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Review Style
My reviewing style varies. I may do a little edit if possible or pinpoint what I think is incorrect. My review is merely base on what I feel about your piece. If I enjoy it, I say it. If not, I tell you why I'm not. I often do reviews on all Poetry Items- regardless of the genres, styles and the way it was written. However if you like, you can request a short story, chapter not the entire book or novel, articles and essays, etc.
I'm good at...
Titles. You may ask for a better catchy titles for your piece. Rhyming for most poetry. I'll be reading your piece aloud and hear if consistent rhyming takes place. Emotions. I'm greatly affected on the emotions your piece may reveal.
Favorite Genres
All but Nature, Love/Romance, Dark/Horror and Inspirational are on top of my list.
Favorite Item Types
Poetry, Short Story, Articles and Essays. Blogs also.
I will not review...
The entire book or novel. Don't have more time to read. Maybe soon.
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Review of Every Minute  
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hi there Dawn Embers!

I was doing a random read and this beautiful piece appeared. How could I not read it when it's written by Dawn Embers? "Every Minute" is a perfect choice of title. While at it, I already got hints about what the content will be which for me is a great thing in choosing titles.

I love the effect of repeating Every minute at the start of each stanza. This provides emphasis to the subject matter and how the following lines supported it. It's a piece with deep meaning about life and how life responds in every minute. I enjoyed reading this. Thanks for sharing!

Gervic


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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Greeting Prosperous Snow!

The Lamentation Of Adam And Eve is a great piece of poetry about Adam and Eve. The title suits well for this and was a great choice. Great job with this. I like the way it is written and how you let them speak for themselves. The piece portrayed a deep spiritual meaning about temptation, the decision they made, the responsibility and their faith that had been put to a test. Great piece. Thank you for sharing!

Gervic


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Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
Hi Eric!

This is Eric and I am currently reading through the Read and Review coener of the site. I see that you're new to the site and with that I'd like to welcome you to Writing.com. May your stay with us be filled with fun and full of inspiration.

The title of this item is too lengthy. You could try Foot Torture or Foot Slave. Or what about Foot Fetish? With the current title, it isn't that catchy. Also, this item might talk about some sexual favors or similar as what I understand based on the title. Thus, the rating must not for Everyone. XGC or 18+ would be best. Please rate this properly once you start putting something in your story body.

Nothing much to read on your content but I'm looking forward to reading this once complete. Are you trying to make this interactive?

I'm looking forward to more of your writings. Thank you!


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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi there Crouching T1ger!

This is Gervic and I am currently reading through the Read a Newbie section of this page. I found this beautiful piece and I couldn't help but give you a review to tell you how much I liked it. But first, I'd like to give you a warm welcome to this wonderful site we call "home". May you will enjoy your stay with us.

The Cabin and the Girl is a good title but for me, it would be better to call your piece "The Girl and The Snow" as the story tackles more with the girl and how she used to like the idea of having a snow. Either way, your pick of title is still okay though.

I envy at how you managed to put the clear imagery into this very short and brief piece. I liked the way you showed how the snow blanketed the once verdant mountains and how the tracks vanished from the snow. The emotion was intense when you started to feel the fright and your worries of losing your father. Great one!

It was indeed a great read! I want more of this. Thank you for sharing. Write on and cheers!


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Rated: E | (4.0)
Greetings Toemetricist !

I am Gervic and I am currently reviewing through the Read a Newbie Corner of this site. I found your piece there and thought of giving it a review.

Life And Much Of It is one good title. At first glance of it one will know that your piece will talk about life (which is interesting) and much about life (which makes it even more interesting). The description "How we can find clarity when feeling like mud. Knowing when to be still." suggests an extreme metaphor as how life would be as compared to that of mud. Great one!

This short piece bears lots of thoughts, message worth pondering upon. I love how you compare life to mud and how you manage to arrive at some great messages with it. I totally agree with what you said about life here

I found typo error though -
... or if we should run away or rejoyce rejoice.
Because, at times, we find ourself ourselves to be much like mud.
We may find ourself ourselves to be like a muddy puddle..

I like this line:
This kind of awareness motivates us to avoid or ride the ripples.

"Ride the ripples" is very much poetic and has great hidden meaning into it.

Overall, a wonderful and inspiring read. Thank you for sharing this. Write on! Cheers!


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Review of Tiny Dancer  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi there CircAid!

