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Usually I review all genre pieces.
I'm good at...
Interpreting the author's viewpoint, correcting grammatical mistakes, to detect if anywhere anything hinders the flow and coherence and add suggestions only. I love to appreciate newbies.
Favorite Genres
Mystery, poetry, short stories, non-fiction
Least Favorite Genres
I dislike none because I do not wish to shut myself out of any spark of creativity.
Favorite Item Types
Short stories, poetry of any length
Least Favorite Item Types
None. I am open to everything.
I will not review...
Very long Novel chapters because I do not consider myself qualified to undertake that task. I also feel tired if there is too many grammatical mistakes.
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Review of Time  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Schnujo!
When everything was
Taller than I was
Sunlight and morning air like a pet monkey
Came leaping over me, nudging to play!
Distracted, in class
I looked out for snow
A sloth winked at me through its half closed eye.
A young man all strapping
Out for proms, interviews,
A date so cherished,
Like a terrier it capered
At my heels, faithful a pet
Following at my command.

When I rest on my stick
On my evening walk
Waiting to catch a wheezy breath
I spy behind
A streak of motion
On chase relentless,
I shudder and resume
My walk and my diet,
A cheetah after me
Relentless
Relentless.
The shades of your dream
Embody the truth
Your words release
The vision relentless
Will sure leap on me
In a flurry of fangs
Relentless
Relentless!

I give you... a poem in appreciation. Please write on!

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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
Hello Hooves!

A Disclaimer: All the comments are generated from my personal interpretation and spontaneous impression. As the author of this creation you are the sole and ultimate judge of what is best for your expression. I shall be very glad if my views can be of any help.

Title: The title is heralding the awakening of nature in Spring and is strongly backed up by the opening line.

Concept and appreciation: The poet celebrates the effervescence of flora and fauna in the warm spring sun. The second line of the opening stanza sets the tune of a new generation taking birth and rejoicing in their vitality. /c}.

Impression of the Idea: The 'fuzzy chicks', lambs, Bunnies, butterflies- all annul the wintry hibernation of nature slumbering a deathlike swoon, but still life does not abhor its 'hibernation'. Spring bids winter goodbye with a kiss and a whisper.The basset hound in its lethargic mien,snores while enjoying the warm sunshine.He is now more a picture of contentment than an apathy to life. *ThumbsUp*

Thematic Suggestion: 'Stubborn moon pursuit' seems to contain a lot of interpretations. We would like to glimpse more suggestions at them!

Grammar and vocabulary: Vocab is flicked and twisted like a master. Sentences flip back from their rigid typecasting and become a light shower of vibrant words. Brilliant!

Detailing: Details are nor very reverent towards themselves, they rather appear like crisp, apparently random brush strokes consolidating into a bright picture.

Style : Format is of a Haiku chain of 7 units. The surprise elements at the third lines made me smile: ' Inscrutable cows' (so true), Generation birth (a verb, I think).

Kudos and Applauds:
The light-handed skill and mood of play!

Areas to work on:1. none.
2. none.3. none.

My favourite expression:

Lambs frolic the fields
Bunnies hop through meadows green;
Inscrutable cows




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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Yes of course! This is a scintillating foretaste of what to come. This is a novel way of showcasing the authors' work and as well as a hooking advertisement.I am sure that everyone who reads these excerpts will immediately add them to favorites. It being a news feed activity and not a full-fledged contest, does not demand writing a new item, but hollers for attention all right! Thank you for this useful novelty.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
A Disclaimer: All the comments are generated from my personal interpretation and spontaneous impression. As the author of this creation you are the sole and ultimate judge of what is best for your expression. I shall be very glad if my views can be of any help.


*LeafY* Title
: An apt and heart wrenching message is contained in your title.The tribute has echoed in my mind making me envision your unshed tears at her bedside
*LeafY* Concept and The Underlying Idea:Your concept is your memory as an offering of tears to your child. I do not know how to critique that.
*LeafY* Form: I am no expert at recognizing forms. Still, I appreciate your flawless rhyme scheme.No rhyme does seem to be forced,it gives a natural flow to the poem.

*LeafY* Impression of the Idea:The opening lines tell all you wish to let out. You have had to watch her pain while you still have to make memories that would last you a lifetime.Tears would have to wait, they will have forever to flow after she would depart. In her painful hours, the beauty of the bright daffodils assume a poignancy because the beloved will take all beauty with her. The redemption promised still is beyond understanding because the heart is blinded with tears and fear for the imminent loss.

