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Rated: E | (3.0)
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Why I chose this piece I did another piece and have done others. I am ex Navy

Overall impression of piece: I like the idea of this. Most stories are simple and are taken from somewhere.

Grammatical and spelling errors Drug-addicted with a hyphen. First sentence is definitely a run on and is hard to follow. Wondering probably is waundering, unless he was an unusually pensive fellow. There actually are mainly run on sentences here. Dashes are two hyphens put together, no spaces

What I liked?*Smile* I like that you gave a source for this. It is an amazing story. I have one I have adapted on "Wrong way Corrigan"

Points to Ponder:*Idea*: Don't be afraid to give us more. If you don't know all the facts, you can extrapolate on what you know or just debate them

How the piece made me feelThere is a bit of the storyteller here that can be developed.

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Peace and beauty in freefall
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Why I chose this piece I like essays and write a lot of them. Jackie O is from my generation

Overall impression of piece: Definitely a subject dear to my heart. I have been married 45 years and have done Bible studies

Grammatical and spelling errors : Quotes start with a capital. The first sentence is a run-on sentence. Can't end the last sentence with a dash>

What I liked?*Smile* Important topic handled in an informal and personal way

Points to Ponder:*Idea*: I need more of what you think

How the piece made me feel The point is, "Sell yourself to the highest bidder?" I kind of miss the personal angle here. Are we willing to invest in our marriages? Without that, they will fail. I don't think Jackie O made it to her third marriage

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Review of She Lingers  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece This came up on a random review

Overall impression of piece I am pretty familiar with ebola

Grammatical and spelling errors Reads well. Well punctuated.

What I liked?*Smile* This is personal and experiential in an area that is hard to describe.

Points to Ponder:*Idea* This is about a man but the reference to she is a little obscure. I think the hospital could be brought out more which would increase the whole pathos of the situation

How the piece made me feel Do we flee from pain into hospitals? Interesting. I think you are right. There is little solace there. We think we are not still hunted by predators. Some of them are very small

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Review of Opposites  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece This came up on a random review. I am well acquainted with your work

Overall impression of piece You definitely get the full range of expression from seemingly simple words.

Grammatical and spelling errors: No errors. Reads well

What I liked?*Smile* What are we as a society? We are definitely googling more than librarying. You have educated language as well as not so much

Points to Ponder:*Idea* This is a lot of words and lines. You have an issue to determine at the end of the piece of so what? Maybe you could end with meaning and paradox

How the piece made me feel Perhaps didn't hit me where I live.

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Review of Two Adams  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece This is a pretty good piece and a very credible effort. Thanks for printing the prompt and the verse. People don't generally look them up. Saw it in the spiritual newsletter.

Overall impression of piece This is pretty good. There is always an earthiness in good theology

Grammatical and spelling errors: Reads well. No errors

What I liked?*Smile* You have definitely got the Eden curse down. It is simple and direct. Your characterization of Jesus as the second Adam is good

Points to Ponder:*Idea* The first Adam is generally considered the one of creation. The second Adam is generally considered Christ. The antichrist just kind of confuses things

How the piece made me feel Paul doesn't describe it this well.

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Review of The Blue Hour  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece I thought I would go for this one. I, too, have a hard time getting things reviewed

Overall impression of piece: The picture is worth a thousand words. Thanks for including it

Grammatical and spelling errors: reads well. No errors

What I liked?*Smile* Loved the footnote. I always read those. There is a certain feeling that comes up with scenes like this one

Points to Ponder:*Idea* Maybe some science as to what this is might help. Kind of describing things, third person takes some of the immediacy out of the description

How the piece made me feel I have seen this and felt this. I know of what you speak. I am not sure what you felt.

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Review of The Final Answer  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Why I chose this piece I bookmarked this as interesting. Part of our port raid

Overall impression of piece: We will scarcely know the future when it comes. Old people, like me will say, "It never was this way before. This kind of looks like a prologue to something much bigger.

