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Review of One Day  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
I am unaware of the poetic version you list. Many will leave a note as to what they had in mind or a footnote. It is kind of a catchy little piece. It does flow pretty well. The ressurrection and our ressurections seem to be the same thing.

We don't need perfection because we'll never get there. That is what Christ's sacrfice was about. We strive to be like Him
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Pretty cool piece. I cab see and feel all of this. It is definitely scripted to ensure certain recollections, As a reader, I was there. Putting all the sights and sounds gives it its realism

I sense though you mean bathe not bath. It is not about cleaning but immersing
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Review of We will survive?  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I like starting with gods with a small g. No we haven't had a promotion. Interesting the Nature is capitalized. Nature is our fate. We our natural beings.

WE are fighting in a hell of our own making. What do we do to be blessed by God? Maybe the right thing regardless of our own personal advantage would be a start.

I think there is more here. I find poetry a little confining, so I don't write much

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Review of Theopathy  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I pretty much get this. I think I too am a thinker in a world that kind of says "Duh". Do we lack the ability to quest after truth? What happened to that? I think Simon and Garfunkle had a song called the dangling conversation.

Can we be real? Are we willing to meet each other wherever we are right now.

Pretty cool piece
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Review of Bottle of Love  
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
I kind of like this. Saw this advertised on a side bar. Of course I have been married for 46 years so aged wine ain't so bad. It is evocative. Drunk young might be a noun or a verb. There is no doubt about what you mean.

Picky, but WDC can be that way. I would upgrade its rating to 13 or 18. We have a lot of young kids on the site. Personally, I found nothing objectionable.

Michael
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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
I saw this unspiritual work and looked at it. Your work has so many banners by it. I thought they were the United Nations.

I never thought of a brown leaf as an ocean survivor. We are all part of a continuum. Shakespeare said it well with his stages of life

It might work better if you start with an I marrator in verse one. Maybe let the child play in the leaves. "Scrunch"
There is a lot of feeling in this work
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Are you right? Of course you are. Yes it is a rant

Is epidemiology and disease control about being decent? I am not sure of this. Either people will agree whole heartedly or they will blow you off as another rant. Maybe something about the virus or droplet infection.

During polios hey day,people did little to control it before the vaccine. They simply did not understand it. We do today

You are right. Something to convince them might be more effective.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece Interested in the virus. Have a science background

Overall impression of piece: The world is still fighting rabies from the early 1900. It is still endemicin three counties. I have apiece in my history section

Grammatical and spelling errors Some punctuation before the quote, at least a comma. I might use a colon, Comma after Sussex. This is an appositive. After relief, a question mark

What I liked?*Smile* Conclusions are justified. You have real facts to back you up. Liked your use of quotes, except for punctuation

Points to Ponder:*Idea* Could use some references. At the very least, include a url

How the piece made me feel You are on the right track

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Peace and beauty in freefall
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Why I chose this piece Who is not interested in what we are going through

Overall impression of piece I am assuming Christian with the Lord noted. (Do capitalize) I am getting something out of this too

Grammatical and spelling errors ??. is unusual

What I liked?*Smile* I do like the poetic things in here. I feel those

Points to Ponder:*Idea* You say a lot of things but don't give particulars--like driving animals to extinction. Our importance is directed towards health. Would be better if purpose or something

How the piece made me feel Do we live in a poetic world or a thought one? I personally think we need more thought.

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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece Part of the self help section

Overall impression of piece: You definitely know what you think and there is little equivocating

Grammatical and spelling errors: Reads well. No errors

What I liked?*Smile* Pretty defined format.

Points to Ponder:*Idea* We are kind of defined in how we interact with others. A lot of this is about what you think. There is more . Feelings define us too. Images would tell us more about your journey of self-discovery

How the piece made me feel Socrates said know thy self. Speaking of that, fill in your bio block. It does help us as reviewers.

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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece I am perusing non fiction

Overall impression of piece: These are not simple times, to say the least

Grammatical and spelling errors One picky point. Generally simple numbers are spelled out. Wella is kind of hard to know what you are saying.