*LeafY* Thematic Suggestion:Nothing I dare.

*LeafY* Description:The state of mind of the suffering spectators is aptly and economically described.

*LeafY* Style of writing:The style is direct and sincere. No imagery is used, but the song of the sad heart has brought in an reverberating quality to the lines.

*Sun* My favourite expression: I cannot think of other things
While tears are waiting in the wings.


Please write more about the world full of pain and beauty that we all inhabit!

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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi Luis, you have a good narrative style combined with a sharp eye for details. There may not be many things 'happening' in your story but the sense of loss is depicted alright. The private time of peace Ryan enjoys is precious to him. the way you have described the hesitant moments slipping by is touching too.
I shall point out a need for editing the paragraphs but I do not know if it is deliberate.
I interpret your piece not as a story, but a monologue.There is a conversation, but that does not build up any interactive exchange of ideas. We do not know the girl with a sweet voice. Here we only get a glimpse of Ryan the recluse. Will you take any attempt to take the story further. I think it will be a story when things happen in it.Please share more. It is a pleasant read.

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Rated: ASR | (3.5)
Hi Harry! I am not an expert in poetry forms.I guess a storoem is a story-poem,and I liked the style you told us the story still in keeping with the rhyme. I was more attracted by the content more than the form, because I skimmed over the rhyme scheme last. What I liked best is the concluding line. At the same time the practical observation in the immediately preceding line contains the quality that saved the poem from receding into a morality chant. Thanks for sharing!






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Review of Summer of 1816  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a very informative read, River. Usually I am not drawn towards non-fiction, but this is a curious piece of history and also of weather change. Your article made me wonder that if there have been a number of other such incidents unrecorded as serious climatic disasters before the painful awareness about global warming and weather change had come into vogue. You have given me opportunity to learn about Mr. Mulvena the author and the painstaking research he did for his writing. This is surely impressive and inspiring.
Thank you for sharing.

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Review of In the Night  
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Hi Jyo! The opening couple of lines sure give a hint of the uncanny, words like 'spindly', 'shiver', 'slither' of shadows create the atmosphere appropriately. I savored your delicious comparisons like 'boat on tossing seas'. Shadows will refer to the Vampire of course, but I felt a bit confused about 'sighted, freeze'. Who is it that freezes, the hunter or the hunted? From ears pricked high I guess the victim is an animal of some kind. If so, why will it have a white neck? This also puzzles me a bit. The rhyme scheme is faultless, so are grammar and spellings. Just this that the points I did not understand hampered my enjoyment a bit. Thank you for sharing!


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Review of To Go Around  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
I have come across your poem and stopped at the playful treatment of a serious vice. Where as a 'warning' it is expected to have been didactic, your poem steers clear of any such cliche. I appreciate the use of carefully chosen words and phrases which have a semblance of a lighthearted poem about young couples, but phrases like 'polished, brash, vociferous youth', 'overused pick up lines', 'infectious, transmitted diseases' turn red like a warning 'Stop' signage. Thank you for the rather unusual read. Please keep sharing!


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Review of Fresh Bread  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Thank you for this refreshing, happy read. No incident happens here, but a simple snapshot of child's daily life. Quite unassumingly, the central idea of freshly baked bread, its captivating aroma and the little private joke of the child and its mother is like a'drop of golden sun'. I found no major grammatical or spelling mistakes to mar the enjoyment. Thank you for the enchanting read. Please share more.

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Review of My Nicky  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I do not know how to review this except telling you that What you endured is no less heroic than your Nicky. I understand that you have indeed recovered from the tremendous tragedy or you could not relate it to us blow by blow. I understand your helplessness at your son's birth, but I respect your decision to bring him to the world despite the forewarning you received. I pray to God to give you and your family peace and blessings.


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Review of Paranoia  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
You are right in both counts. Visual storytelling is awesome and I shall praise your economy of words too. Character building is also another of your strengths quite obviously. I see that you compromise your rhyming a bit to give the appropriate expressions full scope in the second stanza. I shall not be so rigorous to see the possible breathlessness of the character in it, but if it was prose, I would. The woman in death is a morbid picture in short, bold detailing. I liked the concluding line best. It is the right closure for this poem.Keep Writing, Daniel!