Grammatical and spelling errors , and a period together seems odd

What I liked?*Smile* Mankind is designed to squabble. I doubt if that will ever go away. We will definitely be different.

Points to Ponder*Idea* You have things introduced that you don't tell us how they fit it--like AI. First two paragraphs don't seem to add anything to the story. This really doesn't give a reason why it was written

How the piece made me feel: Magic needs to be spun. Use more elements and unless it pertains to your story, don't bring it in
Definitely write something in your bio. It helps us as reviewers.
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Review of Dream  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Why I chose this piece This is a piece for a "raid function." I found this of interest and bookmarked it

Overall impression of piece: What is real in terms of extraordinary ambition? Are we children of the universe?

Grammatical and spelling errors reads pretty well. Perhaps a little more punctuation

What I liked?*Smile* We are looking at life from a different plane. It is not 9-5

Points to Ponder*Idea*This has got real possibilities. What would a real hero look like and feel like? What would feeling stars be like? There is a lot of "I" in here. I am looking for feelings that can be grasped. I have no idea where "here" is

How the piece made me feel You are on the right track. We should be extraordinary but shy away from it. It is helpful to fill out your port descriptions and bio. As reviewers, we really look at that. Everest is called the dead zone because if you die in the final ascent, no one has the energy to bring you back down

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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Why I chose this piece I saw this in newbie pieces and in essays. I love essays and history

Overall impression of piece This is definitely a complex topic for a very short essay. It is definitely valid for our state and time

Grammatical and spelling errors Until with only one l

What I liked?*Smile* This is a good attempt and certainly fits my world view. Revelations say wisdom will depart our leaders in the last days

Points to Ponder:*Idea* Was Washington directing this or was he a product of his time. 52 of 55 of the signers were good church men. Adams would say that without Christian morality that the laws would be unable to be kept. I think we are seeing that. I need specifics on how they are altering the course. I am a profound Christian, but I need specifics as to what you think is happening. Have we forsaken the nation or forsaken God? 45 years seems arbitrary and I have no idea what it refers to

How the piece made me feel Yoou obviously well read. I appreciate that. Maybe some footnotes might be in order.

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Review of Hollow Singing  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece I saw this in a newbie newsletter and I thought some comments might be in order. I volunteer at an aquarium and astound kids that the sound they hear is the ocean that is inside of their ear. It is echoed back to them as ocean waves

Overall impression of piece Ninety percent of people have no idea about sea shells

Grammatical and spelling errors Seems alright. Reads well

What I liked?*Smile* Can we get a message from the universe? Do we know how to listen?

Points to Ponder:*Idea* This is kind of negative. A lot of people have delved into the mystery. Don't give up.

How the piece made me feel We are part of the ocean of life. Even our blood is sea water in terms of salinity. I tell kids that the only way to talk to a mermaid is on a shell phone. (young crowd). We get our best understanding of the universe when we understand it.

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Review of Stars Born  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece Returning a review of your very nice review of my piece

Overall impression of piece You can go a long way with this. Poetic form is good. It rendered questions

Grammatical and spelling errors Reads well. No errors

What I liked?*Smile* The whole world is based on cosmic dust. What happens to humans on death? They return to star dust and probably start the whole process over again. Interesting rhymes. Definiely gives a cosmic perspective.

Points to Ponder:*Idea* Lurks is an interesting word. I had to look it up. Often it means a hideout or a someone who does something deceptively. Stars kind of are just there. Humans, by contrast, are [retty transient

How the piece made me feel This is very descriptive of something we couldn't possibly put our minds around. I am not sure what any of this actually means as an individual

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Review of Darkness  
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Rated: E | (3.0)
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Why I chose this piece This is a requested review

Overall impression of piece: This seems pretty honest

Grammatical and spelling errors: Your sentences have a lot of clauses kind of running together. They verge on run on sentences. I would be a subject. Me would be more of an object. I suggest me