What I liked?*Smile* This is entertaining. We have a 75 year old farm house on an acre or so. We have an eagle in the back yard that thinks the place is his He announces it with a distinctive call. I saw and felt your circumstances

Points to Ponder:*Idea* None significant

How the piece made me feel You achieved your purpose. Just had some picky points.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Interesting thoughts. I too am an Amazon fanatic. There is a legalistic outlook of many conservative Christians that say blood of Jesus but have absolutely no idea what it means. In the Old Testament, our sins were covered by the sacrifice of animals. No one says we were under that sort of blood. Some hymn writers made the concept very popular

Jesus covers our sins by His own sacrifice. We are no way good enough on our own. It is more symbolic that anything, but we do live by symbols, a lot. GDP and the like. I am not sure those are great symbols to live by.

I take this as entirely tongue-in-cheek. Our church has been entirely electonic for month with no end in sight. Disaster will eventually run its course. We survived a lot in terms of epidemics. Entertainment would get a five. Relevance to anything a 4
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Rated: E | (4.5)
This is a pretty cool poem. We think that are manuvering means something, but it in essence does not. We are to be a reflection of the creator. Buisness is not a good character reference.

Picky point. Deceit is a noun. Perhaps deceive would be better.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
This is a pretty cool piece on a fascinating subject. The average person probable doesn't know much about this. I do have Quaker heritage. Ilike all the physical details you put in about the place. It was almost like being there.

Do we reform prisoners or incarcerate them? It has been a plaquing questions. Many of the men in solitary contemplation went quite insane. It was pretty much deemed cruel and unusual. They meant well,but some experience helps a lot.

There is an emotional and spiritual element of this that could be brought out more
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I read a couple of your virus pieces. They seem to contradict each other as fake news and now this one. From what I can tell, there seems to be more concern with closing our borders to illegals. It may be an insurmountable obstacle. I think it is a flood tide. Spanish as a second language would never have been considered a generation ago.

This kind of come off as a rant and you may be right. We have never been good at this. It started with Nafta as we were going to have a continental approach. It was probably a bad approach. On the other hand, can we say that their end of the boat is sinking?.

Its complicated. It might need a bit more depth
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Review of Faith and Freedom  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece This was in an old newsletter. I like history

Overall impression of piece: You have a lot of facts about a giant in our county's history

Grammatical and spelling errors Simple numbers like seven hundred probably should be spelled out. You have a block format, which generally meansa line in between paragraphs. It can be hard to read on screen

What I liked?*Smile* I like your tying Tubmans issues to your own. We all do have issues. The inequality brings them out.

Points to Ponder:*Idea* Your ties to social inequality and societal could be brought out more. With slavery, the inequalities were obvious. I too believe they still exist. Most would not pick up on this without some help. She saved 700 slaves but how she did that could be brought out

How the piece made me feel You did a lot of work on this. A footnote or two might be helpful. I have history stuff on my site
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Review of Dreams  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
This came up on a random review. I have wrestled with this myself. Why don't we all go out and change the world to something better? There are a lot of reasons, most of them have to do with fear. Sometimes the vision to act is not strong enough so we kind of waffle about our life.

Because.. sentence starts with a clause and then become a compound sentence. More of a stream on consciousnsess than grammatical

Dreams is what happens at night. I think what you are talking about is a vision. We get whipers from on high. We're not used to them so, we kind of ignore them
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Review of The Pandemic  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
I like science. I have a background in Pathology and am glad I am not doing autopsies any more. I did several cases of Jacob Creutzfeldt virus where those infected all die within two years.

I think you have some science in here, although you need to define things a bit better so everyone knows what you are talking about and why it is relevant, to them. Your core descriptions were a bit vague. I liked how you brought up the animal reservoir. They think Ebola came from there. Marburg virus sat on the pier for weeks,and ended up not really effecting many--except most of them died. The key to writing a credible article is showing you are competent and why they should believe you.


