| Howdy there, pardner! Moseying along WDC and came across yer western. Thought I'd toss out some of my thoughts. If'n ya find them helpful, great! If not, well, just feel free to toss'em right out.
First off, you've got "It could have been worst" as the What a Character prompt, but I ain't seein' where that's been posted anywhere in the contest. From what I've read, ya just need a new twist on a cowboy cliche and that's it. Anywho, not sure if you wrote it that way on purpose, but shouldn't it read "It could have been worse"?
This sentence: Going back in time to change the past and thus the future was a huge crime and very profitable indeed. Seems a mite clunky to read. I get the gist of it, but feels like it could be more clear. Mebbe something like: Going back in time to change the past and thus, the future, may have been a huge crime, but the profit outweighed the risk." Whadd'ya think, cowboy?
It's O.K. Corral, not Ok Coral. Coral is in the ocean, a corral holds my bronco.
Alrighty, don't forget to capitalize the beginning of this sentence and put the proper quotation marks at the beginnin': 'think of it this way. It could be worst. You could be told to go back and kill your great-great-grandfather..." Love the foreshadowing. But there's that "worst" again. As it's not a required prompt for the contest, I'd highly suggest changing it to "worse", as it just ain't fittin' right.
Now I ain't an expert on time travel and such, but since Sam was related to Wild Hitchcock and Hitchcock was shot when Sam went back in time, wouldn't that cause Sam to, ya know, "poof!" outta existence, making it unnecessary for the other shootin' assassin to have a contract on him?
Lots of potential for this here story, pardner, just needs some refinin'. Fortunately, you've got time to edit before the contest is judged.
Good luck, cowboy!
A review to celebrate you in "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group" 's March Mayhem Raid!