Gervic here and I currently doing a quick passing at the Read a Newbie column of this page. First off, I would like to welcome you to Writing.com! May your stay with us be filled with so much fun, learnings and inspirations.

Tiny Dances being the poem's title served its purpose pretty well. It is enticing and captivating. Good job with your title selection.

I love the way you play with metaphor here. The extreme personification of the flower's brief but most anticipated dancing. The imagery is clear and with its short lines, you managed to convey a great meaning of the spring's coming. Great job!

I enjoyed reading this and I wish to read more of your writings. Write on!

Cheers!


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Review of Dog Parade  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi there Lorelei!

Gervic here, And I am just having a quick visit on the Read a Newbie Column of this page. First up, I'd like to welcome you to Writing.com! May your stay eith us be filled with fun, and more writings to do.

Dog Parade is a great title. When at it, readers will already know what the piece is all about and how it will go. It's catchy and has this awesome drag that will surely bring readers (Especially thise who love dogs) to the content of your writing. I'm not much of a dog lover but I like this piece.

I love the way you show each scene of how those dogs ran while on the loose. The tems smooth and curly provided hints that the owner has different types of dog. I like the vivid imagery you put in here.


I'm just greateful that there are people who look after the welfare of the animals especially the stray ones. This is a great write! Keep writing more of this. Thank you for sharing! Cheers!


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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi! I am certain that this will be a wonderful contest to participate with. I love nature genre myself had once established a Nature-themed contest. Have you heard the Verdant Poetry Contest "Verdant Poetry Contest? I founded this contest and was transferred to our awesome wdc friend Choconut . She hosted it pretty well and now the contest is temporarily closed. It's great to see a new contest of this genre coming out.

I am hoping for your success with this. One quick question though, can we submit old items/compositions as long as it fits the current prompt?

Best regards,
Gervic
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi there Guriya! I was doing a random read through the Read and Review page. Your poem caught my attention so I thought of reading it and leave it with a rating and review. Please note that this review is mainly my opinion.

The title of your piece "Home of Spirituality!" was what captured me. It has this unique element that drags readers (specially those who are interested in this genre) to dig in your writing. Please capitalize the first letter of spirituality and the exclamation mark seems unnecessary. Although your title is already good, I would like to suggest one that I think is way better - A True Abode.

The message you're trying to convey is way to deep and very spiritual. Being alone doesn't mean that you're lonely. Being alone is where we can find our inner peace, where we can find the tranquility of our mind. Through it, we will be able to communicate solemnly with our Creator. Through it we will be able to seek for His guidance and protection-for whatever waves of trials we will be facing, He will always be there to save us so that we will appear victorious in the end of the day. I admire how you put this message in this one short piece.

With the poem composition, I'm not sure what form you follow since you started it with a good rhyming scheme yet at the end it tuned out off-rhyme. The word selection is great and I like your good touch of metaphor.

This is something worthy for a good read. Good job and thanks for sharing! Write on!


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Rated: E | (5.0)

Greetings SMs!

September has always been the most exciting and awaited month ever! Especially here on Writing.com. There would be no funnier and more surprising than what you guys are preparing for all of us here. It is an advantage that you set up this amazing and colorful page intended solely for the week long celebration.

It was too wise of you and SM to put up a WDC Party Central which houses all the amazing contests and delightful activities for WDC's anniversary. Not only that, you always bring us through here, new surprises, fresh additions, new releases, skins and lots if games.

Party Central guides us what to do and where to head ourselves when we are somehow lost and buried in so much activities. There's no need for us to sift through various items since they're all listed in here. Thus, you are make everything more easier.

You don't know how much I loved to see the red logo located on the left sidebar. And I've been hoping it stays there for quite longer, maybe the whole September. U already missed that cute little thing*Smile*

This is indeed a very organized item, clean and I love all the image logo and banners. Not to mention the skins which are so enticing and gorgeous.

I'm getting excited for next year's anniversary already.*Laugh*

Overall, awesome item, colorful, stunning, delightful, and all adjectives that best describes this.

Thanks a lot to all of you guys! You always rock!

Best regards,
Gervic

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Rated: E | (4.5)

Hi There Alan Davies!

Thank you so much for spending your most precious time to join the first round of "Verdant Poetry Contest! Your entry is much appreciated.*Smile* My review will duscuss things I discovered, how you touch me with this, and how this poem impacted me.