What I liked?*Smile* Darkness overpowers colors. That is even true in the physical world. We need a certain amount of light to see richness. I get the despair in this. There is always hope in a new day. Internal eclipse is a very powerful metaphor

Points to Ponder:*Idea* This is so descriptive, I kind of lose the person involved.. This is a first person account, but you kind of lose some of that with all the descriptive clauses

How the piece made me feel Please let us know a bit about you in your port. Reviewers really need to know something of whom they are reviewing

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Why I chose this piece This was on a review forum

Overall impression of piece: I like what you are trying to do here

Grammatical and spelling errors: Because I am learning is a phrase and not a complete sentence. Self-induced with a hyphen

What I liked?*Smile* Ilike the thought that creation is malleable

Points to Ponder:*Idea* I would explain what is supposed to be a critical statement like greatness is doing what most people won't

How the piece made me feel Our steps in the process are a part of the journey. Most writers need rewrites. The painting, "Last Supper," had many renditions. He couldn't get Jesus right. There is an interaction between the artist and the piece of work. We are universe makers. We want people to see what we see.

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Review of Inner Fires  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Why I chose this piece This is part of the spiritual newsletter. I write a lot of stuff like this

Overall impression of pieceL I get some of this from a feeling level

Grammatical and spelling errors: Lots of sentence fragments

What I liked?*Smile* There are a lot of good images here

Points to Ponder:*Idea* This is personal yet you write about it in the third person. I think you know a lot more than you let us in on. What freezes our souls? I would extend these images so that they can be felt more fully.

How the piece made me feel O'Neil would write about not going gently into that good night. I expect that was cold too

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Review of Divine Unity  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece This is part of the shameless plug page.

Overall impression of piece: Words are powerful. We have to consider where they come from.

Grammatical and spelling errors: Reads well. No errors

What I liked?*Smile* There is a cosmic view point in this. I have to consider what you say

Points to Ponder:*Idea* Are words kindled by the Spirit or is the author. I would consider the second. The author creates with words. They are tools.

How the piece made me feel A lot of these faiths that seem so distinctive, have a lot of sismilairites

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece This was part of the shameless plug page.

Overall impression of piece: This is honest and pretty forthright

Grammatical and spelling errors: No errors. Reads well

What I liked?*Smile* You have a lot of swirling imagery. Some of it is well known and easy to identify

Points to Ponder:*Idea* Windmill of our minds and twirling are pushing cliche.Also rabbit hole. Cock is ticking. Alice in Wonderland probably has a lot of drug things in it.

How the piece made me feel I think there is a story here, but I kind of lose exactly what it is.

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Review of INTERCONNECTION  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece I saw this in the spiritual newsletter.

Overall impression of piece You certainly havae a unique perspective on this

Grammatical and spelling errors: Two spaces after a period

What I liked?*Smile* Definitely a cosmic view of everyday reality

Points to Ponder:*Idea* Cosmos and universe tend to be synoymous in most folks way of thinking. I would define how you are defining universe. I believe that a universe has individual laws that designate its purpose and meaning. I am a universe./ I can buy that. I have billions of cells

How the piece made me feel Do 9 billion universes make the world easier to understand?

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Review of Love's Surprise  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Why I chose this piece This came up on a random review

Overall impression of piece: I could give this a one word review. "Wow."

Grammatical and spelling errors Reads very well. No errors

What I liked?*Smile*. We can separate in Marriage and not have lasting disaster is the common view of marriage...We do grow into each other so it is hard to know where one starts and the other ends. Of course there is attraction and yearning. We are all human and we need each other

Points to Ponder:*Idea* Can't think of anything

How the piece made me feel I hope you pursued this. There are differences. There always are. It is a miracle to find each other and keep finding the other

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Review of The Gardener  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Why I chose this piece This came up on a random review.

Overall impression of piece: This inspired a lot of thought.

Grammatical and spelling errors Reads well. No errors

What I liked?*Smile* I like the God pronouns capitalized. It could have been very confusing. Interesting rhymes that do not seem forced.

