Why I chose this piece You reviewed one of my pieces. Your topic struck home with me
Overall impression of piece: Are we living in an insane assylum? Do the inmates have all the keys?
Grammatical and spelling errors: Reads well. No errors
What I liked? We do have a schism between religious right and our new modern man and woman. They are dumb, and they don't even know it. If it is not on their phone, they know nothing
What I disliked This seems pretty close to a rant. These have been written a long time. I think TS Elliot wrote, "Not with a bang, but a wimper.
How the piece made me feel How much does a quiet revolution cost. We, the people have fermented revolution befoore.. Jefferson would say we need regular ones to stay healthy. This is thought provoking, but is kind of hopeless
Hope this helps. Use my ideas as your creativity alchemy deems fitting.
Peace and beauty in freefall