Capturing Mother's Colors, is a colorful piece portraying the artist's feeling of awe and surprise to the splendid scenery of mother nature. She doesn't know where to start her art 'cause she's feeling astounded and overwhelmed to each and every magnificent detail nature ever has. The TITLE was great! It has this awesome charm, colorful enticement that surely will lure readers. Great job!

I love the way you presented your lliece [adding colors created a unique emphasis on each line]. The vibrant blend of harmonious colors especially coincide with the wonderful rhythm and smooth flow of lines. Not to mention the excellent end rhymes which is ax plus factor.

Imagery is awesome. Clear as crystals. I can feel the breeze, the tickling caress of grasses and of vibrant flowers on the field. The scene is soothing and relieving. The emotion ia lively, full of hopes.

I found not a single glitch with regards to grammars. I love your choice of words.

I like the last stanza:

A warm breeze passes over her
She feels mother's love
Approval from love
Her motives without sins
She smiles and begins


It's has short simple lines but has a deepest meaning. Here you showed the love from above. She's granted the wisdom and insight on how to keep thingas simple, how to not give up. Hope appeared in here and she's found the inspiration to start and keep going.

This is indeed a great piece Alan! I enjoyed this very much. I m looking forward to your entry next round. Thanks once again and keep your creative juice flowing.

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Review of Tagaytay  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings to you Candy!

It is too exciting to read articles about places -special places in a country I belong with. I heard Tagaytay but I have never been there. People who happened to visit the place always have a good say to it. The experiences they have made me feel envious. I hope to visit there someday.

You are drawing an awesome and vivid image of the place on my mind. Though I never have been there yet, you seemed have given me a quick tour with the beautiful description you have here.

I agree with you, tourism is the primary source of income to the people of Tagaytay. And if somebody would read this piece, without a doubt, they too will crave to pay a visit.

This is a great article Candy! I am looking forward to reading more of your works- especially pieces similar to this. Thanks for sharing. Write on!

Mabuhay Pilipinas!!!

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Review of Evening Sky  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi there Carly!

Evening Sky was a splendid piece which imagery was awesome. It's vivid and appealing. I can see how the clouds hovered through the clearest blue sky, how the darkness rolled over like curtains slowly covering those soft foamy clouds breasting through the azure sky.

Here you defined that even how beautiful, how brilliant life is, there's always a darkest side of it. There's always problems that ruin our days. However, hope and faith are always in our hearts. And when tomorrow comes, there would be another brilliant brand new day. Tis the essence of life.

I found no grammatical flaw. I liked the smooth flow of lines. Lines were short but has meaning worth to ponder.

I enjoyed reading your poem Carly. Thanks for sharing and Write on! Happy Holidays!


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Review of Winter  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi there April Desiree!

"Winter" was a fine choice of title. It surely will capture readers of all kinds most especially this season of snow.

Content was surprising. At a first glance on the title, images of snowflakes, snowman and any other winter thing were painted on my mind. I thought of Christmas, yet I was wrong. Here you talked about your feeling- lonely, sad and cold for he was no longer there at your side. You long for his warmth but he's not there. His love for you had died, faded and no longer will bloom again for it wilted. That's the winter of your life.

Imagery ws vivid and appealing. Every scene was clear. The emotion revealed were sad, lonely and sorrowful. Rhyming is in perfect and beautiful ABCB pattern. Lines flow smoothly.

I found no error in grammars. I loved this classic piece. I was like reading the works of my favorite classic poets -Frost and Longfellow. Great job April! You have their blood in your veins!

Overall, a wonderful read. Thanks for sharing! Write on!

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Review of My Freedom  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi there Lina Black!

"My Freedom" is a beautiful poetry that portrays how you wished then found your freedom. The title said it all. And it's just a nice choice for it has this dragging charisma that surely will tempt readers to read.

This poem moved me in a way that made me realize and think of the situation I'm in right now. Honestly, I felt no freedom in here ever since I came to this place. You don't know how much I wanted to go home but I just can't, I'm afraid. And I need to finish my college (they promised to finance me actually. ]

This feeling keeps on haunting me and sometimes it made me regret the decision I made before coming here. If you were me, maybe you would hate life, maybe you would blame Him for bringing you to this place. I found no joy, everyday is a never ever good if she's here. She always watch every move I take and will find faults in every good things I've done. It's true and I started to hate life. I'm sorry, this seems going far out from the topic. I just wanted to burst out this feeling haunting me within. And this she I'm talking about is my Auntie's cousin. Good thing there's WDC, my only escape and companion.