Points to Ponder:*Idea* Thinking of your heart in the third person is a little awkward

How the piece made me feel I start with the bottom of the review in this case. Pain and strife always come. We often get through it by helping others. Fixing hearts is always an inside job. God changes us from the inside out. We are "New Creations." (Romans 12:1-2) We also have to doe to our old ways

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Review of Love Poem  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Why I chose this piece This came up on a random review

Overall impression of piece Love is a very particular subject. It come up a lot

Grammatical and spelling errors NO errors. Reads pretty well

What I liked?*Smile* There are interesting rhythms and rhymes in this

Points to Ponder:*Idea* Love is everywhere? How about in abuse and un incarcaration. Love soaring to great heights approaches cliche. You have told us all the things love is, but there is no description to have us feel like you do

How the piece made me feel Love is the ultimate enigma. Sometimes it is unrequited.

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Review of Dream Job  
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Rated: E | (3.0)
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Why I chose this piece sometime bookmark things that interest me. This one caught my eye

Overall impression of piece This is quite succinct

Grammatical and spelling Bachellor of Divinity with caps

What I liked?*Smile* liked how the prompt was spelled out. Brevity is the soul of wit. I do get the essence of this

Points to Ponder:*Idea* You have kind of given us your whole life history. It really doesn't seem to tie in to why you aregoing in this direction. I can imagine (as a christian0 what this might look like bit give us a little more connections of Christ to the Psyche. What will you new job look like?

How the piece made me feel I am envious of where you are going with this. I can certainly see a need.

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Review of Flow  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Why I chose this piece I havaen't reviewed you for awhile

Overall impression of piece:This is pretty well crafted. Flow has been studied in Book forrm in a book labelled flow with an author with an impossible last name

Grammatical and spelling errors: Reads well. No errors

What I liked?*Smile* Rhyme and cadence seem to make this flow in its own unique way. A poem on flow should have that.

Points to Ponder:*Idea* I kind of see a God thing in the "One." Maybe some could use an introduction

How the piece made me feel This is artistic and goes beyond the science of flow.. This is compact and to the point

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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece You reviewed one of my pieces. Your topic struck home with me

Overall impression of piece: Are we living in an insane assylum? Do the inmates have all the keys?

Grammatical and spelling errors: Reads well. No errors

What I liked?*Smile* We do have a schism between religious right and our new modern man and woman. They are dumb, and they don't even know it. If it is not on their phone, they know nothing

What I disliked*Idea* This seems pretty close to a rant. These have been written a long time. I think TS Elliot wrote, "Not with a bang, but a wimper.

How the piece made me feel How much does a quiet revolution cost. We, the people have fermented revolution befoore.. Jefferson would say we need regular ones to stay healthy. This is thought provoking, but is kind of hopeless

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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece Iam aware of this contest and take great interest in it

Overall impression of pieceL|: Life is complex and in the heart and mind of God himself

Grammatical and spelling errors: All quotes start with a capital. I am not sure about quoting a part of a referenced book?

What I liked?*Smile* This is a complicated chapter and you have explained it extremely well

What I disliked*Idea* What does thismean to couples today? We have one of the lowest fertility rates in the world. Malachi 2 talks about children and families and it is pretty specific what God wants. What about aborted kids? The numbers are staggering. This all has staggering implications

How the piece made me feel Congratulations on your 7 kids. It is what you will be remembered for

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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece I like this verse to. Nothing much more specific than this one:

Overall impression of piece: iget where you are coming from. This is powerful

Grammatical and spelling errors: Dashes have no spaces before or after.

What I liked?*Smile* This is personal and too the point. It is a promise. Of course, it works

What I disliked*Idea* inevitably makes it sound that you don't have free will. Perhaps a different word.

How the piece made me feel Change is so bloody hard. If we confess and really don't want to change, is it true confession. Peter asked how many times do I forgive, and Peter said 7x70. Which I think is His way of saying alot. I think and feel we have to keep praying and confessing our failures. This is book material

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