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Review Style
Newbie Style.. I am an Occasional reader. I am not a professional at anything really. I do some Beta Reading for friends once in a while. I can give perspective from an average Joe point of view.
I'm good at...
I am decent with grammar. I am honest and I am very good at being over positive and nice. It is one of my specialties.
Favorite Genres
Fantasy I could say is a Favorite but, I am not only limited to just that. I do not like these "What is your favorite questions". I like to explore everything.
Least Favorite Genres
I do not know. Let me get back to you on that please.
Public Reviews
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Review by Gaia Heap
In affiliation with The Newbies Academy Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Why does the class of Subjective 1911 not get a discount? Now you got my curiosity going. And what happened in 1891 with Cooger & Dark? An incident? What kind of incident? Tell me.. I want to know!

I guess I will just have to keep reading and see what comes up.


*Gold* My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!.
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Review by Gaia Heap
In affiliation with The Newbies Academy Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Ok... I am totally intrigued. I came across a writing of yours that explained a bit about steam engines and such in a newsletter. So I am now sifting through your port and landed here. Now... I must know more! So far, the way you write is comprehensible and climactic for me. If you will excuse me, I am going to rummage through some more of your port for my next fix.
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Review by Gaia Heap
In affiliation with The Newbies Academy Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
My what a nice place you all have here. I know absolutely nothing about writing poetry. I am here because I want to learn something new. What better way than to join a poetry group? I think one of the first things I will check out is the Library. Then I might hop on over to the cafe. Thanks for letting me peak inside.
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Review by Gaia Heap
In affiliation with The Newbies Academy Group  
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Ha ha! Nice. My Wife and I are working on de-cluttering and organizing. We donate what can be donated, repurpose what we can still use and recycle the rest. They are really good about recycling her in Germany.

I would show this poem to my Wife, but I wouldn't want her to get any ideas.*Smile*
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Review of Woodchester  
Review by Gaia Heap
In affiliation with The Newbies Academy Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
I like this story. You did a great job describing the environment. Though you did not give so much details on the Gargoyles, the words you used such as hideous, fierce and maniacal expressions was all I needed to get a good mental picture.

I did find the ending somewhat confusing.

"As it tasted my blood, I was transported."

Where was she transported to?
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Review of Bus Stop  
Review by Gaia Heap
In affiliation with The Newbies Academy Group  
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Great little horror story. Glad I read it during the day.

Very well written I think. It played out like a Twilight Zone show in my head. Bus stops at night in the rain are scary themselves. When you throw strangers into the mix, that just makes it all the more scary. I get a little chill when I think about that bloody smile. Ew...
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Review of The C-Word  
Review by Gaia Heap
In affiliation with The Newbies Academy Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Ha ha.. Clickbait... You got me there.. I wonder, is the word clickbait cliché?

I personally enjoy clichés. I learned many from my Mom and I treasure them greatly.

I do think that the younger generations need exposure to "Clichés". There is a great deal of wisdom behind many of them that the younger generations are not getting from the slang that seems to be taking over these days.

Once in a blue moon I may say to someone "That's so cliché". 99.99% of the time it's out of humour.

So please... Cliché on. Just maybe, you might say one I have yet to hear. But then again, how would I know it is a cliché if I've never heard it before?

Oh what mind boggling thoughts to be having at 5am.
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Review of MMO Zombies  
Review by Gaia Heap
In affiliation with The Newbies Academy Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Very informative. I enjoy RP games. Most what I ever played was on a video game console. I always wanted to play on the PC, but never new what games to look into. Do you have any suggestions? I know that lots of people play World of War Craft. Is that worth buying?
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Review by Gaia Heap
In affiliation with The Newbies Academy Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
How very interesting. People constructed such wonderful things in the past. Though many things were constructed of the backs of slaves and such, they are still something to be admired.

I am sure you are familiar with the phrase "They dont make them like they used to" How true that is. Modern times and technology has made humans so lazy. There are many Lighthouses still standing from days past that I would like to visit. Maybe when I retire my wife and I can do a world tour of Lighthouses. Let us just hope they are still there.

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Review of Gaia  
Review by Gaia Heap
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Lovely! You can imagine my excitement when I saw the tittle of this piece, as I am a fellow admirer of Gaia as well.

Your words flow poetically. I found myself longing to be in the house of Gaia, to go home again. It has been so long. Too long. You have given a piece of home back to me. If only for a moment. That will be a moment I take with me through the grueling days of what is my reality at this time in my life. Until I can make my way back home.

Thank you...

Gaia Heap...
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Review by Gaia Heap
In affiliation with The Newbies Academy Group  
Rated: E | (3.0)
This sentence needs the word "the":

Since then,"the" country has had its share of military rules and martial laws,

This sentence needs a "y":

The"y" are unable to understand the drastic changes in climate of Pakistan.