Oh, that's how powerful this piece is Lina. I'm not suppose to shout this out here in the public but after reading your wonderful piece, I did confess.

Anyways, this is indeed a beautiful write touching every reader's heart. I love the appealing and visual imagery. No found error in grammars and spelling.

Thanks Lina for a wonderful read. Write on!

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Review of The Wrath  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)

Hi there April Desiree!

         The Wrath is a piece of hope and faith. Here you expressed how you overcome and conquered the life's battles, how firm you stood everytime you tumbled down, how you found light amidst the darkest road. You never forget Him whatever happened to you. You held Him strong enough to never loose His guiding hands. And that made you win.

This piece was one of my inspiring reads. Imagery was great. Emotion was sincere. I found no grammatical flaw and the lines just freely flow.

I have no idea or point of information to suggest because this was a perfect write worth to ponder upon.

Thanks Des for another inspiring poetry. You truly are a great poet and writer. Write on!


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Review of Vow  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Greetings April Desiree!

This is a beautiful piece written by a heartbroken writer. You don't know how much this affected me in a way that it brought me to tears. This awaken my deeply slumbered love, the love I strugged to forget then. It brought me too much pain that made me swore not to love again. My heart still cries, grieving for my lost, lamenting ever since the day she left me.

Our vows, our promises were like bubbles poked midair. It burst and disappeared. And I left nothing but a tormented heart. You know it's hard to move on, but a least I tried and yes, I succeeded. This piece, is just perfect for me.

The emotion you revealed was sad, lonely and sorrowful. I liked the consistent and perfecf ABCB rhyming. Imagery was vivid. I found no error with grammars.

Overall, a great write Des! Thanks for a wonderful read. Write on!


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Review of The Rose  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi there Eyestar!

The Rose was a perfectly choosen title for your 'oh so beautiful' piece. At first glance at it, readers would never hesitate to read on and uncover what and how the rose played into you poem. Here you expressly described the utmost beauty of this nature's element- the rose. You excellently choosen words to accompany and describe your subject.

I loved the picture you are drawing in my mind. Imagery was awesome and appealing. I can see how elegant, can feel how soft its petals, I can see how it dance with the wind.

I uncovered what meaning you wanted to convey. And that you said, on the last part, that external beauty and grandeur will just fade and would never last eternal. As with the rose, her beauty faded, lost it's elegance and luster, and one by one dropped into the ground leaving here useless and ugly.

I found no error in everything. It's just a perfect piece Eyestar, I tell you that. Here you explained to me why I love nature genres..And I liked the structure of this piece. Good job!

Thanks Eyestar for letting me read nand comment on your piece. Continue to inspire readers like me. Write on! and Happy Accoumnt Anniversary!


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Rated: E | (5.0)



Hi there Yellowrose!

Giving Thanks was a great choice of title. It surely will tickle readers' interest to read your beautiful offering. Your title said it all. It provided your readers a quick summary to what your piece is all about.

Here you expressly emphasized the beauty of His creation, the great and magnificent things He bestowed us with. And that is what we must be grateful of. Here you instill to our mindd that we need to give thanks to every blessing He showered upon. And that was what made this piece more than beautiful.

I liked the flow of lines. It's as smooth as river flowing downstream. Every word conveyed meaning so worthy to ponder upon. This indeed, a food for thought and soul. A perfect for everyday reading.

I loved the last lines:

"The morning sun will shine for us again
Brighten someone's day with a big smile"

It's very fresh and inspiring.

I found no grammatical glitch. It's just perfect and excellent write worthy for five stars.

Thanks Yellowrose for letting me read this. Continue to inspire readers by crafting more and more words from your heart.

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Review of Invisible  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)


Hi there Yellowrose!

Invisible is a beautiful piece which character was neglected, abandoned, ignored by many. Here you expressed a feeling of emptiness, as if he [the speaker on your piexe] didn't exist, he weren't there, nobody cared for him, that he was invisible. The character felt as if the world hated him that much. And yes, I too, sometimes felt the same. It's too much pain to be in such situation.

I loved the beautiful rhyming and the smooth flow of lines. The way it was presented was clean and nice. Imagery was visual.

