Dear Dr M C Gupta I have been reading GLOWERING WAS WHAT SHE DID BEST and this is just my opinion so you are free to take it or drop it. You know better than anybody what fits.
Overall impression:
I loved the forceful language that you used and the expression of how anger was the main thing that characterized her. Complaining was really clear. I think the poem was nice and easy to read. Correct punctuation.
Suggestions:
I don't have any for this piece.
Well done.
Dear E E Coder I have been reading The Tea Service and this is just my opinion so you are free to take it or drop it. You know better than anybody what fits.
Overall impression:
You wow me. Honestly you do. I am a fan of crimes and this is just one of the best truely.the description of the dominating Michelle and the obeying husband was really so nice and skillful. It is really amusing and enjoyable.
Dear WhoMe I have been reading I Was So Embarrassed and this is my opinion.
Overall impression:
The story is a very funny and short one. I began smiling from the moment I read the title till the end when I began laughing.
A very gripping title.
Nice story indeed.
well I have read this and here is only my opinion.
The story is a nice and realistic one.
But there is something that I can not really get:
the way in which it is written is alittle strange but I feel that you left it that way for a reason which I think can be to feel that it was said by the child himself.Is it so?
Good job and keep going..
This is really funny and I had a very nice time reading it.
The description of will completely matches his attitude at the end .
The title also caught my attention and the begininng wasn't less important.
Thanks for shring that.
I have just read your story and I found it really amusing.
The idea is entirely new for me and so I was curious to know what happened .
But at the end I was not sure what happened, I have lots of questions whose answer are totally unclear to me.
Was that Satan?was he going to set her free by the death of her father?
or you wanted to leave that according to the imagination of the reader .
So I think the end requires a little more elaboration .
This is a mere suggestion that you can take or drop.
Write on .
I can see here that you requested a review so I wanted to provide a humble one
I think your description of worry is good and covers it all, from the state of mind to the physiological effects on the stomach and her way towards the door .You can also add that time was passing very slowly for her( in your own expression).This is just a suggestion that you can take or drop .
well done here.
I like your beast
The poem is simple , easy and may be that is what makes it attractive , but it still tells a whole story .
At the end I didn't have any questions or missing details.
I wish I can achieve that level soon .
Well done and write more .
That is not the ending I expected .
It is nice how you tell a story as a poem using easy language and new example still (the first story i hear with mime )
1 question still:why did the mother weep when she put the baby to sleep?
I couldn't get this
but i like it anyway
good luck
That is great and really comic.
It is enjoyable and made me sympathize with the hero despite the fact that it was his fault after all.
Well done and keep going .
That is really interesting.I like not just the story but the way you describe things .
I think the description fits the subject for example the cold touch of evil ( yeah it should not be warm) and i like that at the end the sound of her silent tears was louder than the cats purring .
Though it is very short ,yet it is not rushed .
well done !
keep going .
well that is really romantic with beautiful places that i kept imagining
it is full of hope till the end
like a soft piece of music.
keep it up!
but what i couldn't get was this
"I knew she’d want me happy you see"
what does you see mean ? i think it should be
I knew she’d want me happy
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