This sentence needs an "a":

A person living in "a" bungalow represents, a million living with tin sheets over their head, in the Assembly, oh the sad irony!

Couple things in this part:

Now try to guess the monthly income of a member of (the) National Assembly, or the LEADER (who are you referring to as "the leader"?). A leader (here are you referring to "the leader" or "a leader" in general?) of this poor country, where (the) majority are living from hand to mouth, gets more than Rs.100, 000(<~~ delete the space between the last three 0's and the coma) monthly, along with along with (here you have "along with" twice) entitlement to receive travel vouchers of Rs.300, 000 per annum. I’ll let that sink in.

It would sound better if you changed the word "getting" to something like "earning" in this next sentence:
One shouldn’t be concerned with what others are (earning) getting. They work hard for it.” Yes, one shouldn’t be concerned with what others are (earning) getting, but when the ‘others’ are your representatives, you have every right to know what they are getting and why,

"Thornless" is one word:
But when these thrones are thorn less,

One more thing is there are way too many comas (,). There are many places where it would be more understandable and flow better if you used a period (.) to end a sentence and start a new one.

Now... with all that aside. I really enjoyed reading this. I found your perspective on democracy in Pakistan fascinating.

Remember, this is my opinion. You can take or leave any suggestions. I would be willing to re-review after any changes you might make of it. Just let me know. *Smile*

P.S. I'm doing all this from my Kindle and its a bit difficult. I hope my review is comprehensible.

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Review by Gaia Heap
In affiliation with The Newbies Academy Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
I have a harder time giving reviews on poetry. I'm not familiar with how poetry is supposed to be structured and all that jazz. All I know is what sounds good or not good to me.

This here sounds lovely to me. Very melodic as the words are read in my head.
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Review by Gaia Heap
In affiliation with The Newbies Academy Group  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
What a sweet story. I was wondering about the name Casper in the beginning. Of course the first thing I think of is Casper the ghost. I thought that in this case it was just a guy named Casper. So as I read on I pushed the whole ghost things out of my mind. So in that way, you really got me in the end. Good job! I did not notice anything worthy of critiquing. I hope it's ok I gave you 5 stars. *Smile*
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Review of Randoms by Rach  
for entry "Busy Busy Busy
Review by Gaia Heap
In affiliation with The Newbies Academy Group  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I found WDC because of NaNoWriMo. I have a friend that I have done a little Beta reading for and she talked about doing some kind of NaNoWriMo camp. I was looking into what that was because I will be doing some more Beta reading and I wanted to learn more about being better at it. So it was interesting to me when I read this from you.

I used to play around with writing a little bit in my younger years. Now that I have found WDC, I am very interested in delving into it a bit more. I do not know if the Review section here is the best place to tell you all this. But hey.. Here it is anyways. I am enjoying reading your stuff. Thanks for sharing.
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Review of Randoms by Rach  
Review by Gaia Heap
In affiliation with The Newbies Academy Group  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
How strong you were to stand up to someone in an authoritative position.

Did you just admit to sneaking booze into Prom? Oh the things we can admit to when we are older. Do you know how life turned out for the Witch.. Ooops I mean Mrs. Sutherland? Maybe a mental hospital for schizophrenia?

Well, whatever happened to her, you at least turned out ok. *Smile*
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Review of Father Figure  
Review by Gaia Heap
In affiliation with The Newbies Academy Group  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
You certainly are a very clever individual. I hope all my reviews are not too positive. I just have not come across anything so far that I feel needs Critique.

What an interesting logic Father Figure has on Religion. You got me with the whole Melanoma bit. I do not know that I would agree with Father Figure about Atheism being a religion as more of an Organization of sorts. But still an interesting view on things.

I may not be Catholic anymore but, I think I will still have me a glass of Wine and continue raiding your Port. *Bottle4* *Glass2*
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Review of Picture....This!  
Review by Gaia Heap
In affiliation with The Newbies Academy Group  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Very interesting poetry/song on this Circus of elections. It is nice to be able to step back and poke a little fun. I like the way everything flowed together. I could hear the tune in the back round inside my head while reading the words.
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Review by Gaia Heap
In affiliation with The Newbies Academy Group  
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
How interesting. I never realized what a Crack Head Goldie is.

I like how you modernized the the story. Even using a little street lingo.

I don't have any constructive critique fir you. But do want you to know I got a kick out of it. Looking forward to checking out some more from you.
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Review by Gaia Heap
In affiliation with The Newbies Academy Group  
Rated: E
Great Poll! I'm doing most my reading adventures, Webbing on my Kindle at the moment. I'm not really a Writer, (YET) but when I do start Writing I will probably do it on the Notebook (aka small laptop) once my Wife gets it working properly. She's more the Computer Person, Handyman, Seafarer, Math doer in the head type person. Me, I'm still working on figuring out what my role is.
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