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Review by Gita
Rated: E | (4.5)
Your principled philosophy is a refreshing change from the "I'll do this quick (and easy)" attitude which is so common these days.

I like the upright and moral virtues you admire and incorporate in your life's vision, including your wanting to give back to the community.

Your poem makes a worthwhile read. Thank you.


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Review by Gita
Rated: E | (4.0)
This is a convincing description of what it must feel like to be a student under quarantine.

In addition to the untethered feeling you have of "floating around the house", the exhaustion as a result of your circadian rhythm being knocked for a loop, and the feelings of anxiety and futility that arise from doing nothing, there are disturbing realities to face: you should be busy working and obtaining that degree.

You decide that "tomorrow will be different", but will it be different? (In my own experience the answer is "no".)


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Review by Gita
Rated: E | (4.0)
Well done! You actually succeeded in taking me on your travels, which amazes me because seldom am I drawn away from my steady, both-feet-on-the-ground position.

"Read the next lines with your closed eyes...
Now it is night since you closed your eyes tight"

The above worked in the blink of an eye.

Congratulations on doing what no hypnotherapist has done for me!


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Review by Gita
Rated: E | (4.0)
I love your idea of attributing colours to various stages in life and linking colours to feelings.

In this poem you've shown life as a full circle, the beginning of which is white and the end of which is black.

The metaphors which I particularly like include:

"Toddler days are vivid yellow.
School is cherry red, teen years are fire engine hot."

There is a sprinkling of assonance and alliteration in the poem, which enhance the cadence.





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