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218 Public Reviews Given
244 Total Reviews Given
Review Style
Usually I review all genre pieces.
I'm good at...
Interpreting the author's viewpoint, correcting grammatical mistakes, to detect if anywhere anything hinders the flow and coherence and add suggestions only. I love to appreciate newbies.
Favorite Genres
Mystery, poetry, short stories, non-fiction
Least Favorite Genres
I dislike none because I do not wish to shut myself out of any spark of creativity.
Favorite Item Types
Short stories, poetry of any length
Least Favorite Item Types
None. I am open to everything.
I will not review...
Very long Novel chapters because I do not consider myself qualified to undertake that task. I also feel tired if there is too many grammatical mistakes.
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In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.5)
The poem has a capability to incite thought, and the best kind for me. I find the "candle in the window" is the real haven after a life-long quest, be it for Truth or for Peace. " The headlights of an oncoming train" summons the rush of destruction, so I love the use of 'Instead of' here.

By the way, it reminds me of the poem in Doctor Zhivago. It goes

" The candle burns beside the window,/ The candle burns."

It is the eternal appeal of love that keeps an untiring vigil in the face of this world's colossal uncertainty. Would you like to go through it?

Though it does not matter in the least, I would suggest cosidering about the following:

1. Do you really need the 'if'?
2. Will there be a 'do' between how and we?
3.In the 11th line will there be a 'are' instead of 'do'?

Please write on!

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In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: E | (4.5)
I appreciate the apt summing up of the delicate task of critique you have provided. It is both enjoyableand useful. I especially like your coinage "emotional carnage". It is indeed a task "to craft the written word".

The poem is basically about pointing out the tasks the reviewers perform, and a sensitization of the authors about its extreme usefulness. I liked it, but I find myself a bit biased about didactic poem. May be that is why I could not give you Full five. I am sorry about that!

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Rated: E | (4.5)
I expected other kinds of in-depth queries on feelings, details of observation, particulas of preferences etc. Otherwise I appreciate the message you have conveyed.
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In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Good thought, Like to come back. Keep on adding meanwhile.

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Review of Cadenza  
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.0)
I don't know what a cadenza is. The rise and fall of unmistakable emotion has caught me. This emotion has swelled over the storyline, which is romantic with a tragic end.

If you have meant it to be floating. without any particular form, you are successful in your attempt. It may not be very highly rated, but it could be rendered in a ballad form, perhaps?
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Review of Zeke's First Day  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
I would like to read it a little longer, really!

The depiction of the child's mind is refreshing, also the childish embarrassment at being abused.
Emotions are hinted at, deftly avoiding being soppy. The detached but sensitive style gives us a feeling of crispness. Also I found no misspelt words.
Why don't you make it longer? I think a 'day' should include more happenings. Please ignore if you don't think it applicable.
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Review of Abiku  
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
A good, interesting read. The description of the five senses coming alive is graphic, it gives the reader a feel of the protagonist's surroundings.

The scene of a deserted birthday party is spooky, but the purpose or reason of the second killing is not clear. In spite of the crystal-clear description, it seems a bit confusing.

The twist in the end is good. But it is not unexpected. Please share more of your writings!
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Review of A Moment In Time  
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Belated Happy Birthday, Pat, wish you many happy returns of the day, crisp and fresh like your daydream!

The best point about this poem is the graphic description of the fauna in motion and the scene created by the brook. The mood you have created is in keeping with the description. It seems you have not gone for rhyming. I did not find a conscious pattern in the lines though they are arranged in a scheme. I enjoyed the poem much, thank you.

Garnetrocks.
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Review of Breaking Glass  
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
'We get, scrapped, bruised and hurt as we try,/ to patch back the glass which once was breathtaking'. i think this is the message in your thought and it is understandably expressed in the poem. 'Brittle' is the key word to all relationships.

With experience I have seen that when I am keen to express a thought, it tends to move away to a statement. only distance can let us see the form of an artwork in it. Your urge is felt through the words, but it has made it necessary to say too much, and so the passion blurred the clear 'body' of the poem.
This line, 'A small crack will turn into a large crack and then break completely down' definitely makes us think. But I would omit the repitition of the word 'crack'.

These little things do not undermine your originality or sincerity at all. Write on and please continue to share.
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Review of Apple  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a greeting from India! The rating does not reflect the fact that you are a compatriot. You deserve the rating very richly.

First, You have made rigorous research and the quotes show it. I appreciate your honest work.

Second, the phasing out of episodes is helpful, but I think a continuous narration would depict the character steadily in a short story. In fact, you have created the material for a bigger narration. Here the positive impact is a dramatic overtone. I like it.

The halucinations experienced by the protagonist is the most engrossing part of the story and you have rendered them meticulously and in a picturesque way.

Well-written indeed, I enjoyed it thoroughly.
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Review of A Spirit To Be  
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
The emotion you have portrayed here is powerful and raw. The word coined 'ensouled' denotes deep thought and more, ability to feel very strongly. I don't know whether everybody will agree to the idea of many births (I do!) but the flawless expression should be enough for a piece of such imagination capable of producing such details.

The turn in the story is appropriate and done with conviction in the rejection of the act of abortion.

The choice of words are exact, the small sentences strung in a series enhance the urgency of tone. Last but not the least, I found no misspelt word. Thank you for giving me such an emotional experience.

Just write on!
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Review of Transformation  
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
You have described the scene with meticulous care, I could have illustrated it easily. Thanks for the info also. Why not replace the second 'begin to' with something else? - Garnetrocks.
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Review of AN OCTOBER RAIN  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Lovely! Lovely imagery all telling of numbing, blinding pain "exhausted and jailed in watery bars of downpour
clicking behind me, the latching of my door"

You have powerful words that can carry your emotions over to everybody.;
Thank you for giving me this taste of exquisite pain.
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Review of The Rose  
Rated: E | (4.5)
The message and thought is impressive. The emotion is felt within, but may be the poet is too shy to let it flow. If you would break the sobriety of the even lines, I mean using lines of uneven length, that would unleash the real power of your feelings, I am sure. It is a good reading.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
The skill factor is important , as I can see here. But the mechanisms distract our attention from the real content which is not allowed enough space to condense. Still very good exercise really.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Liked it. The Options are pretty conclusive, but Empathy and Intellect could be included, in my opinion.
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Review of Paper World.  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Thank you for the interest you have shown to my reviewing, but the rating does not reflect my gratitude.

Your last line "God was smiling too" stands radiant against the situation created in the incredibly short space. I cannot but appreciate the attitude. Everyone of us complains about the tests Life puts us through, but few can keep untainted their faith in Life . The remarkable phrase "vale of relations" suggests to me that the detachment is already taking over, leading finally to the obliqueness of "paper bonds". I feel the message is the ultimate meaninglessness of the world, though I don't know if you have meant it to be like this. The intimacy with God where the agony of the world seems to become a shared joke is startling. It is a new way of looking at things.

One thin I would like to mention about the composition. Since it is not exactly meant to be a poem, may be the arrangement of the lines could change a little? For example, I would suggest putting "Hope Faded..." in a separate paragraph to attain a sharper form.
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Review of Dark Seasons  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Lovely read. Just like feeling as a wolf. New experience, thank you.
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Review of BEHIND THOSE EYES  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Well written, but the the phrases like 'poison comes out of' are a bit jarring.
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