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Review of Rain and death  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hey Luis, seems that I have caught you on your first day first post! Congrats. Your little poem tells me that the raindrops pattering on the windowpane is like thoughts or feelings tapping our minds. Just as the drops cannot penetrate the glass barrier, somewhere our reaching out to the unknown encounters a glass barrier. The 'place of distinct reality' I interpret as clear understanding of the tenets of reality and quite agree that if it is so, 'many will strive' and few will reach'. I do not know if that is what you mean to convey. It is the gravity of your central thought that brought me here and all above is my own interpretation. Would you consider a few more leads to your own meaning? Please keep sharing more!


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Rated: E | (4.5)
Greetings, Charlie! Let me first list out my favorite lines and expressions.They are:"Just imperfections that clung to the crinkled white paper","I meant the words more than the smudges and stains","...the fall after a struggled climb","...as my sanity soaks into my disgrace of a poem","...Must be the table", "Then I remember that I don't care,/at the same time I know I care too much." Your title of the poem stood out enough to rouse my interest and I was well-rewarded. You are right when you say that the 'words were choppy', yes they kind of tumble out of the anguished poet, and they actually give out that feeling. That is why I would interpret it as a metaphor. Another Simile serves its purpose of expressing a gnawing feeling of inadequacy. I assure you it felt sincere and palpable.
One thing more to appreciate. You are on the trail of an undefined feeling, but your rendering of reality is so truthfully done. For example, you pointed out that 'grey smudges' are from pencil graphite markings.In spite of myself, I cannot overlook spellings. 'Shakey' is , I am sure a typo. Still, that is why the half point I truly regret not giving to your poem.
I am charmed! Keep sharing,your resignation is certainly not accepted.


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Review of The Muse's Garden  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Dear Huntersmoon,
I'm back to your poems as bewitched as ever and still attempting to review this particular piece. The form is peach perfect, a Shakespearean sonnet with three quatrains followed by a couplet and the right rhyme scheme. All the imagery with flowing water throwing up sand, walking in a glade beautiful with imagination are befitting and expected. The one of 'Gluttony' surprises with your individual touch. One question though, won't there be an apostrophy before 'twixt'? We have omitted 'be' of betwixt you see.
Thank you for this gratifying read, dear friend.


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Review of Shopping  
Rated: E | (4.0)
I laughed of glee as I finished your story, Jacky! How you glide back and forth in Sarah's life with a child's light feet! There are actually four characters here, Sarah, her Mother, the little boy playmate and the store manager. They are sketched with very sure and few bold lines creating an atmosphere of bright light with tiny shadows dancing underfoot. Does Milbury's really exist? Want to see the door revolving. Ha, ha.


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Review of Greed  
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
The story is openly didactic as the title made the reader expect. The short period this narrative allows us to see pinpoints on the greedy family of the dying man, and in a fantasy way he disables all their wiles to get at his wealth. Though the ending is foreshadowed, the twist is there. It confirms the reader's misgivings about the 'rocket'. The characters are quite in line with their un-rounded formation, which reminded me of the Jonsonian trait of 'elements' of character. I enjoyed the read, I guess, in a lighter mood than Ben Jonson would have liked. Thank you for sharing.
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Review of Table of the Dead  
Rated: E | (5.0)
The atmosphere of gloom and apprehension is made tangible by the emptiness of the fourteenth place. This almost solidifies to compel the old diner to displace the lurking 'danger' by sitting down himself. The almost loving description of the golden light from the candles and the 'arc of red into a loving cup' infuses the inanimate objects like forks, knives and cups with life. "The dark, unconscious me" captivates as it refers to the Unconscious mind where superstitions reside. 'Capturing' the luck or having it 'in thrall' infuses a medieval taste to the line. Beautifully done. Love reading it.
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Review of Raisins  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Perfect form and forceful rendering of emotion. It felt like a part of a dialogue, rather than a poem. Impressed to see that haiku could pack such a punch! The metaphor is also convincing because of the word-pairing of 'Shriveled' and 'Rancid'. Stimulating read! Thank you for sharing.
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Review of Triolet to Frost  
Rated: E | (3.5)
Remembering Robert Frost's "Road Not Taken", the composition offers a refreshing angle other than philosophical. I liked the hovering melancholy of the "Yellow Wood" and the sharp jolt of the 'mended wall' signalling a blind alley. The twist is essentially modern in its disappointment and a particular earth-bound conclusion. An entertaining read, thank you for sharing with us.
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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
A beautiful storyline is the USP of this work, which carries many areas pregnant with possible elaboration.
I got a very strong feeling that the author is arranging a potent plot. The language is lucid with remarkable pictorial quality. I could almost see the arthritic pianist with a kind benign face moving painfully through her rows of students and reclining in her finery to listen to Brett's performance. The sting of her real physical existence has reached me through the line-"The nurse had to make a straight cut down the back of the gown in order to place it over Ethelene's arms and body." The wistful pain of the 'Dream' realized through another dreamer comes from a real life experience, as your note suggests. Reality is often the seed for sprouting imagination. May be that is what is waiting to be born.
Thank you for sharing the beautiful story.