Emotion revealed was sad and lonely.

Overall, great write! Thanks for sharing this Yellowroses! Write on!


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Review of Bare  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Greetings Mallory!

Welcome to writing.com!

I especially visited your portfolio to find items to read and review. And yes, I got your first write for Writing.com. After reading your piece, wow I can say that you have a blood of a great writer. This piece might be fresh in here, however, with the beauty it bears, this was like written by a pro.

Bare, being its title was a great choice. Short word of four letters but this, said it all. This provided a quick snapshot to the entire piece. This has an awesome drag, pulling readers to read on. Keep it up!

Your piece tells what a writer is. What they do, and why they write. "What's the reason for writing?" was the hidden interrogation that you carefully uncovered as your pen crafted every line of your piece. You beautifully exposed the reason behind this. You etched into our minds that writing is the writer's voice. Maybe silent, but the meaning/message/emotions we wanted to expressed are real unfathomable. We write to inspire, to utter our heart's voices, to touch everyone's heart and move them in any way. The pieces we produced are means to expressed the things we could never say. And these you expressly stated in your poem.

I found no grammatical flaw with grammars and spelling. Punctuation was properly applied. I love the rhyming of the piece except the first stanza that you failed to rhyme. Emotion was well expressed. Imagery was vivid and visual.

Overall, great write! Thank you for sharing this Mallory! Welcome and Write on!


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Review of OId in the cold  
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Rated: E | (4.5)

Greetings Iamthenez!

Welcome to Writing.com! My name is Gervic, one of the guest judges in "Invalid Item. I thank you for spending your time and effort to participate in this contest.

The following are the things I found out after reading your piece. Thus, feel free to take suggestions you think are helpful and discard those that aren't.

First Impression:

You don't know how much you moved me with this piece. Every time I read this again and again, it brought my eyes to tears. Your words were tiny needles piercing me within. I just can't hold it. You have perfectly word and narrated the old woman's lament.

Title:

Old in the Cold says it all. Your title here provides a short summation, a quick snapshot to what your piece is talking about. You did great on choosing this.

Imagery:

I love the picture you are drawing . The scene is visual and appealing. I can see how the woman cries. I can feel the pain, the extreme sorrow she's suffering in.

Emotion:

In this story too short with words not exceeding a hundred, you perfectly expressed the sad and lonely emotions. I pitied the old woman more than how the hotdog man felt.

Grammars and Sentence Structure:

I found not a single flaw with grammars. Punctuation was properly applied. No error on spelling detected. However, this sentence " So on her day goes, ignored by all but purveyors of food as she tends to her wintered child." looks vague to me. Will it sounds better if you say, "So when her day passes, ignored by all but purveyors of food as she tends to her wintered child."

Favorite Line:

Tattered clothes found filled with
bones come morn.

Overall:

This is indeed a great write! And oh, it looks pretty with the ribbon it now bears. Congrats!

I enjoyed my read actually. Thanks Iamthenez for sharing this. Keep Writing!


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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi there Ida Matilda!

What is that Prompt is a humorous and sometime true. We can't ignore the fact that sometime the power of forgetfulness defeats us. Though it's just a small thing, when it's because you misplaced or forgot it, to a frantic search you would fall.

I liked the way you wrote this poem. It talked about forgetful and a prompt being forgotten was about forgetful too. That made your piece beautiful.

While I found no grammatical flaw, a typographical error was detected. On the part fist stanza, ward must be word. It matters most since it changed the thought.

All else was great, Imagery is clear.

I enjoyed my reading Ida. Thanks for sharing abd keep writing.

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Greetings Tina!

"The Thoughful Woman" said it all. This was just a great choice of title. I love the style of your acrostic. With simple words, you successfully expressed and emotion with this. This is a food for the mind that enriches the soul of your readers.

Imagery is awesome and the rhyming is perfect and constant ABCB pattern. On the part third stanza, Would it be Men that await instead of Men that awaits?

Anyway, this was a great write! Thanks for sharing Tina!.Happy Account Anniversary and keep writing!

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Hi there Scythe!

This is indeed a horrific piece with a well drawn imagery. I can see how your head fell after being ripped. What I understood with this piece was that you were afraid, frightened in the midst of darkness. You were afraid to die but death took you.

I enjoyed reading this piece though it brought me much goosebumps. Thanks for sharing! Write on!


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