Good idea about a footnote, so we can look things up. I did

Michael
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Review of Chosen Paths  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece Part of the Newbies newsletter. Welcome to WDC

Overall impression of piece You have some pretty heady thoughts here.

Grammatical and spelling errors Path of sin is pathed with thorns. Excessive drug abuse...is a little abuse ok?

What I liked?*Smile* There is a lot going on here that could call for Godly intervention

Points to Ponder:*Idea* Jesus never knew sin but had trials and tribulations even before his death. Job was a righteous man and God allowed Satan to do evil. Maybe some of the evil is a result of a rebellious world, but not all of it

How the piece made me feel God loved sinners in Jesus day. I think it is His native language. We are called to love each other, especially in hard times

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Rated: E | (4.0)
He didn't really write the "I have a dream segment." Aretha Franklin was on the Podium with him and said, "Martin. Tell them about the dream." It was totally extemporanease. The papers omited it the next day because it was not what he had planned to say.

I roomed with a black man in college in 1973. People did think I was kind of weird. You have got some good data about economic racism. I too believe it is still real. Taking one event and launching off of that is perhaps a bit over the top.

TGhis isn't the 60's or the 70's Freedom is a tricky process.. I personally don't look at color as any kind of a barrier in my life. No, I am not black
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Who knows what will come next. The writer of those original words had no idea. Many say that he eventually went crazy himself.

You have a lot going on here. Your images are evocative as causing certain emotions. We all seem to be getting ready for a storm these days. What do we do and whose are we?

Most of these verses are in third person. It misses some of the immediacy of all these things happening to you,a person. You describe it well, but there is something about being there.
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Review of Body, Mind, Soul  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
I am afraid what these three lines portray is more common than most think. Your bio(which I always read) told me a lot more about this than the poem did.

You are not the only one like this. I hang out with lizards at the aquarium where I volunteer. I can be bored in my life and I know that there is something more.

Your reader wants to know what this feels like. You have had heavy duty things going on. I'd plant moon flowers
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I pretty much read all of this (some skimmed). This type of outlook is the stuff of today. I realize the writing is academic. They have their own special brand of non-communication. They don't say anything simply. It is not their way.

This is valid--very valid. When I went through college way back when, my academic interest survey listed eight things. They were all very varied. Circumstances and a pretty young thing who wanted to be married definitely had an influence.

Did I make a right choice? The answer would be yes and no. It was very satisfying for many years. It could have been something else. We are kind of regimented on the way we make decisions. I think the general public is starting to realize that.

It is not all about education 0 to 25, work for 4 decades and then die. You might read The Three boxes of Life
People need help. They may not make a fortune but maybe they won't have to

Obviously, you wrote this for stuffy academic types. I've done it too. The subject is fascinating but you have to be able to bring everyone along with you. I rated this based on the original purpose for which it was written. This is a book for the common person
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece I saw this is newbie reviews
Overall impression of piece

Grammatical and spelling errors Reads well. No obvious errors

What I liked?*Smile* Talks about people who were centuries ahead of their times. The answer is there. Are we willing to listen?

Points to Ponder:*Idea* I am not aware of MLK being nighted. Sir would imply that. When you use they, it is indeffiniate about who they are. It loses some of its punch

How the piece made me feel We should all have a dream. Lincoln didn't really back sufferage but was against forced slavery

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Peace and beauty in freefall
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Why I chose this piece I have long been interested in the topic

Overall impression of piece: This is pretty right on. You have most of the salient facts

Grammatical and spelling errors No errors. Reads well

What I liked?*Smile* You have a great deal of factual stuff here that most would not know. Well researched and put together

Points to Ponder:*Idea* This is a folklore contest. Generally, there is a fact that makes folk lore work. It doesn't even have to be true. Think George Washington and the Cherry Tree. December 25'th was the "Featst of the invinsible sun. It seems gone but will be back. Christians would say "We have an invincible SON too

How the piece made me feel The true origins off Christmas may never be known. Sometimes these things just happen. I agree / December 25'th is not the day. What is the main thing. Mrs of Christmas is a time to worship

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