Thanks for writing this. If you read some of my stuff, I only hint at it. I have similar stuff to write but I must be careful. I can be cruel!
I'm glad I caught it.
I hate to tell you, but, you were dealing with the new norm. We are the only sane ones left which makes us the weird ones!
I'm going to write a short about evolution one of these days. I'm not sure evolution is always an advancement. I think "thems" can evolve in all directions including backwards. Therefore the old axiom holds. Evolve or die...............gottagosee (Of course I'm laughing0
This is the second of these I've read in a row.
I will repeat what I wrote for "This Can't be Dear Monty". I think that's what it was.
Good use of Poetic License
Slightly irreverant, but just enough!
My score: A big smile and maybe I heard a good "ha" from myself.
What a great story told around the campfire.
Tell the story, wait until everyone is back in their tents and then knock three times on something hollow.
Nice imagination and few distracting mechanical errors. Example: inseparable, like magnets, we were glued to one another. I would have used the word stuck instead of glued, because stuck is more magnet like!
Just a few things like that. Hardly worth mentioning.
The part I liked the most is when the Ouija takes off on its own. I've always like that. It's like touching it energizes it and then you can't shut it off.
Thank you. I'm going to publish my first book size creation on Kindle. I'm trying to absorb readers attitudes toward each of the readers, so I'm soaking up any and all information I can. gottagosee
Interesting timing. Good visuals and sequence of events. Alcohol makes all actions possible and is the enabler. Other than these two guys personal relatives, your ending said, "Life goes on!" Many, many people now look back over their shoulders and here comes the train.
Mechanically, this piece looks good except for the word "pluming" which, might be a stretch.
This is the second well done fantasy I've read in a row. I did not find any distracting mechanical errors as I read. This short had a bunch of action for its size, and you produced pretty good visuals. It just goes to show ya, when the evening news says there was a mysterious fire at such and such place, it was not a mystery. You've been there.....Ha Ha Ha ha ha a a....gottagosee
I think in moving pictures. I can't begin to tell you about the hilarious thing I just watched.
I found the piece's mechanics sound and would like this short to remain just as it is except for a comma after "Garden of Eden."
Good job, create and write on.......gottagosee
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