Hello Amity this is Funnyface. Welcome to writing.com. If I can help you in any way, just e-mail me.
I am so sorry that you had to go through such horrible abuse by your Father. The story you told is filled with vivid details of actions he took.Horrible deeds, especially to a little one. I find this poem is heart wrenching and your ending is very strong.
Hugs of comfort to draw on if you need them.
Good evening writes-a-lot777 welcome to writing.com. If I can help you find your way around, I am just an e-mail away. I am so sorry your friend lost her Mother to death at such a young age. I also lost my mother when I was a wee kid, before school age. Death is so final, and I don't think a child will ever get over the lost. I think your friend must feel that you are there to listen to her. You are a sweetie to let her talk about her Mother and deal with her sorrow.
Hello poetrygirl. Your little poem on Depression says so much. It plagues so many of us that we can visualize it coming a calling at our doors. I know that when we are depressed it does way to often feel as if we are in it's icy grips. You used your words wisely here and did a magnificent job describing depression.
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I can never imagine being able to write a song. Lyric is something I don't think I can master, so I am impressed when I read the ones people write. I know many people will relate to the words in this song. So many need to wonder where they stand in a relationship, or if the other person really cares. Love should be kind, caring and sharing. It should be giving, supporting and certainly a strong friendship. We all deserve to be loved and cherished.
Such a lovely love poem. I like how you express how much you love for him/her and in the various way. It is so important to communicate that love. My favorite part is the verse next to the last especially the last four lines. I also think I found a typo error, "To afraid to trust they woman" The word in red. I really liked this poem.Good job!
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Hello poetrygirl, this is Funnyface dropping by toshow my appreciation for your visit to my port.
"Never Really Whole To Begin With" is a heartfelt poem. I am so sorry your heart is broken. I really believe love is being treated like fine china. Cherished, respected, and help in high esteem. I hope you find some one that will really love you.
All the best and I think your poem is simply lovely.
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This poem touches my heart. Lady_lily you have such feeling and passion in this poem. I lost my Mother at an early age so I can only wish I could recall my mother to be able to write about A great job, and i want to congratulate you for having works published.
Hello Sherri I am reviewing an item of your to show my appreciation for you reviewing a story of mine.I choose to read "Go Away"
I find you have deep emotions here, I sense that you might be torn, thinking it might be better if he went away, yet still you want him to stay. I know when this occurs it can cause a lot of heartache and pain. I watch my daughter go through something like this, I often cry with her. A heart felt poem and well written. Hugs of comfort!
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Hello Kiara this is Funnyface. I notice you are fairly new here and I want to welcome you. If there is any questions you might have about your way around here. I will be happy to answer them.
Your poem here is short but very beautiful. I can picture those stars rolling across the darkened sky..they certainly are gems sparkling on valet on high. Nice subject and a nice job with the content. It is a pleasure to read it.
Hello Nathan this is Funnyface. Welcome to Writing.com we are happy you joined, if I can help in any way I am an e-mail away.
I enjoyed your story here very much. I recall my sons rooms when you were describing the cloths on the floor. I like how you build suspense in this story. Where had everyone gone..what happened to the television. I can see you adding another chapter to this or adding on to this. The only suggestions I would make are between paragraphs leave a empty line and the second thing would be to change the word Mike on the beginning of one of the chapters. You could use He or whatever. Keep writing this is nice!
Hello Cool and Cozy Cougar I dropped by to read one of your items to thank you for a review of one of mine. I chose Maury.
What a wonderful heart toughing story. I loved reading every word of it but must admit I had misty eyes by the time it ended.
Your story is strong throughout, and I wouldn't change a word here. It is filled with love..of a dog and humans,experimental where Muray got the chip, it courage and bravery. It has emotions that caused me to smile in a few place and cry in others. This story made great use of dialogue.
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Wow Allacea, this is indeed a perfect wedding night. I just wish every young woman would wait and have a wedding night as beautiful as this one.
I really liked your descriptive writing, you have filled the story full of love and romance but the best part of all is your fine details.
Keep writing.