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Review of Nocturne  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
A Disclaimer: All the comments are generated from my personal interpretation and spontaneous impression. As the author of this creation you are the sole and ultimate judge of what is best for your expression. I shall be very glad if my views can be of any help.

*Vignette6*Title: The title complements the dark thought of un-belonging in the little poem. Beautiful!

*Vignette6* Content: The 'twilight'is the meeting point of conciousness and oblivion. The idea of dreaming gives the possible existence after death an unreal quality. The finality of drifting into nothingness echoes like the tolling of a bell in the title.

*Vignette6* My impression of the Idea: The ringing of the stark end is wrapped up in the deceptive softness of twilit imagery.

*Vignette6* Form: A quinzaine is an unrhymed verse of fifteen syllables. These syllables are distributed among three lines so that there are seven syllables in the first line, five in the second line and three in the third line (7/5/3).


*Vignette6* Kudos: The superb use of the Quinzaine form.

The feeling of weightlessness of the corporeal body.
*ThumbsUp*


*Heart* My Favourite:

Every word of the poem.


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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Duke!

Your choice of topic tells me you are a thinker. Your way of categorizing the responses in gropups are pertinent. The choices already done reflects what the average man thinks about his own life. As you can see the positive and the negative sides balance out each other. Still, life actually has myriad shades in between. The tones expand in variety and in time-space references. Yours is a flag to enter the realm of contemplation of real happiness. A nice thought!
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Review of A Perfect Day  
Rated: E | (4.5)
A Disclaimer: All the comments are generated from my personal interpretation and spontaneous impression. As the author of this creation you are the sole and ultimate judge of what is best for your expression. I shall be very glad if my views can be of any help.

*Sun* Title: The title is typical of an acrostic, it presents the names of the two dogs, the poet's pets.

*Sun* Content: It describes the Whimsical activities of the couple. They take a smart French leave of the daily drudgeries and enjoy each other's company all day long.

*Sun* My impression of the Idea: The aftertaste of reading is really wholesome, leaves a smile on my face!

*Sun*Kudos: The sunshiny atmosphere!*ThumbsUp*

*Sun* Form: The poem is written in a Rondelet form. The Rondelet is a French form consisting of seven lines with two rhymes and one refrain: AbAabbA. The refrain comes in 3rd and 7th line,a repetition of the first line.?

*Heart* My Favourite:

I planned for naught, yet all went right.


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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
A Disclaimer: All the comments are generated from my personal interpretation and spontaneous impression. As the author of this creation you are the sole and ultimate judge of what is best for your expression. I shall be very glad if my views can be of any help.

*MushroomR*Title: The ideas of an array of beautiful things and the end of a list have confused one another. The title is a little out of context.

*MushroomR* Content: Mr. Little Green Man will grant any wishes to a little girl. After toying with the tantalizing possibilities of 'Purple ponies', 'a big green dragon', a chocolatey 'icecream Sundae', she feels that being spoilt for choice is class enough. So she finds time to long for the safe return of her soldier brother.

*MushroomR* My impression of the Idea: The colours associated with the wishes indeed form a rainbow, but it still feels a little far-fetched. The final wish is genuine and warm with feeling and childish hero-worship.!

*MushroomR*Kudos: The transition of the sister from wishes for herself to the ardent prayer for her brother's safety.*ThumbsUp*

*MushroomR*Form and Vocabulary: The poem has a four-line stanza form where only the second and the fourth lines rhyme. There is a distinct rhythm in the uncomplicated diction.

*MushroomR*Verdict: Heartwarming!

*Heart* My Favourite:


Bring him home safe and sound
don't leave him in the cold
let him come home from this fight
let him grow old.



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