Overall Impressions:
I can understand your concerns on rating an item 5 stars or not. Sometimes this is left to the opinion of the reader themselves. Your readers might think that your work is perfect in their eyes. This is just my ideas anyway. Thank you for voicing your opinions on the rating system.
Ciao,
Gem
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Overall Impressions:
This was a very sad but memorable read about your dad.
Emotional Impact:
Even though your dad had a bit of a meanstreak, I feel that he meant well, and fought his hardest not to be abusive like his dad was to him. I can tell that you miss him and your mother deeply.
Imagery:
I loved your descriptions and imagery in this piece.
Grammar/Spelling/Punctuation:
I didn't spot any spelling or grammatical errors.
Suggestions/Improvements to be Made:
None.
Closing Remarks:
Thank you for sharing this emotional piece. Keep writing.
Ciao,
Gem
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Overall Impressions:
This is a very detailed short story about a car.
Narration/Dialogue:
You did a great job on the narration and dialogue.
Character Comments:
I love how you described your car as if it were a person, and how you even gave "her" a name. Very cute!
Emotional Impact:
This story reminded me of my first car that I had when I turned 18. It was fine for awhile, but after a couple years of driving it, I finally came up with a name for the car after it started having a multitude of problems. I came to call the car "Thorn in My Side" I couldn't help it. I just became so annoyed with it that I sold it and got another car in place of it. LOL.
Imagery/Description:
You gave great description and details in this piece. As always you do a great job in this area.
Grammar/Spelling/Punctuation:
I didn't spot any grammatical or spelling errors.
Closing Remarks:
As always, great job!
Ciao,
Gem
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Overall Impressions:
Ah, family trips across the U.S.! Fun. LOL! I can remember arguements on a few trips with my grandparents. Hearing old people bicker is funny.
Narration/Dialogue:
Well done on the narration and dialogue. I especially enjoyed your inner thought process.
Grammar/Spelling/Punctuation:
I didn't spot any misspelled words or grammatical errors.
Favorite Part:
The "Big Ass Circle"!
Closing Remarks:
Thank you for sharing this amusing short story with me! I had a lot of enjoyment reading it! Well done!
Ciao,
Gem
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Overall Impressions:
This was a very insightful and fun read. Yikes! A bear! I am glad that all of you got away safely. I must walk about 8-9 miles everyday, but not up any mountains.
Narration/Dialogue:
Great job on the narration and dialogue.
Grammar/Spelling/Punctuation:
I didn't spot any misspelled words or grammatical errors.
Closing Remarks:
Well done!
Ciao,
Gem
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Overall Impressions:
What a cute and funny story! I am glad that you had fun, lol. I couldn't imagine anyone calling me by a guy's name, lol. I thought it was cute how everyone had fun calling you "Adam".
Narration/Dialogue:
Great job with the narration and dialogue.
Imagery/Description:
Well done on the imagery. I love the photos of you and your daughter. She looks so much like you.
Grammar/Spelling/Punctuation:
I didn't spot any misspelled words or grammatical errors.
Closing Remarks:
Thank you for sharing this!
Ciao,
Gem
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Overall Impressions:
What a cool forum! I like this very much! I like watching sports, especially hockey, football, basketball, and baseball. I think this is a great place for all sport fanatics to gather and socialize.
Imagery/Description:
Well done on the imagery and graphics.
Grammar/Spelling/Punctuation:
I didn't find any misspelled words or grammatical errors.
Originality/Uniqueness:
To the best of my knowledge, there isn't another forum like this one on the entire site. Nice job on making something unique.
Closing Remarks:
Thank you for creating this forum! Well done!
Ciao,
Gem
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Overall Impressions:
I can definately relate to this short story, lol. I can't stand men that are that much older than me, and think that they can win me over with gifts and spoiling. I think older men who try to pick up much younger girls are yucky! lol. I hate getting gutter balls, lol. I get embarrassed if I don't do well in any kind of game, no matter what it is.
Narration/Dialogue:
Well done on the narration and dialogue.
Imagery/Description:
Well done on the description and details.
Grammar/Spelling/Punctuation:
I didn't find any misspelled words or grammatical errors.
Closing Remarks:
Thank you for sharing this with me! Very funny and cute! Keep writing!
Ciao,
Gem
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Overall Impressions:
Very cute. I don't care for Winter or Summer.......too cold and too hot for me. I prefer Spring and Autumn weather at all times of the year! Winter doesn't really bother me, it's the ice that I don't like to drive on.
Plot Comments:
Very well layed out. The plot runs smoothly. I didn't have any trouble reading through it. Nice work.
Narration/Dialogue:
Great job on the narration and dialogue. The throught process of the character was very good.
Imagery/Description:
Well done on the imagery and description. You painted a very presentable picture for the readers. Good work!
Grammar/Spelling/Punctuation:
I didn't find any misspelled words or grammatical errors.
Favorite Part:
The ending paragraph and the last sentence were so cute!
Closing Remarks:
Well done! You seem to be a great writer! I can't wait to read more of your work!
Ciao,
Gem
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