Raynie, I must say this poem is powerful..so many times when one is in a relationship filled with lies, they do become twisted and become one. It is so sad when someone or something kills their spirit and are no longer who they once were. Love is not suppose to be like that.I am so sorry to whomever is going through this as it destroys the spirit. It is a forum of abuse. Great emotions expressed here.
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Mam maw Broken Childhood is so very sad. I relived my life as I read your words. I lived in many foster homes..and still I was never prepared for the loneliness missing my siblings. I think to know we were in foster homes and they only have us because of the money is heart breaking to the foster children. I could never figure out what I did wrong that they could never love me. I know sweetie, how hard it had to be on you. Were you able to stay in contact with your parents and siblings?
Pensive, how encouraging, both to you for being able to make the call to the mental health center, and to spoken to Norma. She was an inspiration to you, by encouraging you. I love how she told you that God understood your anger and frustration. How comforting this must have been. Do I believe Norma was an angel. I believe we have angels administering to us many times, times we might not take notice of. Indeed Norma was your angel.
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Wow, what a touching story. You captured me with your your descriptive writing. and I felt as I was in the dark prison. I can feel fear, fear of never departing, fear of the guard and of the rats. I feel loneliness, when the birds never come to your window, I sense despair as you wonder if you will ever escape. Your ending is the most powerful part of this story.. as you are about to escape you are drawn back in, and as you tear the mask off the guard, you see yourself staring back at you.. How clever.
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Simply a delightful poem. You have captured the essences of friendship in the words of your poem. Yes it is always a sign of true friendship when a person thinks of another instead of them selves. I never thought about a friend loving us even if it is not returned,and so many do understand what we are trying to say even if we can't put it in words. My favorite is the third two lines. A great job here, and I would like to be a friend to you like that.
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Heart wrenching! If anyone can understand your fears, concerns and worry about a missing son I do. Never give up hope. We went twenty years without any word, so I know the sleepless nights. I prayed so many prayers as did our family. If I can help you in any way please don't hesitate to e-mail me. I will pray for George. I know how afraid, lonely and hurt you are, and how it can make you ill. Hugs of comfort. Funnyface
Hello Dianne dropping by to say hello. I like this poem "Time On My Hands". I think sometimes it is nice to have some time on our hands to do the things we enjoy. I know how lonely we would be if we had to much time on our hands. I got a kick as you describe what your hands looks like. Take comfort we all that are getting older has the same type of hands. A nice subject we can relate to and nicely written.
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John I do believe that some people will put their life on the line to save another. I only hope I would have the courage to do so if I was in that position. I guess I couldn't do it by myself but by He who strengthens me. . This is really what I needed to read tonight. You are in my Hubby's and my prayers. Always know you are thought of and loved by all of us, your friends on writing.com
Oh John what a compassionate person you are. It is because you have served your country that you know how these people are feeling, what they see and that no amount of yelling will let them hear you. How kind to write this to let us know we should also pray for the families left back home.
Hello my dear friend John. I hope you are doing well, you are missed on this site. I am starting to feel better. I hope to get active again here. Do you miss the site? We miss you. It is hard to believe all the people that were killed or died because of wars and 9/11. Thank you for reminding us of this, especially at this time of the memorial weekend.
Good morning 1stephzen this is Funnyface. Welcome to writing.com if I can help you in any way I am an e-mail away.
I read your poem here about seeing with your heart and must say I like your title. I also see people as I preceive them not as they really are, I guess it is because we see good in people. It is true when we find people are not as we thought we do get disappointed. You have done a lovely job here on this poem, and congratulations for being highlighted in the newbie newsletter.
Good morning Raynie this is Funnyface. I am reviewing this poem to show my appreciations for you sharing the story of your pen name.
I found this poem to be sad in a way, to think you feel like you hide your face and that your identity is hidden. Your last verse is encouraging, and the last line gives HOPE. Yes you will be free, everyone deserves to be free. A lovely write and I see no errors.
Hello Kaileymarie this is Funnyface. I dropped by your port to read an item to show my appreciations for the gps you sent me today. This short story is really quite nice. I like your opening as you show us how you were settling in for the weekend. You have made great use using dialogs, and in a way that is so believable. I know this is how young adults do talk. Your plot continues to be strong. what a lovely ending as she {Meg) gets to go for pizza with Jack. Well written and I see no errors.
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