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I'm just a new reviewer hoping to gain some experience (and yes, gift points). I don't really have much to say, but if you would like to look at how I review, just look at my public reviews list.
I'm good at...
I would say I'm good at finding errors and looking for plot holes, so I can give feedback on how to improve the item based on its genres, summary, story, and just overall point of the item. However, I will warn you that since I'm new at this, I would only review short stories or a certain chapter from a novel.
Favorite Genres
Fantasy, Comedy, Action, Adventure, Mystery, LGBTQ+, Slice of Life, etc. I think I would be able to review it as long as it's not too long. Still new at this after all.
I will not review...
Poems, Articles, Essays, etc., only short stories and novels, unless I find it in read and review.
Public Reviews
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Review of Dear Father  
Review by GhostFerno
Rated: E | (4.5)
Wow...that's quite an amazing father you have. Can't relate sadly.

Hello. Just a random reviewer here :).

This is quite the beautiful poem. The cover picture, the title, the description, and everything else fit together so nicely. Though I wish it was more spaced out, this was a very heartwarming read.

Thank you for sharing this wonderful poem :D. Have a wonderful day.
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Review of For Debbie  
Review by GhostFerno
Rated: E | (5.0)
Awww! That's such a sweet poem :D.

Hello, I found this poem randomly. Finding a special significant other is quite hard these days, but thank you for reminding me that someday I might be able to have this same experience someday.

Life is a struggle, but at the same time, life is a bliss. Have a wonderful day.

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Review of Betrayed  
Review by GhostFerno
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
And that folks, is why you should never trust a drunken companion.

Hello! I found your poem randomly, and I must say that the one leprechaun will definitely be coming out of that experience with trust issues.

Congratulations on winning, and thank you for creating this poem.
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Review by GhostFerno
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello, just a random reviewer who found your entry randomly.

My overall impression is... WOW. For like one of the first times ever, you really have 'wowed' me with how good your writing is. With my skill in grammar and punctuation, I could just not find anything wrong.

Your short story really made me laugh with the whole situation, and the two dogs being sprayed just made it more fun.

Just one little nitpick though, I think instead of saying 'Jeb' it would be more appropriate to just say 'one of his dogs' to let us readers understand who you are referring to. It's mostly because of the fact that both dogs were just introduced briefly, and no names were given to the two of them.

Hope you found my review helpful, and good luck with your entry :D.


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Review of Beyond the Door  
Review by GhostFerno
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello, just another reviewer who got here randomly.

My overall impression is that you really have a way with words, with a few mistakes here and there.
It's quite short, but the story still feels fleshed out in a way.

Suggestions :

- On the 2nd sentence, I would say 'holds' instead of 'is' just to make it flow better.
- On the 5th sentence, maybe try 'allure--the' to make it seem connected.
- On the 6th sentence, try ^ again but with belonging and family, and just maybe add an extra word with 'and' just so it flows.
- On the 9th sentence, I don't quite understand why 'He' is capitalized twice, when it's not the start of the sentence.
- This may seem like a run-on sentence, but just an idea to connect the last part altogether. 'When he saw 'it' nod, he opened the door, smiling at the though of another soul starting its journey towards a new life on Earth.

That's all I've got, so I hope you found this review helpful :D.


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Review by GhostFerno
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello, I found your poetry randomly.

My overall impression is that these words of wisdom really do have a deeper meaning, as I can formulate some different impressions I'm getting each time I re-read this.

I don't have much else to say as I am not very good at reviewing poetry, but as anger is acknowledged as evil, it really does play a role in our survival.

Sometimes, anger may trigger adrenaline and help our body improve its performance by heightening our senses. However, if anger is not controlled, situations may become even worse when we are fueled to do evil.

Hope my insight was helpful, or correct.
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Review by GhostFerno
Rated: ASR | (3.5)
Hello, just a random newbie reviewer here. After reading this short story, my overall impression is that it's a short story about a husband who spent too much time in navy, and his wife who seemed pre-occupied with the idea that she's always right.

While there may be some comedic elements here and there, I have also seen some grammar and punctuation mistakes that could make readers confused while reading.

I will just point out a few things :

- In the 3rd quote, I believe it would be more grammatically correct to say that she is 'mostly blind too' and not just say eyes.

- Don't capitalize words that the character is re-quoting, unless they are quoting from the start of a sentence.

- I see too many commas in the 4th quote.

- In the 11th quote, I don't understand why there is a semicolon after 'mostly' since it could just be left as 'mostly wrong.'

There are still more I think that could be further improved on, but these ones were the parts I was confused with. Hope you found my review helpful.
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Review by GhostFerno
Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi, I have found this item through a random 'read and review,' and have decided that I could at least help you improve your grammar, since my skills are quite limited and quite frankly, I'm just a newbie reviewer. Hope I can help with your first paragraph (Just helping a bit since I don't wanna be a nuisance.)

I'm not trying to be rude, but my overall impression while reading is that it's just quite hard to understand, and I felt that giving you some help will improve your writing.


Now, here are my suggestions :

1st sentence - When overwhelmed with a problem, what strategy would you use to overcome it?

Put the 2nd sentence much like you would to another paragraph, so it'll look like a question with an answer at the bottom.

2nd - When I hear a hare-brained project proposed by a politician, it reminds me of a scheme an old boss of mine used in the past. It's really much like throwing another ball in the air, while having your hands already quite full.

I would also suggest doing the same thing to the 3rd and 4th sentence, for another question and answer kind of thing.

3rd - When there are more demands than you could ever accomplish in the given time, what would you do?

4th - The grammar is pretty good, so not much I can say here other than changing the '-' to '--' but I may be wrong.

I wrote way too much, but just know that I'm reviewing this to help you improve, not to criticize your essay.
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