest. Yes, you do tell a story. We are where we have been. There are mileposts along the way, to direct us and help us find our way. There is something going on here. We have no idea how many minuits, days, years or generations have gone by. Perhaps it doesn't matter, but it is confusing
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Now this is cool and, reading your bio, right up your alley. I think you could add that people had to think about what is really necessary. The answer probably is very little. I call my car a gas tank with wheel

Homecooked meals is a little peculiar in your piece. Didn't compute with my way of seeing. My gas credit card became invalid and I didn't know and for a long time, didn't care.

I am pretty sure there are lessons we can all take away from this

Michael
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Rated: E | (4.0)
You covered this with a clarity that is missing in most pieces. What do we really know and what is covered up. Covid might be an example. I am kind of the idea that very little thinking goes on and the hierarchy feels we will just kind of forget out about it. Maybe there going with the lunatic fringe argument, but it is a big fringe

Watch words like expungement. I think I am clear, but it is a bit over the top. EBANs is a little unclear.. I am pretty sure I get it from context.
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Review of Green  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
You took a lot of time on your picture. Fascinating. Our culture says we are supposed to be green. Obviously, they have no trouble.

I am wondering about how to make this unique. After all, it is a grasshopper. Archie, as a cockroach wrote a whole series of books in the 20's, including Archie, Archie and mehitabel and one other I think. He gave archie a personality and an attitude

Perhaps there is more
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Review of Losing Our Dreams  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece I was looking through sites with sponsored writing I like the concept of a weekend writer

Overall impression of piece Thought provoking and emotionally ladened piece

Grammatical and spelling errors Reads well. No errors

What I liked?*Smile*I think we are pushed to do the right thing. We know what it is but things happen

Points to Ponder:*Idea* Reach for the stars in nearing cliche. I believe sonnets are 14 lines with rhythm things in the lines. I don't think this is it

How the piece made me feel I am not sure if we can do any of this on ouur own. We need a moral center to think and make good decisions

Hope this helps. Use my ideas as your creativity alchemy deems fitting.



Peace and beauty in freefall
MichaelFrom Mountains
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Review of Why?  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Why I chose this piece I marvel at the challenge to tell a whole story in a limited amount of words

Overall impression of piece There certainly is blood everywhere

Grammatical and spelling errors: NO obvious errors

What I liked?*Smile* You certainly have a lot of graphic detail

Points to Ponder:*Idea* What is the right thing? It really is never said except killing the other. I would introduce the brother's identity earlier. Seems weird. Surely he would understand in time seems odd as he is dying

How the piece made me feel He had it coming and he knew it? That is quite a concept to put into a few 100 words

Hope this helps. Use my ideas as your creativity alchemy deems fitting.



Peace and beauty in freefall
MichaelFrom Mountains
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Review of Drabble #1  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
This is pretty well done. They say the things we remember are generally tied to an emotion or a feeling

Pulled them close. I think you meant her although in this day, who knows? Only one person most likely.

I'd like to feel that you learned something. This probably meant something. I get the less solitude and pain

Fill out a bio. It helps us an reviewers to know something of whom we are reviewing

Michael
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Review of Man and Shark  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I like anything written in a science mode. There is a lot of good stuff in here. You obviously have studied this. It shows with all the detail. They are the top of the food chain so they would concentrate toxins more.

Grammar wise, watch your quotes. They generally start with a capital.

We have an issue in our culture that most get their shark info from watching "Jaws." Shark attacks are generally pretty rare and often involve surfers in a seal nursery. Maybe there are seven per year. Man verses shark numbers in the thousands with most caught in nets with other fish.

Give some history in your bio. We need something to show your capacity to know these things. I volunteer at an aquarium. We're small so generally have reef sharks

Michael

Michael
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Review of Disobedient  
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
This looks like a flash fiction of some sort.. I get the book was highest on a shelf so no one would accidentally have a look.

You have a narrator problem. Who wrote the story? It looks like it was written posthumously. Why this story? I guess it could just be a dark story. There are a lot of them

I guess I am looking for more.

Michael
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Review of Guise  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I am not sure if this as dark as you think. You are in poetry mode, so grammar is just an argument point. I think you have the essence of what a lot of us have been through. If I am not the things I have been preplague, what am I?

Should we run around naked? CAn the world handle that? I am overweight and wondering about that. What is expected of us? If we are all that we could be, would the world be ready?
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Review of The Jar with Ears  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Pretty cool piece. It is a kind of, "YOu wonder how these things get started."

Inanimate objects do have personalities. Police lights always get an ,"Oh no."

I like the philosophy here. We can never do everything, but we can do something. Society, by in large has stopped trying. Your scene setting is priceless. I have been in stores like this

Quotes start with a capital. Possible could have quotes in a quote like family way
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Review of King of My Pond  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I like this. I am not sure if I have known some sensuous frogs, but Frenchman never tell. It is very conversational. I never would have thought frogs were great talkers. You tell most of it through dialogue.

One of your compound sentences is joined by a comma. A midsentence quote is missing a capital. Small issues for a frog I suppose.

You pull off a frog's eye view of the universe. You even make the frog a chauvenist.
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Review of love  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece Who doesn't love the subject of love? Who understands it, without a bit of craziness

Overall impression of piece This is kind of a come-along-side type of piece that works aslong as we believe you

Grammatical and spelling errors: Quotes begin with a capital

What I liked?*Smile* YOu do have examples of perceived love, but they tend to be a bit cliche. I love love crosses out flaws. It is just them

Points to Ponder:*Idea* There are a ton of cliches in here, like actions speak larger than words. You have kind of set yourself up as the resident expert on love. There are innumerable resources, especially the Bible and Jesus. You spoke of this generally; we don't become an expert until we wrestle with it permanently

How the piece made me feel I have been married for 46 years and counting. It changes

Hope this helps. Use my ideas as your creativity alchemy deems fitting.



Peace and beauty in freefall
MichaelFrom Mountains
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